英语六级作文强化解析—写作三大原则及实例

第一篇：英语六级作文强化解析—写作三大原则及实例

英语六级作文强化解析—写作三大原则及实例

写作的三大原则：

第一条原则：vary(变化、多样)

第二条原则：input(输入、投入)

语言学习的五种技能：听(listening)、说(speaking)、读(reading)、写(writing)、译(translating)。

第三条原则：practise(练习)

写作出题分析

一、出题内容

六级考试的作文内容为社会、文化或日常生活的一般常识，不涉及知识面过广、专业性太强的内容。具体说来可以分为两个方面：

(1)关于大学生的话题：2007年1月6级作文

(2)关于社会问题的话题：2006年6月6级作文

二、出题形式

英语六级考试作文的出题方式有：命题作文，看图画或图表作文，根据所给文章(英文或中文)写出文章摘要或大意，给出关键词作文等。

根据具体特点六级考试作文可以分为以下五个类型：对立观点型、解决问题型、谚语警句型、图表图画型、应用写作型。

(一)对立观点型

2000年6月

Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic Is a Test of Spoken English Necessary? The First sentence has already been written for you.You should write at least 120 words, and you should base your composition on the outline(given in Chinese)below: 1.很多人认为有必要举行英语口语考试，理由是....。.2.也有人持不同意见，....。.3.我的看法和打算

(二)解决问题型

2003年12月

Directions: For this part, you are allowed thirty minutes to write a short essay entitled Reduce Waste on Campus.You should write at least 150 words following the outline given below:

1.有些大学校园浪费的现象日益严重

2.浪费的危害

3.杜绝浪费，从我做起

2000年1月

Directions: For this part, you are allowed thirty minutes to write a composition on the topic How I Finance My College Education.You should write at least 120 words, and base your composition on the outline(given in Chinese)below:

1.上大学的费用(tuition and fees)可以通过多种途径解决。

2.哪种途径适合我(说明理由)。

1998年1月

Directions: For this part, you are allowed thirty minutes to write a composition on the topic My View on Fake Commodities.You should write at least 120 words, and base your composition on the outline(given in Chinese)below:

1.假冒伪劣商品的危害

2.怎样杜绝假冒伪劣商品

(三)谚语警句型

1997年1月

Directions: For this part, you are allowed thirty minutes to write a composition on the topic Haste Makes Waste.You should write at least 120 words and you should base your composition on the outline(given in Chinese)below。

1.为什么“欲速则不达”？

2.举例说明。

(四)图表图画型

2006年6月

2003年9月

2003年6月

2002年6月

1996年6月

1992年1月

1991年6月

(五)应用写作型

2005年12月

2004年6月

2002年1月

2001年6月

三、时间与字数

英语六级考试作文要求在30分钟内写出一篇不少于150词的文章。

平均一行的合理字数为8-10个单词，六级写作最合理字数为180左右。

30分钟的合理安排：5(审题和构思)+20(正文)+5(检查)

六级写作改卷分析

应对改卷的五大策略

1、字迹清楚，段落明朗

2、内容完整，紧扣提纲

3、首句正确，再求闪光

4、先总后分，连词用上

5、语言简练，内容得当

具体改卷示例

实例一

2003年1月真题

④Now in our society, many people are not honest in doing soming.We often can meet with soming happened cause by people who are not honest.For example, Now we take the bus need carry cents own, and when you upstairs the bus, you should put the cent into the money box.Every people do that, but some of the people put the other things instead the cents.For another example, it is more normal that in the exams we can always find some students see others。

I consider that every people should be honest.As a people, honest should be first, because it can make us to be increase and make our socity develop.In doing every thing we should be honest all, study, word, life and so on.If you are honest, every people will be friend to you, and who will regard you are good people.But if you don’t be honest, people must unwilling to trath with you.So if you are want to be a good people, remember honest first。

⑤Nowadays, many people choose not to be honest in our modern society.We almost can find such things every day of our life: some students cheat in the exam for higher marks;some corporations tell wrong data to the public in order to get more investment;and some doctors treat their patients with unnecessary and expensive medicines in order to make money, sometimes damaged the patients’ health, even their life。

Seeing this situation.I think it must be changed.Being honest will benefit not only others, but also ourselves.First, your honesty will make others willing to trust you.Second, being honest can lead you to face your problem bravely, which helps to solve it.And the last, honest surely helps to make the society more harmony.So.I think everyone should start to be honest and everyone should have the idea that our society can not do without honesty。

实例二

1999年6月真题

Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic Reading Selectively or Extensively? You should write at least 120 words and you should base your composition on the outline(given in Chinese)below:

1.有些人认为读书要有选择

2.有些人认为应当博览群书

3.我的看法

①When it comes to reading, some people think that reading selectively is a good way, but some other people do not agree with them, they think that reading extensively is better。

