广东省高考英语 作文专题三 夹叙夹议型 读写任务

第一篇：广东省高考英语 作文专题三 夹叙夹议型 读写任务

专题三

夹叙夹议型 读写任务

夹叙夹议就是一方面叙述某一事情，一方面又对此事加以分析与评论。这种表达方式中的叙与议是一个有机的整体，“叙”是“议”的基础，即议论不能脱离记叙，必须在记叙的基础上展开；“议”是“叙”的渗透，即议论在记叙的基础上发表，且要有一定的深度与广度。

写夹叙夹议类书面表达时，思维要有灵活性，要随着记叙与议论的转换，及时调整思维方式。

例题：阅读下面短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。

As I got into a taxi one afternoon, the driver was very angry about something that had happened to him earlier that day.Here’s how he told the story：

“One of my fares(旅客)left a wallet in my cab this morning.Nearly three hundred dollars in it.I spent more than an hour trying to trace the guy.Finally I found him at his hotel.He took the wallet without a word and glared at me as though I’d meant to steal it.” “He didn’t give you a reward？” I asked.“Not a cent.But it wasn’t the money I wanted，” he fumbled, then exploded,“If the guy had only said something…” Why was the driver so upset? All he wanted was something simple, but even more valuable than money: to be thanked for his efforts.In short, what he wanted, what he needed but did not get, was a little bit of gratitude.[写作内容]

1．概括故事的内容要点，以此引入话题，该部分的词数大约30。

2．以约120个词就“感激”这个主题发表你的看法，至少包含以下内容要点：

(1)什么是感激(gratitude)?

(2)感激的表现方式。

(3)表达感激最重要在于真诚(sincere)。

(4)故事的启示和你的结论。

[写作要求]

1．你可以使用实例或其他论述方法支持你的论点，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不要抄袭阅读材料中的句子。

2.作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。[评分标准]

概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，篇章连贯。

练习(一)阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。

During summer holidays, two classmates, Tom and Peter, were traveling in the desert.As they were walking, they had an argument, and Tom was so angry that he slapped Peter hard across the face.Peter felt hurt, but without saying anything, he wrote down in the sand these words: “Today my best friend Tom slapped me in the face.”

It was very hot, but they kept on walking and walking until they found an oasis(绿洲), where they decided to take a bath.Suddenly Peter got stuck in the mire(泥潭)and started drowning.Seeing that, Tom rushed over and saved him without any hesitation.After Peter got recovered from the drowning, he wrote with a knife on a stone: “Today my best friend Tom saved my life.”

Feeling curious, Tom, who had slapped and saved his best friend, asked Peter, “After I beat you, you wrote something in the sand but just now you put down what I had done on a stone.Why？”

Peter replied, “When someone hurts us, we should take it down in the sand where winds of forgiveness can erase it away.But when someone does something good for us, we must carve it in the stone where no wind can ever erase it.” Hearing that, Tom was deeply moved and understood what Peter had said and what he had done.[写作内容]

请你以“What I Have Learnt From Tom’s Understanding”为题，谈谈你读了这个故事以后的感受。内容要点包括：

1．以约30个词概括上述故事的要点。

2．以约120个词就Peter“被打”和“被救”后的举动发表你的看法，内容包括：

(1)Tom 为什么感动了？他到底明白了什么？

(2)你从这个故事中学到了什么？简要说明其理由。

练习(二)阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。

A long time ago, there was a huge apple tree.A little boy loved to come and lay around it every day.They loved to play together.As time went by, the boy had grown up and no longer played around it.One day, he came back and the tree exci-tedly invited him to play.But the boy said he needed money to buy toys.“Sorry, but I have no money, but you can pick all my apples and sell them，” said the tree.The boy did as told and left happily but never came back.The tree was sad.Many years passed, the boy returned and told him he had to make money to build a house for his family.The tree happily offered his branches for his house.With the branches, the boy left satisfied.The tree was again lonely and sad.Then one hot summer day, the tree was delighted to see the boy back again.“Come and play with me！” The tree said.“I am sad and getting old.I want to go sailing to relax myself.Can you give me a boat？” “Use my trunk to build your boat.” The boy cut the tree trunk and went sailing but never showed up for a long time.The tree was happy, but it was not true.Finally, the boy returned after he left for so many years.“Sorry, my boy.But I don’t have anything for you anymore.No more apples for you.” The tree said with tears.The boy replied that he was too old and needed nothing.“Good!Old tree root is the best place to lean on and rest.Come, sit down with me and rest.” The boy sat down and the tree was glad and smiled with tears… [写作内容]

1．以约30个词概括上述寓言故事的要点。

2．以约120个词，写出以下内容：

(1)故事的寓意及读后感。

(2)假如你是故事中的那个男孩，你会怎样做？ [写作要求]

1．可以使用实例来支持你的论点，也可以参照阅读材料的内容论述，但不得直接引用原文中的句子。

2．作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。[评分标准]

