2012年上海高考英语作文及评析

第一篇：2012年上海高考英语作文及评析

2012年上海高考英语作文范文及评析

又一年高考落下了帷幕。2012年上海高考英语作文题较有新意——假设作者上周在一所小学观摩两堂绘画课，以日记的形式描写两幅小朋友的绘画作品，并谈谈从中获得的启发。其中一幅是小孩用脚蘸了颜料在画布上踩脚印，另一幅图是小孩用画笔在纸上画山水。

这不是一篇容易写的文章。同样是图片作文，今年的难度要高于2010年的《课堂一角》。首先，提供的图片有两张，提高了对于描写的要求。高考英语作文已经不再仅仅考察学生的议论能力，它有些借鉴中文作文，要求学生夹叙夹议。在叙述中，如果只是平铺直叙那显然得不到高分。描写的关键在于捕捉事物的特征，而高考作文往往要求学生在短短几句话中描写到位，这其实是不低的要求。在笔者看来，精妙地运用几个动词是这部分制胜之道。相反，要少用形容词和副词。马克吐温曾说：“当你看到一个形容词时，杀死它。”虽然这样说不无夸张，但好的动词确实能让文章充满力量，生机勃勃。如，以下是笔者为2010年高考作文原创的范文，请看这里的描写：

In this picture, the pupils are all beaming.They are scrambling to answer a question as if they have full confidence in themselves.The excitement and the eagerness to participate gush out of the picture.This is reminiscent of my own classes at primary school.At that time, we each wore the same innocent smile, fought with a jungle of other hands, and single-mindedly believed our answer would impress the teachers most.I enjoyed these classes for they sparked my interest in many subjects and taught me that competition could be fun.其次，图片的含义并不是显而易见的，需要看出每张图背后的意思并将两张图结合起来说。2010年的考题也是开放性的，但相对来说学生比较容易展开。可以具体分析为什么小学生会积极举手发言，而年龄越大课堂参与感越弱。如以下这样论述：

Such fond memories they are!Unfortunately, as we grow older, we are increasingly reticent in class.There are many possible reasons for this change.It may be puberty that is to blame because we dread losing face.It may be that our body and mind are straitjacketed by the education system.It may simply be humans’ desire to conform to their peers—“Since nobody is putting their hand up, why should I?”

Whatever the reason, our carefree and innocent years at primary school is a reminder that we are always children at heart.Behind that cool facade, we can still be enthusiastic and committed to what we love doing.而今年的考题可以表达的含义则更为多元。有些学生认为这两幅画体现了传统和创新优缺点，笔者并不完全同意。单单从创作的角度来说，用脚画画谈不上创新，脚印的堆砌也构不成艺术。而用画笔画山水也不尽然都是传统。因此，用这两幅画分别代表传统和创新不具有很大的说服力。既然话题是开放性的，绘画可以只是个表象，在绘画背后的寓意则更深刻。一个个脚印可以代表脚踏实地，不拒绝做一些朴实而基础的事。相反，山水画代表着鸿鹄之志，代表着对未来的憧憬。而这两种特质应该是一对矛盾统一。就像Facebook的创始人马克?扎克伯格说的一样：“把眼睛盯着繁星，把双脚踩在地上。”显然，这样的立意更耐人寻味。

再次，文章要求考生用日记的方式写，对熟悉了议论文、图表作文和书信等较正式文体的广大考生来说，是个不小的挑战。即如何体现出日记的风格，保持一种真实、清新、内省的笔调，而不是一副架势十足的虚伪样子。但是，作为应试作文需要有一定的规范。考生可能会疑惑是否可以使用俚语、习语、缩写或网络流行词。确实，笔者认为既要考虑日记的特性又要兼顾考试的规范是一件令人纠结的事。尽管如此，还是可以通过一些手段，如将较正式的it is缩略为it’s（面对自己，我们无需如此正式）或运用如would be better off这样较口语

