沪江网BEC频道访谈之沪江网友作文评点1

第一篇：沪江网BEC频道访谈之沪江网友作文评点1

BEC频道访谈之沪江网友作文评点（1）

主题：BEC频道之沪友BEC作文点评 形式：修改作文，以及简短的老师的点评

昂立BEC项目部主任张梦琳老师，担纲商务英语听说、企业团训听说主讲,曾在知名企业担纲首席口译。从事听说教学十年之久，最乐意与同学分享职场经历，她的教学理念是：Enjoy learning English in the rest of your life!

内容：（如下）

你是一家国际大公司的人力资源部经理。你刚刚任命弗朗西斯卡女士为公司总部的销售经理。

给总部的全体员工写一个字数为40-50的备忘录：

（1）宣布对弗朗西斯卡女士的任命。

（2）说明她开始工作的具体时间。

（3）要求总部员工准备欢迎她。

首先，我们要了解一篇memo的基本格式：

MEMORANDUM From: Olive HR Manager

To: All staff Date: June, 2008

Subject: Appointment of Francisco Here we announce the appointment of Mrs.Francisco as our new Sales Manager of the Headquarter.She will be starting her job next Monday morning.There will be a small welcome party by 9:00 that day so everyone please be on time.从基本格式来看，网友的作文在格式上欠缺完整。职位称呼错误。

其次，写一篇作文，我们说任何形式的BEC作文，都要考虑如下因素： Who is going to read my memo? What has the reader already known about this? What does the reader need to know? How is the reader going to respond my memo? 第三，memo尽量使用短句，这样表达清晰，结构紧凑。

第四，字数超，memo使用词汇要简短干练，确保大家都看得懂。

第五，写memo前要考虑清楚字句的组织，用精练的语言，有头有尾地把memo完成。

沪江网友作文：

1.gracezlq

MEMORANDUM TO: All employees FROM: PR Manager SUBJECT: Welcome new marketing manger Ms Francisca is appointed to the marketing manager of our company for her rich experences and excellent performance for many years.Since the marketing department is so important for our company,Ms Francisca should start to work as early as possible.Tomorrow, she will come and in charge of this department.As a way to express our welcome, every member is required to gather togather at 8 o'clock in the hall of the company and wait for the coming of Ms Francisca.Don't be late!

2.shiningboy20

To all staff All members, today I want to give a announcement.You will have a new sals manager, Mrs.Francsisc.She will take the duty on next Monday.And you will be fond of her because she is easy to please.So you must be ready to welcome the lady.From Alfred Re Assignment

3.haywood

To All employees, I am very pleased to announe the appointment of Ms Fransica as our new sales manager at head office.She will be officially on board from Aug.01.2008.Please join me to give her the warmest welcome.Thank you!From Mr Wu

4.zdyiam

to all staff attentiong please,ms Francis which is new sales manager will come to here on 8:00 pm 7,6,2008, so that time all of you should give her a big welcome.From Human resources manager 7,5 2008

5.duyang250

To all the staff of HQ：

Aftering serious consideration and consultation，we decide to appoint Mrs.Francisco the sales manager of HQ.She is expected to start her new work next Monday.we will give her a short welcome meeting then，so all of you please make a preparation for it.From Mike，HR manager Re：Appointment

第二篇：2013年6月英语四级作文高分版(沪江网校版)

2013年6月英语四级作文范文高分版（沪江网校版）2013年6月大学英语四级考试作文高分版

The Big is the Little

Nothing can be done except little by little, the French poet

Baudelaire Charles once said.Most people, however, often ignore such a truth.So does the little boy shown in the picture.He

expresses his worries to his father about disposing of nuclear waste, but is told that he can achieve nothing if he doesn’t empty the dustbin first.Every single little thing you can do today matters.The truth has been tested for ages, and thousands of great people have set good examples for us.For instance, Leonardo da Vinci, the

world-renowned master in painting, starts his career with repeated egg-drawing.Lu Xun, the great man of letters, reminded himself to get up early by inscribing the character “morning” on his desk.As university students, in my opinion, we should aim high, but at the same time, we shall never measure a task by its size.All in all, only those who have the patience to do simple things perfectly will acquire the skill to do difficult things easily.