入学考试 改错+书面表达

第一篇：入学考试 改错+书面表达

第四部分：写作（共两节，满分35分）

第一节：短文改错（共10小题，每小题1分，满分10分）

假定英语课上老师要求同桌之间交换修改作文，请你修改你同桌写的以下作文。文中共有10处语言错误，每句中最多有两处。每处错误仅涉及一个单词的增加、删除或修改。

增加：在缺词处加一个漏字符号(∧)，并在其下面写出该加的词。

删除：把多余的词用斜线()划掉。

修改：在错的词下划一横线，并在该词下面写出修改后的词。

注意：1.每处错误及其修改均仅限一词；

2.只允许修改10处，多者（从第11处起）不计分。

Dear Mary,I’ve received your e-mail.Don’t worried about me.I’m

getting on well with my research work in the lab.But in my surprise, you say you will give in learning English.The reason is that you have not done well in it recently and you have lose interest.I’m afraid I can’t agree with you.I knew it is not easy to learn English, and it is widely used in the world today and it will be a important tool in the future.Beside, it is becoming more and more important in our daily life.I am sure that if you study hardly, you will succeed.I’m looking forward to hear good news from you!

Yours,Li Hua

参考答案：1.worried 前加be,或worried改为worry

2.in my surprise __________ to my surprise

3.give in__________ give up

4.lose_________lost

5.knew_______know

6.and________ but

7.a____an

8.Beside_________Besides

9.hardly_____hard

10.hear________hearing

第二节：书面表达（共1小题，满分25分）

假设你是新华中学的学生李华，得知某英文报招聘兼职记者，你有意应聘，请按下列要点给报社写一封自荐信。

1.表示感兴趣

2.说明优势：知识面、英语水平、合作精神、相关经历

3.希望得到回复

注意：

1.词数：100左右

2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯

3.开头已给出，但不计入总数

参考词汇：兼职记者part-time reporters优势advantages职位position

Dear Sir or Madam,I’m a student from Xinhua Middle School.——————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————。Yours faithfully,Li Hua

参考作文：

Dear Sir or Madam,I’m a student from Xinhua Middle School.I’m glad to learn that you want a few part-time English reporters.I’m quite

interested in it.I think I’m fit for the job and I have many advantages.As a student, I’ve read a lot and have much knowledge in many fields.I’m fond of English and do well in both speaking and writing.Besides, I’m easy to get along with and enjoy working together with others.Above all, I once worked as a reporter for my school broadcasting station.So I’m sure I can do the job well if I get the position.I’m looking forward to your reply.Yours faithfully,Li Hua

第二篇：补课短文改错练习.和书面表达doc（最终版）

短文改错练习

（一）Mr Zhu was my math teacher when I study in primary school.He was very

strictly with us and that I never saw him smile in class during the first few

weeks.One day I suddenly got terrible headache at his class.I felt very horrible

that I couldn`t help crying.Mr Zhu stopped his teaching and walking to me，“What`s wrong? ”he asked gently.Heard what had happened, he immediately

put me on his back but carried me to the hospital.The doctor treated me

in time and I recovered soon.Seeing this, Mr Zhu smiled at me and said

“I am so glad you are better now!” Oh, how a bright smile!I learned from

that experience he was really a kind-heart man although he looked very serious.书面表达练习

（一）假定你是李华，你所在的学校要以A good teacher为主题举行一场英文演讲赛，请根据以下要点些一篇演讲稿，介绍你所喜欢的一位老师。要点：1.对学生的关爱2.能力与责任心

要求：1.词数100左右（开头和结尾以为你写好不计入词数）

2.可适当发挥，以使行文连贯

Hello everyone.It is a great pleasure for me to be here today.________________

That`s all.Thank you for your attention.Hello everyone.It is a great pleasure for me to be here today.My English teacher Mrs zhang is a good teacher in my mind.She loves us and Treat us as her own children.Patient and responsible,she is always ready to help Anyone poor in English and encourage them to catch up with the others.And she is happy whenever we make progress.She loves English and really enjoys teaching.Learning a foreign language may be boring,but it becomes interesting in Mrs Zhang`s class,because she has a way to make her class lively and sometimes full of humor.She aims to improve our proficiency in listening,speaking,writing and reading.The results are impressive.That`s all.Thank you for your attention.

第三篇：书面表达

中考英语书面表达的考点集汇、讲解和训练

【考点扫描】

书面表达是每年中考必考题型，是考查学生交际能力的一个重要组成部分。书面表达通常有三种形式：

1、书信、日记、通知、留言、假条；

2、看图作文；

3、根据汉语提示作文。

无论是那一种书面表达形式，考生所写的短文都要紧扣主题、文理通顺，要素完整，语言准确、得当、格式正确、无大、小写和拼写错误，标点符号正确，能达到交际目的。【名师解难】 一.训练方法

1.记。认真系统复习和背诵基础知识和优美的句子、句型。中国有句古话，叫“熟读唐诗三百首，不会吟诗也会作”。同样，要使自己具有较强的写作能力，首先应该熟读和背诵一些句型和短文。许多同学写出来的语言根本不符合英语的语言习惯，相当一部分人有对照中文逐字翻译的不良习惯，不去理会中英文的差异。大量的背诵和阅读是提高写作能力的有效办法，同学们若有大量的现成语言积累在脑海里，自己写起文段来，就可以做到脱口而出，或是模仿、套用，甚至发挥。

2.练。每练一篇书面表达题，都要真正学到一点东西，不可贪多而边学边忘。平时可以采用循序渐进、灵活多样的练习方式。从根据提示词写单句开始，到写单句，然后到写几句话，最后到写流利的文段。尽量尝试多种形式的写作，如短信、说明、通知、便条、明信片、看图写作、根据表格或记录写短文等。