Those people, who think that reading selectively is better, believe that good books are as many as bad books.Those good books can give us pleasure and knowledge, while those bad books can only lead us to the wrong way.So, they suggest that we should only choose the good books to read and never touch the bad books.But, the other people, who hold that reading extensively is better, think that one kind of books can only give us one aspect of knowledge.Even the best book only contains one field of information.So, they can easily come to the conclusion that “to know more, to read more”.So they believe that reading extensively is better。

To my point, we should choose good books to read and read good books as many as possible.By this way, we can increase the quality and quantity of reading.(11分)

注：when it comes to 当谈到„„的时候

When it comes to reading, opinions differ from person to person。

Those people who think that reading selectively is better believe that good books are as many as bad books。

可以表示“认为”：argue, claim, assert, hold, maintain.但这些词一般跟在 第三人称后面。

But 改为 However

the 去掉

to my point 改成 in my opinion / in my view / As far as I am concerned ②I think reading not only selectively but also extensively.Because the two sides are not contradict.Our time is limited.So we can not read every book in the world.However, we will not be interested in every book.We should read those books may be useful to ours, read those books which we like.But those books which we choose must be extensively so it can give ours all kinds of knowledge, news and so on, it also make ours become a wise man.On the one hand reading selectively let ours not waste our time which it is limitted.Moreover it can emphasis among all books that we can read.On the other hand reading extensively can deal with all kinds of need in our life.They are all useful to ours.(5分)

③Most people thought that read books should have been selectived.But others belived reading extentively was correction。

Selective books or reading extensively? Sure, you can choice one from previous ideas, on one hand, There are too book to read for us.We should choose those which we intrested, and it would be helpful for us。

On another hand.Someone’s intresting was wide.Each book could bring you specific contain we couldn’t reading at only one level。

I confirmed all of these ideas were good but weren’t wise。

As a reader, the main task is to discover more and more books the second task is to held some which wonderful and helpful for us.Don’t treat these books with rackless abandon。

The best technology of reading is connect.(2分)④How should we read? Should we read selectively or extensively? Everyone has his own view。

Some people think we should read selectively.They argue that with the development of modern science and technology, more and more books are published.It is impossible for us to read all the books.What’s more, there are many bad books that are poisonous to our mind, and we shouldn’t read them.Since we can’t read all the books and we shouldn’t read bad books, we must read selectively。

But others may not agree.They emphasize that today’s society is not what it was.If one man has many kinds of knowledge he’ll have more chances to succeed.If a man knows much in one field but knows nothing in other fields, he may be useless.Since we must have many kinds of knowledge, we must read extensively.Who’s right? I think both of them have something right.But I think we should read extensively first.We should read books in many fields, and read selectively in one field.(14分)

注：more and more 可改为 an increasing number of

⑤ Some people think reading shall be choosed.Because some books are good to hummen beings and some books are harmful to people。

Some people think that men shoud read books widely.Because wide reading can help man get much knowledge.And man can use it to change the world。

It is my point that reading must be selectively.Because reading is important to man.Some books can help man but some books can lead some people to crime.It can be seen in the newspapers and watched on TV.We can make full use of some good books and gain more useful knowledge.It can make our life more beauiful.We must give up those unhelpful books.They are not good to us.Reading them is wasting time and money.So reading selectively is an important part in reading.(8分)

实例三

2003年1月真题

Directions: For this part, you are allowed thirty minutes to write a composition on the topic It Pays to Be Honest.You should write at least 150 words and base your composition on the outline(given in Chinese)below:

1.当今社会上存在着很多不诚实的现象。

2.诚实利人利己，做人应该诚实。

It Pays to Be Honest

①In our modern social life, there are many examples around us show many people are cheated.Advertisements cheat people, salesmen cheat people, even one’s closest friends cheat him or her.So many heartbreaks are heard everyday that we cannot help asking: where is our honest exist? Everybody is taught honest in the primary school or even in the kindergarten.Honesty does good not only to ourselves, but to others as well.If we are honest to others.We will be happier and be in a better mood.Otherwise, we’ll feel guilt at last.To a company and its advertisement, honesty will bring it more consumer and more profit.If we cheat others, friends will never believe you and they will leave you alone.To a company, no consumer will buy your product again。

So, as the above is said, it pays to be honest.Let’s create a morally outstanding social。

注：show改为showing或 在show前加 that

honest 前应加上to be

as the above is said 正确语序为 as is said above

②Although honesty is believed to be a virtue, there are still dishonest people in our society.For example, some businessmen sell fake product to their consumers;some students cheat in the exams。

Dishonest people are short-sighted.Those who sell fake products may make money at first, but consumers won’t buy their products any more.As a result, they will lose their fortune or even be sent to prison.By contrast, honest people gain a lot.Those who always tell truth or keep to their promise not only let others trust them but gain respect from other people as well.Such persons are sure to have a lot of good friends.Because they are trustable and respectable, everyone is eager to make friends with them.Besides, it is easier for a person with a good record to get a good job.Generally speaking, every employer wants his employees to be honest.So we can say that anyone who is honest will be paid back later。

