第一篇:2011年中考作文预测
2011年中考作文预测内容:聚焦五大热点
(一)时间热点:立足“今天”。我们所指的“今天”,不仅仅是指今日这一天,也是指当前、现在。在具体表现上,一是文题中直指“今天”的,比如“今天真好”(南京题)、“今夜无眠”(乌鲁木齐题)就聚焦今天,眼望当前;二是站在今天回忆过去的,比如“又是一年风起时”(济南题)、“亲切的怀恋”(大连题一)、“从那一刻开始”(温州题)、“印象”(宁夏题二)、“感受节日”(桂林、百色合卷题)等,都需要考生回顾往事,叙写真实感受;三是站在今天展望、畅想未来的,比如“假如初三不再补课”(吉林题一)、“中考后,我最想”(南充题二)、“并没有结束”(北京题)等,需要我们写未来的生活,但是其中必有今天生活的投影和延续。
(二)地点热点:面向身边。比如,“喜看家乡新面貌”(达州题一)、“这里风光好”(眉山题一)、“沉醉在的世界里”(贵阳题)、“走在的小路上”(荆州题)、关于本地留守学生生活及经历的材料作文(怀化题)等,都是在深入挖掘本地文化和自然资源的基础上命制出来的好题,它们鼓励考生观察生活,表达真情实感。这类题目,具有较强的人文特色。
(三)人物热点:以“我”为主。大量全命题和半命题作文文题中都出现了“我”这个字眼。比如,“刹那间,我发现了自我”(深圳题)、“我发现了的美”(茂名题)、“在我的世界里,一切都很美好”(陕西题)、“那一刻,我迈上了新台阶”(兰州题)、“我们一起走过”(南通题)、“那次,我和他(她)都是好样的”(义乌题)、“谢谢你,为我助跑”(丽水题)、“我和一起”(广东题)、“触动了我”(海南题一)等等,其中有的要求考生站在“我”的角度写“我”,有的要求站在“我”的角度写“他(它)”、写社会,总的特点是聚焦同学们的日常生活,说真话,抒真情。以“我”为命题着眼点的试题,肯定还会大量存在于2010年的中考作文试题中。
(四)事件热点:聚焦经历。与2008年考前出现的抗击雪灾、抗震救灾、喜迎奥运等重大事件不同,2009年中考前出现的抗击国际金融危机、五四运动九十周年等大多不直接进入同学们的生活。或许正是这样的原因,像2008年中考出现的“当地震发生后„„”“战胜自己,坚强起来”等直面时代热点的试题,今年相应地少了很多。
2009年各地中考作文题,要么是把时代热点安排在导语中,比如江苏泰州试题就用抗击甲型H1N1流感中的一个故事引出了全命题作文“懂得责任”;要么是暗含时代热点,比如“取暖”(台州题)、“伸出自己的手”(潍坊题)、“传递”(常州题)、“不走寻常路”(嘉兴题)、“春风吹又生”(长沙题二)等,既可以写考生自己的生活经历,也可以从一个或大或小的角度折射时代热点。
而大量试题指向的是考生的人生经历,比如,“生日快乐”(淄博题)、“难忘的经历”(济宁题)、“放假了”(漳州题一)、“我们初中生的故事”(三明题)、“师生之间”(安徽题)等,考生一看就能联想到自己的诸多经历,找到大量素材。总之,命题者努力做到最大限度地调动考生的生活积累,便于他们找到得心应手的写作素材,鼓励他们“说真话、实话、心里话,不说假话、空话、套话”。
(五)情操热点:健康向上。中考是人生的重要经历,其作文命题在考查毕业生写作能力的同时又要引导考生思想和人格的提升,这是命题者的一大追求。所以,命题者在文题内容要表现的思想情操方面,必然是健康向上的。比如,“,太棒了!”(山西题)、话题作文“自信”(荆门题)等试题,鼓励考生自信乐观地面对生活、面对他人;“我很幸运”(江西题),传达出知足、感恩等心理感受;话题作文“团队精神”(青岛题二)、“伸出自己的手”(潍坊题)等,让考生懂得与人相处,合作共赢;
“我还缺少什么”(佛山题),勉励考生要正确认识自己,不断进取,完善自我;“逆耳忠言助我行”(河南题一)、话题作文“走出自我小天地”(临沂题)、材料作文“尽力而为就好”(武汉题)、写信劝慰同学正确对待挫折和压力(天津题)等,着眼的是在解决好生活问题的过程中不断成长,走向成熟。
以上五大热点,都贯彻了《教育部关于深入推进和进一步完善中考改革的意见》中“学业考试的命题要严格依据学科课程标准,加强试题与社会实际和学生经验的联系”的文件精神,也都落实了课标“写作教学应贴近学生实际,让学生易于动笔,乐于表达,应引导学生关注现实,热爱生活,表达真情实感”的精神。我们可以预见,在未来的中考中,以上热点还会继续热下去。
备考:坚持全面训练
中考作文复习备考,从内容上准备,就是要从自我成长、生活热点、品德修养、情感体验、思辨感悟、想象创新等方面阅读和揣摩一些优秀作文,看看它们都有哪些地方值得我们学习和借鉴,同时从这几个方面储备一些名人名言和新闻时事等相关素材;从题型上准备,就是要根据本地考区的常用题型(至少两种),研究它们的应对方法,认真训练。
比如,应对全命题作文,一定要对题目(包括其中的导语部分)进行仔细分析,对组成题目的各个语素和词语,都要明确其意思,从而准确把握题目规定的写作范围和内容。应对半命题作文,要认真研究文题中的引言和要求,吃透已经给出的题目词语的含义,补出合乎语法规范的短语作为题目。补题时,要根据自己的人生体验和生活积累,打破思维定势,补出自己熟悉的题目、最有把握的题目、感悟最深的题目、最容易写出新意的题目。
只有这样,才能扬己所长,掌握主动。应对选题作文,要在较短的时间里确定写作试题,为自己的考试赢得主动。挑选的原则应该是选熟不选生、选易不选难。如果选择的是材料作文,关键是要读懂材料的内涵(涉及的主题和相关内容),然后以此为话题展开写作。从方法上准备,我们要注意搞好下列训练:一是开展全程训练。
可以按照老师的复习规划,从作文评分的若干方面(如审题、构思、立意、选材、表达、修改等),逐一进行训练,每一项都要落到实处,取得实效。二是开展局部训练。主要是开头、结尾等影响中考作文评分的关键部位和个人劣势方面,不妨重点训练几次。三是开展创新训练。
作文最忌平淡无奇,千篇一律,平时要加强对“精”“深”“活”“新”等方面的训练,以便收到平中见奇、同中见异的效果。四是开展速度训练。这是为了避免在考场上因时间不够而导致无法完卷的遗憾。平时应训练自己快速审题、快速构思、快速行文的能力,养成“快”的习惯。
除此之外,在应考过程中,如果我们面对的是偏难的作文题目,在写作中应该注意以下几个问题:
一是准确理解题意。准确理解题意包括对材料、题目、提示语和写作要求等内容的理解。要仔细推敲材料,弄清材料的内容及命题者隐含的意图,确立自己的观点;要看清、想清、吃准题目的含义及它涉及的范围;要领会提示语透露出来的信息。做到这些,就可以有效避免偏题离题。
二是善于转化话题。在准确理解题意的基础上,要善于将题目设定的要求转化到便于我们把握的范畴之内。比如,浙江台州市的全命题作文“取暖”,我们知道它有别于“温暖”一题。一个“取”字,表示出一种动作行为,需要施动者主动地付出一定的努力。
“取暖”者,是缺乏温暖者的行动,而“暖”的比喻义,可以是关心、理解、爱护、教育、亲情、友情等等。这样一来,“取暖”这道题目就可以转化为“我追求母爱”“我为爷爷送去关爱”“相互激励”等话题。也就是说,找到跟题目要求相关的词语,对比辨析,可以帮助我们化解偏而难的试题带来的审题难度。
三是理清行文思路。写作前,我们要养成列提纲的习惯,列提纲可以针对文章层次、段落、先后主次等做一个统筹安排。写作时就可以按照提纲有步骤地展开,确保文章思路流畅、条理清晰。
第二篇:中考预测作文
1.Write at least 60 words on the topic “Padsgo into our class”.(南京的21所中学目前正在推进“电子书包”项目。部分中学已经用Pad代替了课本。以“平板电脑进课堂”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文,标点符号不占格。)The following is for reference only.(以下问题仅供参考)1.What’s your opinion on“Pads go into our class”? 2.Do you agree or not? 3.Give your suggestions on learning on Pads.Padsgo into our class