概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，篇章连贯。

例题【参考范文】

We Cannot Do Without Gratitude

The other day I read a story which is about a taxi driver who got mad and disappointed，for he received nothing for his efforts to return the lost wallet to its owner，not even a simple word.The story sets me thinking about gratitude.Gratitude is the feeling of being grateful，the art of receiving gracefully，and the act of showing appreciation for every act of kindness，big or small，that others do for us.Gratitude can take many forms.It can be expressed by a large，dramatic gesture or it can be shown in a small way，like finding a very original and personal way to say thanks for a friend’s gift.Whatever we do to show our gratitude，we should do it in a sincere manner，for it is the feelings in our hearts that matter the most.The story reminds us how important it is to express our gratitude to the ones who have offered us help.We can never be too grateful.The smiles and the thanks we give help us to build a better world，one that we can all live in and enjoy.练习

(一)【参考范文】

What I Have Learnt From Tom’s Understanding

While traveling in the desert, Tom slapped Peter’s face, and Peter wrote it down in the sand.But when he was saved, Peter carved that down on a stone, which moved Tom deeply.In this story, Tom was touched by Peter’s actions because he was ready to forgive others by forgetting unhappy things and he would remember and value it forever in his memory when his life was saved.I think what Tom understood was how to get along well with friends and how to deal with others’ kindness and rudeness.As for me, not everyone has the same good virtues and behaviors as Peter if such things happen to us.In my eyes, Peter is really our role model.“Attitude is everything！” So let’s try to be kind to people who have done something unpleasant to us, and grateful to those who have done us favors.Anyway, true friendship never comes easily.练习(二)【参考范文】

The fable presents a sentimental story to us in which an apple tree satisfied a boy’s wishes unconditionally by sacrificing everything for him.All it desired is the boy’s company.The tree in the fable is affectionate and unselfish.The moral of it is that parental love is so infinite that children should be grateful for that.I was deeply moved by the fable and felt an impulse to praise all the parents.It made me realize how great my parents are and I should be grateful for what they have done.If I were the boy, I would keep contact with the tree and be considerate.First, from the bottom of my heart, I know the tree is more than a tree;it is my dearest love.Young or old, I would keep in touch with it using various ways.If I have to travel away, I would write to it, phone him or send e-mails to it informing it of my life.Second, in order not to let my dearest feel so lonely, I would plant some trees and flowers around it.These plants will brave the hard winters with it.In addition, I would invite some other children to play with it.Their company will surely make the life more colorful.Therefore, if I were the boy, I would hold the tree dearly.

第二篇：高考优秀作文.doc夹叙夹议

高考优秀作文——善举≠拯救

本报今日刊登10篇高考优秀作文以飨读者——夹叙夹议，见解力的不俗

有时你一个善意的举动，或许并不能拯救一个或一群生命，相反，你会让它们万劫不复，就如那个游客一样，本是出于善心去拯救一只小生命，却不曾想，他因此而使几乎所有的小龟成为老鹰的口中之食。

或许这个游客的心理是人类常有的，对于弱小的，没有任何抵御能力的生命他们总会倾其所能去帮助它们，而他们却不知道，这样的溺爱或善心总会让它们有那样一种依赖的心理，到最后却和人们的初衷背道而驰。

对于一个沿街乞讨的乞丐，我们或许所能做的只是掏尽身上所有的口袋，给他一点施舍。而我们却不知道，这样做并不能解决根本的问题，他也不可能靠你那一点善意的“资助”而生活有任何的改变。或许我们该大声告诉他们，一个人要生活，乞讨没有出路，他应该试着去努力工作，赚钱养活自己。谁都希望这世界上多一个自食其力的人，而不是逢人伸手的乞讨者。不是吗？

而这个游客的举动也突然让我觉得像现实社会中那些独生子女的父母，他们总是把孩子当宝一样，含在嘴里怕化掉，捧在手心怕碎掉。过分的溺爱让孩子失去了独立自主的能力，也使得孩子有了太强的依赖心理，其实他们应该给孩子一个适当的空间，让孩子放手去成长的。曾看过一句话：既然老天给了我们青春，我们就要放手一搏。也相信，我们离开了父母的好心、溺爱，我们一定会有“摔倒了再爬起来”的能力，而不是爬在原地等父母把我们扶起来。

很多人遇到以上经历时，一定也会像游客和我们的父母一样，“护着小龟爬进大海”。而他们却不知道，疼痛，是成长的第一步，没有经历过创伤和疼痛的人生是不可能完整的，因为经历过，我们才不至于象小海龟一样，在还未经历生命是怎样的过程便已经全部逝去。

所以，希望所有善良的人放开你们的手，让我们去自己面对，自己去经历吧!因为我们相信只有经历过才会成长。

因为———疼痛，是生命的第一步。

评析：

文章在把握原材料的基础上，提出了一个很好的命题，进而联系到对独生子女教育的问题。文章把游客的善举———“护着小龟爬进大海”和当今社会一些家长对独生子女的过分呵护、溺爱联系起来，对比进行论述，见解不俗。

第三篇：最新2014高考英语二轮复习方案专题夹叙夹议型读写任务 Word版含答案

专题限时训练(三十七)[夹叙夹议型读写任务]

(限时：每篇30分钟)

