TPO1 托福综合写作 满分案例

第一篇：TPO1 托福综合写作 满分案例

The professor think that by 4-day workweek rules, the company may probabely cost more and cut in their profits.Firstly, more employees means more work space and more computers, this is a large budget that the lecture didn,t include.Even thought they accept that they can be payed less if they go on the four-day workweek, the amount of work doesn't change.To fullfill the company's business goal, they need to hire more empolyees, therefore more private work space and computers and stuff like that are needed.Since the new employees take up the salary which the others gave up, the cost of the computer and workplace cannot be solved without investing more money.Secondly, by reducing the work hour, one emploee's assignment cannot be accomplished as much as before, and then the leftover must be shifted to another employee.Also, with less time to work, the employees should work much harder than they used to be.This will lead to a high work expectations that make one's pressure more intense.How can a man live a good life under a huge stress? On the contrary to the lecture, less work time will oppositely lead to an unpleasant life than a better life which can improve one's work efficiency and make more benefits to the company.Finally, as the competition is so high in the work market, one who just work for 4 days a week cannot match those who work as hard as they can and at least 5 days a week.Being less competitive, one cannot keep their job stability, and may be the first sacrifice of the job competition.Since the boss must give their credit to those who work 5 days a week other than those who work only 4 days a week.Therefore, the delegant ones get promoted for they can be relied on crucial tasks and they will supervise the company constantly with lower absense-error happening.

第二篇：tpo综合写作26

综合写作26

Reading

The zebra mussel, a freshwater shellfish native to Eastern Europe, has long been spreading out from its original habitats and has now reached parts of North America.There are reasons to believe that this invasion cannot be stopped and that it poses a serious threat to freshwater fish populations in all of North America.First, the history of the zebra mussels’ spread suggests that the invasion might be unstoppable.It is a prime example of an invasion made possible by human transportation.From the zebra mussel’s original habitats in Eastern Europe, ships helped spread it out along new canals built to connect Europe’s waterways.The mussel can attach itself to a ship’s bottom or can survive in the water—called “ballast water“—that the ship needs to take on to properly balance its cargo.By the early nineteenth century, the mussel had spread to the whole of Europe.It was later carried to the east coast of North America in the ballast water of ships traveling from Europe.The way ships have spread the zebra mussel in the past strongly suggests that the species will soon colonize all of North America.Moreover, once zebra mussels are carried to a new habitat, they can dominate it.They are a hardy species that does well under a variety of conditions, and they have a high rate of reproduction.Most important, however, zebra mussels often have no predators in their new habitats, and species without natural predators are likely to dominate their habitats.Finally, zebra mussels are likely to cause a decline in the overall fish population in habitats where they become dominant.The mussels are plankton eaters, which mean that they compete for food with many freshwater fish species.Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they support/contradict specific points made in the reading passage.Listening

Narrator

Now listen to part of a lecture on the topic you just read about.Professor

Contrary to what you just read, there are ways to control the zebra mussels’ spread.What's more, it is not so clear that the mussel is a serious threat to fish populations.True, the spread of zebra mussels couldn't be controlled in the past, but that's because people didn't have enough knowledge.In fact, there are effective ways to stop ships from carrying the mussels to new locations.Here's an

example.The way zebra mussels usually travel across the ocean is that a ship takes on some fresh ”ballast water" in Europe and then empties that water into American waterways when it arrives.Full of zebra mussels, but the ship can be required to empty out the freshwater and refill with ocean water while still out in the ocean.Saltwater will kill the mussels.Second, it's true that zebra mussels often don't have predators in their new habitats, but that's only in the beginning.What's been happening in Europe is that local aquatic birds sooner or later notice there's a new food source around and change their habits to exploit it.They switch from whatever they were eating before to eating zebra mussels.And birds can eat a lot of mussels.So zebra mussels aren't so likely to dominate their new habitats after all.Finally, even in habitats where zebra mussels become dominant, is the overall fish population likely to decrease.It's true that zebra mussels may have a negative impact on fish that eat plankton.But on other fish, they can have a positive impact.For example, the mussels generate nutrients that are eaten by fish that feed near the bottom of the lake or river.So bottom-feeding fish populations may increase, even if plankton-eating fish population decrease.一、阅读听力要点概括

Reading Passage

Main points: The invasion of zebra mussel to North America is unstoppable and puts a threat to freshwater fish.Sub point 1: History suggests invasion might be unstoppable.Sub point 2: Mussels can dominate their new habitat.Sub point 3: Mussel threats fish population after they dominate the area.Lecture

Attitude: Contrary.Unsure mussels’ threat to fish population.Sub Point 1: There are effective ways to stop mussels in today’s knowledge.(Salt water)

Sub Point 2: Birds can be predators and eat mussels.Sub Point 3: Bottom-feeding fish may increase while plankton-eating fish decrease but overall fish population only likely to decrease.Answers