化的表达。

在本次高考结束，笔者又特地创作一篇范文，供读者参考。笔者水平有限，如有错误，请不吝指正。

范文：

Date: June 8, 2012

Last week, I sat in on two painting classes at a primary school.In one class a student dipped her feet in ink and made a painting out of footprints.By contrast, the same student used a brush to make a breath-taking landscape painting—so vivid that one could almost smell the refreshing rivers and hear the chirping birds.Though standing in stark contrast, the two paintings both intrigued me.In fact, they reminded me of what Facebook founder Mark Zuckerberg said, “Keep your eyes on the stars and your feet on the ground.” It’s this maxim on success that lends insight into the two paintings.The first painting represents that we should remain grounded and be cautious of being carried away with temporary success.A kite stays afloat because it’s attached to a reel;otherwise it will instantly lose its balance before eventually crashing into the ground.So it is with us.However, success requires more than being simply down-to-earth, with a lofty ideal being another crucial factor.So grand was the scenery portrayed in the second painting that it embodied the reach of our dreams.Instead of ignoring the gleam of light, the spark of wisdom that flashes across our mind and worshipping the luster of the sky of geniuses, we’d be better off trusting that the gleam and the spark will one day shine as brightly as a search light if we have faith in ourselves.The paintings taught me to dream big and act small.And I believe, by doing so, the warm light of success will cascade into my life.

第二篇：2013上海高考英语作文参考

上海博物馆拟举办一次名画展，现就展出场所（博物馆还是社区图书馆）征集公众意见，假设你是王敏，给上海博物馆写一封信表达你的想法。你的信必须满足以下要求：

1.简述你写信的目的及你对场所的选择；

2.说明你的理由（从便利性、专业性等方面对这两个场所进行对比）。

Dear exhibition organizers of Shanghai Museum:

My name is Wang Min, a student studying at Shanghai XX High School.I am writing to offer my views on the place where the exhibition should be held.As far as I am concerned, the painting exhibition should without doubt take place in Shanghai Museum instead of the community library.The reasons why I hold that opinion are as follows.First, in terms of convenience, Shanghai Museum is a much better choice for visitors who may not know well about Shanghai.Located near People’s Square, the best-known transportation center and tourist site in Shanghai, it is absolutely easy for anyone to find it.Considering that it is an exhibition of famous paintings that will attract guests from all over the world, the broad streets will serve as another advantage to provide easy access and sufficient parking space.Another advantage that Shanghai Museum has over the community library is that it has considerable experience in organizing such exhibitions.It is quite common for Shanghai Museum to be in charge of a wide range of activities.We should hand a task to a professional rather than an amateur and Shanghai Museum is just the professional who will fulfill the task skillfully.Modest as my reasoning may seem, I believe it makes sense.I hope you will include my views when you make the decision.Thank you!

Yours Sincerely

Wang Min

第三篇：上海高考英语满分作文汇总

June 8th

Dear Haiqing，I hear you are very unhappy these days because your parents can‘t afford to buy you some brand-name shoes and garments you like very much.And I write you this letter to share with you what I think about this matter.To begin with，beauty is just skin deep.Don‘t you think it silly to pay so much attention to your appearance？ He is a shallow person who judges others by their appearance； in the same sense，he is a shallow person who thinks that a brand-name garment can add to his glamour.So please，just forget about those brand-name things.What really matters is not whether you wear brand-name shoes or garments but whether your clothes fit you.As a student，you have to wear the school uniform on the weekdays and to be honest，you look very smart in it.Then why do you have to bother to buy the expensive brand-name things？

Secondly，I know your parents are both average workers.Hard as they work，they don‘t earn much.Despite this，they do their best to give you a lot of things on demand.Look at the callus on their hands and wrinkles on their faces，how can you have the heart to ask for more than they can afford，which will surely break their hearts？ Remember，parents don’t owe us expensive summer camps； they don‘t owe us Sony Walkman； nor do they owe us Nike shoes，If you really want those fancy things，you should take a part-time job to contribute to their purchase rather than ask your parents for money to add to their already heavy burden.Don’t you think so？