In a word, honesty wins trust, respect and honor.So it is important that we should be honest。

注：product应改为复数形式

③With the development of modern economic and industry, competitive is becoming more and more obvious.At the same time, the performance of dishonest is becoming more and more clearly。

Nowadays, there are many dishonest performance in our society.For example, some people found that he saled goods had past the preservation date.Not throw them away, they revised the perservation date, and saled them again after several days.Another case in the point, a pair of shoes was made from goat.However, in order to sale at a high price, the salers would say they were made from cow which has good quality。

From the foregoing, we can see that dishonest dose not only harm to yourselves but also harm to others.And it is no use only realise the harmness of dishonest.We should be honest from now on and be honest in our daily life.It is only that people all over the world are honest them our country will be beautiful and wealthy。

注：economic 改为 economy

industry 改为 society

competitive 改为 competition

obvious 改为 fierce(激烈的)

more and more 最好改为 increasingly

phenomenon/phenomena 现象

behavior/action 行为

fur 皮毛 skin 皮肤

leather 皮革

hide 兽皮

from 改为 of

第二篇：2010年12月英语六级写作及解析汇总

2010年12月英语六级写作范文及解析汇总

2010年12月英语六级作文题目

六级作文题目：

1.目前高校排名相当盛行

2.对于这种做法，人们看法不一

3.我认为„„

2010年12月英语六级考试作文范文高分版

2010年12月英语六级考试作文范文高分版

For those university students-to-be, choosing their ideal school is never an easy job, but luckily, different authorities come up with the university ranking to help!Top students shall choose the top schools high on the list and vice versa.Complicated issue becomes easy numerical comparison, yet the real problem stays there, can the numerical ranking tell you the status quo of these universities? Are these “authorities” producing the ranking authoritative enough to make the judgments? Let’s take a serious look at the issue before we jump to the conclusion whether university ranking is good or bad.We have to admit that because of historical reasons, most of the 1950s-1960s parents were denied higher education and this cruel fact makes them even more eager to give their children high education even though they have no idea of what university education is all about.The ranking helps them to make decisions based on their simple idea of better ranking means better jobs in future, and therefore better income!It is pathetic that they interpret knowledge and wisdom in such a way yet it is even more pathetic that there are so-claimed well-educated people making up all the ranking and get the ranking published to mislead them!

2010年12月英语六级写作范文

It is a not-uncommon social phenomenon that the university rankings are especially prevalent in our country.For example, universities are measured by scale, academic achievements or the number of papers published in famous magazines.As to this issue, opinions vary from person to person.Some people hold that university ranking dramatically promotes the development of university in various fields.But others maintain that university ranking also leads to some undesirable consequences such as academic fraud even to deceive people.As far I am concerned, every coin has two sides.On one hand, University ranking does encourage the development and growth of colleges.Such growth– the grand libraries, splendid stadiums and fruitful academic achievements, has caught the attention of the world.We’re impressed by these signs of our education’s tour to the 21st century.On the other hand, we have to pay attention to an unexpected phenomenon that some people have ignored the objectivity of university ranking.Take South university of science and technology of china for an example, this university occupies the second position in some university rankings.In those rankings, it is superior to Peking University and Tsinghua university.In a word, we should inspire the advantages of university and abandon its disadvantages.考试吧点点版：2010年12月英语六级考试作文范文

1、当今社会，高校排名很流行

2、个人看法不同

3、我自己的观点

Nowadays , university and college ranking has become increasingly popular thoughout the nation.According to the survry conducted by China Daily , an estimated 85$ universities are closely concerned about the ranking.In other words, we cannot fail to notice the obvious trend that university ranking has become a social focus , triggering a wide concerns across the nation, especially fromschool campuses。

A host of individuals are divided over this issue about university ranking.an army of folks deem that we are supposed to be concerned about the ranking because the ranking is the sole standard of measuring the school’s comprehensive level.Plus, when choosing the university for their kids, a growing number of parents take the ranking into account.However, others maintain that it’s not a wise and rational idea to view the university ranking as the only standard ,put in another way , we should not over-value the ranking.The ranking is the outward style of the university。

On my personal level, however, ranking matters much to a university , but enhancing the teaching and comprehensive quality is on the top of university’s priority, ranging from the faculty to teaching methods to teaching instruments and so forth.Only in these ways can we bulid up fast-paced and flagship university smoothly。

考试吧海天版：2010年12月英语六级作文范文

1、当今社会，高校排名很流行

2、个人看法不同

3、我自己的观点

Nowadays , University and college ranking has become increasingly popular thoughout the nation.According to the survry conducted by China Daily , an estimated 85$ universities are closely concerned about the ranking.In other words, we cannot fail to notice the obvious trend that university ranking has become a social focus , triggering a wide concerns across the nation, especially rom on and off school campus.A host of individuals are divided over this issue about university ranking.an army of folks deem that we are supposed to be concerned about the ranking because the ranking is the sole standard of measuring the school’s comprehensive level , plus, when choosing the university for their kids, a growing number of parents take the ranking into account.However, others maintain that it’s not a wise and rational idea to view the university ranking as the only standard,put in another way , we should not over-value the ranking.The ranking is the outward style of the university.On my ersonal level, however, ranking matters much to a university , but enhancing the teaching and comprehensive quality is on the top of university’s priority, ranging from the faculty to teaching methods to teaching instruments and so forth.Only in these ways can we bulid up fast-paced and flagship university smoothly.考试吧：2010年12月英语六级考试作文范文及解析