A

阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。

The “Clean Your Plate” campaign was started by nongovernmental organizations and activists, which urged people to save food by not wasting anything on the dining table.The campaign, launched on the microblog, was soon joined by millions of netizens across China to fight against food waste.The estimated annual waste of grain in China reaches 50 million tons, enough to feed about 200 million people for a year.People from across China support the campaign.The Central Government has promised to take measures to reduce food waste, take the lead in saving food and follow a simple working style.More and more Chinese are saying “no” to food waste.Staff members of a restaurant set off a campaign encouraging customers to stop food waste in Qingdao, Shandong Province, on Jan.24.“Did you empty the dishes today？” has become the most popular question in China.Showing an empty dish also turns a new fashion among Chinese netizens.In some restaurants, there are signs reminding the diners not to waste food.Some even offer awards to the customers who eat all their food, as part of the campaign to reduce waste.More and more restaurants kindly remind and encourage customers to take their leftovers away.[写作内容]

1.以约30个词概括上文的主要内容。

2.以约120个词就“光盘行动”的话题谈谈你的想法，内容包括：

(1)“光盘行动”产生的背景；

(2)“光盘行动”的作用；

(3)你对“光盘行动”的看法和呼吁。

[写作要求]

1.作文中可以使用亲身经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子。

2.作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。

[评分标准]

概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，语篇连贯。

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B

阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。

A little boy was playing in his sandbox.He had with him his box of toy cars and trucks and a red plastic shovel(铲).In the process of creating roads in the soft sand, he discovered a large rock

in the middle of the sandbox.The boy dug around the rock, managing to get it out from the dirt.With a little bit of struggle, he pushed the rock across the sandbox by using his feet.When the boy got the rock to the edge of the sandbox, however, he found that he couldn't roll it up and move it to the wall.Determined, the little boy tried again, pushed, and shoveled, but every time he thought he had made some progress, the rock rolled and then fell back into the sandbox.The little boy struggled, pushed, and pulled, but failed.Finally he burst into tears.The boy's father watched him from his living room window all the time.At the moment the tears fell, a large shadow fell across the boy and the sandbox.It was the boy's father.Gently but firmly he said, “Son, why didn't you use all the strength available? ” Defeated, the boy sobbed, “But I did, Daddy, I did!I used all the strength that I had！” “No, son，” corrected the father kindly.“You didn't use all the strength you had.You didn't ask me.” With these words the father picked up the rock and removed it from the sandbox.[写作内容]

1．以约30个词概括短文要点。

2．以约120个词就“人生需要帮助”的话题谈谈你的想法，内容包括：

(1)你读完文章的感受；

(2)以你的亲身经历谈谈帮助的重要性；

(3)今后你是否也会帮助别人，为什么？

[写作要求]

1．作文中可以使用亲身经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子。

2．作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。

[评分标准]

概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，语篇连贯。

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C

阅读下面的短文，然后按要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。

An elderly carpenter(木匠)was ready to retire.He told his employers of his plans to leave the house-building business to live a more leisurely life with his wife and children.His employer was sorry to see his good worker go and asked if he could build just one more house as a personal favour.The carpenter said yes, but it was obvious that his heart was already not in his work.He built it impatiently and used poor materials.It was unfortunate for a wonderful career to end like that.When the carpenter finished his work, his employer came to inspect the house.Then he handed the front door's key to the carpenter and said, “This is your house.It's my gift to you.”The carpenter was shocked!

What a shame!If he had known he was building his own house, he would have done it all so differently.So it is with us.We build our lives, a day at a time, often putting less than our best into the building.Then, with a shock, we realize we have to live in the house we have built.Therefore, build it wisely!

[写作内容]

1.请你以约30词概括上文的主要内容。

2.请你以约120词以“Build your life wisely”为话题谈谈你的想法，内容包括：

(1)读了短文之后，你觉得文中木匠的做法明智吗？

(2)我们能以木匠建房的态度去对待我们的生活吗？为什么？

(3)你觉得我们应该如何对待生活才是明智的？

[写作要求]

你可以使用亲身经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不要直接引用阅读材料中的句子。

[评分标准]

概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，语篇连贯。

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D

阅读下面短文，然后按要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。

A new rule from the Beijing Traffic Management Bureau, taking effect on Monday, will see jaywalkers fined 10 yuan(1.6 US dollars), according to a Beijing Times' report.“Chinese style of crossing the road” refers to large crowds of Chinese people crossing roads, no matter whether the traffic light is green or red.Indeed, the phenomenon of pedestrians running the red light is commonly seen in some cities.It is very dangerous that pedestrians scramble for roads with cars in crowded downtown areas.“Chinese style of crossing the road” reflects the deep­rooted belief that the law will not punish numerous offenders.In the fast­paced life, some people lack of safety awareness and cannot wait for the green light.Therefore, the group effect takes shape and some basic regulations have been thrown aside.However, we should analyse the reasons for running the red light comprehensively, instead of blindly blaming low quality of the public.The pedestrians' crossing roads with a disregard to traffic lights is related to the unscientific planning of urban transport, short green light and unbalanced relationship between pedestrians and cars.To some extent, pedestrians have no choice but to run the red light.[写作内容]