3.写。要进行实战写作。要求自己在20分钟内写出100个词的短文，并且质量高、1 内容全、形式正确。这样形成习惯，考试时就能得心应手。二.应试策略

1.审题目：要切中题意。《中考考试说明》指出，书面表达要切中题意。怎样才能切中题意？就是要认真审题，看到考题后，先不要急于动笔，要仔细看清题目要求的内容。在自己的头脑中构思出一个框架或画面，确定短文的中心思想，不要匆匆下笔，看懂题意，根据图画、图表、提纲或短文提供的资料和信息来审题。审题要审格式、体裁、人物关系、故事情节、主体时态、活动时间、地点等。

2.圈要点：防止遗漏要点。要点是给分的一个重要因素。为了防止写作过程中遗漏要点，同学们要充分发挥自己的观察力，把情景中给出的各个要点逐条列出。

3.列提纲：为写作做好准备。根据文章要点短文的中心思想将主要句型、关键词语记下，形成提纲。

4.定基调：定出时态、人称、顺序、开头、结尾。5.写全文：写短文时要做到以下六个方面：

(1)避免使用汉语式英语，尽量使用自己熟悉的句型。几种句型可交替使用，以避免重复和呆板。

(2)多用简单句型，记事、写人一般都不需要复杂的句型。可适当多使用陈述句、一般疑问句、祈使句和感叹句。不用或少用非谓语或情态动词等较复杂的句型。(3)注意语法、句法知识的灵活运用。1）语态、时态要准确无误。

2）主谓语要一致，主语的人称和数要和谓语一致。3）注意人称代词的宾格形式。

4）注意冠词用法，例如： He is an honest student.中的an不能写成a。

5）注意拼写、标点符号和大小写，例如：receive, believe, fourteen, forty, ninth, restaurant等。

(4)描写人物时，要生动具体，例如：

1）外表特征：tall, short, fat, thin, strong, weak, ordinary-looking 等。2）服饰颜色：red, yellow, blue, white, green, brown, black 等。3）内心境界：glad, happy, sad, excited, anxious, interested 等。4）感情描写：love, like, hate, feel, laugh, cry, smile, shout 等。5）动作描写：come, go, get, have, take, bring, fetch 等。

(5)上下文要连贯。上下文的连贯性也是评分的一条原则，因此同学们应把写好的句子，根据故事情节，事情发生的先后次序（时间或空间），使用一些表示并列、递进等过渡词进行加工整理，使文章连贯、自然、流畅。同学们应注意下面过渡的用法： 1）表示并列关系的：and, as well as, or… 2）表示转折关系的：but, yet, however… 3）表示时间关系的：when, while, after, before, then, after that… 4）表示因果关系的：so, therefore ,as a result… 5）表示目的的：in order to, in order that , so as to, so that… 6）表示列举的：for example , such as… 7）表示总结性的：in general, in all, in a word, generally speaking…

(6)不会表达，另辟蹊径。中考作文给分是以要点和语言准确度而定，不以文采打分。造句越简单准确越好，造复合句容易出错，容易被扣分，阅卷场上有句话：“错误面前人人平等，文采好不加分”。如遇到个别要点表达不出来或难以表达，可采用变通的办法，化难为易，化繁为简。总之，所造句子要正确、得体、符合英语表达习惯。(6)改病句：认真检查，改正错误。中考作文时，由于时间紧、内容多，同学们出错在所难免。因此，改错这一环节必不可少。中考作文评卷是根据要点、语言准确性、上下 3 文的连贯性来给分，根据错误多少来扣分。因此，中考时花几分钟时间用来检查错误显得尤为重要。检查错误应从以下几个方面入手： 1）格式是否有错。2）拼写有无错误。3）语言是否用错。4）时态、语态错误。5）标点错误。6）人称是否用错。三.注意事项

书面表达要特别注意书写工整，卷面整洁。每年阅卷老师在十来天的时间里要看十几万考生的作文，工作量之大，时间之紧，可想而知。书写是否工整，卷面是否整洁与得分高低直接有关。【中考范例】

VII.书面表达（共1题，计10分）

假如你叫张强。请根据下面美国朋友Bob的来信内容，结合你自己的情况写一篇语言连惯、符合逻辑的英文回信。

要求：1.认真阅读来信的内容，从中获得你需要的信息。2.词数：80左右。回信的开头、结尾已给出，但不计入总词数。注意：回信中不得出现你的真实地址和所在学校的名称。

Hello！I’m your new friend.My name is Bob.I’m fifteen.I’m American.I live in New York.4 I am a middle school student.I’m good at maths.It is very interesting.My favourite sport is basketball.And I am not only a basketball fan but also a good player.I like pop music.My friends and I often sing pop songs

After school, I am interested in getting on-line.I have known a lot about China from the Internet.Now I’m learning Chinese.I hope I will visit your country one day.Please write to me and tell me something about your life.I’m looking forward to hearing from you.Bob Dear Bob, _________________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________________________ Yours，Zhang Qiang 【解析】根据前面提到第六个步骤，我们来写一下这篇书面表达。

1.审题目：通过审题目我们可以知道：本篇书面表达应是写一封回信，写信人是张强，收信人是Bob，信的内容应是介绍张强自己的情况。

2.圈要点：根据来信判断，写回信必须包括以下要点：

1、收到对方的来信；

2、愿意和对方交朋友；

3、自己的姓名、年龄和住址；

4、自己的身份、特长和爱好；

5、自己的希望。

3、列提纲：1.got your letter 2.glad to be your friend 3.name, zhang Qiang, fifteen, live in Shanxi 4.a middle school student, like English, like sports, good at drawing, 5.hope we’ll meet in China

