第一篇:2014浙江高考作文
2014浙江高考作文:门与路永远相连,门是路的终点,也是路的起点,它可以挡住你的脚步,也可以让你走向世界。大学的门,一边连接已知,一边通向未知,学习、探索、创造,是它的通行证;大学的路,从过去到未来,无数脚印在此交集,有的很浅,有的很深。综合上述材料作文,不少于800字。
我的路 我的门
温岭中学陈越(高考语文142分)
看到这个题,我有一种莫名的近乎落泪的感动。
(平实的开头,真挚的感动,感动前有三个修饰词,文采显山露水。但作者的高明之处在于成功地将门与路的关系型话题转化为对感动的表达,化难为易。)
禁锢已久的已逝的和我憧憬着的闪着光的日子不知从哪里涌出来,让我既熟悉又陌生,既欣喜又不知所措。
(禁锢、已逝、憧憬、闪着光、熟悉、陌生、欣喜、不知所措。一句话用了八个修饰词来写日子,心理词语有六个,说明感官集中在心理描写上,也就是感动的演绎。)早晨起床,对爸爸妈妈感慨一句:“这么着,我就要高考了。”他们都笑了。
(情境描写,突出感慨一词,重压之下的释放,既是自我解压,也让父母释怀,被自己的洒脱感动。)
三年一瞬,曾经认为漫长的高考路已到尽头,我记得怀揣着分班成绩踏入教室时的踌躇满志;我记得第一节化学课校长坐在讲台上我们的小心翼翼;我记得发了高烧数学老师允许我睡一节课我的心满意足;我记得无数个夜晚我的挑灯夜读;我记得无数个清晨我的闻鸡起舞„„现在回想,这一切或成功或失败的努力,或欣喜或忧伤的经历,于不经意间早已一寸一寸地为我铺平前方道路,承载着我最初的梦想让我坚强地前行了。
(用五个我记得的。。的句式来连缀高中三年时光,手段不算高明。但此段有两处变化,一是首尾有对高考的认知从幼稚到成熟的变化,二是词汇虽然仍以心理词为主,但从双音节词变换为成语,这就显得不俗了。)
而今,我在路上奔跑着,我看到了不远处的那扇门,虽然我仍只是望着它遐想,但我知道,那是与未来,与更广阔天地的连接点。门口,有自由的风气,有大师的思想,有无所畏惧的新的征程。我渴望着在一片更广阔的领空翱翔,然后在我所最钟爱的一片绿荫中停歇;我渴望着在更辽阔的海洋遨游,然后在某处深潜下去,去和其他鱼儿嬉游争食,去和海底的珊瑚问好。门后,是又一块如此适合我的梦想的起飞之地。而现在,我已正在不远处眺望着它,过不多久,我就要一踮脚够到它了。
(对门外风光的想象。先设置一个奔跑在路上的情境,前方看到了门、未来、天地、自由、思想和征程,都是理性的;理性表达之后变为感性呈现,领空翱翔、绿荫停歇、海洋遨游、争食问好,展现了两幅生动可感的画面,理性到感性的变化,为此段的亮点,但还在感动之内。)
门与路,真是天生一对如此玄妙的组合。路上挥洒汗水,门后收获惊喜;路上风雨兼程,门后自有既定的目的之地,作为对执着的人最好的回报。路给了我明确的方向,门给了我拼搏的动力。而即将走完一程路、推开一扇门的我,无疑是个最满足的人了。
(正面阐述门与路的辩证关系,并无特别之处,但这是扣题之处。)
我的路上有温暖同行,我收到了妈妈关切的电话,我也看到从不参加什么祭拜的父亲在普
陀双手合十给我许愿时弯下的宽阔脊背。那些时刻,我便握紧拳头,更奋然而前行。(继续在父母关爱的细节中感动着,爱是我前进的动力。)
我的门需要我自己推开。有一刻我终将试练我的锋芒,在另一个圣洁的地方,仰望头顶灿烂的星空,我将依然微笑着面对一切,亦会如伟人一般在真理的大海边玩耍。
但我知道,我依然不能停止奔跑,因为大学之门后,自有另一条充满挑战的路,那里有我未来的阴晴雨雪,路的尽头,一定会在梦的渡口闪光。
(个人成长固然需要父母帮助,但更重要的是独立坚强。最后两段,用诗歌的语言作结,门后的未来,是一个圣洁的地方,在星空下,大海边试炼我的锋芒;通往门的路上,有阴晴雨雪的挑战,有梦的渡口在召唤。门和路成了意象,营造出了两个截然不同的意境,路上如雾似梦;门后手可摘星,文采尽显。)