1.以约30个词概括短文的主要内容。

2.以约120个词就“Chinese style road crossing” 这一话题谈谈你的想法，内容包括：

(1)你是怎么理解“中国式过马路”的？

(2)你支持“罚款”吗？ 为什么？

(3)你有什么建议？并说明现代城市需要新的交通法规。

[写作要求]

你可以使用亲身经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不要直接引用阅读材料中的句子。

[评分标准]

概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，语篇连贯。

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专题限时训练(三十七)

A

One possible version：

When some people started the “Clean Your Plate” campaign in an effort to reduce food waste, millions of netizens joined it and more and more people are taking real action to prevent food waste.I'm quite delighted by this campaign.As far as I know, while people in developed countries don't have to worry about their meals, millions of people in some poor areas are suffering from hunger every day.Though most Chinese have enough food to eat, there are still some others who are struggling hard for a little food to fill their stomach.Unfortunately, I can always see people leave a large part of their food on their plate and throw it as waste.It is reported that every year the Chinese altogether waste 50 million tons of food, which is enough to feed 200 million people for a whole year.What an alarming waste it is!We should feel guilty to waste so much food.It is high time for us to stop such waste.There is every reason for us to clean our plates at our meals.If all people take action to cut down food waste, a large quantity of food can be saved and more people will be fed.The “Clean Your Plate” campaign is really good and useful.Let's join in it and eat up our meals instead of wasting any food.B

One possible version：

A little boy had some difficulty in removing a big rock from the sandbox.Though he tried hard, he still couldn't move it.Finally his father helped him and he managed.After reading this passage, I think highly of the father's words.He helped his son realize the importance of help.Similar things also occurred to me.I still remember last summer holiday when I travelled in Beijing on my own.Unfortunately, I lost my baggage, I was penniless and I couldn't go home.It was with the help of the local police that I was able to return home safely.What I experienced has taught me a lot.Help is very important for us, and we will benefit from others' help.There is no doubt that I will offer help as much as possible if I find someone who is in

trouble.Helping others is a good virtue, which will make problems solved more easily, make people feel the warmth of others, and make our lives better and better.C

One possible version：

Build your life wisely

A carpenter felt regretful when he knew the last house he had built impatiently was a gift for his retirement, which reminds us that we should build our life wisely.It is absolutely unwise of the carpenter to end up his career in this way.Treating his last job carelessly made him lose not only a good house but also his fame as an outstanding house builder.There is no doubt that we shouldn't treat our life as the carpenter did.As a saying goes, “How you treat life, and how life treats you！” If we are unwilling to face or deal with our life correctly, it will reward us nothing.Then how can we build our life wisely? It's fairly simple.The only answer is to be serious.Only when you treat all the matters happening in your life seriously can you learn and gain a lot, which is beneficial as well as wise.D

One possible version：

Chinese style road crossing

“Chinese style of crossing theroad” has become a funny term to criticize the traffic problem, which has aroused the public concern and debate whether the jaywalkers should be fined.In my view, I don't quite agree to fine the pedestrians as a serious punishment when crossing the red lights.As we all know, “Chinese style of crossing the road” reflects the deep contradiction between pedestrians and motor vehicles on distribution of right-of-way.Therefore, in order to solve the problem, we should strengthen education and guidance to enhance citizens' quality and awareness of obeying traffic rules, improve urban management, fully protect pedestrians' right-of-way, encourage drivers to learn the driving awareness in developed countries, install traffic lights in a scientific way and take necessary management measures.In this case, Chinese people may not be “uncivilized” in crossing roads and the traffic order in China will be greatly improved.In short, new rules and regulations should be fully discussed before they are put into practice.

第四篇：夹叙夹议教案

记叙文写作之夹叙夹议教案

一、课

题：《记叙文写作之夹叙夹议》

二、课

型：新授课（2课时）

三、教学目的：

1、明确记叙文以“记叙”为主体。

2、明确记叙文中的议论在记叙文中的地位和作用。

3、掌握记叙文中夹叙夹议的写法。

四、重点、难点： 学会写夹叙夹议的文章，以记叙为主，在记叙中运用恰当的议论。

五、突破方式： 讲练结合，边讲边练

六、教学方法：修改归纳

合作探究

阅读赏析

七、教学过程：

（一）导入（创设意境）

“生活是海洋，凡有生活的地方就有快乐和宝藏。”（艾青）只有让“生活的心”与“自我的心”互相碰撞，才能写出生动的文章。

(教师讲解)夹叙夹议是记叙文中常用的写作手法。夹叙夹议记叙文是以议为纲，以叙为主，叙事是完整的，议论与之相辅相承。在记叙文中恰当地穿插一两句议论，有时就能使一篇貌似平常的文字变得精辟，璨然生色，就像画在壁上的龙，一经点上眼睛，就立刻电闪雷鸣，腾云而去。议论就是对客观事物进行评论，以表明自己的观点和态度。(板书课题)

