雅思教父刘洪波_雅思写作之四种境界

第一篇：雅思教父刘洪波_雅思写作之四种境界

雅思写作之四种境界

摘自雅思教父刘洪波2010年心血大作——《最简化雅思写作》

雅思教父刘洪波2010权威作品

《最简化雅思写作》

8月光芒上市

从零开始，单词、词组、句式、思想

完全应对官方四大评分标准

最新研发最简化15句写作框架模板

涵盖雅思题库各类型高分范文

幽默通俗的语言手把手教出写作高分

中国区前任雅思考官强力推荐

我眼中的雅思写作有四种境界：

初入江湖

我是新手。

看完Task 2的题目，沉思良久，终于开始提笔写作。写写停停，因为一边写，我要一边思考选择各种词汇语法，或写完一句话，不知道下一句应该写什么。

最后终于写完，身心疲惫。看看表，花了一个小时以上；数数字，还不到250。

问题：我对各种武功招式还不够熟悉，还要一边出招一边回忆。我觉得我似乎没有思想，写不出更多的内容，250字对我来说好像太多了。

小有名气

我已经写过十来篇雅思作文了，读过很多雅思的高分范文，今晚再练一篇。

看完Task2题目，闭目，神游万里，思接千载，感觉体内有气流动，大脑四肢微微发热。猛一睁眼，或奋笔疾书（手写）；或指光一片（敲键盘），间或有停顿。

写完收功。看看表，一个小时；数数字，350。

问题：我还控制不住我的武功，无法精炼我的思想，驾驭不了文章结构，我知道，上了考场我会收不住笔，时间不够。

一代高手

我有自己固定的写作套路，我的雅思大作文永远只写15句话，篇篇结构相同，四平八稳，中正严谨。我终于练成了属于自己的武功。

看完Task2题目，闭目养神，灵台空明，让一条思路在脑海中渐渐清晰。睁眼，一挥手，纸上留下一片娟秀字迹。

我不用看表，一定在40分钟以内；我也不用数字数，因为那一定是15句话，在260至300字之间。

天下宗师

我没有自己的武功，天下间所有的招数技法都已融会贯通，烂熟于胸，随时可信手拈来。我的文章体例没有固定的套路，或开门见山，花开见佛；或欲扬先抑，跌宕起伏。我的文章风格篇篇不同，或文气飘逸，灿烂锦绣；或语气磅礴，跃然纸上；又或字字珠玑，大放光明。

我的武功，没有套路。所以你们只能欣赏，无法模仿。

你很难成为“天下宗师”。不要花很多时间去分析学习《剑桥雅思》中考官写的高分范文，那是宗师级文章，可远观而不可亵玩。

但你要进入“一代高手”的境界之后方可参加考试。

其实我们可以通过科学的、有系统的、最简化的训练直接进入“一代高手”的境界。这也是我写这本教材的目的。

第二篇：雅思教父刘洪波：教育类雅思作文高分及点评

雅思教父刘洪波：教育类雅思作文高分范文及点评

雅思教父刘洪波2010权威作品

《最简化雅思写作》

8月光芒上市

从零开始，单词、词组、句式、思想

完全应对官方四大评分标准

最新研发最简化15句写作框架模板

涵盖雅思题库各类型高分范文

幽默通俗的语言手把手教出写作高分

中国区前任雅思考官强力推荐

Most countries spend lots of money on education as they start to recognize its importance.In your opinion which two following subjects are the most important for your people and which one is the least important?