As is shown above, many schools in America and other countries, including China, are using Pads instead of traditional textbooks in their classes.From my view, they are of great help to the students.Firstly, Pads provide students with various forms of background information.With the help of stories, music, pictures and videos, classes can be great attractions to students.Secondly, Pads make students learn more.When they have their lessons, students can type on Pads to gain more information than what the teachers have taught them.Last but not the least, Pads are so small and light that we can go anywhere with them in our pockets without carrying a large schoolbag full of books.I’m in favour of this move as long as they are not misused in class, especially when it comes to exams.2.Write at least 60 words on the topic “My opinion on online payment”(以“网络支付之我见”为题,写一篇不少于60个词的短文,标点符号不占格)提示:现在,大家在网上、超市或商场购物时,很流行用支付宝、微信钱包等支付工具,请发表你对这种现象的看法和建议。
My opinion on online payment Nowadays, people often use online payment when going shopping online or in the shopping mall.However, it has advantages as well as disadvantages.On one hand, online payment is more convenient and easier than traditional payment.It saves people a huge amount of time ,and this enables them to spend more time on work or other things that they want to do.On the other hand, online payment isn’t as safe as it seems, especially when people lost their phones.As a result, the government should make certain regulations to ensure the safety of online payment.To sum up, we should take everything into consideration, and only in these ways can we use online payment securely.3.为了提高人们的环保意识,你所在的环保小组计划组织一次环保宣传活动,假如你是组长,请用英文写一篇活动倡议,你的倡议必须包含以下内容: 1).What kinds of pollution have you noticed in your daily life? 2).What do you think caused the pollution? 3).What can you do to deal with the pollution?(注意:
1、短文字数不少于60个词,标点符合不占格。
2、短文中不得出现任何人名、校名及其他相关信息,否则不予评分。)
To be green consumers As is known to us,our environment has been polluted in the past decade.Water, land and air around us are so poisonous that we have developed a variety of diseases, including cancer.Behind the pollution, one major reason is that many people are not aware of the danger we are facing now.(Factories poured the waste water into the river nearby without being treated.Farmers overused the fertilizer and pesticide on the farm, hoping for a higher production.Citizens throw a larger amount of household waste every day.)To solve the problems, we should be green consumers.We can not only persuade others not to throw rubbish into the rivers, but also plant more trees to make the air cleaner.Moreover, we can use paper bags instead of plastic ones when we go shopping.Using public transportation instead of private cars is another choice.Only in these ways can we better our Earth.4.随着年龄增长,同学们或多或少都有一些自己的小秘密,当你有心里话的时候,你会选择去和父母、朋友或老师倾诉吗?写出自己的小秘密或者心里话,去向自己的父母、朋友或老师倾诉。
(注意:
1、短文字数不少于60个词,标点符合不占格。
2、短文中不得出现任何人名、校名及其他相关信息,否则不予评分。)
My inner thoughts and feelings to my maths teacher
I’m writing to express my sincere gratitude for your help with my maths study.I will never forget the experience when I began to learn geometry.I work hard on geometry but it’s not my cup of tea.I was in a low spirit and almost gave up.Luckily, your encouragement and help brought me fresh hopes for geometry.You tutored me after classes, and your way to solve thegeometrical problems always
interested me.Step by step, I became brave enough to challenge the hard problems.My confidence came back to me.Unbelievably, I won the second prize in the maths examination.It was the first time that I had experienced the happiness of success in my life.How time flies!Myjunior high school life will come to end.I always remember the profound influence you have made on my studies.5.假如你是李华,你们学校开设了有关中国传统文化的综合实践课。请你用英文写一篇不少于60字的短文给某英文网站投稿,谈谈为什么有必要开这门课,在课上你通常做什么以及你的感受。
Words for reference(以下短语仅供参考): show ,make tea, paper cutting ,dumpling ,proud Questions for reference(以下问题仅供参考)1).Why is it necessary to have classes about traditional Chinese culture? 2).What do you usually do in these classes? 3).How do you feel?