（二）复习旧知

引导学生回忆记叙文相关知识

（三）新课讲授：

1、介绍基本“夹叙夹议”的概念。（多媒体展示图片）

讲解：夹叙夹议是一面叙述某一件事，一面又对这件事进行分析、评论。这种写法的好处是：笔法灵活多样，生动活泼，还可以起到总起、提示、过度和总结等作用。一般来说叙是议的基础，议是叙的深化，以叙为主，议在其中。记叙文的中议论，大多是在叙述描写的基础上引出作者的感想、认识，直接写出对所写的人物、事件的感受及主观评价。作者犹如一个讲解员，随时随地就所讲述的人和事发表一点评论。

例如杨朔的《荔枝蜜》从看荔枝园、喝荔枝蜜，写到参观养蜂场：（学生齐读，无条件由教师朗读）

我想起一个问题，就问：“一只蜜蜂能活多久？”

老梁说：“蜂王可以活三年，工蜂最多活六个月。”

我不禁一颤：多可爱的小生灵啊！对人无所求，给人的却是极好的东西。蜜蜂是在酿蜜，又是在酿造生活；不是为自己，而是为人类酿造最甜的生活。蜜蜂是渺小的，蜜蜂却又是多么高深啊！

这段饱含诗情的议论，热烈赞扬了蜜蜂无私奉献的精神，给人以强烈的震撼。这样的议论是作者认识飞跃的产物，它既能起到点睛的作用，又可以和写人叙事互为映衬，交相辉映。

2、纠正文章的错误，进一步了解“夹叙夹议”

（1）同学们在日常作文中经常出现议论使用不恰当的现象。下面两段话中的议论都有毛病，请先指出毛病，再做修改。段落一：雨，尽情地下着。走出考场，我看到雨中走来了我的母亲，她很快汇入前来接考生的家长的人群。在考场楼前，在那一大群母亲中，她的个子是那么小，可她也象每一个母亲那样，挺起矮小的身子，急切地在那些从考场里涌出的孩子中寻找着我。她打着一把雨伞，可那伞哪是为了遮挡她的身体！她把伞的一大半用来遮挡手中的东西，那时我的衣服、雨鞋，还有蛋糕、汽水、饼干。我到了她眼前，她眼泪汪汪的看着我，我一辈子也不会忘记母亲看到我时的那种目光。那是难以用语言描绘的目光，那是母亲眼里特有的光华。

毛病：———————————————————

修改：———————————————————

段落二：妈妈非常的疼我。一天，天生瘦弱的我病倒了。母亲白天带我到医院排队、挂号、看病、拿药整整忙乎了一天，夜里又一直守候在我身边，生怕发生什么意外。可那时我完全不知道妈妈一夜没水，整整一夜，一直都在看护着我。第二天早晨，我慢慢的睁开双眼，朦胧中，我看到了母亲的脸，黯然无光，眼里布满了血丝。显然她已经疲惫不堪了。见我醒了，她用手轻轻的抚摸着我的前额，露出了欣慰的笑容。顿时我只觉得一股暖流涌上心田，啊！妈妈的经历是多么的充沛，意志有十多么坚强啊！我真为有这样一个精力充沛，意志坚强的妈妈而感到幸福。

毛病：—————————————————————— 修改：——————————————————————（2）学生读材料后，交流讨论得出答案。

（3）全班共同交流，学生回答自己是如何分析的。

明确：段落一毛病：结尾的议论空洞，不具体。

段落二毛病：结尾的议论抒情句和记叙、描写的内容脱节，没有准确地揭示记叙、描写所要表现的内容。

3、小结：通过刚才我们的共同交流，同学们应认识到在记叙文写作中运用议论需注意的问题有两点：①、议论要具体、贴切。②、议论要和记叙、描写和谐统一。

4、随堂练习

请学生读材料，按要求在下列文中的横线上加入恰当的议论句。

在下面这段话结尾的横线上，加入能揭示“我”感受和记叙内涵的议论句。

清晨，走在上学的路上，一片树叶飘落在我的肩上。一叶知秋，我将它拾起，仔细地端详。它那变化了的色泽，正在失去的柔软，以及开始卷曲的形态，向我展示了一个生命最后阶段的依恋与惆怅。----。（1）学生阅读填写。

（2）小组交流，推荐最好的学生发言。师生共同评议。

（3）参考答案：它似乎在告诉我，生命是多么美好，时光又是多么容易流逝，珍惜这大好青春吧！

5、写作指导——归纳记叙文中议论的作用

记叙文中记叙是主体，是基础。由于记叙还不能完全表达作者的意思，因此在叙述和描写以外，往往还要使用议论；或是对事物的本质作理司性的分析；或是对事实的意义作必要的引伸，（由此及彼），以扩大读者的认识；或是对问题进行辩证。（1）叙述中议论的特点

叙述中议论的特点有三：第一、议论是建立在记叙、描写基础上之上的，议论是由人物、事件的记叙生发开去的。第二，它可长可短，安排穿插比较自由。第三，作者常是由事生感，由感而议，因此，它又带有抒情性，议论和抒情自然的结合起来。（2）叙述中夹叙夹议的形式： ①先议后叙（概括式）