二、范文逐段赏析

Paragraph 1

Contrary to what is argued in the passage, the lecture demonstrates how zebra mussels are not likely to become an imperative threat to freshwater fish populations in North America.此段功能：

(Listening passage后文提到用L代替)

(Reading passage后文用R代替)

以L的观点为主要观点，mussels不会对淡水鱼群造成危害。首段一句话即确定全文逻辑为相反，contrary。

此段结构：

作者用一句话总结了全文讨论的问题，并告诉大家全文逻辑为相反。极其单刀直入。大家发现论点很简明时大可不必费心凑两句话再起下一段。

Paragraph 2

First of all, recently uncovered knowledge of zebra mussel has shed light on new ways to prevent their invasion.Even though people in the past have not been able to stop the spread of zebra mussels, knowledge and technology may help abate their spread in the future.For example, although a large amount of zebra mussels spread to America by staying in the ballast water that is emptied halfway on the journey across the Atlantic and replenished with sea water, the zebra mussels can be exterminated as soon as they are directly exposed to salt water.此段功能：

以L的观点起头，谈sub topic 1，说明现代科技相比旧时代科技有机会阻止mussels spreading.随后举听力中的具体例子为证明。

此段结构：

此段为总分结构。第一句陈述L的观点(可以阻止spreading)，第二句陈述R中的事实(过去的人确实未能阻止mussel spreading)，第三句呈现L中的事实(咸水可以消灭mussels)反驳R中的事实。

Paragraph 3

Furthermore, zebra mussels do not often dominate a new habitat for a long period of time.The lecture agrees that although zebra mussels may have no predators and reproduce rapidly in the beginning, it would not be long before predators take notice of this new source of food, and develop a taste for it, thus preventing its domination.此段功能：

还是以L观点出发，谈sub topic 2, 说明mussels不会经常统治它的栖息地。L中同意短时期内mussels没有天敌，但没过多久掠食者就会发现这些新的美味从而结束mussels的统治。

此段结构：

总分结构。第一句总结L观点说明mussels完全统治是不成立的。第二句陈列L中同意R的证据。第三句陈列L反驳R的补充理由证据。

Paragraph 4

Finally, zebra mussels alone would not cause the decline of overall fish populations.Although zebra mussels may perhaps cause the decline of plankton eaters, as the passage suggests, they would also provide nutrients for bottom-feeding fish and ultimately cause the population of those fish to increase.此段功能：

讨论sub topic 3, 说明mussels不会造成总体鱼群数量的下降。L说虽然他同意R的观点(mussels造成plankton eaters下降)，但是伴随而来的bottom-feeding fish的数量上升从而导致总体鱼群数量上身。

此段结构：

总分结构。第一句总结L观点。第二句依然是陈列L同意R部分的证据。随后第三句陈列L中补充的证据来反驳R的观点。

三、范文全篇总评

1、逻辑结构

全文遵从总分结构，开头段直接一句话总结+逻辑，展开全文反驳基调。随后三段依照3个分论点依次展开。在分论点的论证中，作者阐明了L的态度，先小幅度同意R的观点，随即立刻补充新证据，反驳R的观点。作者利用R的证据，补充新证据后证明了R原来观点的片面性，从而达到一一驳倒的效果。

2、语言表达

全文十分紧凑，并启用了一些新词语赋予色彩。

其中值得借鉴的词语和句式有：

1.Recently uncovered knowledge of zebra mussel has shed light on new ways to prevent their invasion

Recently uncovered:最近新发现的

/Newly discovered/ It is recently found out/

Shed light on: 给与了希望

/Shown/ Given/ Illuminated

2.The lecture agrees although………….(R的观点)………..，….…(L的观点会抵消R的观点)….。

3.Ultimately：最终的，终极的

/Finally/ At last/ In the end/ After all/

Ultimately, the success of his company depends on good marketing.

第三篇：托福 tpo26 综合写作

In terms whether the zebra mussel will exert negative influence on North American, the passage and lecture are contradictory to each other.The author believes that zebra mussel might do harm the local species as they arrived while the lecturer holds a different opinion.First of all, the author makes a point that the history events suggest the zebra mussel's invasion is unstoppable.In the past, human transportation makes it possible for zebra mussel spread around the whole Europe and it is likely to happen again in North American.However, the lecturer demonstrates a different idea that a change made in the “ballast water” will prevent the invasion of zebra mussel from continuing.He says that if we refill the “ballast water” with ocean water, the mussel will no longer survive because the saline water might probably kill them all.Second, contrary to the belief in the passage that zebra mussel is able to conquer the new habitat due to their high reproduction rates and adaptation ability, as well as lacking predator, the lecturer says that the hypothesis made by author is not true.He mentions that there are many local bird will eat the zebra mussel as a major prey.As a result, the zebra mussel is unlikely to dominate the new habitat.Finally, regarding whether the zebra mussel will cause the decline in the fish population since they may compete for food such as plankton with fish species.The author thinks it is a possible consequence brought by zebra mussel.However, the lecturer refutes it that the mussel can't reduce the fish population because they provide enough nutrient for bottom living fish.

