第十一届全国创新英语大赛细则

第一篇：第十一届全国创新英语大赛细则

“安博杯”第十一届全国创新英语大赛复赛考试细则

为了规范第十一届全国创新英语大赛的复赛考试工作，建立公开、公平、公正的考试制度，保证第十一届全国创新英语大赛考试质量，根据组委会相关规定，制定本办法。

一、复赛场地查看

1.时间：2012年7月14日下午15:00~17:00

2.地点：各赛区考点

二、考试时间：2012年7月15日

（一）听力、作文考试时间 2012年7月15日上午8：30-9：50。

8：00――8：15核对证件 选手进入考场

8：15――8：20宣读比赛准则

8：25――8：30发放答题纸

8：30――9：50听力、作文笔试

9：50――10：30休息，下午进行口语比赛的选手离场

（二）口语考试时间 2012年7月15日上午10：30-12：30，下午13:30-18：00。

10：10A组口语比赛的选手进入侯考区

10：30――12：30A组口语比赛时间

13：10B组口语比赛的选手进入候考区

13：30――15：30B组口语比赛时间

15：40C组口语比赛的选手进入候考区

16：00――18：00C组口语比赛时间

三、复赛选手参加考试必带材料：

1．准考证；

2．身份证（无身份证选手可以使用临时身份证或者附有盖章照片的户籍证明）；

3．准考证必须和身份证同时使用才有效（无身份证选手请参考以上第2条）；

4．准考证以大赛报名系统显示为准，禁止擅自修改，一经发现，取消考试资格；

5．钢笔或签字笔（黑色或蓝色）、2B铅笔（听力比赛使用）、橡皮。

四、听力考试

（一）考试办法

1.听力考试时间为20分钟。

2.听力试题由试题命题组命制，考试当天要求在全体选手监督下拆封试卷和听力资料。

3.考试结束后，由监考老师当场装订并密封试卷。

（二）听力评审

1.复赛听力评分办法：复赛结束后，全国各地的试卷汇总到北京赛区，统一阅卷评分。

2.所有试卷阅卷老师无法看见学生的考号、姓名等个人信息

3.听力成绩占总体复赛成绩的20%。

五、作文考试

（一）考试办法

1.现场限时作文一篇（时间60分钟，字数不少于300字）。

2.复赛作文题目由参与本次大赛的部分高校分别命制并组成题库，考试当天由北京主考区考生家长当场随机抽取一道题目；北京主赛区抽题结束，组委会连线全国其他15个考点告知考试作文题目。

3.考试结束后，由监考老师当场装订并密封试卷。

（二）作文评审

1.复赛作文评委：复赛评委由参与本次大赛的部分高校选派的英语教学专家、教师组成。

2.复赛作文评分办法：复赛结束后，全国各地的试卷汇总到北京赛区，统一阅卷评分。

3.阅卷分为A、B组，每组设一个评卷组组长，组长由著名高校的英语专家担任，组长负责把控作文的阅卷标准、阅卷进度。作文由A、B组老师各阅1遍，取平均分为考生的最终成绩。