Subject:

LiteratureSports

MathematicsEconomy

Physics History

Music Geography

It has been said that investing in education is investing in one’s future: this is true for both individuals and nations.It is always somewhat subjective to say which is more important, the humanities or sciences, as both have value.However, I would like to make a case for the importance of math and economics in this day and age.Let us begin with math.Mathematics is a foundation subject which bridges many different fields, from physics and chemistry to the Internet and modern medicine.All of our material advances in the 20th century could not have happened without advanced mathematics.To be sure, it will also play a critical role in meeting challenges like global warming and space travel, to name just a few, in the future.Likewise, economics is a fundamental discipline that allows societies to be stable and move forward.History is full of example of kingdoms and empires that collapsed as their economies declined.Most obviously, we need look no further than the current economic meltdown to see the importance of economics.The jobs and wellbeing of individuals and nations alike depend upon a deeper understanding of this field.While all subjects have their merit, perhaps Geography doesn’t have the same

importance it once did.After all, in our modern world we have 3-D maps online that allow us to see anywhere with the click of a mouse.But to reiterate, we need a balanced approach to education where we still produce artists and thinkers and historians and so on.To summarize, math and economics are critical subjects in the 21st century.Governments must do their part to make sure we invest in these key areas and have qualified teachers.By doing so, they will ensure our prosperity and progress.(294 words)

Harvey点评：

写作观点：数学、经济学重要，地理不重要。所以文章中间三段分别讨论三个学科。

这篇文章题型少见，题目内容对中国考生来说比较另类。说明哪个学科的重要性不难，难的是说明一个学科为什么不重要，还注意到题目中有最高级词汇：the most important, the least important。

我们受到的教育是行业没有三六九等，行行出状元。如果在小学课堂上讨论此类题目，有小朋友胆敢说地理最不重要，老师一定会发飙：“胡说，不要有偏见，各个学科都重要，人类都需要，缺一不可。”于是大家考试不能偏科，长大之后都没有了“偏见”。

而这篇文章就是逼着你写出偏见，让你偏科，还很极端，因为题目中有最高级。

所以我最欣赏的是在本文首段第二句话，在表达个人偏见前的让步：It is always somewhat subjective（主观的）to say which is more important, the humanities（人文学科）or sciences, as both have value.这句话我相信也是大多数考生看完题目后的第一感觉，但表达不出来。

先学习下面的词汇和短语，然后再重读范文，体会它们在文中的运用

词汇

subjectiveadj.主观的foundationn.基础

bridgevt.架桥，连接

criticaladj.关键的，重要的meltdownn.彻底垮台

wellbeingadj.福利，康乐，安宁

reiteratevt.反复地说，重申

短语

invest in投资于

make a case for 提出充分的理由

in this day and age 当今

play a critical role in 起到关键作用

meet challenge 应对挑战

to name just a few 等等 = and so on

depend upon依赖，依靠

allow sb.to do sth.使某人能做某事

with the click of a mouse 只需鼠标一点

do one’s part to尽自己的职责

key areas 重要领域

三分钟熟读或背诵本文最实用的三个句子

 It is always somewhat subjective to say which is more important, the

humanities or sciences, as both have value. Mathematics is a foundation subject which bridges many different fields, from

physics and chemistry to the Internet and modern medicine. All of our material advances in the 20th century could not have happened without

advanced mathematics.

第三篇：雅思教父刘洪波：服装类雅思作文高分及点评

雅思教父刘洪波：服装类雅思作文高分范文及点评

雅思教父刘洪波2010权威作品

《最简化雅思写作》

8月光芒上市

从零开始，单词、词组、句式、思想

完全应对官方四大评分标准

最新研发最简化15句写作框架模板

涵盖雅思题库各类型高分范文

幽默通俗的语言手把手教出写作高分

中国区前任雅思考官强力推荐

1.流行时尚

In modern society, fashion is becoming more highly valued in people's choice of clothes.Why? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

It seems that in recent years more and more people, especially in urban areas, are dressing more stylishly.Nowadays it is not uncommon to see people walking around in brand name clothes and sunglasses like celebrities.But why is this happening and is it a positive development?