What I have learnt in traditional Chinese culture class We had courses about traditional Chinese culture this term.In my opinion, it is very necessary to have these lessons because not only can we get to know more about Chinese culture but also we can apply what we have learnt to our real life to make our life more colorful.In the classes, I’ve learnt a lot.The teachers showed us how to make tea and told us the history of tea.Paper cutting, a traditional chinese art,was also included and I can cut some beautiful paper flowers now.Making traditional Chinese food is my favorite, so we tried making dumplings and zongzi.It’s really interesting and I firmly believe that other students also love these classes like me.By having these classes, we both learnt a lot and made friends with our teachers.I am proud of being a Chinese.6.这两年真人秀节目开始走红,譬如爸爸去哪,(Where are we going, Dad), 奔跑吧兄弟(Running man),我们15个(We fifteen people)等等一经开播都得到观众的大力支持,这类节目都是在鼓励我们走出自己舒适的生活,去接受一些挑战,做一些自己以前没有做过的事情。
According to this, write at least 60 words on the topic “How to face the challenge?”
(据此,写出一篇不少于60字的短文,说明我们要不要去接受一些挑战,及面对挑战时应该以什么样的心态处理?标点符号不占格。)
How to face the challenge Our life is full of chances, but we also face challenges in the course of our growth.I always keep an open mind to face the challenges that I come across.A challenge is a friend.We live our life with its company.When I face a problem, I would rather treat it like a friend that I need to take care than an enemy that I must defeat.Only by keeping a peaceful and active mind can I make it.A challenge is a teacher.He tells me my strength and weakness.It encourages me for a higher aim.The learning and growth process is also a process of overcoming a challenge.It makes me confident and strong by being both a friend and a teacher.7.近两年流行一档农村孩子和城市孩子互换生活环境的节目。如果有这样一个体验机会,作为城市孩子的你,去了农村以后,该如何适应那里的生活?如何和那边的“爸爸妈妈”以及农村的小伙伴们相处?请以 My life in a countryside 写一篇不少于60个单词的作文。
My life in a countryside Born and living in Shanghai, I’m unfamiliar withthe life in the countryside.It is truly challenging and mysterious if I’m given the chance to go through the adventure.As the saying goes, do in Rome as Rome does.On one hand, I have to adapt the life as soon as possible, such as the terrible food and the awful living environment.On the other hand, I will cook some traditional dishes of my own family for “mom” and “dad” there to add a new taste to their table.For the children in the countryside, I hold the view that they are so kind and smart that I will make friends with them soon.I can tell them what the city life is like and share my stories with them.Frankly speaking, it will be my special experience that I never forget in the future.8.中考结束,你们班同学约定要举行一次大聚会。对比两幅图片,你会发现以前聚会大家欢声笑语,无所不谈。现在聚会朋友们低头不语,只听到各种信息的提示声。请你以The changes in our way of communication为题写一篇不少于60词的文章。文章内容包括以下几点:
1)对于两幅图中聚会时的不同情景,你的态度是怎样的?理由是什么?
2)给出改善的建议(至少2条)
The Changes in Our Way of Communication Now people are so keen on electronics that we spend most time on the net-pals instead of friends in front of us.To be frank, I am not for it.Most of us are living a busy life and it is not easy to be together once in a while, thus we’d better value the precious chance.In addition, getting together from time to time enables us to discuss something important that we can not talk about through QQ or Wechat.In order to avoid the same situation at our after-exam party, I’d like to suggest everyone turn our phones off or to silence.It is also a good choice to gather our phones and havesomeone look after them untill the party ends.Without such distraction, we can fully enjoy our time.In brief, I believe parties without phones can also be happy and meaningful.9.端午节是中国传统的节日,那么端午节你是怎么度过的呢?请你写一篇日记来记录你端午节的感受和收获。
Words for reference(以下短语仅供参考):
the Dragon Boat Festival , activities , presents , celebrate
Thursday, Jun.9th, 2016.Sunny
It is the Dragon Boat Festival today.I got up early because I was asked to prepare for our family get-together with mom.First, we had to get rice and reed leaves for our traditional food, zongzi.Making a zongzi is really a skillful job.I never made it a triangle at first.It was mom’s instruction and encouragement that made me succeed.Then in the afternoon, we went to the park for pleasure.We saw many people in the park.Some were flying kites in different colors and shapes, some were taking photos, others were walking and talking with each other.Everyone was having a great time there.I was busy and tired, but I learnt the secret of success, never giving up.What an interesting and meaningful Dragon Boat Festival we had today!