4、定基调：1.时态：收到来信用一般过去时，介绍情况用一般现在时，希望用一般将来时。2.人称用第一人称。3.可按提纲的顺序来写。4.开头和结尾题目已经给出。

5、写全文： Dear Bob, I got your letter yesterday.I’m very glad to be your pen friend.My name is Zhang Qiang.I’m fifteen years old, too.I live in Shaanxi.I’m a middle school student, too.I like English and physics very much.I also like sports, but I’m good at drawing.I know a little about America.Could you tell me something more about your country in your next letter? I hope we’ll meet in China some day.I’m sure we’ll have a good time together.Please write(to)me soon.Yours, Zhang Qiang 6

6、改病句：认真复查一边，如有错误，加以改正。【满分演练】

（1）

华山是中国名山之一。假设外国友人到你校参观后，准备去旅游。请根据以下要点向外国友人简单介绍华山（the Hua Mountain）

1．位于陕西东部，是中国著名的旅游胜地，每年有大批中外游客前去旅游观光。2．乘汽车去大约要花1个小时；也可以乘火车去。

3．登山便可领略其云海（the sea of clouds）、奇松（wondrous pines）、怪石（unique rocks）等秀丽的风景及清晨美丽的日出。注意：

1．字数：80词左右。2．请不要逐字翻译。（2）根据提示和要求完成下面短文

假如你（Li Lei）在去年夏令营认识的一个朋友Jim从英国给你寄来一件礼物—— 一件红色的衬衫，并附有一封信。在信中他向你问好，他想知道你近来在忙些什么。请你给他写一封回信（100个词左右）表示感谢。回信要包括以下内容： 1.向Jim问好并对他表示感谢。

2.礼物是你最喜欢的颜色，尺寸很合适，你非常喜欢。

3.告诉Jim你近来很好，上周刚过完生日，生日聚会很热闹。询问Jim的近况，并表示希望他能来中国。

注意1.信的格式已经给出。

2.信中不得使用真实的人名、地名。（3）

根据中文意思和英文提示词语，写出意思连贯、符合逻辑的英文文段。所给英文提示词语必须都用上，中文提示内容不必逐句翻译，每组英文提示所写出的句数不限。

今天是6月23日星期日，天气晴朗。你和你的同学张宏参观了西安市动物园。那里的动物十分有趣，人见人爱。当你看到有位游客在向猴子投喂食物时，就上前阻止并说……

请你用英文写一篇日记，记述今天的经历。（请注意日记格式）1．fine day, sun, bright 2．visit, Beijing Zoo 3．animal, so interesting, people, love 4．see, visitor, throw…to, stop, say（4）

根据中文设置的情景、英文提示词语以及表格所提供的信息，写出语法正确、意思连贯、符合逻辑的英文文段。注意1.字数60~80。

2.所给的英文提示词语及表格所提供的信息必须都用上。（可适当发挥）3.发言稿的开头和结尾已给出。

假设你是张斌，今年暑假你将参加学校组织的赴加拿大“绿色之旅”夏令营活动。请你准备一篇在开营式上的自我介绍发言稿。

name, Zhang Bin, fifteen years old, live in Xi’an, favorite subject, biology…

Dear friends

I’m very glad to introduce myself to you._______________________ _________________________________________________________________________________

That’s all.Thank you for listening.（5）

根据中文提示和英文提示词语写一篇短文。

今年暑假，有一批美国中学生要来你们学校访问。请你写一篇有关西安的简介，以便和他们交流。

注意：1.字数100左右；

2.必须使用所给英文提示。Capital of Shaanxi, Lie in the Northwest, many places of interest, autumn, best season 9（6）看图写话。

根据以上四幅图和提示词语，写出一篇语法正确、意思连贯、语句通顺、符合逻辑的短文，开头已给出。要求：1.叙述要用第三人称。2.词数60~80个左右。3.要表达自己的看法或想法。

4.选用下列词语：rush hour, cross, make sure, come over, traffic rules Last Monday, Tim got up at 7:40 in the morning.______________________________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________（7）

请你参考图文提示，写一篇60~80词的短文。注意：1.语言规范，语意完整，内容丰富。2.表达符合图意，书写规范。3.给出自己的观点。4.文章的开头已给出。

参考词：pollute, turn off the tap(水龙头)，dry, save(节约 vt.), water resources(水资源)From the pictures we know that ______________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________（8）

请根据下面四幅图，写一篇70个单词左右的短文。文章开头已经给出，不算入总词汇数内。

参考词汇： on fire 着火firefighter n.消防员put out 灭火

Jack was woken up by the shouting “Fire!Help!Fire!Help!...”

__________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________（9）看图写话。

要求：1.根据图画所提供的语境，写出意思连贯、语言流畅、语法准确、符合逻辑的短文。2.至少使用两种时态，70词以上。不得使用真实姓名、地名、学校名。

3.标题和第一句已给出，但不计入70词之内。

One day Lin Tao and Mei Mei were playing in the garden.___________________________________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________________________________（10）

根据所给图画用英语写一篇约80词的短文。

(11)

假如你所在的学校要出一期英语壁报。你准备就自己经历的一件事写一篇英语短文向壁报投稿。下面五幅图记录了你上个星期六与老师和同学到南河边参加植树活动的全过程。请你就以下五幅图写一篇英文短文。

注意：1.短文内容要包括所有图画中的主要内容 2.词数：70～90

3.生词提示： 桶bucket锄头hoe

________________________________________________________________ 13 ____________________________________________________________________（12）