My View on University Ranking

In recent years, all kinds of University Ranking Lists can be found on some educational websites, or newspapers.The ranking standards also vary.These lists have great influence on students.They are even becoming the only scale to evaluate the colleges and universities。

People hold different views toward this phenomenon.Some believe that these lists help the students a lot, especially for those who will choose their university.While some other protest vigorously.In their points, the list is really ridiculous and harmful.In my view, the university ranking may have its own reference values, but its disadvantages overweigh its values。

For those university-students-to-be, they are supposed to choose the school according to his or her own situation, but not the so-called Ranking List.What’s more, how about the university students? How do they feel about themselves when they see the ranking? The list may become some intangible shackles for them if their own school ranks poorly。

In a nutshell, there is no easy method to rank these universities, but the Ranking, only helps students ignore the essentials, namely, their ninety-nine percent perspiration。

此次六级作文的自由度很大，看似给出了提纲，实际上具体的观点全靠个人发挥。第一段需要点明大学排名这个现象，第二段需要铺陈不同人的观点，第三段要陈述自己的观点。

大学排名这个题目，实际上涉及到了对了大学的理解，对于大学排名标准的理解，以及对于大学排名的目的的理解。而这件事更加离不开中国具体的国情，新中国 50年代人至今受教育的情况，90后择校的情况，目前大学的情况，考生发挥的空间可以纵横数十年的教育史，并且可以深入探讨教育的本质。

当然，对于大多数考生来说，凑满150个字万岁!那么，模板又可以派上用场了。

第三篇：2014年6月全国大学英语六级写作及解析

2014年6月全国大学英语六级写作范文及解析

【作文题目一】

For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay explaining why it is unwise to judge a person by their appearance.You can give explain to illustrate your point.You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.【解析】

本次作文话题是关于“Never judge a person by his appearance 不要以貌取人”。对于这个话题，考生一定都不陌生，这在大家平常的作文训练中都会涉及或碰到。

此类作文的思路与结构也很清晰：首段，可以引用一两句名言，引出不要以貌取人的观点。中间段落从两方面阐述原因或以貌取人的敝处。末段，重申观点，也可给出建议。

【参考范文一】

There is an old saying that people never judge a book from its cover.From my point of view, this saying also applies to our attitudes towards others: never judge a person from their appearance.Because you never know one person’s true merits if only judging from their appearance.It is true that an attractive appearance is of great significance not only for daily life but also for the job.However, it is unwise to judge one person by the appearance for the following reasons.On the one hand, with the advancement of science technology and medical level, people

can transform their surface by all means.On the other hand, the appearance should not be the merely criteria for judging an individual, considering that are more important factors, including Courteous, kind-hearted, honest and so on.In conclusion, it is unadvisable to judge a person by their appearance.That’s why I assert that we should pay more attention to one's inward and place high value on inner cultivation.【参考范文二】

As a prevailing saying goes,” Don’t judge a person by appearance”.Undoubtedly, it reflects a current phenomenon that fewer individuals seem to attach due importance to the significance of intrinsic factors.However, from my own perspective, we should put more emphasis on the quality rather than appearance.Taking a look around, we can find examples too numerous to list.The best illustration might be some currently over-packaged products in the markets.To put it more exactly, we may easily notice that the delicate packaged products may turn out to be of inferior quality.Exactly, it is the intrinsic factors that enable us to make reasonable choices.In short, laying a solid foundation is crucial if we want to make achievements in our studies or work, or indeed in any other aspects of our lives.And what we should bear in mind is that essence matters most

instead of “the first sight”.【作文题目二】

题目：It is unwise to put all eggs in one basket.As a common saying goes，“It is unwise to put all eggs in one basket.”Placing all eggs in one basket means focus all our attention on one thing and fix all our hope on one thing.However, It is wrong and reasonless.Why placing all eggs in one basket is wrong? Placing all eggs in one basket tends to reduce the odds of success.By focusing on one thing, people will surely improve their efficiency and proficiency.However, they will also overlook other resources and possibilities，thus，the likelihood of success will be lower.Take Jack, one of my best friends, as a case in point: he started to hunt for jobs in his senior year.Compared with other students who chose different kinds of jobs, he aimed at state-owned firms alone.Unfortunately, getting a decent job in state-owned firms is really hard for him.At last, when others got a job, he was still on the way to his interviews.suppose he choose jobs in a wider range and “place all eggs in different baskets”，he could have gotten a job much easier.Putting all eggs in one basket in unwise, a truth which is applicable to many situations.As a college student，we should endeavor to master more skills, accumulate different experience and make friends with diverse people.参考译文：