Thirdly，we have such a wide variety of things available these days which are both nice and inexpensive.What‘s the point of paying much more for those brand-name things that are not much better？ My friend，take my advice，and you’ll be a wiser consumer as well as a more considerate child to your parents.Poverty，sometimes，is a good thing.It can test a person‘s character and it makes a man out of a boy faster than anything else.Keep working hard，and you are bound to be able to afford those things in the near future.Now you may as well focus on your study.Anyway，wouldn’t it be funny for a would-be achiever to be so preoccupied with brand-name things all day long？

Keep in touch.Yours

Huangping 459 2012 As is vividly described in the picture, the foreign pupils are raising their hands, eager to answer the teacher’s questions.Judging from the smiles on their faces, they must be very happy, relaxed and free.This reminds me of my primary school days, which was totally different from theirs.As far as I can remember, my teachers as well as my parents always told me to keep quiet and sit straight in class, not to do anything without the

teacher’s permission, including smiling and speaking out our viewpoints freely.I did as I was told.Frankly speaking, I’m fond of the atmosphere in western classes.But on the other hand, I still treasure the strict discipline learned when I was young.As a matter of fact, I think it is different cultures that make different classes and also different students.I am glad to see that the education of China is undergoing a significant reform, which aims to reduce students’ learning burden and encourage students to be more imaginative and creative.I firmly believe that in the near future more and more Chinese students will enjoy a free and open classroom atmosphere.192 2.As is described in the picture, a group of foreign students are raising their hands to give answers to the question in a joyful and active way.The purpose of the picture is to show us how active the class performance is in the foreign country.Compared with the class performance in local China, the difference is quite obvious.We Chinese students stay quiet in class, keep taking notes and listen to what teacher is talking in a careful way.I ask myself what causes lead to the phenomenon? Why class performance of Chinese students is quite different from that of foreign students? Possible reasons can be listed as follows.Most important of all, education system in China is the key reason.The first day we become the primary student, our teachers tell us to obey the rules in class.We put our hands back and stay quiet in class.Lecture-model teaching is the traditional way in Chinese class.Teacher is the leading actor or actress and student is always the supporting roles.Gradually we get into the habit of staying quiet in class and lose the ability to raise questions and give the answers.The second point to be mentioned is that Chinese students hold different attitudes toward study.In our minds, we always think what we should learn instead of how we should learn knowledge in a smart way.We behave us as a passive listener, but foreign student act as a active learner.As a saying goes, it is better to teach to fish rather than give a fish.Taking what has been discussed above into account, there is no doubt that we need to think it over whether we are supposed to be a learner or a quiet listener.193 2009 •

It is said that a summer camp is to be held by your school and a few courses are available to choose from.I am interested in gardening, in that I believe it features my character and personal benefits.•

During the learning period, I expect to gain some unexpected knowledge.A radical technique I’d like to obtain is to know how to tell difference species of plants and flowers apart.This helps me to have a clearer outlook of those in my garden.Furthermore, the proper cutting time and frequency to water are some other skills I want to learn.A little knowledge concerning choosing suitable soil or reasonable positions will also be a good choice.• The main reason why I choose gardening is that I want to help my parents with their work in the domestic garden.In addition, I find that we students generally lack the knowledge of gardening, missing a chance to have a word with nature, so that knowing the surroundings is imperative.Last but not least, by attending the courses, I will have a meaningful summer vacation, and drowning myself between plants will by all means add a brilliant touch to my life.200 2008 1.A group dancing competition will be held in our school and the monitor calls on everybody to take an active part in it.While most of my classmates are still hesitating whether to participate, I have said yes to our monitor with great pleasure.Generally speaking, there are two reasons for my decision.First, it is a good opportunity for me to relax myself, which will enable me to study more efficiently.All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy, so goes the saying, which clearly shows us the importance of relaxation.Besides, I think I am a good dancer after learning dance for more than five years.Participating in the contest will be a golden chance for me to show my dancing skills and make some contributions to the class.For the two reasons mentioned above, it is no surprise that I have such a strong enthusiasm for the group dancing competition.155