The cause of this fashion obsession surely is connected to movies and pop culture.In today’s society, we are constantly seeing images of attractive movies stars and MTV videos with pop icons wearing the most recent styles.To some extent, and perhaps even subconsciously, this affects our own behaviour as we imitate what we see.One on level, being fashionable is quite healthy.It is natural for us to want to look good, because if we look good we feel good about ourselves.Especially in today’s world of work and relationships, it’s important to have good self-esteem and be confident.Looking good can help us achieve that.But from another angle, being too fashion-conscious has its problems.Sometimes people end up obsessing about buying the most expensive things and look down upon others who can’t afford them.Such people become superficial and often don’t pay enough attention to the important things in life, like friendship and being a good person.So in the end, each person has to find the right balance regarding how fashionable to

be.There is nothing wrong with looking good and feeling good;in fact it’s human.But we must also be sure not to dwell on it so much.(265 words)

Harvey点评：

写作线索：首段，引出现象并表态；第二段，问答第一个问题why；第三段，positive；第四段；negative。末段总结。

本文清新自然，没有大道理，很多小常识。比如第三段第二句：It is natural for us to want to look good, because if we look good we feel good about ourselves.好作文不是高难词汇的堆砌。最简单的词汇也可以直指人心，赢得读者共鸣。

先学习下面的词汇和短语，然后再重读范文，体会它们在文中的运用

词汇

stylishlyadv.时髦地

celebrityn.名人，名流

obsessionn.迷住，迷恋

popadj.流行的，通俗的iconn.偶像，图标

subconsciouslyadv.下意识地

imitatev.模仿

fashionableadj.流行的，时髦的self-esteemn.自尊

superficialadj.肤浅的短语

depend on取决于

be connected to 和…有联系

to some extent 某种程度上

from another angle从另一方面看

look down upon 瞧不起

pay attention to 关注

dwell on 仔细研究

三分钟熟读或背诵本文最实用的三个句子

 Nowadays it is not uncommon to see people walking around in brand name

clothes and sunglasses like celebrities. Personally I feel that whether it’s good or bad depends on the individual’s

attitude. Especially in today’s world of work and relationships, it’s important to have

good self-esteem and be confident.

第四篇：雅思教父刘洪波：犯罪类雅思作文高分及点评

雅思教父刘洪波：犯罪类雅思作文高分范文及点评

雅思教父刘洪波2010权威作品

《最简化雅思写作》

8月光芒上市

从零开始，单词、词组、句式、思想

完全应对官方四大评分标准

最新研发最简化15句写作框架模板

涵盖雅思题库各类型高分范文

幽默通俗的语言手把手教出写作高分

中国区前任雅思考官强力推荐

Putting criminals into prisons is not an effective way to deal with them.Instead, education and job training should be offered.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

How to handle criminals is a problem that all countries and societies face.Traditionally, the approach has been to punish them by placing them in prisons to pay for what they have done.Some, however, advocate for trying to make them better with training and education and it seems they may have a good point.First of all, consider all the money that we have to spend to lock people up in jail.It doesn’t seem like a good use of public money if the people don’t actually get any better.Because most criminals eventually are let out of prison, our focus should be on making them better citizens.In fact, the reason why many people end up in jail in the first place is because they didn’t have a good education or happy family.So if they can learn job skills they perhaps can find work and feel they can contribute in a positive way.If they do this, they won’t need crime.Surly everyone deserves a second chance.Of course this does not mean that we should be too lenient on criminals.Those who commit crime should still be punished, but during their punishment they should also be treated.If we make an investment in them and show compassion, most will be able to make a new start.To summarize, we must make more of an effort to go to the root of the problem.We need to treat criminals as patients and give them the medicine they need: education and training.By giving people the skills for a second chance we can make our society safer and healthier.(271 words)

Harvey点评：

写作线索：首段，赞同题目观点；第二段，罪犯在监狱里什么都不做是花着纳税人的钱的；第三段，没有接受教育和不幸的家庭是原因，要教育，要给他们机会；第四段；当然要惩罚，但惩罚和治疗并用。末段总结。

好文章。末段第二句的比喻给本文增色不少，：We need to treat criminals as patients and give them the medicine they need: education and training.十分贴切。