4.如果同一份试卷，A、B组阅卷分数相差5分（不包括5分）以上，将由复审专家进行复审。

5.所有试卷阅卷老师无法看见学生的考号、姓名等个人信息。

6.作文成绩占总体复赛成绩的60%。

六、口语考试

（一）、比赛办法

1.口语试题由参与本次大赛的部分高校分别命制口语题库。

2.分赛区所有选手由组委会事先由电脑程序自动生成口语比赛顺序，选手准考证上可看到自己的进场侯考时间。

3.参加口语比赛的选手应在规定时间，在指定的考场外等待考试，按照顺序依次进场考试。

4.选手进入口语考场后，将准考证交给考场工作人员，由选手本人在考试机器上输入自己的准考证号，进入系统后，选手确认个人信息无误后，开始考试。

（二）、口语评审

1.复赛口语评委：复赛口语评委由参与本次大赛的部分高校选派的英语教学专家、教师组成。

2.全国创新英语大赛组委会对本次考试全程录音。

3.复赛口语评分办法：复赛结束后，由评委老师根据选手口语考试录音。每一个选手的录音由两个考官进行打分，取两个考官的平均分复核确定最终成绩。

4.口语考试占复赛总体成绩的20%。

（三）、口语题型

口语比赛题型分为：自我介绍和话题陈述。

各占10分。

自我介绍：考生有10秒的时间阅读考试要求，在系统提示可以陈述之后，考生有60秒的陈述时间，自我介绍内容包括：

My name is„

My number is„

I have a dream„

话题陈述：系统随机抽题，选手有30秒的准备时间，在系统提示可以陈述之后，有90秒的陈述时间。

七、评分和奖项：

1.选手复赛成绩为：20%的听力成绩+20%的口语成绩+60%的作文成绩。

2.大赛复赛获奖者均可获得参加此项大赛自主招生高校相应的自主招生等优惠条件。

3.复赛结果请于8月初登陆创新英语网（）、腾讯网、新浪网查询。

八、考场纪律要求

1.考生进入考场，只准带必需的文具，如钢笔、签字笔、铅笔、橡皮等，不可携带任何书籍、纸张、笔记本、电子词典、字典等任何作弊材料及工具。手机等通讯工具必须关闭，否则立即取消考试资格。

2.禁止家长跟随考生进入考区，家长可在考区之外等候考生。

3.笔试开考前15分钟（即8：15）之后，考生不得进入考场考试。

4.考试时间内如有特殊情况经监考同意后可暂时离开考场，但必须有监考人员陪同。除此之外，离开考室均须交卷并不得返回续考。

5.听力、作文考试时，考生答题一律用黑、蓝色钢笔或签字笔书写。考生答卷时，要先在试卷指定位置填写姓名、考号。凡姓名、考号漏填或字迹模糊不清、无法辨认的，该试卷一律作废。

6.考试结束时间一到，考生必须立即停止答卷，并将试卷背面朝上放置在课桌上。不准将试卷和分发的稿纸带走，提前交卷的考生不得在考场附近逗留、谈论。

7.考生在考试时不准偷看他人的答卷或有意让人抄袭，不准交头接耳。凡有作弊行为的考生，一律取消考试资格。

8.严禁考生作弊，如发现冒名顶替、代考等作弊现象，当即取消其参赛资格，并通知考生所在中学。

9.有下列行径者，考官可以当场取消考试资格：

（1）由他人冒名顶替考试的；

（2）扰乱考场秩序的；

（3）在试卷卷面非署名处署名或作标记对评卷人员进行提示的；

（4）不尊重监考和主考，扰乱考试，情节严重的。

《高校招生》杂志社

全国创新英语大赛组委会

2012年7月

第二篇：第十一届 全国创新英语作文大赛 (经典)

Topic: Moms and dads, please let us fly.Conversations:

Parents: Take good care of yourself, my boy.Boy: Yeah, I’ll.And you，too.Parents: Don’t forget to check your passport again before boarding the plane.Watch out your belongings, and don’t be shy to ask your host family for help if you make any mistakes, of course you can call us as well.And, oh…

Boy: Don’t worry, mom and dad.I promise to only make mistakes you never made.Composition:

As can be seen in the picture, there stands a merrily boy who is well-packed.Maybe he is going to be an exchange student.And his parents are saying goodbye to him by their house.This picture conveys the message that the couple gives the freedom of practice to their child.They allow him to break a path by himself so that he can adapt to the society easily and finally lead a rich and varied life although they worry a lot about their little boy.Just as the message above shows, our parents usually think too much of us, because they want us to be a perfect one.They tell us what we should do and what shouldn’t, ignoring our thoughts.They just don’t think what we are interested in is beneficial to our growth.They love us in an unsuitable way.Actually, in our opinions, we think we need chances to make mistakes.Because we will go through a process of making mistakes, during which we experience

and learn a lot.So, for this point of view, I advice parents respecting and encourage the personality of their children.And the most effective way is taking part in society activities.For one reason, with the rapid development of information technology in the 21st century, our society needs an increasing number of talents who have not only extraordinary ability of knowledge but also the teamwork spirit and sense of cooperation, but not the ones who are spoilt by their parents.Another reason is that there exists intense competition in modern society.So in order to have our own places in society, we must make full preparations through experiencing setbacks and challenge them.If parents follow the principles above, there will be a much happier and more harmonious relationship between parents and us.What’s more, for us, these experiences and rebirths will also be invaluable to character building, making them more independent, diligent and enterprising.Moms and dads, we need opportunities to make mistakes, only in this way can we stand a better chance.So you may rest assured that we will not fail your expectations.If you love us, just let ourselves go!

