雅思写作7.5分高分心得分享(邓徽老师学生自己辛苦整理的写作资料)

第一篇：雅思写作7.5分高分心得分享(邓徽老师学生自己辛苦整理的写作资料)

雅思写作7.5分高分心得分享（里面有自己辛苦整理的写作资料）

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1.雅思写作（内含大量雅思写作快速提分学员心得以及题目为“整理这些短语我掉了一把头发”雅思写作提分短语-每一个短语均出自剑桥雅思官方指南1-8里面阅读单项当中所有可以用到写作当中的短语）。目前雅思界第一个整理八本雅思指定辅导书的牛人。

2.高级写作提升（内含每天更新经济学人优秀词汇以及短语—记住是每天更新！不是每月也不是每年也不是一辈子！）

3.雅思托福词汇

大作文的写作最重要，但是小作文也很重要，不能一直放的小作文不看，因为小作文如果写的不流畅，老是思考，不能在20分钟内写完，就会严重影响大作文的质量。写作文一定要知道换说法，一个意思同样的说法最好不要出现第二遍，这当然需要积累不同的句型和短语，比如文章后面给的写好处的句子要记得换着用哦~~~邓老师说大作文要得高分，倒装句、插入语、强调句、复合句和同位语至少各用一次！一开始，我每篇作文都五种句型刻意出现一遍，到后来就用的比较熟。

1把《雅思写作机经题源大全 》看了三遍，主要是记了上面的论据。上面的文章按类型分类，可以总结一下某一方面常用的搭配和句型。我的写作邓老师让我把新概念3的文章背背，但我背了两篇就放弃了。不过我把新3上的文章都看了一遍，把觉得好的句子总结在了一个本上，然后背，尤其是快考试那几天每天背一遍，弄得很熟，所以用起来也很熟。大家一定要看啊！！关于模板：我觉得模板还是很有用的，但不是已有书上的模板，大家都知道的那些模板和句型最好少用。因为雅思作文一共五大类，我一般练得都是两边倒的作文，自己有准备一个模板，除了问原因解决类的作文外都可以用同一个模板，所以要练得比较熟，一般写作文都要用自己的模板。不过我考试时候还是碰上了问原因类的作文，所以最好是总结两个模板就万无一失啦~~。当时邓老师让我基本上一天看一篇《经济学人》的文章，总结不会的单词、短语和句型，因为上面的文章都是老外写的，所以文章非常地道，好句子很多~~~上强化课前看过一遍十天突破雅思写作，觉得还是很不错的，对雅思写作有了比较全面的了解。但是上面的句型和模板最好不要用了~~关于写作文：我一共写了十篇左右的大作文，小作文要每种至少练一篇吧，快考试前一个星期我用专门的雅思考试写作纸卡时间，大小作文一起一起写，写了4套。我觉得大作文不在于要练的很多，但是要刻意的改进。写完一篇文章后要自己改一遍，把看的出来的语法和单词错误改了，还要看论据合不合理，再把看过的好的句型刻意套进去，然后如果有条件找给邓老师给改改。第一篇作文我写了一个半小时才写完，当时真是把所有能用的上的好句子和词组都尽量往里套。邓老师说第一篇要是半小时之内写完就是混的没好好写。尽快把能用的上的写作资料背熟，这样写作时间自然会减少，小作文必须20分钟搞定，如果你的模

板和句子用的熟，大作文也会很流畅。我的雅思考试作文写了满满的2页考试纸后，又要了一张写了一半，还把小作文检查了一遍（真的检查出一个错~哈）。除此之外，我还总结了四种句型，开头句型，写好处的句型，写坏处的句型和解决问题类句型。因为所有的雅思议论文题目基本上都是要讨论一个问题的好的方面和坏的方面，所以这样的句式要准备几个（不用太多），而且确定自己背的很熟，最好是每篇文章都换的多用，达到用的灵活自如。在这里与大家做一下分享。

好句总结：多用such替换the ,a.例：Admittedly, such issue ,to some extent,has given rise to a bunch of familiar questions.（模板的第3段开头）开头句型：（放在文章中间也很好的句子）As a result of constant media attention , A(A指题目话题), once largely ignored,has come to be seen as especially valuable/significant.2(The right of the media to do this)is rarely disputed, but(the way in which it does this)often comes under withering critism.(括号里可以换)As our lives are saturated with the flood of(advertisements),no one can avoid being influenced by ads.(ads 错的，不能用简写哦~)(Bad traffic and increasing pollution)are thorny issues challenging every major city in the globe.（in the globe全世界）The issue ofAis a complex and sensitive one.What lies behind …..?(问原因类)After years in the wilderness , the term “ A ” seems posied to make a comeback.(和第一句意思比较像)好处句型！Nothing can be compared with sb/sth ~~(新3的哦，推荐)

2Aexert a positive impact on ….3A can an effective way to(help)……(简单但好用)

4Few things can be more（impressive）than ….that…(新3的哦，推荐)