10.Write at least 60 words on the topic of “Studying from Babyhood”.以“学习从婴儿开始抓起”为题,写一篇不少于60字的文章
The following is for reference only.(以下问题仅供参考)1.What’s your opinion on studying from babyhood?(谈下你对学习从婴儿开始抓起的看法)2.Do you agree or not?(你是否赞同从婴儿抓起?)
3.Give your suggestions on studying from babyhood?(请谈一下你的个人观点)
Nowadays more parents hope that their children will enter famous schools.Therefore, it is very important to study from a baby.Personally, I agree with it.As we all know, if our babies study early, her brain will be fully developed, learning things more quickly.Our babies can learn a lot, from musical instruments, Chinese, Maths to English.In this way, they have the chance to enter a good kindergarten.If our babies study late, it will be hard to catch up with others.For all these reasons above, it is necessary to study at an early age.11.Write a letter at least 60 words, according to the given situation(根据所给的情景写一封不少于60词的邀请信)Suppose you are Mary, a student of Sunny School.Shanghai Disneyland Park is going to officially open to the public soon.Write a letter to your pen pal Jack and invite him to visit Shanghai Disneyland together.Phrase for reference(以下短语仅供参考)be keen on, officially open, combine with, have chance to do…, the most unforgettable thing,Dear Jack,Glad to write to you!I know you are keen on Mickey Mouse and Disney cartoons.There is great news that Shanghai Disneyland, the sixth one in the world, will be officially open to the public soon, combining Disney cartoon characters with games and adventures.We will have chance to explore six unique and unforgettable lands.We can not only enjoy the famous stage showing the King Lion but also join in many different theme activities especially the parades.In addition, we can go shopping in the Souvenir shop filled with lovely toys.The most unforgettable thing is to see Enchanted Storybook Castle!I’m sure it’ll be a fantastic journey here!
I am looking forward to your reply soon!
Yours sincerely,Mary
12.上海迪士尼度假区将于2016年06月16日正式开门迎客,并举办为期数日的盛大开幕 庆典,届时,必将会有很多游客进入园区游玩。作为上海中学生的一员,你对即将进园游玩的游客,有什么好的建议和意见。请以“My suggestions on visiting Shanghai Disneyland”为题写一篇不少于60词的短文,标点符号不占格。Questions for reference(以下问题仅供参考)1)Give a brief introduction about Shanghai Disneyland.2)Some suggestions on visiting Shanghai Disneyland.As we all know, Shanghai Disney Park will be open to the public soon.It’s founded by China and the United States.Although it is very expensive to visit Shanghai Disney Park, it’s still popular with a lot of tourists.However, how should we visit it happily and efficiently?
Firstly, we can make some preparations for the visit.For example, we can search for the best route online, and make arrangements that are both effective and comfortable.Secondly, it is also important to wear comfortable clothes and shoes for easy walking.To sum up, I hope these two suggestions will be of great help for you.Wish you a wonderful trip!
13.在生活中,大家经常会遇到意见不一致的时候。当你和他人意见不同时,你会选择听取他人的意见还是坚持自己的意见或其他。以“Listen to others or not”为题陈述一件你和他人意见不一样的事件,并写出你的处理方式。
In our life, we may meet different views on the same thing.In my eyes, the best way to deal with the problem is to consider others’ opinions before making the final decisions.Last month, the headmaster asked us to finish a project in pairs.In the beginning, my partner and I held different opinions.Neither he nor I wanted to change our mind.In order to avoid entering a dead end, we decided to discuss it together.Through listening to each other, we found the key points and the task was finished perfectly.I learn that when meeting a problem, try to listen to others and you will get something great!
14.Write at least 60 words about the topic “I bring my happiness to _____”(请以“我给______ 带来快乐”为题,写一篇不少于60个词的短文,标点符号不占格。)The following is for reference only.(以下问题仅供参考)1).Who do you bring your happiness to? 2).What do you bring to your family, friends or strangers? 3).How do you feel?
My favorite proverb is “Happiness is a choice, not a mood”.So I firmly choose to be a happy man who infects others.I hope that I can bring my happiness to people around me, my family, friends and even strangers.To my excitement, I can bring happiness to strangers who live in old people’s home.Grandmas and grandpas are really happy when I as well as my classmates go there and put on performance for them.At that moment, there are big smiles on their faces.In fact, I am really excited and feel that I am the happiest person in the world when bringing happiness to others.How happy it is!
15.2016年1月1日起,上海市颁布了《上海市烟花爆竹安全管理条例》,明确规定禁止外环以内燃放烟花爆竹。对此,你有什么看法?你每年都放烟花吗?写出你的想法和建议?
Setting off firecrackers is a Chinese tradition.It brings us a lot of happiness.So many people do it during the Spring Festival.But I don’t set off firecrackers and I think it should be banned.Firstly, setting firecrackers not only pollutes the air but also makes a lot of noise.They are harmful to our health.What’s more, every year many people are badly injured because of the firecrackers, which make their family sad during the festival.So in order to protect the environment and our safety, I think it is necessary to stop people from setting off firecrackers.