第三篇：第十一届语文创新作文大赛

阅读能力测试（1）

1、作者通过通过宾夕法尼亚大学近期的一项实验发现：人们不愿关注那种那种泛泛的信息，他们更有可能会捐钱给某一特定受害者。即人类相比于关注社会性的贫穷问题，更愿意关注个人性的贫困问题。

2、人们在面对贫穷等问题时第一反应是慷慨，但由于自己能力有限而所需捐款数额巨大，而往往觉得自己的捐款起不到什么帮助。

3、人们总是会对捐款的最终去处产生担忧，因此人们总是怀疑捐款的安全性和真实性。

4、人们的想法过于极端，会觉得捐款毫无用处或觉得捐款就可以解决一切问题或者其他。

5、人们总是只注重捐款，而不注重提高贫穷地区人们的整体素质。

6、人们总是去思考如何解决贫穷，但由于实施起来难度太大，总是不去做。

7、人们总是夸大捐款的作用，不去帮贫困地区人们提高积极性和生产力，不能从根本上解决贫穷问题。

8、注重捐款的过程而不注重捐款如何去用，不了解贫困者心理状态，不能做到对症下药，让捐款起到应起的作用。导致了捐款的盲目性。

9、不去了解贫困者真正的生活困境及其特殊性表现，不去思考如何消除贫穷。（2）

贫穷与富有是相对的，两者有着密不可分。在我看来，未来世界将会更加“贫穷”，但最终会趋于稳定。全世界都存在贫富差距，并普遍认同意大利经济学家创立的基尼系数，并将0.4设为警戒线。我没有读过资本论，但有幸涉猎了一些经济学。如果资本家可以通过做生意赚取2000万人民币的话，他可能只需要拿出500万来给工人开工资。剩余的1500万就被资本家给剥削掉了。而这个世界上有着许许多多的资本家，也就是说这个世界的大部分财富掌握在这少部分人手中。那些贫穷的人因为教育资源的匮乏和趋于饱和的市场等问题就难以有为。而原来的那些资本家与他们的后代可以凭借先前的资本进行越来越大的“剥削”。长此以往，越来越多的财富会聚集在越来越少的人身上，而基尼系数也就会越来越大。但过大的贫富差距如果不在体制或规则上进行制约，社会必会以动荡乃至崩溃的方式来强令其调整。所以我想未来世界相比现在会再“贫穷”一些，不过终将趋于稳定。创新作文写作

高考之外

六月斑斓的风，浮在脸颊上的青春，我们在一起的时光。高中三年对于每个人来说都是一次考验和一段美好的记忆，不同的态度可以产生不同的结果。在浩如烟海的试卷里，许多人还未高考就急于否定自己，最后拿到了“理所应当”的成绩，但其实低谷并不可怕，可怕的是你自己急着承认失败！许多人的高考之路失败了，但也有许多人通过高考而实现了人生的逆转。落榜两次最终考上北京大学的新东方创始人俞敏洪，从全班倒数第一成为正数第一并最终考入中国传媒大学的央视主持人白岩松，高考前拼尽全力学习而考上清华大学的畅销书作家高晓松。我们身边从来就不缺少高考励志的小故事，高考也确实改变了许多人，让许多有才之人可以凭自己努力来实现梦想。高考有着它最大的特点——公平。但高考真的是我们成才的唯一出路吗?如果不通过高考我们就不能获得好的教育，从而拥有美好的生活吗?到底什么样的人才适合高考之外的那些路径呢？

事实是，条条大路通罗马，高考并不是唯一的成才之路，在高考之外，万千学子仍有着许多方法和机会去实现各自的理想，只要有信念。说到韩寒，可谓无人不知无人不晓。成功逆袭的他已然成为青少年的新一代励志偶像。高二时，处于青春叛逆期的他怀着对传统流水线教育模式的不满愤然退学，开启了另一种奋斗模式。他通过自己的执着和坚持不懈的努力，凭借辛辣的笔触迅速崛起，在新文学论坛开辟了属于自己的一片江山。当许多成绩不好的愤