俗语有云：“把鸡蛋放在一个篮子里是不明智的”。将鸡蛋放在一个篮子里意味着将我们的注意力集中在一件事情上，将我们的所有希望寄托在一件事情上。然而，这是错误且不理智的。

为什么将所有鸡蛋放在一个篮子里是错误的？首先，将鸡蛋放在一个篮子里，往往会减少成功的概率。聚焦一件事情，人们确实会提高效率和熟练程度。然而，人们也会因此忽略其他的资源和可能性，因此成功的可能性反而降低了。比如说，以我最好的朋友之一杰克为例，他在大四那年开始找工作。与其他找不同的工作的同学相比，他只选择国企。不幸的是，在国企找到一份合适的工作着实不易。最终，当别人都找到工作的时候，他还在赶着去面试呢。假设他再更广的范围内选择工作或者说将“鸡蛋放在不同的篮子里”。或许他可以更加容易的找到工作。

将鸡蛋放在不同的篮子里是不明智的，这个真理适用于不同的场合。作为一名大学生，我们应该努力去掌握更多的技能，积累不同的经验以及与不同的人交朋友。

【作文题目三】

看到什么、听到什么就立刻得出结论是不明智的。

Living in an age when the adolescents are lack of the necessary guidance and supervision, we can never fail to figure out the fact that teenagers are become especially self-conscious.Under this circumstance,the youngsters are more likely to believe in what they have listened or seen instead of thinking twice before drawing their conclusions, which is pathetically and undoubtedly considered controversial or even unreasonable.The reasons why I insist on the viewpoint that we should never directly and irresponsibly come to conclusions only by listening or seeing mainly lie in the following two aspects.To begin with, it is a invariable law to every existence in the world that nothing will stay still even for just one second.So are the things happening around us.What we see or listen may be just some particular period of the development of things, which proves unstable and changeable.In addition, the perspectives we conclude just through seeing or listening are usually one-sided.Drawing conclusions rashly is not objective enough to make our statements persuasive.To sum up, it is unwise for us to define any thing as what we assume or imagine at first sight.Only by our serious thinking and accurate analyzing can we come up with more rational and reasonable conclusions.

第四篇：典型病句实例解析三

典型病句实例解析三

1.下列各句没有语病的一项是()A.“9·11”恐怖事件造成美国人民生灵涂炭，同时也带来了经济的滑坡。B.我的拙见，归根结蒂一句话：挣钱才是硬道理。C.近10年来，长江源头生态破坏的严重情况令人堪忧。

D.本书作者希望这本书能对读者在学习英语句型方面起举一反三的作用。2.下列各句表意明确的一项是()A.通过家长学校的学习，家长们都认识到不适当的管教孩子是不行的。

B.在英国，一只狗进一次美容院的花费，相当于一个普通工人月工资的三四倍。

C.那年，我响应党的号召，瞒着你奶奶和你姑姑毅然到大西北当了新型农民。从此，就改变了我的人生。D.奶奶看到我俩非常高兴，就急忙从炕上下来，拉住我们的手问这问那。3.下列各句没有语病的一项是()A.粮库主任的失职，使100吨小麦霉烂变质，上级领导为了严肃法纪，决定给他记过处分，并赔偿一万元经济损失。

B.楼上户主是知识分子，但常有馊泡饭临窗泼下;平房里的住户大多是环卫工人，却经常向外扔烂菜叶。C.为了全面推广利用菜籽饼或棉籽饼喂猪，加速发展养猪事业，这个县举办了三期饲养员技术培训班。D.这个被评为先进单位的曙光电线，是由三个街道生产小组合并起来的。4.下列各句没有语病的一项是()A.山西省煤炭的蕴藏量是我国最丰富的地区之一。

B.三张小方桌拼在一起，作为会议桌，以供接待客人和开会之用。C.她9岁起就在报刊上发表作品，并被一些文集选录。

D.下岗职工有效地组织起来，把饮食、缝纫、拆洗等福利事业兴建得很好。5.下列各句没有语病的一项是()A.分小班能针对性地解决学生存在的各种问题。

B.作者着力刻划了两位主要人物，这两位主要人物的一言一行，一举一动都体现了作者对这两类不同女性的深刻理解和深切同情。

C.这个经验值得文教工作者，特别是中小学教师的重视。D.母亲的贫血和吞咽困难均已恢复，这多亏王大夫高超的医术。[page] 6.下列每组中的两句话所表达的意思不相同的一组是()A.①去年我差点考上北大。②去年我差点没考上北大。B.①中国足球队差点输了。②中国足球队差点没输。C.①小张差点买了那张假画。

②小张差点没买了那张假画。D.①雨天路滑，好几个人差点摔倒。②雨天路滑，好几个人差点没摔倒。7.下列各句没有语病的一项是()A.由于蒲松龄所处的时代和出身的局限，不能不在他的作品中有所反映。