这种形式往往出现在文章的篇首，主要作用是提示和点题，出现在一段文字开头的议论，同样具有概括全段的作用。这种议论句，我们通常称之为中心句。②先叙后议（总结式）

这种形式往往出现在一篇文章或一段文字的结尾，带有某种哲理的色彩或某种深沉的感慨，它的主要作用是总结全文、深化主题、画龙点睛、启迪思维等。③边叙边议（包容式）

边叙边议，即边叙述事实，边进行议论，发现自己对所叙事实的看法。

夹叙夹议中“议”是作者表达的一种认识，这种认识不仅要富含哲理，还要有饱满的感情。正如古人所云：“立片言而居要，乃一篇至警策。”这是对“议”的最好的诠释。需要指出的是，议论要看准当口，选择时机，掌握火候，做到恰当到好处。（3）叙事中议论的作用

叙事中的议论大体有三点作用：一是议论可以使事实与道理相辉映。读者不仅可以了解到事实，而且可以从中认识到事实具有的深刻意义；二是议论可以对叙述的事物进行适当的评价和分析，使主题表现得更加突出、鲜明，尽管是只言片语也能起到画龙点睛的功效；三是议论可以直接表现作者的思想、情怀，把作者对客观的见解和主张概括为抽象思维，给人以有益的启迪。

（4）叙事中的议论的技法：

开宗明义，提挈全篇。即在文章开头做精要议论，以提示全文中心并引起下文。穿针引线，承上起下。这种议论一般用于事情发展的转换衔接处，也称作夹叙夹议。如《谁是最可爱的人》一文就是通过议论把三个故事衔接得天衣无缝的。这种叙议相间的方式，由于运用了多层次的议论，便使得文章跌宕多姿，因而感染力也就更加强烈。

画龙点睛，深化主题。凡是高明的作者总喜欢在记叙进入高潮后来一段精辟的议论，或突出性格，令人起敬；或点明事理，引人回味；或触景生情，让人慨叹。

篇末点题，总结全文。叙事文结尾的议论，一般应做到总结全文，揭示主题，或意在言外，发人深思。

（5）叙述中议论应注意的问题

明确：在写记叙文中运用抒情议论时要注意避免几个问题： 一是“空”：议论和记叙脱节，各敲各的锣，让人不着边际。

二是“浅”：议论没有切中所记事物的深刻意义，浮光掠影，成为空洞的说教和时髦的口号。三是“滥”：议论多而且不当，即乱发议论。

八、参考资料：

九、作业布置：题目：这一次，我没有放弃

要求：（1）写成记叙文。（2）内用具体，中心明确，写出自己坚持做某事的经历。（3）结构合理，详略得当，语言通顺。（4）采用夹叙夹议的写法。（5）字数不少于600字

十、课后反思：

第五篇：夹叙夹议作文指导

“夹叙夹议”作文写作指导

一、教学目标

总的目标是通过系统复习，达到会写夹叙夹议的文章。具体说来有三个方面的要求。

（一）整篇作文：

（1）准确全面地理解题意；（2）思想健康，中心明确，材料充实；（3）语言规范、准确、连贯、得体；（4）结构完整，条理清楚；（5）符合文体要求；（6）字体端正，卷面整洁。

（二）单项能力：

多写一些“夹叙夹议”的语段，写好“夹叙夹议”中的“叙”，写好“夹叙夹议”中的“议”。

二、难点、重点分析

夹叙夹议是散文最常用的手法，也是记叙文与记叙性散文的最大区别之处。“叙”是抒情、议论的基础，否则抒情议论将变得空洞；“议”是“叙”的升华、深化，使文章的内蕴丰富，所以说“枝繁叶茂”。但散文中的“叙”与“议”与记叙文与议论文不同，可引导学生阅读中领悟。并在写作训练中练习，学会和提高夹叙夹议的能力。

夹叙夹议的作文就是以记叙为主，在记叙中运用恰当的议论。这类作文要写好，一定要注意处理好“议”，议是叙述点睛之笔，所以议不能为主，议要恰到好处，使文章的主题得到升华，使读者更能理解和品味出文章的主旨来。

（一）何谓“夹叙夹议”？

把议论穿插于具体的叙述和形象的描写之中，就是夹叙夹议。

（二）“夹叙夹议”适合哪些文体？

记叙类(记叙文、散文)

议论类(议论文)

1、文章中的议论的作用：用议论深化主题，揭示自己的思想、看法。

2、“叙”与“议”的关系：“叙”是“议”的基础，“议”是“叙”的深化。

（三）记叙类文章之记叙文

要使记叙文有动人的感染力，必须：不能只是单纯记述事情，要与议论、抒情等结合如何处理记叙文中的“夹叙夹议”？

1、记叙和议论的结合是有机的。二者不能相互脱钩。记叙为主，议论为适当的提炼、概括和升华。

2、合理安排议论的位置。

用在全文或一个大层次的开头，起提示、概括文章内容、表明作者思想、立场而展开下文的作用。

夹叙夹议”既是一种写作方法，又是写作的一项基本技能，掌握了这种技能，对写好各类散文和议论文有着重要意义。纵观近年来的高考作文，许多得高分的考生，大都善于运用“夹叙夹议”的手法。在作文教学实践中，可尝试着让学生多写一些“夹叙夹议”的语段，收到了很好的效果。这种语段写作训练可分两步进行。