5play a pivotal role in …

6benefit from../ profit from…一般

7promot the development of..8A is the cornerstone of …

9remove the barrier for..raise one’s awareness of …常用enable sb to do …sb is the ultimate beneficiary（sb是。的最终受益者，社会问题类说人们应该自己也承担责任用）consolidates its status as the..get a clear perspective of..give a boost to..A is an indispensable part of BA is irreplaceable tp BThe signigicant of A to B can never be ingoredA is the key ingredient to B~~A made it possibe for sb to…A exert a peculiar fascination on a great many people.(新3的哦，推荐)

find it impossible to resist the temptationto do ….Needless to say / Indeed ,……（可以放在任一句开头，很好用哦~）

23develop an unshakable faith in …have a reputation of..Nothing can catch them for …make a contribution to(也可作写坏处的句子 the city make its own contribution to noise)27 buildbridges between特别的Improve one’s physical and psychological wellbeing /soundness 身体心理健康

optimise people’s living standards 提高人们生活水平

eradicate poverty 消除贫困

It’s not A that are important ,but B

Satisfy basic(human)needs 满足要求

Ease the tension and conflicts between alleviate the problem of消除冲突和紧张

Be fully aware of the consequences

The impact of（sporting activities）goes far beyond the bounds of(leisure and recreation.)3 坏处的句型drive up the crime rate..widen the gap between Apose a(direct)threat to …stifle creativitydiminish individual’s leisure time…spin out of controlcause(creat)tension and conflicts between…exert(have)detrimental/negative/adverseinfluence（impact）upon/onis markly incompatible with…与。不协调be afflicted with …deprive one of sthsth is the root cause of …be saturated with sthat the expense of ….be confronted with sthrun contrary to …erode the national identitypose a dilemma foris an vicious circlehamper(scientific)progressthere isa yawning gap betweenpose a devastating problemthe reputation is ruinedA is a complete failureThings can go wrong on a big scalesth is always faced with a difficult task /problemIt is impossible tohave(little)difficulties in doing

29pay the price for(fame)(pollution)is the price we pay for(overpopulated ,over industrialized planet)

people seem to fail to take into account the fact that ….好句！

lead to some unfavorable results

sacrifice ….for …

Thereis amajor concernovert heworldabout ….35 give rise to a bunch of familiar questions

36This is compounded by the fact that …

the problem of(information overloaded)exacerbated by(the growth …)

The problem , however , is complicated by the existence of dozens of..and by the fact that…..4 解决问题类

小模板：

1Evidence suggests that a key step is to develop a policy on ….,saying clearly(that..).2Other policies(such as。)can be taken to back up the policy.One helpful step is to … ,Another possibility is to improve …., so that ….It should be an addtion to the policy work ,not a substitute.The more effort put in and wider(the whole school)involvement ,the substantial the results are likely to be.give priority to sthshoulder the responsibility tocomply withimpose restrictions on..take …into account /considerationshould be increasingly focus on…rather than …what will make the most difference is …..The new study makes this point evenmore starkly 8 There are ways of dealing with the topic through …, ….and …..Three factors are involved in this change.新概念3+剑桥好句：Apparently,there is a good deal of truth in this idea./There is an element of truth in both agreements

2More importantly/significantly,there is still good evidence that …

3This is compounded by the fact that …由于。的事实，使。变得更糟

4Women,it is obvious, are freer than in the past.插入语has given rise to a bunch of familiar questions.It’s not A that are important ,but BProviding more parking area, in the long run ,has proved to be a practical way out in many large cities in the world.插入语Not only had the poor man been arrested ,but he had beensent to prison ,as wellIt has been estimated that …据估计Considering the amount she paid ,he was dear in more ways than one.非谓语

Fearing that she would never see Ratus againuse fewer materia resources and ,therefore,be much compatible with protecting the

environmentavoid squandering money on 避免浪费钱在。上shoulder important responsibilities on major global issues

14These regions are fragile not just in terms of their ecology,but also in terms of the culture of their inhabitants.Climate change ,whatever its causes,is a direct threat to their way of life.插入语Cinema might, for example , have become pimarily a documentay form.for example放中间，好！But what happened was that it became ,overwhelmingly, a medium for tekking stories.插入语 28Unfortunately, they are the ones the organisation can least afford to lose.There is an abundance of evidence to support the motivational benefits that result from carefully matching people to jobs.an abundance of 大量的，好！Managers, must be sure ,therefore, that employees feel confident that their efforts can lead to performance goals.插入语

31To varying degree, we all have secrets which……

Instead of becoming a doctor , however ,he became a successful writer of detective stories.33 It seemed certain that

广告Much as we may pride ourselves on our good taste,we are no longer free to choose the things we want ,for advertising exerts a subtle influence on us.35 In time ,it became an accepted fact that …