青也想模仿韩寒以为可以轻而易举获得成功时，韩寒却说：“照亮我前途的不是七门功课红灯，而是才华。”是的，韩寒的成功不是每个人都可以复制，因为让他走向名利双收的从来不是他所谓的叛逆，而是他异于常人的才华和难以想象的付出。

新一代文艺女作家蒋方舟也是名噪一时。她有着和韩寒相似的文学禀赋，自7岁就开始写作，9岁写成散文集《打开天窗》，2008年被清华大学“破格”录取，毕业后，就任《新周刊》杂志副主编。她也是一位桀骜不驯的人，但不像韩寒那么极端那么有棱角，而是选择了充分利用自己文学方面的特长，顺利通过保送进入清华大学，依靠清华良好的氛围和平台进一步成就自己。

现如今，有着越来越多的奥赛生通过保送或自主招生进入自己心仪的大学，让不少学生分外眼红。不过我想这些奥赛生所获得的优惠是他们应得的。为了理想，他们放弃了闲适的假期，无论严寒酷暑，终日与难题对抗，冒着偏科的危险追求自己的理科梦想，并敢于在数以万计的考生中做一个不一样的人。关键是，他们比一般考生更努力。有些成绩不好的学生可能会觉得自己只是没好好学，好像他们只要一好好学就能考到年级前几一样，对此，我只想说，我所在的奥赛班没有一个人是笨蛋，但每个人都很努力。高考之外并不是指的不上大学，它是泛指除高考外实现人生目标的方法。你只有才华而没有努力是不会取得什么成就的。只有具有才华，玩命努力，才能在高考之外找到属于自己的天地。

一位物理学研究生曾多次与其导师讨论最前沿的科技问题，而他的导师每一次的回答都是“对不起，这项研究我还没有看。”久而久之，研究生就对导师的能力产生了怀疑，他忍不住去问导师他是不是已经对物理学失去兴趣了。导师只是浅浅一笑，淡淡的回道：“我想你并不知道这些科技前沿新闻的价值到底是什么，它的价值在于让你了解你研究的课题别人是不是已经研究过了，或者这项科研进行到哪一步了，距离出成果到底还要多久，而不是让你也加入到这项研究中去。我之所以不看这些东西，是因为我已经养成了自己的决策论和方法论。”由此而知，知识的追求不在于多，而在于精。如果我们的学习方法自成体系，而自己恰好又才华横溢，便可以沉醉在自己的思考中，追求自己的人生目标。别忘了，当年爱因斯坦想出相对论的过程中，他没接受任何帮助。聪明讨巧的思考方式，是高考数学抢分的关键。而独具一格的思维模式，是你与别人最大的不同所在。

你所热爱的不一定拥有，你所向往的不一定抵达，你所眷幕的不一定停驻，你所坚定的不一定持续。经过与快乐的谈判，与痛苦的和解，适合你的生活方式，就是归宿。但只有那些天生具有才华，能吃得人下苦的人才能在高考之外实现自己的人生目标。对于大部分人来说，高考才是真正的主战场。

空气流动，风的路线有一万种。无论高考之外还是高考之内，我们的目标都是通过努力过上自己喜欢的生活，就算平平淡淡，也绝不意兴阑珊。方向可以改变，但绝不能丢失，让自己过得快乐的人，才是最大的赢家。