第三篇:2015中考作文预测
主题素材专项备考
一一2015年中考作文备考素材关键词:真情
【2015年中考作文命题分析】
真情,是每一道作文试题的核心命意,感情唯有真实才可贵,感情唯有真实才美丽。“心灵”“美好”“美丽”“真情”之类的字眼高频出现于各地中考文题之中。“分享是美丽 的“(安顺)、“美丽的绽放”(潜江)、“触动心灵的”(遂宁)、“感悟美好”(凉山)等2014年中考作文试题便是这一主题高频呈现的明证。0 1 4年中考此类文题还有:我心灵的甘露(天津),那份不一样的真情(长沙),——就在身边(宜宾),感动(雅安),深处(宁波),心泉叮咚(沈阳),等等。
让发自心灵深处的声音穿透肺腑停驻于笔头纸端,让美丽的真情倾泻于字里行间,你一定能在这样美好的真情中看到一个全新的世界。
按照这一思路,真情类作文备考,我们还可关注以下这类相似的文题训练: 情到深处
心灵之花盛开的季节 我___了(从“哭”“笑”“陶醉”“迷惘”“疑惑”“懂(明白)”等词语中选填一个)不想___(从“住校”“成为作业的机器”“做笼中的小鸟”“压抑自己的情绪”等词语中选填一个)想___的时候(家、你、母亲、父亲、玩、旅行„„)无论写怎样的真情,都离不开喜怒哀乐。“喜”有喜悦、愉悦、兴奋、沉浸,“怒”有生气、愤怒、怨恨、憎恶、厌弃,“哀”有悲伤、痛心、悔恨、惋惜,“乐”有快乐、陶醉、自豪、得意„„只要我们将内心潜在的真实情感发掘出来,因真实的生活而自然生发出真实的情感,就一定能写出令自己心动的文章来一一如果连自己都感动不了,可别指望阅卷者青睐哦。【经典素材】 文段一:
他在长长的行列里,等候护照检验;我就站在外面,用眼睛跟着他的背影一寸一寸往前挪。终于轮到他,在海关窗口停留片刻,然后拿回护照,闪入一扇门,倏乎不见。
我一直在等候,等候他消失前的回头一瞥。但是他没有,一次都没有。
此刻他二十一岁,上的大学,正好是我教课的大学。但即使是同路,他也不愿搭我的车。即使同车,他戴上耳机一一只有一个人能听的音乐,是一扇紧闭的门。有时他在对街等候公车,我从高楼的窗口往下看:一个高高瘦瘦的青年,眼睛望向灰色的海;我只能想象,他的内在世界和我的一样波涛深邃,但是,我进不去。一会儿公车来了,挡住了他的身影。车子开走,一条空荡荡的街,只立着一只邮筒。
我慢慢地、慢慢地了解到,所谓父女母子一场,只不过意味着,你和他的缘分就是今生今世不断地在目送他的背影渐行渐远。你站立在小路的这一端,看着他逐渐消失在小路转弯的地方,而且,他用背影告诉你:不必追。
一一龙应台《目送》 【运用剖析】 “描写+抒情”,是真情表达最为常用的方式。描写,要力求精准形象;抒情,要尽可能写出真实的情感。文段从“他”的“等候”“停留片刻”“闪入”“倏乎不见”,“我”的“站”“挪”“等候”等几个简洁的词语,极为精练地传达出人物内心真情,并将之前发生的相关事件插叙进来,使描写的内容显得更为丰富,以便为后文哲理性的抒情铺垫。这是描写的部分。
之后,作者则从“我”内心的真实情感出发,以抒情的笔触写及“我”之于事件的思考。“目送他的背影渐行渐远”是抒情的核心,“不必追”则真挚而深刻的感悟结论,也是至为感性的人生启示。这样的抒情不是无本之木无源之水,它紧紧依托于前文的铺垫,更因为抒情的“形象性”而使情感显得更加自然,更加真挚。
叙写真情就该这样,由人事景物自然生发情感,让情感表述更加形象。文段二:
我还记得2002年正月初二的那一天,我和爱人应邀到城西的弟弟家去吃饭,我们没有乘车从城里走,而是上了堤坝,绕着小城步行而去。那天下着雪,落雪的天气通常是比较温暖的,好像雪花用它柔弱的身体抵挡了寒流。
堤坝上一个行人都没有,只有我们俩,手挽着手,踏着雪无言地走着。山峦在雪中看上去模模糊糊的,而堤坝
下的河流,也已隐遁了踪迹,被厚厚的冰雪覆盖了。河岸的柳树和青杨,在飞雪中看上去影影绰绰的,天与地显得是如此的苍茫,又如此的亲切。走着走着,我忽然落下了眼泪,明明知道过年落泪是不吉祥的,可我不能自持,那种无与伦比的美好滋生了我的伤感情绪。三个月后,爱人别我而去,那年的冬天再回到故乡时,走在白雪茫茫的堤坝上的,就只是我一人了。那时我恍然明白,那天我为何会流泪,因为天与地都在暗示我,那美好的情感将别你而去,你将 被这亘古的苍凉永远环绕着!