第四篇：托福写作两次满分一点经验

小生是在3月24日和4月28日考的托，其他的都太水，不过两次写作都考的不错，都是满分。所以在这里和大家分享下自己的经验。

首先，小生是考过G的，答过AW的人都知道打字速度是很重要的，而且小生的个人经验看来，T的写作也是要拼字数的，两次的独立写作都写够了600，综合都写到了400.所以大家练习打字是很重要的，在最后小生给大家留有一个练习打字的小软件，可以帮助大家提高打字速度。

然后，怎么把字数写到那么多？ 就独立写作来说，就一句正反两方面说，写到600字，除了天才，没准备的人很难做到，这里如果大家考过AW，那么事情就会简单些，按照Issue的反正正或正反反方式去说加上开头结尾五大段，最后再加上一个建议端。即按以下的公式： 开头+让步（支持一小下你不赞同的那面）+转折+递进+总结+建议，大家不要觉得用Issue的方法写托福作文会不会不好，一开始我也是这么想的，很多XDF的老师都说，G考逻辑，T考语言，实际上小生认为T也是考逻辑的，因为任何文章没有逻辑都无法写出。而且我以我的亲身经历告诉大家，文章写的很有逻辑至少是没有害的，而且我认为会有好处。想想考官在看了那么神散形也散的文章后，看到了一篇结构清晰的文章，即使语言稍差，也应该是倍感轻松。

然后就是建议段最好要有，我觉得很重要，而且可以凑字数。

之后有了框架之后就是中间内容的填写，最好用例子，这里的例子就没有G里的例子那么严格，小生觉得形式也不用那么教条，即使是你排比比喻或瞎编，只要切题就可以。但是例子一定要新，新例子从哪里找，我觉得在十天的那本书说的就很好。

例子是要准备的，考前可以根据机经适当准备一些。

之后就是词汇替换，我觉得词汇替换很很总要，还是那个道理托福考官看了那么多篇文章全是一样的词，然后看你的文章里也充斥着那么多一样的词，你说他得有多烦。所以要学会把一样话两样说，小生也准备了一些词类替换，最后传给大家。

另外，一些小细节就是名言的运用，和开头，我认为开头很重要，开头写好了，对后面也很关键。所以我的建议是开头用名言和复合句，然后正文多用短句，因为开头不是说理，不用写的太短，所以可以拽下文采。

此外，减少语法和拼写错误也是很重要，即使你写的再好，拼写错误太多，考官也不会好评你的文章。所以写到一定程度后不要贪多，一定要留下时间检查错误，这又是对打字速度的要求。

对于综合写作，我认为模板的作用很重要，听力也是很重要的一部分，这个有点像AW中Argument，很多Argument中的套话也可以用在模板中，这里我觉得需要指出的一点是结尾段一定要写，一是凑字数，二是起一个总结补充的作用，可以让逻辑更清楚。另外，就是拼写错误的问题，也是留出时间检查的。

第五篇：托福写作满分作文怎么写

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托福写作满分作文怎么写？

首先，应当挑选题目新、话题多样、写法全面的高质量范文资料，这一点至关重要，倘若范文质量欠佳，势必会影响备考效率。然后，按照如下步骤使用范文资料：

第1 步，通读30 篇高分范文，注意寻找文章的写作思路和主要论点，把握整体框架。以《托福高分范文大全》中的文章为例，2013 年6 月15 日考题：

The way a person dresses in is a good indication of his/her personality and character.通读此文时，应找到文章主要论点：1.着装习惯反映个人偏好;2.着装习惯透露了性格的某些方面;3.除了着装习惯，行为和举止是性格的更真实体现。

第2 步，精读10 篇范文，理清每句话之间的关系。如：Relatives were co-habitants inside a large house where more intimate relationships could be stably maintained and carried on.Nowadays, however, nuclear families are taking up the greatest ratio of social build-up...这两句话之间形成了转折的逻辑关系。又如：Minor setbacks might cause a loss of confidence, or even produce overwhelming distress.Therefore I think it is unrealistic to expect a person who is down in spirit to accomplish their goals.这两句话之间形成了因果逻辑关系

第3 步，详细分析10 篇范文，弄懂每句话内部的关系以及每句话之间的关系。如：In addition, obsessed with computer games, children are gradually becoming slaves under the control of the pre-designed game modes.As a matter of fact, it is not only a waste of time, but may also considerably mislead children mentally...在这段话中，标志词in addition 表明首句承前启后，该句中，过去分词短语obssessed with...表原因，children are usually...是原因所导致的结果。第二句是对首句的进一步解释说明，注意not only...but also...这个典型句式的应用。

第4 步，选取经过详细分析的10 篇范文题目进行仿写练习。

第5 步，再选取另外10 道题目进行写作练习，完成后与范文对照，寻找自己的优点与不足之处。