2.Today the monitor calls on everybody to take an active part in the group dancing competition which will be held in a couple of days in our school.But after some careful consideration, I have decided not to participate.There are a number of reasons for my decision.First and foremost, as the College Entrance Exam is just around the corner, study is the top priority for me.Participating in the group dancing competition has to give way because it might take me too much time.What’s more, without any experience of dancing, I don’t think I can be a good dancing partner.I am afraid my poor dancing skills will probably spoil the performance of the whole class.In this case, it’s better for me to be a spectator cheering for my classmates.For these reasons, it seems more appropriate for me to watch the competition than to dance myself.151 2007

A Present for Father’s Day

The Father’s Day will come soon.and I want to give my Dad a present.That is a VIP card of a health club.When I was a little boy, Dad worked hard as a teacher.During term, Mother and I sometimes accompanied Dad in his office till a late hour.From then on, I understood that Dad worked with great effort.There are still too many precious memories which I’ll cherish in my heart.And I want to give this present to express my thanks to him.Time flies and I’m 18 now.As I grow up, Father is getting older.He is now still diving into piles of books.With the health club membership, I hope that he will set aside some time to do more exercise.I think that he will relax in the health club and make more friends as well.150 2.It is widely acknowledged that a good present is of great value to a person and even prone to change his or her life.As for me , one of the most impressive presents I have given to my friends is a watch which I have used for three years.The watch was given to Tom, who is one of my best friends.Diligent and warm-hearted as he is , he sometimes has no sense of time, which causes him to be late for many things and leads to some trouble in work.By giving him such a watch, I hope he will pay more attention to punctuality, which may bring him more credibility in life and higher efficiency in both work and study.Besides, he used to tell me that he might feel lonely in the new environment after leaving the old friends in high school, and thus I hope that such a gift will remind him of the good old days we happily spent together and help him to feel better when he misses me.Anyway ,I do wish that Tom will like this present, which hopefully will bring him good luck.192 2006

Of the two universities listed above, I prefer the one in the north.The main reason is that the tuition is only 5,000 RMB for the university a year, compared with 8,000 RMB for the university in the south.This makes a big difference for a family like a mine, because my father is peasant and the only breadwinner in the family.Studying at the northern university can save my father big money.Another reason I take into consideration is the preference policy the northern university offers.Any candidate who chooses to study there may gain an extra 20 points, which greatly raises the possibility of my being admitted to this university.Of course, it doesn't mean that it will be quite easy to pass the entrance exam because this university has limited the number of qualified candidates to 10 only.However, I have been doing quite well in school, so I believe I can pass the entrance exam with flying colors.162 2.Compared with the northern university, the southern one is more to my liking.It is true that in terms of tuition the former is 3,000 RMB cheaper than the latter.However, that's not a problem to me because I can work my way through college once I get admitted.What counts is the reputation it has.Once I enter this school, my future career is guaranteed.Also, the university in the south recruits 20 new students instead of 10, which means that I will stand a better chance of getting admitted.The competition is very keen, though, as you can see because this university doesn't give candidates any extra points.So all I can do now is study hard, pass the tough entrance exam, and qualify as a student of the university of my choice.135

2005

There is an old English saying that there must be a use for my talent.I have regarded it as my motto for many years.From my point of view, there is no difference between one person and another.With some useful talent, you will make your contributions to this society.When I was ten years old, there was an old man living at the corner of xx Road.He didn’t have the opportunity to study in school, but he learned how to make wood furniture.Every time people went to ask him to solve some problems of furniture, he was willing to help them.To my surprise, in his spare time, he would make some toys with small piece s of wood.Some of them were sold to the toy store and others were given to us.The moment I see the lovely toys made by this old man, I would remember the happy childhood.From this old man, we can see whatever kind of talent you have, you can find your own method to display your talent.The most important factor is your confidence.If you believe the saying that there must be a use for my talent, you will succeed.205