B.《手机三包规定》深受广大消费者欢迎，因为它强化了人们的自我保护意识，使消费者的权益得到最大限度的保护。

C.3月17日，六名委员因受贿丑闻被驱逐出国际奥委会。第二天世界各大报纸关于这起震惊国际体坛的事件都作了详细报道。

D.对科学问题上的事非之争，不应采取压服的方式，尤其不能搞文字狱一类的东西，历史上凡是这样做了的，没有一个会有好结果。8.下列各句没有语病的一项是()A.一连几个酷夏，县委都动员大批机关干部和科技人员到农业第一线去，同历史上罕见的洪涝灾害作斗争。B.这次篮球比赛，真想不到我们班会夺得冠军，而且一连战胜六个强劲对手。C.这件事在广大师生中广泛地引起了议论。

D.不少在科学研究上有杰出成就的人，是在物质条件十分艰苦的情况下，经过顽强刻苦的努力才获得成功的。

9.下列各句没有语病的一项是()A.我本想这次能在家乡同你见面，回家后才知道你由于正忙着搞科研，不回来了。B.两次特大台风给广东、福建等沿海人民造成的灾害，已被党和人民解决了。C.这个车间还建立了干部巡回检查制度，定期到各班组检查制度执行情况。

D.这位名闻遐迩的五官科老教授是耳、鼻、喉的克星，五官上的任何顽疾到他手里都一扫而光。10.下列各句没有语病的一项是()A.偷车人见有人追赶反而加大油门拼命逃窜，公安人员直追到山根下才将其抓获。，B.在群众大会上，他那铿锵有力的话语，至今还响在我的耳边。

C.最让人高兴的是，在全厂职工团结协作，日夜奋战下，全年的生产指标终于超额完成。

D.马教授领导的科研组研制出能燃用各种劣质煤，并且有节煤作用的劣质煤稳燃器，为节能作出了重大贡献。[page] 11.下列各句没有语病的一项是()A.市委采取有力措施，制止了群众揭发少数单位违反财经制度，请客送礼的不良现象。

B.我们的祖先在这块神奇的土地上创造了灿烂的物质文明和精神文明，形成了具有民族特色的文化传统，为人类文明做出了贡献。

C.实践证明，哪个研究小组搞得好，哪里科学种田和单位面积产量就较高。

D.谁也不能否认，要是没有边防战士无时无刻在保卫着祖国，我们就不可能安定地生活。12.下列各句没有语病的一项是()A.他们在施工过程中，对每个重要的技术问题都交给群众讨论。B.那辆新进口的小轿车，最高时速可达180公里以上。

C.虽然小红同学只说了这么简单的一句话，但却深刻地概括了当代中学生的风貌。D.他去世后群众虽然怀念他，但艺术界却不把他列为艺术家。13.下列各句没有语病的一项是()A.读了这篇文章，能够使广大读者更加深刻地认识到没有制约的权力必然产生腐败这一道理。B.这本书，精装本和普及本的价格悬殊一半多。

C.古典芭蕾舞体系能够最大限度地体现舞蹈动作的技巧性、表现力和协调性，培养演员的体力和悟性。D.某厂擅自使用天津厂的牡丹牌商标，推销自己的产品，是违反商标法的行为。因为侵犯了商标专用权。14.下列各句没有语病的一项是()A.令人不可思议的是，当该地区违规操作的问题曝光以后，各地的采购员反倒蜂拥而至。B.兔子泛滥成灾，糟蹋了整个牧场，使誉满全球的澳洲绵羊成倍减少。C.公司家大业大，更要注意节省不必要的开支和不应有的浪费。D.我国向太平洋预定海域发射的首枚运载火箭圆满成功。15.下列各句没有语病的一项是()A.为了争取高速度，我们必须狠抓科学技术的现代化，使它走在生产建设的前面，把我国国民经济用先进的科学技术搞上去。

B.观摩会上，林医生为两个中学生做了角膜切开矫正近视手术。C.我们无论如何不能不承认，太阳不是从东方升起西方落下的。D.请连长放心，尽管遇到多大的困难，我们也要坚决完成任务。[page] 1.选D。这是一组考“重复哕嗦”的题。A 项“生灵”即“百姓、人民”的意思，和“人民”重复。B 项“拙见”意为“谦词，自己的见解”，和“我的”重复。C 项“堪忧”意为“令人担忧”，和“令人”重复。

2.选B。这是一组考“表意不明”的题。A 项歧义。可理解为“需要适当的管管孩子了”。也可理解为“对孩子管得不适当(如打坏了)是不行的”。C 项歧义，是“瞒着奶奶”一个人，和姑姑一起去了大西北，还是“瞒着奶奶和姑姑” 两个人，自己一个人去了大西北。D 项歧义，一是“我俩非常高兴”，二是“奶奶看到我俩后，她自己非常高兴”。