一一迟子建《我的世界下雪了》
【运用剖析】
这是一个以曲折的笔法传递真情的范例。
同样是以描写起笔,作者让我们 看到了飘洒的雪花,让人感觉能抵挡寒流的雪花,看到了那么熟悉而亲切的河流。但作者并未就此抒发内心的真挚情感,而是让“泪”先流了下 来一一这泪是真实可触的,却让读者感觉有些茫然,为什么明明知道落泪是不吉祥的,还如此抑制不住自己的情感?但当我们读完整个语段之后,一切便恍然大悟:原来,是“美好的情感将别你而去,你将被这亘古的苍凉永远环绕”!而这美好的情感,如果你读了《我的世界下雪了》全文就会明白,是“我”与“爱人”间那份相濡以沫的深情。
许多时候,我们都会莫名地喜怒哀乐,说它“莫名”,只是因为眼下还没能感悟出是怎样的真情让自己生发相应的情绪,一旦找到了情感的“触发点”,你便恍然明白:原来,是 深埋在心底的某种情感让自己拥有这样的举动。
迟子建以她的生花妙笔告诉了我们如何描写这种看似“莫名”的情感,相信你也能把类似的情感写得真实而动情。
【2015年中考作文试题前瞻】
1.雨,再熟悉不过的天气现象。雨,又不仅仅是天气现象,它或许还与你内心的情感有关。
请以“走过多情雨季”为题写一篇作文。
要求:①除诗歌外,文体自选;②结合自己的生活体验写出真情实感,且全文不少于600字。2.“百度词典”对“心花怒放”一词的解释如下:怒放,盛开。心里高兴得像花儿盛开一样。形容极其高兴。请以“心花怒放“为题写一篇文章。
要求:①除诗歌外,文体自选;②结合自己的生活体验写出真情实感,且全文不少于600字。【素材链接】
用行动传递人间真情
爷孙2人因交通意外而不慎落入10米深的河沟里,险些丧命,山西3名铁路职工英勇施救却不留名。一心想要报恩的爷孙辗转数日终于找到了救命恩人。
10米深的河沟,常年流淌着1米多深的河水,被困河沟里的小轿车,无法打开的车门,呼救无助的老人和不谙世事的女童,手拉手迅速蹬水走来,用木棍用力拉撬车门前来施救的3位好心人,救人英雄朴实的话语,未留下姓名就已远去的背影„„一个个精彩画面的回放,把3名普普通通的山西铁路职工用爱谱写的故事呈现在世人面前。
素材运用:这件小事再次验证了平凡人身上传递的那份真情的力量。“遇上这事谁都会伸手相助的”,英雄们朴实的话语,折射了平凡人身上那道耀眼的光芒。“赠人玫瑰,手 留余香”,从大家默默而无私的行动中看,素材可运用于“帮助”这一话题;普通人之所以不普通,在于他们的血液里奔流着真情待人的因子,从这个角度而言,素材可运用于“平凡中的伟大”这一话题。
迁安“老好人”候秀霞
2010年4月,侯秀霞送走了80多岁的奶奶婆。在奶奶婆的灵柩前,侯秀霞痛哭流涕,表示自己一定不辜负奶奶婆的重托,让大伯公公安享幸福晚年。大伯公公名叫朱瑞,侯秀霞结婚后,时常去照顾他们。奶奶婆去世后,侯秀霞也不负重托,吃的穿的都可着大伯公公。大伯公公因脑血栓住了4次医院,每次都在侯秀霞的精心照料下转危为安。如今,在她的精心照顾下,大伯公公的身体一天天地硬朗起来。
侯秀霞除了打理好自己家里的事情外,还尽自己所能,帮助周围的邻居。谁家有需要,她都会去帮助;哪家有矛盾,她也会去劝解;做了什么好吃的,她也常常给邻居们送一些„„就是因为这些小事,侯秀霞“老好人”的外号传开了。
素材运用:真情助人已属不易,用真情传递人间大爱更显其可贵,从这个角度而言,素材可用于“传递”这一话题;侯秀霞本就是个老人,老人该是这个社会的弱势群体,但她总感觉到“奶奶婆”一样的孤寡老人比自己更弱,将幸运者对不幸者的真情关怀当成了自己的一份责任,从这个角度而言,素材可用于“责任”这一话题。
【佳作示例】
走过多情雨季——团慈溪市新世纪实验学校陆雨欣 雨,总在不经意间给你带来些淡淡的伤感。周三晴转暴雨
刺目的日光无法照彻我忐忑的心,心的阴霾处躲着个令人烦躁的小预兆。
和骏、威并排走出食堂,难得的漫步时光都显得那么滞笨,拖着碎步,踅进了办公室。因为粗心大意,因为挂着陌生面孔的定义,科学测试,我竟折了半壁江山!一向好强的我,一时之间眼眶微润,咽下泪水,匆忙从后门踅回教室,狠狠地完成试卷的订正。再一次小偷般踅到办公室等待老师讲解时,同学们争相查看成绩的场景,终是让泪水无情决了堤,我感觉得到自己身体微微的战栗,我听得到自己内心的哀伤和悔恨。
逝了热情的老师和同学注意到一隅不停抽泣的我,纷纷踱过来安慰,哭势一时间得到缓解,小妮种种卖萌的劝慰更让我感到温暖,老师耐心细致的讲解则既让我明白了细心才是我最重要的挚友,也让我因为懂得自己的成绩与“粗心”休戚相关而徒增悔恨。回到教室,一夜无语之间,内心传来的却是无助的泪。
是夜,雨滴落于静寂的夜,我的天空里阴云密布。周四多云转阵雨
一夜仿佛一整个世纪,悔恨在时间的打磨之下少了尖锐的棱角,似乎能静下心来听老师的讲解了,就这样静默着直到午餐之后。
独自一人迈入办公室,心若止水:倒数第五!虽在心理上早有准备,却依然被这个结局打傻。乖乖地等待老师惩罚,老师却故作严肃地抛下一句:“教训,想必你已经记住了。”沉寂的心湖一时间波涛汹涌。
窗外,那棵永远挺拔的雪松,被一阵突如其来的阵雨击打得噼啪作响。
周五雨转晴
雨,在中午时分停了。我的心里,找不着一丝丝回家的热情。该怎么解释呢?摇摇头,叹息一声一一又该惹他们生气了。
妈妈一如既往地站在门口迎我。夕阳染红门前绿叶带上稀疏的几株衰草,一如我内心一般破败。“科学,考得好差。”不知哪来的勇气,我第一时间宣布了这个“噩耗”。一向暴躁的母亲出乎意料地没有如雷般暴跳,淡淡一笑之间默然不语。
其实,我更愿意母亲一如往常般训斥一通。
“看见了吗?天晴了,连续下了两天都晴了。有什么好难过的?”耳畔传来父亲的声音。抬头望向窗外,夕阳染红了整个西天。
走过多情的雨季,呈现于你眼前的必定是温暖的阳光。
同学微评
马骏:似乎,写考试失利的文章很多,雨欣的这篇文章让叙事与借景抒发的真情交替出现,水乳交融,艺术效果果然不同凡响。看来,陈酒新瓶,让真情之花在普通生活的绿地上尽情开放,才能让平凡的素材焕发出崭新的生命。
第四篇:中考预测作文
假设你是李华,在得知四川大地震的消息之后,作为校学生会主席,你决定给灾区的中学生写一封慰问信,主要内容包括:
1、得知四川发生突如其来的特大地震灾害,心情非常难过;
2、看到你们表现得非常镇定、坚强,感动得热泪盈眶;
3、患难见真情,全校师生向你们表示慰问的同时,共计捐款12万元;
4、美好家园可以重建,希望你们要看到希望、充满信心。
参考词汇:捐款 make a donation to
One possible version:
Dear friends,I'm awfully sorry to hear that a horrible and severe earthquake unexpectedly hit your hometown.Faced with such a rarely-seen disaster, you remain so calm and strong-willed that we are all moved to tears.A friend in need is a friend indeed.Thinking about your present situation, we can not wait a minute to make every bit of our effort to help you.I, as the chairman of student union, on behalf of all my schoolmates, express our most sincere pity and care for you.Besides, we make a donation of 120 thousand yuan to you, expecting that it can help you go through the difficulty.A better hometown can be rebuilt.Therefore, never give up whatever happens.Remember we won’t be far away when you need any help!
Yours Sincerely,Li Hua
The Wenchuan Earthquake
May 12, 2008, the Chinese people know about this big news-Wenchuan earthquake.In this earthquake.Many people left this world, so I am sad but I am glad to see that more and more People to help Wenchuan.I hope I can help people in Wenchuan.In the future, Wenchuan building will be better than before.It will be a beautiful city.4月20日四川雅安发生7.0级大地震,作为一名中学生,你有什么样的感受呢?你有没有献出自己的爱心呢?下面是你整理的2013年中考英语作文预测:雅安地震的参考范文。
2013年4月20日,四川省雅安地区发生了7.0级大地震,那里的人们痛失亲人和家园。全国人民众志成城,抗震救灾。作为一名中学生,请你谈谈你的做法
和感受。
要求:文章语言流畅,逻辑清晰,用词准确,80—100字左右;词汇参考:地震 earthquake悲痛 sorrow受到感动 be deeply moved安慰 comfort重建 rebuild自愿做某事 volunteer to do sth
参考范文:
On April 20th, a big earthquake happened in Ya’an, Sichuan.Many people lost their relatives and their homes.All the Chinese people feel quite sorrow.A lot of people volunteer to help them.Some people raise money for them, some people buy something for them, some people go there to comfort the sad children.Thousands of soldiers help them to save their relatives and rebuild their homes Even foreign friends also give them a hand.I’m deeply moved by these people.So I’ll use my pocket money to buy some food and school things for the children there.I think all of us should try our best to help them to get out of the trouble together.导语:雅安地震给灾区儿童带来了极大的伤害,他们有的失去了亲人,有的则受到了心灵上的创伤。请给灾区的儿童写一封慰问信吧!下面是小编整理的一篇参考范文。
I feel so sorry for your loss, maybe yesterday you're leading a happy life, but this unexpected terrible disaster destoryed all, no one would like that coming.But don't let the earthquake ruin your life and take your sunshine away!I hope you overcome the pain in a short time and get back to school with all your classmates.Hope you always feel be loved and protected, you must believe that there is a lot of nice people in our society and they're all willing to help if you met any difficulties.I believe you are strong in mind.Life is hard, try to turn this memory into consistant power.No matter what happens, as long as we are together, we will never ever ever ever give up!There is always hope and love!
第五篇:2014中考作文预测
这篇2014年语文中考作文题目预测的文章,是无忧考网特地为大家整理的,希望对大家有所帮助!