第一步，指导写好“夹叙夹议”中的“叙”。

[设计简说] 作文，不仅纪录我们的生活经历，纪录我们对生活的观察，同时还纪录我们对生活的认识，因此，好作文不仅有“叙”——叙得生动，而且还有“议”——议得深刻。“夹叙夹议” 就是叙事和议论穿插进行，写法上灵活多变，作者可以自由自在表情达意。

[作文题]

世界，充满了七彩阳光；生活，回响着动人的乐章。是什么曾拨动你的心弦？是新绿的小草？是母亲的微笑？是丛飞的歌声？„„那么把你心中的歌唱出来吧。请以“我要为_____唱首歌”为题作文。要求：将题目补充完整然后作文。[作文背景] 生活本来就是平常的、普通的、甚至是平淡的，但是，如果用心品味，如果能从中品味出真善美，并生动地表现出来；能从一件平凡的小事中，获得特别的体味，并抒写出自己的一份独特的感受来；能从一处平常的景色里，发现大自然的魅力，并表达出自己一些真切的认识来，那么你的作文就是很有意义的了——不仅让自己重温了生活中珍贵的影像，再次品味了幸福的滋味，而且还给别人以启迪——这是很了不起的。

[作文指导

（一）] 还记得《济南的冬天》吗？那是老舍先生为自己生活过的古城唱的歌；你一定还记得《背影》吧，那是朱自清先生为父爱唱的歌；铿锵的《安塞腰鼓》你一定没忘吧，那是为蓬勃的

亲情,它是一剂良药,能治愈心中的创伤;亲情,它是一个港湾,能容纳漂流的小船;亲情,它是一双大手,能抚平情感的挫折.小时候,亲情就是母亲温暖的怀抱,父亲宽厚的脊梁,幼小的心灵里能充分感到亲情的温暖与无私.那时的亲情是生病时的探望与呵护, 顿挫时的鼓励与支持,也是得意忘形时的棒喝„„是亲情的力量支撑着我们慢慢长大,渐渐成熟.长大了,亲情便是一盏明灯,照亮了前进的道路,同时,它也是一个避风港, 给飘泊的游子一个平静的港湾.这时,母亲的鼓励与父亲的关怀就是激励我们前进的永恒动力.亲情是无形的，没有人能够说清楚它是什么样子；亲情是无偿的，它不会让你为它付出任何代价；亲情是无价的，世上没有什么事物的可以价格比得上它；亲情是无私的，世上没有东西比她更能牺牲自己；亲情是无尽的，你的一生无时无刻不在体会到它的存在.如果你是一粒种子，亲情就是土壤;如果你是一株小草，亲情就是大树;如果你是一艘小船，亲情就是灯塔；如果你是一条小河，亲情就是大海.亲情是春季绵绵的细雨;亲情是夏季阵阵的清风;亲情是秋季收获的喜悦;亲情是冬季希望的曙光.亲情是这喧嚣的世界之中的桃源,亲情是无边沙漠之中的绿洲,亲情是绝望之中的一丝希望„„亲情,能时刻给人温暖,予人快乐,让人明白,在这人情冷暖,世态炎凉的世间,还有一直对我们不离不弃,始终如一的东西存在.„„

亲情是山顶的积雪，简洁却永恒；亲情是河底的流水，轻柔却又悠长；亲情是海上的那一轮落日，缠绵却又绚烂；亲情是古老的碑文，模糊却又永恒!亲情,超越了时空，编织了人生最美丽的彩虹.友情似清水·美酒

月光淡淡，清风徐徐，独自在河畔；水波荡漾，花香四溢，友人在远方。

----题记

仰头看去，浩瀚夜空只剩一轮圆月，对天问道：灿烂星空为何只剩月光？人各有志，各奔四方。盈盈月光，我掬一杯最清的，洒向夜空，月光好似珍珠一般，带着一缕清风的清爽，月光的澄澈，飘落到我的脸上。花朵的芳香，萦绕在我的身旁，让人感到一种非常的温暖，无限的惬意。

友情好似清水，它没有世俗的杂质、也不需要绚丽的颜色，更不需要改变它的味道。清澈、纯洁、真诚是它的本质，有了这些，这清水般的友情就足够了。不要让它建立在权力、富贵、荣华之上，正如圣人所说“君子与君子以同道为朋，小人与小人以同利为友”。不要人为的去为他制造一个惊心动魄的过程，真正的友情是建立在纯自然的基础上的，什么也无法改变它，正如诗句所说“海内存知己，天涯若比邻”。更不要再好友离别时，大肆为好友饯行，以示彼此的友谊。那样就使友谊失去了他本身的意义，只需要一声简单的送语一句安慰便可，正如古人所言“莫愁前路无知己，天下谁人不知君。”