请按照下面6幅图和表格的提示，写一篇题为“Changes in Our Hometown”的英语短文。（词数：50~80，不包括已经给出的单词）

内容要点：

过去 现在 旧房 高楼 河水污浊 河水清澈 步行、骑自行车 乘公交车、小汽车 Changes in Our Hometown

Over the past ten years, great changes have taken place in our hometown.In the past 14 ________________________________________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________________________________ 【练习答案】

(1)参考答案：

The Hua Mountain is one of the most famous mountains in China.It lies in the east of Shaanxi.Every year thousands of Chinese and foreigners pay a visit there.It’s not far from here.It takes you about one hour to get there by bus.You can also go there by train.When you are at the top of the mountain, you’ll find clouds, wondrous pines and unique rocks around you.In the early morning when the sun rises, the sky looks very beautiful.It’s really a nice place to visit.(2)参考答案：

Zhonghua street Xi;an, China June21st, 2004 Dear Jim：

How are you? Many thanks for the shirt!I’m very happy to hear from you again.I love the shirt very much, Jim, and red is my favourite colour!You remembered!It’s just my size.Every time I wear it, I will think of you.I’m fine here in China.Last week I had a birthday party.Many of my classmates came and my mother made us a lot of good food.We really had a wonderful time together.How are you doing in England, Jim? I miss you very much.I always miss the days we were together last summer.I hope you can come to China someday.Please write back soon.Your friend, Li Lei

(3)参考答案：

Sunday June 23rd

It was a fine day today and the sun was bright.I visited Xi’an Zoo with my classmate, Zhang Hong.The animals there were so interesting that all the people loved them.When I saw a visitor throwing food to the monkeys, I went/ran to stop him/her and said, “Animals are our friends and we must take good care of them.”

(4)参考答案： Dear friends，I’m very glad to introduce myself to you.My name is Zhang Bin.I’m fifteen years old.I live in Beijing.One of my favorite subjects is biology.I’m interested in drawing.In my free time, I often go camping, draw some pictures of plants, and enjoy the singing of birds in nature.I want to be a biologist when I grow up.I feel lucky to join you.I hope we can be good friends and do our best to make That’s all.Thank you for listening.(5)参考答案：

Xi’an is the capital of Shaanxi with a long history.There are many places of interest, such as the Dayan Pagoda, the Xiaoyan Pagoda, the Bell Tower and the Terra Cotta Warriors.Since it lies in the Northwest of China, the winter here is long and it sometimes snows.Autumn is the best season in Xi’an, for it’s neither too cold nor too hot.One of the most famous traditional foods is “Yangroupao”.(6)参考答案：

Last Monday, Tim got up at 7:40 in the morning.It was the rush hour.He rode his bike to school very fast.He was crossing the street when a car came at that moment.Tim’s bike hit the car and he fell to the ground heavily.The driver was very kind and stopped to make sure that Tim was all right.Then a policeman came over.He told Tim to ride more slowly next time and it was dangerous.Tim thanked him and went to school.All of the young men should obey the traffic rules.17(7)参考答案：

From the pictures we know that much water has been polluted.Some factories are pouring waste water into rivers and lakes.The water becomes dirty and lots of fish have died.Many people often waste water.For example, they often forget to turn off the taps.If we don’t have enough water, land will be dry and crops will die.We can’t live without water.So we should try our best and encourage everyone to protect water resources.We must save water and stop polluting it.If we do that, Things will be much better.(8)参考答案：

Jack was woken up by the shouting “Fire!Help!Fire!Help!...” What had happened? He looked out of the window.Wow!He found that his neighbour’s house was on fire.Jack jumped off the bed and rushed to the telephone.He made a call to the police.Then, he ran out and helped his neighbour(to)fight against the fire.Soon the fire fighters came and in a short time the fire was put out.And the house owner and fire fighters thanked Jack and his neighbours a lot.(9)参考答案：

TAKING CARE OF TREES

One day Lin Tao and Mei Mei were playing in the garden.They found

that a young tree there was dying.They thought they must save the young tree.Then they put a rope around the tree and watered it.Some days later the tree came back to life again.Their mother saw this and praised them, “You are good children!”

(10)参考答案：

Yesterday afternoon Li Ping and I were going to school.On the way we saw an old woman crossing the street.Suddenly a car passed by very fast.The old woman was frightened and fell down to the ground.The apples in her basket were all out on the street.Immediately, we ran to the old woman, helped her get up and picked up all the apples.Li Ping helped her carry the basket and I helped her cross the street.The old woman thanked us very much.（11）参考答案： 内容要点：

（1）上星期五老师告诉我们“明天去南河边植树”。（2）上星期六（第二天）早上六点半我就起床了。（3）我带着桶去学校，同学们带着桶、锄头在校门口等待。（4）到南河边，我们开始植树。（也可描写动场面。）（5）看着新种下的树，我们都很高兴。

Last Friday, our teacher told us that we would go to plant trees by the 19 South River the next day.On Saturday morning I got up at six thirty and went to school with a bucket.My classmates were waiting at the school gate with buckets and hoes.When we got to the South River, we began to plant trees on the river bank.(On the river bank, some students were digging holes, the others were planting or watering the young trees.)