第四篇：2013年全国英语创新大赛作文

外语屋教育

2013年全国英语创新大赛模板作文

How to Eliminate Fake Diplomas

As is known to us all, jobs or something else.What’s worse, someone even takes faking diplomas as their jobs.It is generally accepted that faking diplomas does no good to not only the universities or companies but also the owners.The universities or companies may have some low-skilled students or workers, which will make the institutions suffer a lot.For the owners, faking diplomas may cause a bad thought in their mind, because they hold the opinion that faking diplomas can solve all the problems.If this trend came into being, the whole society would be in such a mess.Therefore, how to solve the problem is worth paying more attention to.What’s worse, our country may fall behind compared with other countries, if the trend continues.The following ways can be adopted to eliminate fake diplomas.Firstly, the universities and companies can have a search to see whether the diplomas are real or not online.Secondly, they can give exams to check whether they have skills.Thirdly, our government should take measures.For example, the government can set an online data base store to help universities or company check online conveniently.Last but not least, we, the civil, should set up a proper attitude to faking diplomas, and refuse to do that.And if we see someone is faking diplomas, we should give an alarm to the police in order to make a harmonious society.It's true that we need high-skilled workers, but what we need more is honesty.Only if we treat others in honesty can we set up a world in harmony.However, eliminating fake diplomas is still on the way.We need to spare no effort to do that.Only when we stop this trend can we live in a fair society.Never Give Up

As an old proverb goes, never give up.At anytime, whether giants in any field or common people, the old saying can refer to them.No doubt, only with the determination of “Never giver up” can we achieve the final success.Many remarkable reasons contribute to this argument.First of all, success usually can’t be achieved until after a lot of failures.It is not unusual for us to fail in our first attempt at something new, so we should not feel discouraged by our failures but should try again, which is the main basic spirit of “never give up”.What’s more, a lot of scientific achievements are created under the spirit.For example, if Edison had given up his research after a few failures, we might not have the electric light today.If WangXizhi once had given up his ambition to write excellently, I’m afraid we might not have the brilliant handwriting.Besides, we can develop confidence from our mistakes and failures.In addition, it also helps us to improve our skills.All mentioned above tell us that it is necessary for us to do the right things without giving up.If we give up, we will not achieve anything.Besides, if we give up, it may make us lose heart.And if we always give up when confronted with difficulties, we will not be able to develop new skills and see miracles come out

All in all, “never give up” is a basic requirement for us.Not only can we achieve success but also make us confident.We should never give up when working towards our goals.Therefore, there is no denying that we should have the determination of “Never give up”, whatever we do.Only with this belief in mind can we really achieve something.The Difference in Income Sources between American and Chinese Student

As is described in the chart, we can clearly learn that Chinese students depend on parents much more than American students.It is reported that American students get a large amount of income from their part-time jobs rather than from parents which suggests that American students are much more independent.爱心用心专心 1

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There are many reasons accounting for that case.First of all, as we all know, Chinese students are ordered to keep on studying for a long time in order to pass exams while American students have much more free time when they can earn money.Secondly American students are taught to be independent when they are young.On the other hand, Chinese students’ priority is to study well since they set foot into schools.Thirdly, American government allows children to do part-time jobs, while Chinese government doesn't.Last but not least, the college scholarships in China are not enough to meet most of Chinese students' needs.As a result, it's quite evident that why there exists such a big difference in income sources.As we all know, the way American students use to earn money will make

them much more independent, while we Chinese students will never catch up with up with them.So it’s high time that we were supposed to take measures.In my opinion, the Chinese should learn from Americans.The students should find more chances for part-time jobs in spite of parents' help, because they can not only lighten the heavy load of high tuitions fees on their family, but also gain necessary social skills and experience in communication or others.By means of doing part-time jobs, they can also have an objective view on this country, and even develop their creative ability.Therefore, Chinese students' income source should be diversified.Telephone or letter

Quite a few people take it for granted that telephone has taken the place of letters.Even some hold the opinion that we don't need letters anymore.On the other hand, some prefer to write rather than make a phone call.In my view, I'm in favor of the former.Of course, writing can organize one's thoughts more logically.By writing they express themselves more easily.But writing a letter takes a lot of time and sometimes it makes one so eager to receive his letter that he may get worried.Besides, it will cost us a lot of money if we want to write to a friend far from us.As we all know, as a convenient way to making a phone call gets more and more popular.The following reasons can account for my argument.First, the telephone provides us a quick way to get connected tothe person who we want to contact.A good example is that it takes us only a few minutes to call an ambulance by phone.Second, by making a call, we can listen to the speaker's voice on the line as if we are talking face to face, which, I believe, can strengthen the relationship between each other.Third, it suits the world's fast current on economy and life style.If we wrote instead of making a phone call, we would lose chances or right time to earn money or to develop our companies.Last but not least, with the development of Internet, the Internet telephone is more popular, which costs a little.All in all, I still hold the opinion that writing must be set aside(建议用make way)for making a phone call, because the former doesn't suit our fast steps at all.What we need is a much cheaper and fast way for daily life.（302）