第二篇：雅思学术写作小作文图文对比 学生6分作文及老师批改

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1.作文题目

2.学生原文

The chart below shows male and female fitness membership between 1970 and 2000 The given chart provides the information about how many men and women keep healthy over three decades, from 1970 to 2000.It is interesting to notice that, from one thousand people in 1970, women fitness membership was almost constant at about two thousand people from 1975 to 1980, when it showed an exponential growth, rising to under three thousand after which it declined by about one thousand before another increase, ending at two thousand in 2000,whereas the number of man fitness membership doubled the women in 1970, despite some fluctuation, it fell back to the 1970 figure of women.With some decreases, the figure of men fitness membership reached at the peak in 1995 when it represented at five thousand.There was a remarkable fall in men who keep healthy from five thousand individuals to only one thousand.This decrease was particularly noticeable between 1995 and 2000, during which time the figure of men fitness membership was down five times.Similarly, there was still a gradual drop for women who keep healthy during that period, from around three thousand to two thousand.www.xiexiebang.com

In conclusion, women who keep healthy had a remarkable increase , but there was a corresponding drops for men

3.老师批改

用词不当逻辑错误语法错误修改添加

The chart below shows male and female fitness membership between 1970 and 2000.(The bar chart illustrates changes in male and female fitness membership over a thirty – year period./ from 1970 to 2000.)(Overall, during the period, there were significant fluctuations in fitness membership among men than women.The number of male members reached a peak in 1995, and finally in 2000, the number reached to a similar pattern that was in 1970.)The given chart provides the information about how many men and women keep healthy over three decades, from 1970 to 2000.(overview,本段概述总结你从图中读到的最明显的整体趋势和信息。此段非常重要，)With some decreases, the figure of men fitness membership reached at the peak in 1995 when it represented at five thousand.(可以尝试把一些有显著差别数据做一些比较，比如男女生的情况，The number of male members stood at just over 2000 while there were only 1000 female.After the following five years, it increased to 4000, which was doubled in 1975.Then there was a drop until 1995, peaking around 5000 in total.However,)there was a remarkable fall in men who keep healthy from five thousand individuals to only one thousand.This decrease was particularly noticeable between 1995 and 2000, during which time the figure of men fitness membership was down five times.Similarly, there was still a gradual drop for women who keep healthy during that period, from around three thousand to two thousand.It is interesting to notice that, from one thousand people in 1970,(The figures for women/ female membership began lower than 1000 in 1970, doubled by 1975, and then fluctuated between 2000 and 3000 over the period.)women fitness membership was almost constant at about two thousand people from 1975 to 1980, when it showed an exponential growth, rising to under three thousand after which it declined by about one thousand before another increase, ending at two thousand in 2000,whereas the number of man fitness membership doubled the women in 1970, despite some fluctuation, it fell back to the 1970 figure of women.（数据很全，但是可以在总结性强一点。）

In conclusion, women who keep healthy had a remarkable increase , but there was a corresponding drops for men。（如果写过overview，这一段可以省略。）

4.作文总评 批改： 令狐敬老师

本次批改严格按照IELTS大作文评分标准进行。IELTS小作文评分项：TA(主要信息呈现度), CC(连贯性及一致性), GRA(语法范围及精准度), LR(词汇资源)。文末会进行总评及打分。www.xiexiebang.com

总评 6（TA 6 CC 6 LR6.0 GRA5.5）

1.主要的趋势基本表达清晰，但是数据也很充足。2.可以多一些明显区别的比较，学会更合理的分段。3.词汇上变化也比较多，很好。

4.可以再尝试多用一些从句，来短时间提升语法分数。

一些建议：这一段概述可以放到第二段，作为overview，这会给考官一个对图像的整体印象，也有助于对你在后面两细节段的理解，文章整体会更加有逻辑性。所以可以使用以下结构：

1.Introduce the graph（首段介绍图像，最好不要借用考官的题目原词。）2.Give an overview（把主要的趋势，总体趋势：不要给出具体的数字信息）

3.Give the detail（细节讨论时，先从最大的趋势写，比如这里男性的变化更大，所以先写male 的情况。在这个主体段落里具体给出你的数据或者趋势变化等。）

（提示： 在detail段落里，重要的市如何根据不同的或者相同的变化分段。）

5.作文范文：

The chart shows male and female fitness membership over a thirty-year period.The vertical axis represents the number of members.The horizontal axis represents the period from 1970 to 2000.Overall, the chart indicates that there were greater fluctuations in fitness membership among men than among women.The number of male members started the period at just over two thousand and reached highs of four thousand in 1975 and five thousand around 1995.The lowest rates were in 1985 and more recently in 2000 when the rate dipped as low as one thousand.Female fitness membership began lower at one thousand, doubled by 1975, and then fluctuated between two and three thousand for the remainder of the period.When male rates were at their lowest, female rates were higher.This was particularly true in 1985 when over three thousand women held fitness membership.In brief, there were marked differences in rates of male and female fitness memberships in the period covered.(161 words)