After we finished our work, we were happy to see the young trees we planted on the river bank.（12）参考答案：

Over the past ten years, great changes have taken place in our hometown.In the past, the houses in our hometown were very poor, but now many people have moved into tall buildings(there are many tall buildings here and there).The water in the rivers was very dirty, but now the rivers are clean and people can swim in them.People used to walk or ride bikes, but now they can take buses or drive their own cars to go to work.走到茶几边，我认出了外婆的杯子，但是哪一个才是妈妈的杯子呢？突然之间，我觉得，自己真得太不了解父母了。当妈妈为我倒水时，我却不知她的杯子是什么样的；当妈妈为我夹我喜欢吃的菜时，我却没想过他们是爱吃淡一点，还是浓一点。。。2009年到了，意味着过去一年的逝去和新的一年的到来。妈妈为我操劳了一整年，仔细想想，现在的我也应该为她做一点点事了。

于是，我决定先将茶沏好再找杯子。学着爸爸平时沏茶的顺序，我先从茶柜 里找出了一罐普洱茶，再往烧水的壶里加入水放在电茶炉上烧，接着，我将爸爸已经掰好的普洱茶片拿了两片放在盖碗里，等了一会，水开了，我小心地将水注入盖碗，将盖盖上，把盖碗里第一遍的茶水滤掉，然后再次注水，盖上盖，焖一会才两手并用地将茶水倒入茶海里，因为第一次自己动手，盖碗的烫手是我所没想到的，手忙脚乱的我弄得茶几上一片片的水渍。重复几次这样的程序后，我先帮外婆倒了一杯茶，因为外婆特别喜欢喝茶。当外婆从厨房走出来的时候我已经把茶都给倒好了，这时，外婆才告诉我哪一个是妈妈的杯子。

妈妈起床了，我双手捧着水杯送到她的面前，就像捧着一颗温热的心。妈妈一愣，随即脸上露出了微笑，她一手接过水杯，伸出另一只手将我拉进了她的怀里，那手轻轻柔柔地在我的头上抚摸着，接着妈妈在我的脸上深深地亲了一口。虽然妈妈经常亲我，但这一刻的亲吻却最让我感到幸福。我抬起头对妈妈说：“妈妈快喝吧，要不茶要凉了。”妈妈仰起了脖子，张着嘴巴，“咕咚，咕咚”地喝了几大口。看她那甜蜜蜜的样子，仿佛微苦的普洱茶也是蜜一般甜。

我记得在我小学的时侯，就读过一首曹值的七步诗：“煮豆持作梗，辘毂以为汁；秸在釜下燃，豆在釜中泣；本是同根生，相煎何太急”。那时只知其大意，只知道曹操的长子曹丕继位，他在一些奸臣的影响下，担心他的同胞弟弟曹值篡位，便逼迫曹值在七步之内作出一首诗来，否则处死；结果他的弟弟就在七步之内写出了流传至今的“七步诗”。当时这首诗对曹丕也是一种极大的潮讽。

几个世纪过去了，社会和生活都发生了极大的变化；应该说人的素质也应有所提高；一个人生活在世上，是离不开亲情、友情和爱情的；有人说：打架亲兄弟，上阵父子兵，但是，兄弟姐妹的团结并不是真对与他人打架斗殴，在生活上，21 事业上应是不可或缺的照应；俗话说“一根筷子容易断，十双筷子断就难”；可见，团结是一种力量，只有团结才有攻不破的堡垒。

然而，就在生活优越的今天，兄弟姐妹往往因为一点小事，一点利益而你争我斗，反目成仇，甚而相残；我和我的朋友在聊天时有时聊及这个问题，有人这样评论：一个人生活在世上，如果不顾亲情，对兄弟姐妹甚至父母于不顾，那他在这个社会上和任何人都不要谈“情”字，特别是友情。

树大分枝，各自成立家庭后，在生活中一些小事是难免发生的，但要看你怎样去对待，把金钱和利益看的太重，那麽，你就会值亲情于不顾；看淡名利，注重亲情才是做人的底线；争则不足，让则有余，在利益和金钱面前，我们何不礼让一点，做一个有道德、有素质、有亲情的人呢？

家和万事兴，团结是一种力量，让我们团结友爱，和睦共处，为个人的事业、为家庭的生活、为国家的兴盛而看重亲情、友情、爱情；把金钱和利益看淡一些吧！人过留名，雁去留声，希望在几十年之后，当你离开这个世界的时侯，留给后人的不是唾泣，而是美愉。

今天是她父亲的生日,她要回家和父亲一起过生日.我很理解她的想法,更理解她的思念之情.是的,她父亲已经六十多岁了,为了子女的成长与幸福,含辛茹苦,真的的不容易.话说过来,人一辈子真的很不容易.人年老时非常希望能够和子女在一起,即使不能在一起,哪怕一个电话甚至一个短信,父母也已经很知足了.我由于长期在外,很想念爸爸妈妈.想起过去,心里真的很辛酸,父母亲为了我们的成长真的付出了很多,然而他们现在又生活得怎么样呢?想起过去的一幕一幕,我心里很难受!我很希望做做子女的我们,踏踏实实地做好每一件事情,不让父母担忧,这是最基本的我们应当做的事情.22 谈到这里我不由自主地想起一部电影《我的兄弟姐妹》,这是一部关于亲情的影片,暂且不管故事的真实性,主要考究它的内涵.主人公齐思甜和哥哥齐忆苦、妹妹奇妙、弟弟齐天生活在一个不富裕却充满温馨和爱的家。然而在一个暴风雪的夜晚，他们的母亲旧病复发，咳得吐血了。父亲背她去医院，却出了意外，他们俩都亡故了。次日，另一家人搬进了四个孩子的家。性格刚强的哥哥无法忍受这个新家庭的种种，无奈地带着弟弟妹妹离开了家。他们开始四处奔波，寻找落脚之处。当实在没有能力照顾弟弟妹妹的时候，他把妹妹齐思甜送给一对正要出国的夫妇；把弟弟送给他的舅妈一家；又把小妹妹带到一对老人家中请他们收养。他自己和弟弟妹妹们便各奔东西……20年后，齐忆苦在北京当上了出租车司机；齐思甜出国受到良好的教育，成了音乐家；齐天成为东北大学学生；齐妙却当上了舞厅小姐。在北京的音乐会上，思甜蓦然回首的瞬间，音乐霎时凝固了。他们四人拥抱在一起，泪水顺着另一支悠扬的乐曲落下，听众的掌声久久不息……终于，他们有了一次永久的重逢。