总结:本文是一篇想象作文的典范。作者的心理词汇十分丰富,可以猜测,作者应该平时特别喜欢看国外的散文,积累有多丰厚。取巧之处有二,一是避开门与路的象征意义,从感动的角度来铺陈;二是将门与路的辩证关系放在篇幅的四分之三处,恰到好处。精彩变化之处有四,一是概述与细节的变化;二是抽象语言与形象语言的变化;三是思路上从路到门又回到路上的变化;四是句式上的变化。一篇好的作文,从遣词造句到谋篇布局,必然是变化多端,才能让人眼前一亮,拍案叫绝。
第二篇:2012浙江高考作文
2012年浙江高考作文
江山如画,一时多少豪杰。遥想公瑾当年,小乔初嫁了,雄姿应发,羽纱纶巾。谈笑间,樯橹灰飞烟灭。
早生华发的苏轼两肩挺拔,须发飘飘的站立在黄州赤壁瞻仰着周瑜,誓言要功成名就。凄凄惨惨戚戚的国破家亡的易安居士站在汨罗江边凝视着项羽誓言生当做人杰,死亦为鬼魂。素袍一袭的闻一多面对着已是满目疮痍,饿殍成河的祖国站在演讲台上,面对万万学生,激情昂扬誓言要驱逐倭寇于吾国。
从古自今,一辈辈的先人如同在一艘巨轮上的掌舵者,在漫无边际,浩浩荡荡,时而狂风骤雨的江面上,长风破浪,披荆斩棘的为我们把巨轮开驶到一片灿花烂漫,骄阳妩媚的陆地上。逝者已经离去,精魂永驻心头。但当人们在和平年代不用在流血拼命的时候,却早已将英雄们的精魂抛到了九霄参云外,不再仰鼻承息了。有的心甘情愿的坐在茂密如荫的茁壮的参天大树下拾掇着从路边拾捡来的瓦砾一般的玉石珠宝,有的舒舒服服的靠在已有百年年轮的树桩上乘风纳凉,好不逍遥,有的则两眼直直紧紧的瞪着一往直前的后继者们。
和风硕硕,青山叠嶂,溪水浅浅。一位须发冉冉,鬓角斑白的老者放下匆忙的脚步,驻足路边,说道:请跟我一起前往吧,翻过这座山,越过那条河,就可以到看到一幢金碧辉煌的圣殿并住进去了。树荫下的人们像已经连接了电源的电风扇的扇叶一般摇头并哧哧的笑着说:山间的凉风很是舒适,软软绵绵。说完继续做着刚刚停手的事情。不过多时,一位衣衫褴褛,精气十足的年轻男子跑过这里,看到这些不慌不忙的人们,说道:请跟我一起跑吧,听说翻过这座山,越过这条河,就会在一座金碧辉煌的圣殿里看到一位可以帮助每一个人实现他们梦想的君王。树荫下的人们不约而同的回道:拥有这棵古树就是我们梦寐以求的,已经实现了。说完继续做着刚刚停手的事情。过了很久,一位扎着蝴蝶结的带着红领巾的小朋友气喘吁吁的停下来,看着路边的人们问道:你们是否看见一个爷爷和一位叔叔超着这条路跑过去,他们往哪去了。树荫下的人们齐手向小女孩招招手说:你追不到了,来跟我们一起吧。翻过那座山,越过那条河,是不可能实现的。
小女孩摇摇头,说道,老师说了,没有做不到,只有想不到,我相信自己,泰山再高,也只能把大地作为基座,江河再宽再长,也有靠岸的堤坝。不再理会他们,继续往前了。
第三篇:2012浙江高考作文
坐在路边鼓掌的人
恍然如梦,有一种不真实的感觉,仿佛眼前的一切都是梦境,可不会有人去打扰它,只是静静的坐在路边,看着事情发展的经过,一边鼓掌,一边思索——这就是一个成功者的经历。
人生如戏,但更如棋局,每一个都是棋手,即使你不慎沦为棋子也不需自暴自弃,你可以退出成为看客。为你真正“旁观者清”而重返棋局大杀四方时,你已初窥成功。
一元钱每个人都拥有,但当你拥有一万.十万甚至一千万时,你还会以五元钱为标准吗?不是每个人都能将俗事看轻,难得糊涂,所以孔子在世时提出中庸,老子在世时提出无为。
当你看见一个杯子中装满牛奶时,你会大声说“这是牛奶”,当杯子中装满水时,你会说“这是一杯水”只有将杯子中的东西倒了,放在你面前,你才会说“这是一个杯子”。所以第一个人心中具有想法.偏见时,是很难改变的。但成功者又不一样,他们又跳跃了一个境界。正如世界首富比尔.盖茨,他已经拥有了旁人难以想象的财富,为什么不是买一幢海景别墅,几十辆豪车,隔三差五的开派对。人生如此,夫复何求。为什么还穿着几百美元的短衬衣,泡在一群大老爷们中开发什么操作系统!