先学习下面的词汇和短语，然后再重读范文，体会它们在文中的运用

词汇

Punishvt.惩罚，处罚

Advocatevt.提倡

jailn.监狱=prison

lenientadj.宽大的，仁慈的compassionn.同情

patientn.病人

短语

in jail监禁

end up最后结果

commit crime犯罪

make an investment in…投资于

make an effort to do 努力去做

三分钟熟读或背诵本文最实用的三个句子

 In fact, the reason why many people end up in jail in the first place is because

they didn’t have a good education or happy family. We need to treat criminals as patients and give them the medicine they need:

education and training. By giving people the skills for a second chance we can make our society safer

and healthier.——摘自刘洪波2010新作《最简化雅思写作》

第五篇：雅思教父刘洪波：建筑类雅思作文高分及点评

雅思教父刘洪波：建筑类雅思作文高分范文及点评

雅思教父刘洪波2010权威作品

《最简化雅思写作》

8月光芒上市

从零开始，单词、词组、句式、思想

完全应对官方四大评分标准

最新研发最简化15句写作框架模板

涵盖雅思题库各类型高分范文

幽默通俗的语言手把手教出写作高分

中国区前任雅思考官强力推荐

1.建筑风格

Modern buildings are appearing in large numbers but some people believe that we should build our buildings in traditional styles.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, an interesting trend has emerged.Countries with long histories and rich cultures have been modernizing the quickest, especially in terms of architecture.Many have criticized this as not respecting traditional culture.While traditional architecture should be protected, however, I feel it is not necessary to stop building modern structures as we move forward.One reason for this is that modern buildings are more practical and comfortable to live and work in.While traditional buildings might look nice from the outside, they are often not very user-friendly.Modern buildings usually have lots of windows and light and are clean and energy efficient.Surely this will make those inside them happier.Another point to consider is that modern buildings will give a good impression to those visiting from abroad.Consider Beijing during the Olympics, for example.Many foreigners were surprised to see all of the stunning new building designs.In the long run, this will probably attract more business and tourists to the country.Of course, traditional architecture still has its value.Everyone loves visiting famous historical places and admiring architectural styles from throughout history.We should protect and appreciate such places for future generations, but at the same time, we don’t have to live in the past.Ultimately, each city needs to find its own balance between “old” and “new” when it

comes to building styles, but modern buildings are for sure a positive thing.After all, if we don’t continue to explore new building styles we won’t be able to let future generations know what our period of history was like.(264 words)

Harvey点评：

写作线索：首段，现代建筑必要；第二段，因为现代建筑的实用性和舒适性；

第三段，代表城市现代化；第四段；让步，传统建筑的价值。末段总结。

文中第三段的观点不够有力。其实现代建筑的优点直接分实用性和舒适性两个段落来重点阐述即可。比如实用性，现代化都市人口密度比以前大，摩天大楼skyscraper提高了城市土地的使用效率。

本文末句很有趣味，再仔细读读：After all, if we don’t continue to explore new building styles we won’t be able to let future generations know what our period of history was like.（毕竟，如果我们不继续开发新建筑的风格，我们的下一代将不会知道我们这一代的历史是什么样）历史是相对的，对于我们的子孙来说，我们现在的现代化建筑将成为他们眼里的古代建筑。

先学习下面的词汇和短语，然后再重读范文，体会它们在文中的运用

词汇

emergevi.显现出来

architecturen.建筑物

practicaladj.实用的user-friendlyadj.用户友好的，方便用户使用的stunningadj.足以使人晕倒的，极好的admirev.赞美，钦佩，羡慕

ultimatelyadv.最后,短语

in terms of在...方面

move forward前进

in the long run从长远看

for sure确实

after all 毕竟

let sb.do sth.让某人做某事

三分钟熟读或背诵本文最实用的三个句子

 In recent years, an interesting trend has emerged. One reason for this is that modern buildings are more practical and comfortable

to live and work in. After all, if we don’t continue to explore new building styles we won’t be able to

let future generations know what our period of history was like.