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第五篇：全国创新英语大赛优秀作文

题目：

Directions:

Read the following paragraph and write a composition as stated at about 300 words in 60 minutes.Your composition will be graded according to clarity, accuracy and meaningfulness.In accordance with CRI news, the spirit of Chinese volunteers, from responding to the May 12 earthquake to the 2008 Beijing Olympic Games, not only touched the Chinese people, but also generated worldwide attention.Official statistics show that china has accumulated about 8 billion hours of volunteer work from 380 million volunteers since 1993 and is going to have more and more volunteers, especially the youth.How do you understand volunteer work? In what way(s)is it important to promote the well-being of individuals, families, communities and the world at large? Your writing ought to contain three parts, your viewpoint, the supporting ideas, and the conclusion.Come and join us in volunteer work right now!

On Volunteer

黄昕彤 辽宁省鞍山市鞍山一中108班

The definition of the word volunteer in Lougnan（Longman）Dictionary is someone who helps others sponstaneously（spontaneously）and willingly.That's true!Life is a style of enjoying yourself, not only by entertaing and enriding yourself, but also by the process of helping others.Undoubtfully, those volunteers reveal their great love and passion for their country.Love is the eternal theme of the world, Without hove(love), it's like birds without wings, failing to show its talents of flying, It's like spring without flowers, burying is charming fragrants in the deep soil.Their volunty work unites China, shouing the world how united Chinese people are shocking the world of its cooperation.People around the country are making their efforts to helping others, which leaves the world an impression that China is a veal country, and all the people here are like brothers and sisters, who cares a lot for others.You can never imagine how touched I was when I watched the TV program called “Moving China”.13 peasants from tangshang volunteered to help those victims of Sichuang on hearing the tremendous earthquake happened there, leaving all their farm work done in the field they sacrifiled anything and helped others at any cost, for they knew the glant pains the earthquake brings to people.They can never forget how much pains they havendertaken in the earthquake and how much help they have received from the world.They compared their own feelings to the victims and passed the splrit on.In this sense, people will pass the spirit from generation to queneration, from China to all over the world.Then, how sweet will the World be!

I have a dream that one day, I will be a member of the volunteer team.I have a dream that oneday, I'll make contributions to China however slightest it may be.I have a dream that one day I'll be a founder of a world Charity, helping people all over the world.I'm firmly convinced that it will not only be a drean for me, but also a drean for people all over China, all over the world, and for the great Global Village.专家建议：

整篇文章条理清晰，结构完整，总体感觉很好。但有个别语法错误，固定搭配有些用得不够准确，建议多用课本学过的固定搭配或是词组造句。

专家点评：

文章语言流畅，运用了修辞手法，展现出一定的语言功底。此外，论据生动有力，让人信服。如果句子之间的多用些关联词就更好了。

陈茜 江苏省哈尔滨市第三中学高三18班

Dear grandfather:

How are you?