第四篇：上海高考英语作文万能公式

开头万能公式

原理：要想更有说服力，就应该用实际的数字来说明。

原则上在议论文当中不应该出现虚假数字的，可是在考试的时候哪管那么多，但编无妨，只要我有东西写就万事大吉了。

所以不妨试用下面的句型：

According to a recent survey, about 78.9% of the college students wanted to further their study after graduation.看起来这个数字文绉绉的，其实都是编造出来的。

更多句型：

A recent survey shows / indicates that …

结尾万能公式一：如此结论

说完了，毕竟要归纳一番，相信各位都有这样的经历：领导长篇大论，到最后终于冒出个“总而言之”之类的话，我们马上停止开小差，等待领导说结束语。也就是说，开头很好，也必然要有一个精彩的结尾，让读者眼前一亮，这样，你就可以拿高分了！比如下面的例子：

Obviously, we can draw the conclusion that good manners arise from politeness and respect for others.如果读者很难“显而易见”，但说无妨，就当读者的眼光太浅罢了！

更多过渡短语：

• To sum up, „

• In conclusion, „

• In brief, „

• In short, …

• In a word, / In a nutshell, …

• All in all, …

更多句型：

• Thus,it can be concluded that„

• Therefore,we can find that…

• So, we can conclude that…

写作的“七项基本原则”

一、长短句原则

工作还得一张一驰呢，老让读者读长句，累死人！写一个短小精辟的句子却可以起到画龙点睛的作用。而且如果我们把短句放在段首或者段末，也可以揭示主题：

• As a creature, I eat;as a man, I read.• Although the former is to meet the primary need of my body while the latter is to

satisfy the intellectual need of mind, yet they are in a way quite similar.• 如此可见，长短句结合，抑扬顿挫，岂不爽哉？牢记！

强烈建议：

 在文章第一段（开头）用一长一短，且先长后短；

 在文章主体部分，要先用一个短句解释主要意思，然后在阐述几个要点的时候采用

先短后长的句群形式，定会让主体部分妙笔生辉！

 文章结尾一般用一长一短就可以了。

二、主题句原则

国有其君，家有其主，文章也要有其主。否则会给人造成“群龙无首”之感！相信各位读过一些破烂文学，故意把主体隐藏在文章之内，结果造成我们稀里糊涂！不知所云！所以奉劝各位一定要写一个主题句，放在文章的开头（这样做更保险）或者结尾，让读者一目了然，必会平安无事！

特别提示：隐藏主体句可是要冒险的！

To begin with, you must work hard at your lessons and be fully / wellprepared for the exam（主题句）.Without sufficient preparations, you can hardly expect to answer all the questions correctly.三、一 二 三原则

领导讲话总是第一部分：第一点、第二点、第三点、第二部分：第一点、第二点、第三点

虽然繁琐，可毕竟还是条理清楚。考官们看文章也必然要通过这些关键性的“标签”来判定你的文章是否结构清楚，条理自然。破解方法很简单，只要把下面任何一组的词汇加入到你的几个要点前就清楚了。

1）first, second, third, last（不推荐，原因：俗）

2）firstly, secondly, thirdly, finally（不推荐，原因：俗）

3）the first, the second, the third, the last（不推荐，原因：俗）

4）in the first place, in the second place, in the third place, lastly/finally（不推荐，原因：俗）

5）to begin with, then, furthermore, finally（强烈推荐）

6）to start with, next, in addition, finally（强烈推荐）

7）first and foremost, besides, last but not least（强烈推荐）

8）most important of all, moreover, finally…

9）on the one hand, on the other hand（适用于两点的情况）

10）for one thing, for another（适用于两点的情况）

建议：不仅仅在写作中注意，平时说话的时候也应该条理清楚！

四、短语优先原则

写作时，尤其是在考试时，如果使用短语，有两个好处：其

一、用短

语会使文章增加亮点。如果老师们看到你的文章太简单，看不到一个自

己不认识的短语，必然会看低你的作文。相反，如果发现亮点------一个

精彩的短语，那么你的文章定会得高分了。其

二、关键时刻思维短路，只有凑字数，怎么办？用短语是一个不错的办法！

比如：

 I cannot

可以用短语表达：I cannot

 I

可以用短语表达：Iit.I am badly in need /want of it.这样字数明显增加，表达也更准确。

文章主体段落三大杀手锏

一、举实例

思维短路，举实例！提出一个观点，举实例！提出一个方案，举实例！而且这也是我们揭示一个观点最好的方式。在任何情况下，只要我们无法继续文章，不管三七二十一，尽管举例子！