齐思甜的父亲是一个音乐教师，他们一家人都生活在音乐的天堂里，这也为后来思甜成为音乐家打好了基础。父亲说：“人生路上有许多困难的事情，只要有音乐在，你的灵魂便不再寂寞。”这位父亲是伟大的，他乐观开朗，以身作则。尽管他和蔼可亲，但同时又是一个严厉的父亲。有一回，齐忆苦偷邻居家的鸡蛋，是为了满足妹妹小小的心愿。而他却因此挨了父亲的鞭子，还罚他站在雪地里很久。在父亲被分配到别的地方边劳动边教音乐时，他对这“莫须有的罪名”并没有悲愤倒下，而是瞒着家人当搬运工挨家挨户送木材，还干各种各样的粗活。他也没有一丝怨言，还对孩子说：“我没事。”懂事的孩子们也拿起了工具，帮父亲干活。他哼着小调，阳光幸福地洒在他们脸上。

可见,这位父亲是多么伟大，他以他的行动告诉了孩子们音乐的重要性及如何面对生活的苦难。

那么，又是一种什么样的力量，使后来的四个孩子重逢，使他们欢聚，使他们接受心灵的洗礼？

毋庸置疑，是亲情。

寒冷的冬天，四个孩子依偎在车站。他们在为下一餐饭而担心着。“哥，我饿。”、“哥，我冷。”、“哥，我想回家……”弟妹们的话刺痛了哥哥。他说：“只要我还有一口气，就不让你们受委屈。”事实上他也这么做了。如果不是亲情，他又何必活得如此累呢？他又怎能忘记，那一晚，父母临走时对他的嘱咐：“你是哥哥，要照顾好弟弟妹妹。”

生活改变了许多人和事，也改变了他们。但是，亲情是始终不渝的。最小的妹妹齐妙长大后竟成了舞厅小姐！她离开原来的家后，养父母去世得早，加上无人看管，就开始堕落下去了。她在20年后与齐思甜相遇时，大言不惭地对她说她满足于当前腐朽昏暗的生活方式。但是自那以后，她回忆起以前的一点一滴，又不免伤感和懊悔。她发现自己对不起所有爱她的人，她的良心受到了谴责。于是，亲情的归来使她的精神方面的巨人复活了！她的灵魂才得以解放。

亲情给人以新生，亲情又犹如一支镇心剂。

亲情是心中的太阳，照耀着我们；亲情是温柔的春风，抚摸着我们；亲情如绵绵的春雨，滋润着我们。

亲情是雪，晶莹剔透；亲情也可以是雷，惊天撼地。

亲情可以是灯，温暖柔和；亲情也可以是微弱的烛光，不亮却很辉煌。不管怎么说，亲情一定是无价的宝藏。

没有了亲情，世界变得荒芜、凄凉；没有了亲情，生命则无法繁衍后代；没有了亲情，生活就单调枯燥；没有了亲情，人间也成了地狱。

亲情是沟通两代之间思想交流的桥梁，是一条连结两颗心的纽带。“兄弟姐妹原是天上掉下的水花，谁也不认得谁。但落在地下后，结成一体，结成冰，化成水，就永远也分不开了。”

“临行密密封，意恐迟迟归”，是亲情。“我在这头，母亲在那头”，也是亲情。

无价的亲情呵，愿我们在你的鼓舞下，驶向美好灿烂的明天。关于亲情的影片..我看这部影片时,心情很沉重,流泪了.我想,不论一个人的出身是多么卑微,只要我们能够记住亲情的鼓舞与期待,只要我们我们去刻苦努力,只要我们在心理上能够战胜自己,那么我们就是生活的强者!

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There are two sides of opinions about it.Some people say A is their favorite.They hold their view for the reason that②-----------------（支持A的理由一）What is more, ③-------------理由

二).Moreover, ④---------------(理由三).While others think that B is a better choice in the following three reasons.Firstly,-----------------(支持B的理由一).Secondly(besides),⑥------------------（理由二）.Thirdly(finally),⑦------------------(理由三).From my point of view, I think ⑧----------------（我的观点）.The reason is that ⑨--------------------(原因).As a matter of fact, there are some other reasons to explain my choice.For me, the former is surely a wise choice.2

People, however, differ in their opinions on this matter.Some people hold the idea that ___.In their point of

view, onone hand，_____.On theother hand, _________.Therefore, there is no doubt that _______.As far as I am concerned, I firmly support the view that ________.It is notonly because ________, but also

because _________.The more _______,the more ________.解决方法题型

In recent days, we have to face the problem-----A.The problem is becoming more and more serious./ The present situation is worrying.First,------------(说明Ａ的现状)．Second,---------------(举例进一步说明现状)

Confronted with A, we should take a series of effective measures to cope with the situation./ To our great joy, many measures have been taken to solve the problems.For one thing,---------------(解决方法一).For another-------------(解决方法二).Finally,--------------(解决方法三).Personally, I believe that------(我的解决方法/ 看法)./ Consequently, I’m confident that a bright future is awaiting us because-----(带来的好处)/ if--------------.说明利弊题型

nowadays many middle schools prefer to---------.Generally, its advantages can be seen as follows.First,----------.Besides / What’s more,-------.Meanwhile,-----.On the other hand,/ However,-----------------------.The most important thing is that------------.As a result,-----------------------