3.选D。这是一组考“成分残缺”的题。A 项成分残缺，应改为“并责令他赔偿……”。B 项缺宾语中心词，应改为“但常有馊泡饭临窗泼下的行:”。C 项缺宾语中心词，应改为“推广利用菜籽饼或棉籽饼喂猪的技术”。4.选B。这是一组考“搭配不当”的题。A 项主谓不搭配，“蕴藏量是地区之一”不通，应改为“山西省是我国煤炭蕴藏量最丰富的地区之一”。C 项主谓不搭配，“她被文集选录”不通，应改为“这些作品并被……”。D 项“兴建事业”不搭配，应把“兴建”改为“兴办”。更多相关信息请访问中公教育

5.选B。这也是一组考“词类或词义误用”的题。A 项“针对性”是名词，不能作状语，应改为“分小班能针对学生存在的各种问题右越饩:”。C 项“值得”为副词，它后面必须是动词性结构，应去淖“重视”前面的“的”。D 项应改“恢复”为“治愈”，“恢复吞咽困难”等于吃不下东西了。

6.选A。“差点”后头如果是不希望发生的事，“差点”和“差点没”意思一洋，都表示“没发生”。“差点”后头如果是希望发生的，“差点”后头肯定形式表否定的意思，否定形式表肯定的意思。即“差点实现”是没实现，“差点没实现”是实现了。A 项是希望发生的事，①②表达的意思不同。B、C、D 三项都是不希望发生的事，所表达的意思相同，故选A。

7.选B。A 项滥用介词造成没主语，应去掉“由于”。C 项介词不当，“关于”应改为“对于”。D 项“这样”指代不明，是指代“压服”还是“文字狱”? 8.选D。A 项不合逻辑，一连几个酷夏都同洪水作斗争就不能说是“历史上罕见”了。B 项语序不当，应先战胜对手后夺得冠军。C 项语序不当，应改为“……引起了广泛议论”。

9.选A。B 项“解决灾害”搭配不当，应把“解决”改为“战胜”。C 项结构混乱，“车间定期检查情况”不通，应在“ 定期”前加上“干部”二字。D 项逻辑不通，“耳、鼻、喉的克星”即克掉了耳、鼻、喉。

10.选D。A 关联词不当，本句为承接关系而非转折关系。“反而”应改为“马上”。B 项介宾短语位置不对，应改为“他在群众大会上那……”。C 项“在……上”、“在……下”中间插人的必须是各词性成分，应改为“在全厂职工团结协作，日夜奋战的情况”。

11.选B。A 项缺结构助词“的”，应改为“制止了群众揭发的……”。C 项“两面对一面”不照应，应去掉“科学种田”。D 项“无时无刻不”等于“时时刻刻都”，应加-个“不”字。

12.选C。A 项介词运用错误，应把“对”改为“把”。B 项最高时速必须是确数，应去掉“以上”二字。D 项关联词位置不当，应改为“虽然群众怀念他”。

13.选C。A 项成分残缺，缺主语，应去掉“读了”二字。B 项“悬殊”为不及物动词，不能带宾语，应去掉“一半多”三字。D 项缺宾语中心词，应改为“推销自己产品的行为”。

14.选A。B 项数量的减少只能用分数或百分数，增加才能用倍数。C 项“一面对两面”不照应，“节省不应有的浪费”不通。D 项“运载火箭圆满成功”不通，圆满成功的是“发射运载火箭”。

15.选B。A 项最后一句语序不当，应改为“用先进的科学技术把我国国民经济搞上去”。C 项否定不当，应去掉“不是”的“不”字。D 项“尽管”应改为“不管”。

第五篇：2010商务英语BEC中级写作实例解析

2010商务英语BEC中级写作实例解析

随着中国人学习英语风潮的持续升温，拥有日常英语交流能力已经变得不足为奇，未来在就业市场上走俏的将是职业英语，即能够用英语交流工作中的问题，比如和外国同事讨论公司的市场营销策略或者代表公司和外国公司接洽等。但是目前绝大多数学生和职场新人对于商业英语非常陌生。笔者认为，备考剑桥商务英语证书(Business English Certificate，简称BEC)是有志跻身于商业职场的人士熟悉商业场景、学习商业英语的最佳方法。

BEC考试的显著特点就是把商业实际和英语运用结合起来，分成初、中、高三级(BEC Preliminary, BEC Vantage, BEC Higher)，其中BEC中级最符合广大考生的求职需求。BEC中级考试分成听、说、读、写四项考查，各占总成绩1/4，其中写作部分与听、说、读相比，因其考查形式固定，内容要求有限，因而最易得高分。写作部分包含两个部分：Part One, 备忘录或电子邮件(Memo or Email)，占写作成绩的1/3;Part Two, 商务信件、报告或提议(Letter, Report or Proposal)，占写作成绩的2/3。两部分相比，Part One要求简单，较之Part Two更容易提高，本文以《剑桥BEC真题集(中级)第二辑》的Test Two, Part One为例，详细分析Part One的写作流程，并在最后给出BEC写作的复习资料。样 题