I am writing to invite you to join us, in the next year, to be a voluntear in the great event, which is to hold in Shanghai.We, a generation born in the 90s in our city, have made a team to do the volunteer work.And you are welcomed by all our team members awing to your great amount of knowledge about Chinese traditions and culture.Please don't tell me you are too old to do this job.I believe you are sure to accept my invitation after reading my following explannation of the importance of the volunteer work.Nowadays, volunteer work, which has raised public interest and concern, is becomming more and more popular throughout the world.As is known to all, volunteer work is not only meaningful but also necessary.One my personal wete, what's more, it's interesting and pleasant!It help us develop oursel.Firstly, for individuals, especially those young, to do volunteer work is an awailuabe wany to goin social experience.By doing volunteer work, they can meet vorrious people and they may run across all kinds of troubles.They however, can become mature and determined by solving these problems.You know, no pains, no gains.Also, individuals will realize that they do make a difference in someone else's life, even the whole event, the world!Their confidence can be rovised and confidence is what it takes to do any job well.For families, if you're the side that received the help of the volunteers, of couse your issue will be more easily dealt with.If you're the side who give others your hand, you will realize there exists no better way to educate your children that “a virtwre deserues amother” because you'll get the best presentsmall at first, contained within its banks, flood passionally then merged into the sea, for the sense of moral considerations.And now, I quite support to be a volunteer.We can never forget these moving scenes: A group of adolecents from Beijing dashed to the City of Wenchuan who gave up their comfortable living situations and picked up the heavy burden to save people buried into the ground, while a middle aged white collar who threw away his computer and salary came here to fetch wictims' lives from the death.It is volunteers who rushed to this place which has suffered from the catastrophe that gave a great help to those victims in need.A volunteer can support a piece of sky, and this one reason I am eager to join them.Secondly, only a volunteer who is in active part in Beijing Olympic Games will he give a great help to those losers.It is volunteers who gave us a warm welcome to Beijing that put the glorious sports meeting from in chaos to in order.A person, as we know, who hasn’t join into the group of volunteer is one of the unfortunate victims of this society which is occupied with love.All of us are in high pressure in this adverse circumstance.Our mind catches hold of something and will not let it go, if we choose the way to argue with the mind, the stronger the will, the more fuitile the task, so we, should choose a way to help others, to see the smile from others.Then the pressure get out suiftly.I always go into rapture at a mere mention of being a volunteer and regard it as a person who is eager to help others or a group not in the same class with the suburban social-climbers.It seems a cliché but a saying which is an infallibility that a splendid case can not leave a volunteer just as a fish can not live without water.专家点评：作者尽量用到了一些高级词语和句型，表明作者有一定的英语功底，但是小的错误频发，如单词拼写，语法问题，句子逻辑，这在某一方面也表明作者的基本功有待提高，继续努力。

专家建议：用词准确是写作的基础。对于学习英语的中国学生来说，背单词扩大词汇量是有必要的，但遗憾的是，学生们背的大都是单词的“外壳”，记的大都是单词的表意或字典提供的大致意思，而基本上忽视了词在语境中的作用和词的“精神”。这种只记单词表意的学习方法对提高语言的运用能力，特别是写作能力是极其不利的。

Let us shine

徐叶子 江苏省张家港市张家港外国语学校高二4班

Volunteers are just like diamonds in the sun, and the diamonds are forever, especially the youth.Volunteer work is just like a miracle.From the May 12th earthquake to the 2008 Beijing Olympic Games, volunteer work made unbelievable contributions.60 years ago our country was set up, today we will celebrate its 60th birthday.In this process, volunteer work did a lot of help and now our country is standing in the world just like a giant.In the past years, volunteers have helped a large number of people, the old, the young, the poor and the homeless.All the volunteers know that the road ahead will be long and cragged, but no matter what obstacles stand in their way they will never stop.Because they have a creed and they believe everything is possible.Oh the creed of volunteer work, you make volunteers keep on going without hesitation.Oh the creed of volunteer work, you make volunteers hand in hand and be with together forever.Oh the creed of volunteer work, you make volunteers go to the edge of the world and let them know the true meaning of life.Do you know what the creed is? Yes, it is love.With love, volunteer work makes people open their mind and let them find the sky is theirs.With love, volunteer work makes people look into their hearts and let the sunshine in.With love, volunteer work makes people believe that smilers will never lose and frowners will never win.I know something has changed because of volunteer work.I know it for real because it feels so right and the world looks so much brighter.Love is important to volunteer work and volunteer work is important to the whole world.The infinite sky is motionless and the blue ocean is boisterous.This moment is perfect.Let us become volunteers and try our best in volunteer work.It can be the start of something new and it's our turn to learn some or win some.So, let's make a wish and get ready to shine like diamonds.专家建议：

建议该考生在语言流畅的基础之上，注意两方面问题。第一，用词更具体些，避免使用语义较为空泛的表达，如learn some or win some。第二，文章华美有余，但逻辑层次不足。需加强句子与句子之间以及段落与段落间的逻辑性。

专家点评：

该作文使用了很多修辞方式，从这一点上看，作者在学习英语的过程中一定是位有心人，注重边阅读边积累背诵。同时能看出，作者一定是一位喜爱英文歌曲的人，文中很多表达都来自于音乐歌词。但在遣词造句时，需要区分口头表达和较书面表达，在这点上，文章还有提高的空间。