From the comparison between these positive and negative effects of ,________ we should take it reasonably and do it according to the circumstances we are in.Only by this way can _________.现象解释

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⑴It so happened that_______________⑵Just at the moment,___________.⑶It impressed me most because_______⑷What happened next was _________________.⑸At first,____________.⑹Almost at the same time, ___________.⑺What”s more, ____________⑻As a result,____________⑼As I understand,___________Onone hand,____________⑾On the other hand___________⑿Therefore,（二）

I⑴As is known to all____________⑵___ seem to get accustomed to_____⑶In fact_____,..⑷The reasons of _____lie in several aspects.⑸Firstly___, ⑹

Secondly,⑺Thirdly,____________________.⑻Finally,__________________.⑼As a matter of fact, _________________⑽Onone hand,__________⑾On the

other hand,________________________..⑿Therefore, ____________

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As is shown by the figure/percentage in the table/picture,____ has been on rise/ decrease,significantly/dramatically rising/decreasing from ____ in _____ to _____ in _____.From the

sharp rise/decline in the chart, it goes without saying that _____.There are at least two good reasons accounting for _____.In one hand, ____.In the other

hand, _____ is due to the fact that ______.In addition, ______ is responsible for _____.Maybe there are some other reasons to show ______.But itis generally believed that the

above mentioned reasons are commonly convincing.As far as I am concerned, I hold the point of view that _______.I am sure my opinion is both

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Your addressMonth, Date, yearReceiver's addressDear...,I am extremely pleased to hear from you.And I would like to write a letter to tell you

that_____.……

I will greatly appreciate a response from you at your earliest convenience/I am looking

f0rward to your replies at your earliest convenience.Best regards for your health and success.Sincerely yours,话题作文

Nowadays, there are more and more __ _ in __ _.It is estimated that ___.Why have there

been so many ____? Maybe the reasons can be listed as follows.The first one is ______.Besides,_____.The third one is _____.To sum up, the main cause of

it is due to _____.It is high time that something were done upon it.For one thing,_____.For

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_____ is becoming more and more popular recently.There are two sides of opinions of it.Some people say ____ is their favorite.They hold their view for the reason of ____.What is

more,_____。Moreover,______.While others think that _____ is a better choice in the following three reasons.Firstly,_____.Secondly(besides),______.Thirdly(finally),_____.From my point of view, I think _____.The reason is that _____.As a matter of fact, there

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Ladies and Gentlemen/Dear_____,⑴Welcome to.⑵To begin with,.⑶It’s my pleasure to.⑷Now to

share the schedule with you,.⑸Please keep in mind that.⑹According to

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Dear,⑴I am very sorry to say/tell you that.⑵Now, I am writing you this letter of apology

to show my deep regret.⑶Please accept my sincere apology.⑷I fear you are unhappy

at.⑸I hope you will understand me and excuse me for.⑹Let me explain.⑺The rason for my delay/absence was that.⑻I had no way out

because.⑼Thererfore, it,s not in my power to.⑽Naturally, I want to suggest.⑾I shall be obliged if you will kindly write and tellme

when and where you.⑿We may meet again and I hope to see you soon.Sincerely yours,Signature

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Dear,⑴My name is.⑵I am.⑶I want to write you a letter about.⑷

The focus of the complaint is.⑸For one thing,.⑹For another,.⑺

Honestly speaking,.⑻But.⑼Besides,.⑽All in all, there is still

much room for improvement.⑾I do hope.⑿Thank you for your time

and kind consideration.Sincerely yours,Signature

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高考英语满分作文范文:A Letter of Thanks(一封感谢信)

时间： 2008-04-08 17:11:41作者：来源：

Dear Mr.John,How are things going with you in Beijing?

I am writing to show my thanks to you.You tutored me in my spoken English

before you went to Beijing.With your help I made such rapid progress that I won

the first place in the Spoken English Competition of the city.My achievement is owed to your help.Thank you very much.I have heard that you and your wife will pay a visit to my school.I am very glad at the news.In that case we can see each other again.I am looking forward to your coming.I am sending you a telescope as a small gift.I hope you will like it.All the best.Yours,Liu Jie

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1．书面表达（本题20分）根据要求完成短文写作，请将作文写在答题卡指定的位置上。假如你是一名叫李明（Li Ming）的中学生，看了上述故事后，你想表达自己的看法。请你给栏目编辑写一封电子邮件，内容包括： 1.你对其中的哪个故事感兴趣？原因是什么？ ．．．．．．．2.你对这个故事所提及的现象的看法。3.就该现象提出至少两条解决问题的建议。作文要求：

1.不能照抄原文；不得在作文中出现学校真实的名称和学生的真实姓名。

2.语句连贯，词数80个左右。作文开头和结尾已经给出，不计入总词数，也不必抄写在答题卡上。Dear Editor，I read the stories on BBC World Have Your Say today，__________________________________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________________________ Your, Li Ming

2．书面表达(满分15分)

假如你叫李明，是一位高一新生，你的班主任(也是你的英语教师)要求你们在下午的班会课上用英语演讲的形式参与班长(monitor)竞选，请根据图片和文字提示，以“I believe I can” 为题写一篇演讲稿。要求:

1.短文必须包括三个方面内容：我的优秀品质；我的能力；我将为大家做什么； 2.短文内容可适当发挥，提示词可选用； 3.短文中不得出现真实的人名和校名；

4..短文词数为80左右，开头、结尾部分已给出，不计入总词数。

I believe I can

Good aftemoon, ladies and gentlemen!My name is Li Ming

Thank you!