You are the Managing Director of a company whose profits have recently increased and you would like to reward staff for this.Write a memo to all staff:

Thanking them for their contribution

Explaining why profits increased

Telling them what their reward will be.Write 40~50 words

题目解读

BEC中级写作考试总时长 为45分钟，根据词数要求和分值，通常小作文写作不超过15分钟。应试创作可分成以下三步：1.审题构思Read & Plan(3 mins);2.写作Write(10 mins);3.检查Check(2 mins)。

Part One的题目背景通常是一事、两人、三要点。本题中，最近公司利润增长，“你”作为公司的董事总经理(Managing Director)将对全体员工(all staff)进行奖励，备忘录的内容需包括三个要点：感谢员工的贡献，解释利润增长原因，并告之奖励内容。正文词数要求为40～50个词，因为商务英语要求简洁，词数要求有上限，这和四、六级以及考研写作只规定词数下限有所区别，但实际考试时允许少量超标，比如接近60词。

内容、结构、语言和形式

首先可根据各要点的逻辑关系调整写作顺序，比如在本题中，先解释利润增长的原因，再感谢员工，最后宣布奖励。其次应针对要点简要展开论述，比如利润增长的原因可能是销售量增加(the increase of sales)、成本降低(the reduction of cost)或推出新产品(the launch of the new product);而奖励的内容经常是集体旅行(a company trip)、涨工资(an increase of salary)或发放奖金(bonus)。要点扩展应注意两点：其一，商务交流要求具体，比如利润的增长比去年同时段增加10%;其二，扩展内容应符合商务实际，如全体员工工资上浮50%、增加带薪假期(paid leave)、开派对(a party)或唱卡拉

OK(Karaoke)等奖励都是不符合商务实际的。如果确实对商务实务不熟悉，可用简单的理由以避免出错，比如公司业绩增长的原因可以宽泛地写成是员工的努力工作和加班(hard work and long working hours)。

结构

因为文章内容很少，总词数只有50个词左右，写作时应写成一个整体，不应出现每句一段的散文诗文章，而且不要刻意使用first和second之类的过渡词语。

语言

Part One题目中的要点通常以三个现在分词形式给出，写作时通常是三句话，即针对每个现在分词写一句 话，平均句长在15个词左右。备考时应针对题目中常见的分词动词准备相应的表达方式，尽量避免重复使用题目中的词句即可。

解释原因：

连词：because, since, for, so;短语：because of, due to, owing to

表示感谢：

Thank you very much for...;I would like to thank you for...;I am very grateful for...;It was very kind of you to...奖励：

A rise in salary of X%;A bonus of X% of your monthly salary;A trip to

Hawaii/Athens/Maldives

需要注意的是，商务英语要求正式文体，较之非正式文体，其有以下常见特点：

正式 非正式

Headquarters, September(不简写)H.Q.Sept.(缩写)

schedule, discuss(精确动词)set, talk about(宽泛动词或词组)

A copy has been sent.(被动语态)I sent you a copy.(主动语态)

最后需要考虑的就是备忘录的形式。正式考试时，文字题目下方会模拟商务实际，附上备忘录开头片段，包括To, From, Date, Subject等细节，但是考生不必直接在片段后书写，应该在试题纸背面写作，写作时不要求必须有From, To等内容，但若能准确而符合商务习惯地写出备忘录细节，无疑会增加文章的印象分，这里简单介绍一下备忘录细节的注意事项。

To: 备忘录对象

如果具体到人，最好写出全名，不要写自己的真实姓名，有作弊嫌疑，尤其不能“重名”，如Bill Tom，Bill和Tom都是名(Given name)，而不是姓(Family name)，一个简单的处理方法就是use others?name，比如男名Bill Gates, Michael Scofield, Jay Chou或女名

From: 备忘录作者

要点同上，一般不用尊称，只有对方不知道自己身份的时候才后缀职位名称。

Date: 日期

BEC属于英联邦国家的考试，日期的写法一般为日、月、年，比如7 December 2002，注意月份用英文而不是数字，以免和日期混淆，可以缩写，比如将一月写作Jan(也可以用开放标点)。

Britney Spears, Jennifer Aniston等;若显示关系亲密，还可以把名字缩写，比如B.Gates, M.Scofield, J.Chou, B.Spears, J.Aniston等;如果写给上级，还应该加上尊称甚至职位，比如Mr.Bill Gates — Managing Director, Mr.Jay Chou — Art Director等;现代商务写作中流行开放标点(Open Punctuation)，即标点不影响理解的时候可以不用，所以Mr./Ms./Mrs.后面的省略点也可以省去，简单写成Mr/Ms/Mrs;最好不要省去名字。

范文示例

To: All Staff

From: Bill Gates

Date: 7 December 2002

Subject: Staff Reward

The profits of our company this month went up 10% compared with the same period last year, due to your hard work and long working hours.I would like to thank you for your long devoted service.A trip to Hawaii has been arranged next month as a prize.Enjoy!