预测一:《我的中国梦》、《梦中的XXXX》。
推荐理由:十八大以后,中国梦成为一个热点名词。每个人都有自己的梦想,每个梦想都是中国梦的一部分。考生写中国梦,不要写得大而广,抓住自己梦想的一个内容,就行了。例如:住房、诚信、环保、平安、医疗等,围绕一个主题,写记叙文,感悟中国梦即可。需要注意的是,写这类东西,尽量不要做愤青,不要骂政府和国家,不要写“遍地贪官”,以免走歪。
预测二:《触动心灵的风景》
推荐理由:该作文题是写人与写事的结合,甚至,你可以写成一篇单纯的写景作文。风景,既可以是看得到的景色,也可以是一类现象的象征。写出你身边的一种感人的场面或景象,抒发你内心的感悟和感慨,提炼出对成长有益的价值,是这篇作文的要求。如:毕业的离别场面、抢险救灾的感人场面、考场外父母陪考的辛苦场面、大雨中警察指挥交通的场面、扶贫济困的场面,都是值得你搜集和书写的素材。
预测三:“爱”“正能量”话题作文
推荐理由:当前,“正能量”这个词,见报率很高。大家要做好准备。这类话题作文,不能讲大话,说大道理,必须从小见大。我们身边的每一种渴望,只要是健康的,与国家有观点,就是中国梦的组成部分。对正义的渴望、对环境的保护、对住房的期待、对健康的思考,都是中国梦的组成部分。如果是我,可以写写我家住房多么狭窄,然后期待宽敞明亮的居室——这就是我的中国梦。如果是民工,在劳累的夜晚,有一张容身的床,就这中国梦的组成部分。如果是农民,身边的河流不流淌着污染的脏水,就是中国梦的一部分。写一件事,放大,抒情,就是一篇中国梦的好作文。
“爱”话题作文,是写人写事的结合。爱,既可以是母爱、父爱、师爱,也可以引申为“大爱”,即爱岗敬业、无私奉献、遵纪守法等。考生需要想好一类,然后叙事,末尾扣题抒情。例如,你可以写风雨中交警的坚守——爱是风雨中的坚守;你可以写母爱——爱是清晨餐桌绿洲;你可以写军人——爱是路边那么惊艳的绿色;你可以写扶贫济困——爱是青春无私的风险。甚至,你还可以笔走偏锋——爱是老爸的那记耳光、爱是老爸深夜的等待。预测四:《XXXX的精彩瞬间》
推荐理由:这是写事儿的作文,貌似简单,但是写起来很不容易。因为,要求学生们写的是瞬间,凸出瞬间的精彩,就得有大量的描写,末尾还得有扣题和抒情。这对于习惯于写大事,写长故事的学生而言,把瞬间写大,显得极具挑战性。生活中的瞬间很多,你选择哪个呢?再就是,怎才算是精彩呢?孩子们需要开动脑筋。
预测五:《与你一起走过的时光》
推荐理由:这是写人写事且偏向于写人的作文,具有一定的难度。首先,这是一篇第二人称的作文,孩子们容易在人称上发生混淆。其次,题目中的“你”,既可以是人物,也可以是物品,也可以是一种品质。例如,“你”可以是字典,也可以是一种向往,也可以是一
种困难。当然,就作文而言,“你”最好是一种看见到摸得见的人物和事物。如果你对第二人称的作文,掌握得不够熟练,那就赶紧练练吧。
预测六:《在XXXX中成长》
推荐理由:这是一篇倾向于叙事的作文。就文题本身而言,显得有点老生常谈,但是,这是一篇最为贴近新课标要求的作文。建议考生就这篇作文,从不同的角度写出自己的真实感受。此文的补题技巧,要求也相对高一些。在校园中成长、在这座城市里成长、在温暖的家庭中成长;在思念中成长、在一次次跌倒后成长、在训斥中成长;在雾霾中成长、在自信中成长。同学们一定要有个别致的补题。这篇作文可以写成“总分总并列段”结构,当然,也不妨写成小标题作文。
预测七:《课堂里的XXXX》
推荐理由:既然新课标要求孩子们写身边的真实体验,那么,就拿这个作文题目练手吧。课堂里肯定发生过许多你难忘的事情,或者出现过很多触动心灵的人物,回忆一下,补全题目,写出你真实的感受吧。这篇作文需要场面描写,也在考验着学生们的描写能力。不过,这篇作文孩子们不会感到为难,写生动则难了些。在补题的时候,一定要注意补得别致些、生动些。在选材的时候,最好是生动些、诙谐些。
预测八:《XXX教给我XXX》
推荐理由:从社会、他人、景物中,提炼出动人心魄的感悟,这是新课标对初中作文的要求。既然这样,你曾经领略出什么,就写出来吧。双重补题,留给考生足够的想象空调间。前面的补题,既可以是人,也可以是事儿,也可以是景色,还可以是一种现象。如:妈妈教给我坚韧、那次事故教给我交通规则、烂漫花枝教给我珍惜青春、“送礼”教给我自强,等等。
预测九:《我很XX,但是我很XXX》
推荐理由:成长中,总有一些不如意的机遇,但成长就是克服阻力,在追求中进步的。20多年前,就有一首歌《我很丑,但是我很温柔》,我们写这篇作文,补题的时候,两个补题,要注意形成反差:我很笨,但是我很刻苦;我很累,但是我很坚强;我很开朗,但是我很纠结;我很傻,但是我很被人喜欢;我很想成功,但是我很无奈。这篇作文,你可以写你成长的经历,详略要得当。这是一篇容易出彩的作文。练练吧,没亏吃。
预测十:“害羞”、“惭愧”、“有趣”、“天真”等话题作文
推荐理由:我们在初中写作文写了三年,感动、温暖、财富、成长、礼物、思念等话题作文,早已熟悉有加。但身边那些看起来很俗的事情,往往也蕴涵着人生的真知和享受。例如,童年里的天真、无知、趣事,至今回味起来津津有味。再如,你肯定有过害羞、惭愧、心跳的经历精力,就像你无意中跟异性在教室门口走个碰头顶,脸会变红。