友情似清水，淡淡之中已将我们彼此紧紧相连。

一阵风刮起，带起尘沙，慢慢睁开眼，看一人独自在夜光下畅饮。昂首吟道“举杯邀明月，对影成三人。”我走近看罢，正是被人们称为诗仙的李白。我慢慢坐下，轻声问到为何如此？“好友离去，知音难觅，怎能不愁？”斟一杯美酒与太白共饮，美酒的幽香随风飘去，一直飘到那多愁的月亮上去，看看太白的愁容，月亮的光芒，我体会到了“我寄愁心与明月，随风直到夜郎西”的那种寂寞与思念,也懂得了“千金易得，知音难觅”的孤独与无奈，百感交加只得举杯和太白对饮。友情正向这美酒，时间越久，味道则越香纯。而这美酒的原料正是两颗真诚的心和那来之不易的缘分。无论我们在哪里，只要我们的心还在一起，这美酒就会不断的酿下去，而且会越酿越香、越酿越纯，永远都不会变质。有人说友情就像浓茶，香浓过后就只剩下平淡和无味；但你是否听过“人生得一知己已足以”有人说友情只是一种无聊的感觉，时间会将一切冲淡；但你是否听过“相知无远近，万里尚为邻”。

友情似美酒，越久越旧，友情则越香纯，越浓厚。

我爱这清水般的友情，它使我懂得“友情是人生的调味料，也是人生的止痛药”。生活不能缺少朋友也万不能少了友情，人生若能得一知己，死而无憾。

我也爱这美酒般的友情，它使我明白“若知四海皆兄弟，何处相逢非故人”，真正的友情是用两个人的心筑起的铜墙铁壁，固若金汤。

友情似清水、美酒，它洗涤了我的心灵，带走了我的不快。我重视朋友，但更重视我们彼此之间清水、美酒般的友情。让清水的友情洗去烦恼，让美酒的友情飘满人间。

例文

1.生活因挫折更精彩

在人生这所学校中，挫折是一门必修课。

这门课增加了我们的勇气;增强了我们的意志;坚定了我们的信念，使我们更坚强、更勇敢、更乐观……我有这样的亲身体验。

我爱好民乐，喜欢琵琶。刚学它时，我遇到了许多大大小小的挫折。这些挫折几乎将我打倒，一度我准备放弃琵琶。当我心灰意冷时，一次成功的登台演出，使我得到了许多人的好评。

我笑了，这次成功使我懂得了挫折的美丽，明白了如果生活中没有挫折，生活就平淡得好似一杯白开水;如果生活中没有挫折，像一望无垠的沙漠，没有一点起伏，那么生活又有什么意义呢? 也许，你还在摇头，说这些并不能说服你，那么请看贝多芬。贝多芬双耳失聪，要知道，音乐家失去了听觉就像驾驶员失去了眼睛。但他却忍受着病痛的折磨，以一句“我要扼住命运的咽喉，决不让命运使我屈服”激励着自己，继续在音乐领域里奋斗，他创作出了不朽名曲《第九交响乐》。这不仅使他的生活有了美妙的旋律，也为全世界喜欢音乐的人们带去了精彩的生活与美的感受。

司马迁狱中写《史记》;吴承恩在科举中屡遭挫折，但他并没有放弃，写出了《西游记》;一生不得志，生活贫困的蒲松龄创作出了中国着名的文言短篇小说集《聊斋志异》;鲁迅在黑暗势力的迫害下，仍能写出众所周知的《彷徨》、《呐喊》……还有全身瘫痪的奥斯特洛夫斯基和他的《钢铁是怎样炼成的》;因患小儿麻痹症而终身残疾的小提琴王子帕尔曼……

当这一个个活生生的实例展现在你面前时，你还摇头吗?你还认为挫折仅仅是阻挡你前进的障碍吗? 其实，生活似大海，挫折就似大海中的波澜，赋予大海以壮丽与神秘;生活如蓝天，挫折如蓝天中的白云，星星点点，却布满天空;生活像一张白纸，挫折则像一支支画笔，为生活这张白纸描绘出美丽的图画;生活是一个乐章，挫折则是这乐章中一个个跳动的音符，奏响的优美乐章……

假如你选择了蓝天，就不要渴望风和日丽;假如你选择了陆地，就不要渴望大陆平坦;假如你选择了海洋，就不要渴望一帆风顺。让我们勇敢地面对挫折，生活因为有了挫折而更加精彩!2.岁月痕迹

时间匆匆，转眼中华人民共和国已经成立62周年，她经历风风雨雨，却始终保持这她那份坚强与毅力，没有人知道她是如何度过那些心酸的日子，像无数的恶魔在身边，像千只蚂蚁在吞噬，这一切的一切只有经历过风雪的她才能懂得，我为她骄傲，为她鼓掌。

至新中国成立初期，好多事情都让我们的祖国妈妈头痛，面对这强大的外敌与不断的内部斗争，在看外强中干的自己，鲜血已经流很多了，但自己的孩子却不能得到基本的满足，她在心中发誓：一定要将生产提升上去，让孩子得到足够的温饱。她开始引进新的技术与不断培养人才，也许时间不是问题，但技术却在不断创新。在很长的时间中，她迷惘过，更伤心过。于是，她踏遍祖国的每一个地方，开始不断深入研究，让每个地区因地制宜，发展自己的潜力。到1978年，从改革开放，她明白了自己这条路是走对了，让他国了解自己，更可以学习别国的文化技术，增加国与国之间的了解。这条路走的很顺利，很快我们的祖国从贫困中走了出来，人们的生活水平变好了，经济水平得到了提升，她有