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从前，我们通讯不便捷，只能通过书信与千里之外的亲朋交流，富有浓浓的亲情。今天，随着互联网的发展，智能手机（smart-phone）已被广泛使用。人们的交流变得非常的方便，可我们身边的“低头族(phubber)”随处可见，很多人都有同感：“距离近了，可亲情远了。”请根据图中所示，结合表格所提供的信息,以“Refuse to be phubbers”为题写一篇80词左右的短文。

要求：1.短文须包含所有信息，语句通顺、意思连贯,可适当发挥；2.题目与开头已给出，不计入总词数。

参考词汇：1.have effects on 2.concentrate on 3.face-to-face conversation 4.make good use of

Refuse to be phubbers

With the development of the Internet, smart-phones are widely used among people.Phubbers can be seen here and there.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Refuse to be phubbers

With the development of the Internet, smart-phones are widely used among people.Phubbers can be seen here and there.Some family members play with their smart –phones while eating with families instead of talking with them.It has effects on the relationship between them.Some people look at their smart-phones while walking even riding or driving.It may increase the danger of causing traffic accidents.Some children want to play with smart-phones before sleeping.It’s bad for their health and their study.In fact, face-to-face conversations are much more conventient and better than chatting on line by phone.Mobile phones are helpful and necessary tools for modern life.But we should make good use of it to be “healthy” users rather than Phubbers.【解析】 试题分析：本文要求按图表提示，以“Refuse to be phubbers”为题作文。短文重点是两个方面，一是现象与弊端：揭示现代人用手机的恶习及其产生的危害；二是观点与方式：告诉人们怎样正确的使用手机，利用好这个现代的通讯工具。短文主要用一般现在时态。第三人称或第一称形式。写作亮点：短文首先结合现代人使用手机的现象，说明了人们使用手机给生活带来的危害，接着告诉

试卷第2页，总3页 人们怎样正确地使用好手机。条理分明，层次清楚。短文包含了提纲的所有信息，语句通顺，意思连贯。文中用了while doing，instead of, rather than等等结构，给短文增色不少。

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参考答案

1．Dear Editor，I read the stories on BBC World Have Your Say today.I am interested in Mike's story, because I had the same experience when I traveled in Guangzhou.I can't stand bad manners in public, either.In fact, I really get angry when people jump the queen and smoke in non-smoking areas.I think it's wrong to break the rules in public.In my opinion, we should know more about good manners.On the other hand, we had better stop people around us from being rude.If we can't stop them, we can always ask the police or someone like that for help.Yours, 【解析】

试题分析：这是一篇电子邮件。本题所给材料是是根据上文的故事表达自己的感受。写作前先结合要表达的事情确定句子的人称时态，注意标点符号及大小写等问题，不要犯语法错误。注意上下文之间的逻辑关系，语意连贯。

写作亮点：文章直接谈到作者对麦克的故事感兴趣。文中用到了一些好的句式，如：I can't stand bad manners in public, either.；On the other hand, we had better stop people around us from being rude.给文章增色不少。考点：考查提纲作文。2．

Good afternoon ladies and gentlemen!

My name is Li Ming!I'm very glad to be a member of our class.I want to be monitor for these reasons.First, I’m hard-working and helpful.I work very hard at my study and do well in all subjects.I am kind and I would like to help you anytime.Second, I am active.I have a lot of hobbies such as playing basketball, singing and dancing.I believe I will guide our class in the correct direction in study and other fields.I'm sure we will have a wonderful time during the following three years.That’s all.Thank you!【解析】

试题分析：本文要求写一篇演讲稿，要按照要求，从：我的优秀品质；我的能力；我将为大家做什么三个方面进行写作。用第一人称形式，我的品质和能力用一般现在时态，我将为大家做的用一般将来时态。要根据演讲稿的特点选择恰当的词语和句型结构，增加语言的感染力。

写作亮点：范文开头简单的自我介绍后直接点题：我要当班长；接着由first, second 等等列出自己想当班长的原因；后面用两个一般将来时的句子说明自己将会怎样当好班长。叙述清楚，结构明晰。文中的I believe I wi11„；I'm sure we will„充分表达了作者的自信，彰显了作者个性，突出了短文主题，语言精炼，符合演讲稿的特点。【考点定位】 考查提纲类作文。3．

Refuse to be phubbers

With the development of the Internet, smart-phones are widely used among people.Phubbers can be seen here and there.Some family members play with their smart –phones while eating with families instead

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of talking with them.It has effects on the relationship between them.Some people look at their smart-phones while walking even riding or driving.It may increase the danger of causing traffic accidents.Some children want to play with smart-phones before sleeping.It’s bad for their health and their study.In fact, face-to-face conversations are much more conventient and better than chatting on line by phone.Mobile phones are helpful and necessary tools for modern life.But we should make good use of it to be “healthy” users rather than Phubbers.【解析】

试题分析：本文要求按图表提示，以“Refuse to be phubbers”为题作文。短文重点是两个方面，一是现象与弊端：揭示现代人用手机的恶习及其产生的危害；二是观点与方式：告诉人们怎样正确的使用手机，利用好这个现代的通讯工具。短文主要用一般现在时态。第三人称或第一称形式。

写作亮点：短文首先结合现代人使用手机的现象，说明了人们使用手机给生活带来的危害，接着告诉人们怎样正确地使用好手机。条理分明，层次清楚。短文包含了提纲的所有信息，语句通顺，意思连贯。文中用了while doing，instead of, rather than等等结构，给短文增色不少。

【考点定位】图画及提纲类作文。

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