也正如埃里森,甲骨文软件公司总裁,一个中年创业,老年成功的又一个“美国梦”他们的成功激励着所有人。但你不可否认他们曾经都失败过,但他们都毫不犹豫的将自己的灵魂与身体分开,坐在路边,圆梦曾经的过往,从中反思到明白问题的关键才会鼓掌起身。最后将自己的人生推向另一个高峰。
俄罗斯方块告诉我们,落下的错误会累积;坦克大战告诉我们只是一味的进攻输的还是你......而简单的事重复做,你就是专家;复杂的事用另一种眼光看结局会截然不同——看山是山,看水是水,独上高楼,望尽天涯路。坐在路边看风景的人,就会是你!
第四篇:2013年浙江高考作文,原创
世界因你而美丽
美好的世界,来自万物的丰富多彩,更来自丰富多彩的人的心灵。而一个人的心灵的充盈程度,是随着他的成长而不断饱满的。但是这个成长却总是要面对沉重而压抑的现实。我想说,不要屈服这些啊,否则心灵的灵动和多姿多彩就会离你而去,剩下的躯壳中,尽会留下僵硬和干枯的心灵。如果是这样作为一个人将多么可悲,如果是这样世界怎能不沉沦?
似乎越是年轻的时候,越会去回想童年的时光,年轻的美好感觉,很大程度上是来自这里的。而童年的美好时光,作为一种饱含真情和真意的养料,也似乎只能滋养人到年轻的时候。人成长到这个时候,美妙的东西还好多啊,欢乐是生活的主基调。
因为世界之于他们是那样单一,因为周围都是爱他们的人,因为他们还有自由,还能得到宽容,因为他们还有希望和梦想……他们拥有很多的美好,他们的心灵也是如此的光明和纯净。所以,我说世界为你而存在,世界因你而美丽。
想一直如此,但是时间的无情,社会的考验,引导你走向了另外的一片天地。这个世界,有饥饿寒冷,有暴力流血,有不公歧视,有尔虞我诈、有勾心斗角,有……一种沉重和窒息感让你彻底忘记了曾经的欢乐,为了生存,于是你开始改变。当你努力的时候,你发现要抛弃以前的梦想;当你想成功的时候,你发现你需要麻木和冷漠。你终于明白了这才是真正的现实。但是当你理直气壮的改变自己去拥抱所谓成功的时候,你的心灵正在沉沦,直至走向了深渊。此刻,你也许感觉这个世界属于你,但世界并没有因你而美丽。
我想上天在人的前半生,给人以美好和希望,让人拥有美好的心灵,绝对不是让你在后半生去改变,去适应一种邪恶的环境。我相信这是在给你美好的同时,赋予了你重大的使命。这个使命就是,让世界因你而美丽。
我们也看到了黑暗之中的光明,看到了邪恶之中的正义,看到了野蛮中的文明。我想这些不仅仅是个人在成长中会遇到抉择,也是一个社会和国家在发展进程中会出现的复杂现象。如果一个个的人能够拥有美好,那么这个社会和国家,也将走向更美好。所以,世界会因你而变得美丽。
第五篇:2013年浙江高考作文.ppt.Convertor
2013年浙江高考书面表达范文
One thing I am proud of
(开头引言)During the course of growth, everyone has experienced a lot and has many stories,sad or exciting, it is these events that make upof our colourful life.Following, I’d like to share one of my proudest stories with you.(正文叙述)The first day I went to high school, I saw some of my classmates playing table tennis.Amazed at how skillful they were, I was determined to be just as good.Later on, I often watched them carefully to learn their techniques.Then I kept practicing until I became confident enough to challenge the good players.At the end of the term I became one of the best players in my class.(总结感受)I am really proud of this experience, because it helps me realize that we all can fulfill our potential and achieve our goals through hard work.It also helps me better understand the proverb “Practice makes perfect”
One thing I am proud of
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He went into the classroom, with a thoughtful expression on his face, wondering if he had ever seen the person on his way to school somewhere before, for the person gave him a long and thoughtful look, which reminded him his father…….