In order to attract more customers, advertisers have tried every possible means in making ads, such as sound, light, colors, cartoon films and human performances.For instance, to advertise a certain kind of food, advertisers will ask an actor or actress to sit at a table and devour the seemingly delicious food while they film him or her.更多句型：

• Let’s take „ as an example.• Let’s take „for example.• For example,„

• For instance,…

• One example is… and another example is…,二、做比较

方法：写完一个要点，比较与之相似的；又写完一个要点，再比较与之相反的。世界上没有同样的指纹，没有相同的树叶。文章亦然。只有通过比较，你才会发现两者的相同点(through comparison）和（through contrast）。

下面是一些短语：

相似的比较：

likewise, similarly, be similar to„,in the same manner

相反的比较：

on the other hand, conversely, whereas, while, instead,nevertheless, by contrast, in contrast to/with„,in comparison to/with„,on the contrary, compared with „

三、换言之

没话说了，可以换一句话再说，让你的文章再多一些字。

或者文绉绉地说，是让读者更充分地理解你的观点。实际

就是重复、重复、再重复！下面的句子实际上就三个字

I love you!

I am enthusiastic about you.That is to say, I have lost my heart to you.I am wild about you.In other words, I have fallen in love with you.或者上面我们举过的例子：

I cannot bear it.可以用短语表达：I cannot put up with it.因此可以这样说：I cannot bear it.That is to say, I cannot put up with it.or I am fed up with/ am bored with / am sick of / am tired of / am weary of it.更多短语：in simpler words,/ put it more simply（简单地说）

总之，如果我们经常按照上面的方法练习，加上多多模仿优秀范文，就一定能写出比较好的英语文章。

第五篇：2014上海高考英语改革（推荐）

2014上海高考英语改革

近日，2014年高考改革的消息一直不绝于耳，语法部分的变动是板上钉钉的定论------取消选择题，替换为语法填空题。

下面，请大家先看一下2013年3月份左右高考考试院内部发布的2014年语法新题型的样题，牛刀小试一下：

Directions: Read the following passage.For some blanks, there is a word given in the brackets.Fill in each of these blanks with the proper form.of the given word.Fill in the other blanks with words that are correct in structure and proper in meaning.There is a photo hanging above my desk.Whenever I look at that photograph, it takes me back to those early years __1__ everynew experience was important for me.It was towards the end of the school year __2__ it happened.I had been looking forward to that day with such eagerness.I can still remember the shouts of the spectators as I __3__(go)out onto the sports field with my classmates.Two days __4__(early), I had qualified for the finals of the 100 metres.Now looking around, I was determined __5__(win).…

请大家对对答案：

1.when2.that3.went4.earlier5.to win

众所周知，高考英语的语法题型多年来一直以单项选择的传统题型来考查，2014年将全面取消语法选择题（16题*1分=16分），替换为新题型：语法填空（见以上样题），2个语篇，共15道题（15分）。

通过样题，我们可以发现新题型语法填空的形式，基本可以分为两种，提供提示词的和没有提示词的。前者的考察点在于，以提示词的适当形式填空；后者则以连接词、或代词、冠词、介词、固定搭配等为考察点。

相较语法选择题，鉴于没有可供排除的选项，故新题型的难度相对较高，需要考生有一个扎实的语法基础，方可游刃有余的应对此题型。虽然2014年的考生大部分都花了十几年的时间来训练选择题，对选择题的题型及应试技巧烂熟于心，但是在考纲未发生重大变化的前提下，“万变不离其宗”，纵然题型有变，但是主考的语法点并未发生变化。只要考生对语法的基本知识有系统的掌握，加之多年选择题的大量操练，一样可以应对新题型，无需感到紧张不安。