浅谈小学英语作文的修改

第一篇：浅谈小学英语作文的修改

浅谈小学英语作文的修改

泗泾小学张玉莉

在小学阶段，大部分英语教师都非常注重学生的听、说和阅读能力的培养和训练，往往忽视了写作能力的训练，认为这是中学的要求，或者是因为觉得写作教学难，教师修改学生英语作文也难，因此一般对阅读理解较重视，而对写的重要性认识不足，忽视学生写的能力的培养。可是英语写作却能唤起学生对所学或所掌握的语言的感觉，让他们更好地将这些语言知识进行实际的运用和巩固。随着英语教学的改革，现在英语作文在我们小学阶段尤其是高段来说，显示出的地位越来越重要，这势必要求我们的小学英语教师要提高相关的能力，如自身的写作能力，指导写作的能力等等，同时不可忽视的是采用有效的修改英语作文的方法，帮助学生在写作方面更快更好地进步。英语作文的修改，是通过师生、生生信息互动，使学生的英语作文逐步完善。那么，有哪些较好的修改英语作文的方法呢？

一、教师要言传身教，严格把握好英语作文的修改关。

1、对于初学英语作文的学生，教师要详细修改他们的每一篇作文，从单词拼写、语法、逻辑安排方面全面修改，让学生知道该怎么写，在写英语作文的起始阶段先解决语句的准确性和逻辑的合理性，指出学生普遍性错误，提醒学生注意；鼓励学生同一个意思用不同的表达方式，为学生今后写好英语作文打好基础。修改学生的英语作文时，教师应注意发掘学生英语作文中的优点并给予肯定和鼓励。学生作文完成之后，他们往往不了解自己文章的不足之处，这就需要教师在旁边地悉心指点。学生文章好在什么地方，不好在什么地方，一定要讲得具体而明确，可以将相关的评语写在学生的作文旁边，对于学生能看懂的语句可用英文，如：This sentence is wonderful!You can watch the things carefully.但对于学生看不懂的语句教师可以结合中文批注。

2、面批。就是让学生拿好自己写的作文，在规定的时间内向教师请教。此时教师不需要逐词修改，而是提出其作文的问题所在，并附上自己的修改建议（这些建议只是提供给学生一个参考，允许他们按照自己的想法修改，前提是保证语句通顺，逻辑合理。）。然后，让学生根据教师的修改意见，再一次结合自己的想

法进行修改。这种方法有助于培养学生倾听的良好习惯，同时有助于培养他们的记忆力与理解力，更为他们的修改作文提供了一定的自主空间，能够让他们较好地发挥自己的个性。当然这种方法对于学困生来说有一定难度，因此教师在面批他们的作文时要降低要求，最好辅以文字帮助。

3、分析例文。以上两种方法采用的是一对一的方式，但在修改作文的过程中我们也不妨用一用集体修改的方法，那就是分析例文。

例文的选择可以是多方面的，教师可以选择优秀的范文，集体展示欣赏。在学生仔细阅读后，能谈谈范文的优点，尤其是从语句、逻辑安排方面入手，帮助学生在欣赏范文的过程中进一步了解小学英语写作的要求。紧接着让学生对照自己的作文，寻找差距；然后依照“缺什么补什么”的原则，重写自己的作文（当然可以将自己作文的优点保留下来），在重写的过程中让每一位学生都有所进步。

另一种例文的选择，是选择一些存在着有明显问题的作文，让每一位学生从写作要求入手，找一找例文有哪些问题。当然找错只是初步要求，重点还是在让学生提出正确的修改方法，在修改的过程中可以刺激学生更好地掌握该方面的知识，避免自己犯同样的错误。

在采用这种修改作文的方法时，还要注意：对于范文，要注上学生的姓名，这样也是一种表扬的方式，也可促使其他学生努力，争取自己的作文也能早日被展示欣赏。而对于那些问题作文，千万不要表明作者的身份，最好是不要选择本班学生的作文，跨班选择，以保护学生的自尊心。

二、下放修改英语作文的权力，让学生尝试修改英语作文。

我们往往发现学生在写英语作文的时候缺乏积极性，忽视自己在学习上的主体性。要改变这种局面就要重视学生的主体性，把修改作文这一任务交给学生，让学生参与到整个英语作文活动中，树立修改意识，培养写作兴趣，变“要我学”为“我要学”，从而彻底改变英语作文教学的被动局面，有效地提高学生的英语作文能力。

1、学生自改作文。顾名思义，就是学生自己修改自己的作文, 对自己的文章进行完善。当然，在修改之前，教师首先要让学生明确修改要求，如：主题是否突出；内容是否充实；逻辑是否合理；是否有语法错误或拼写错误或用词不当。然后让学生默读，用不同颜色的笔在自己作文初稿上进行修改, 对其中疑

难问题可向教师请教。

但是这种方法对于一部分学生效果不佳，他们总是找不出自己作文的问题出在哪里。怎么办呢？我从朗读中找到了灵感，当学生用心而富有感情地朗读一篇文章时，他们往往能找到朗读过程中出现的问题。因此，在学生自改作文时，我要求他们读出声音，而且要求读三遍左右，在反复朗读中学生较容易找到自己作文的问题，然后进行修改和完善。

2、学生互改作文。俗话说“三个臭皮匠赛过诸葛亮”，“众人拾柴火焰高”，在学生有了一定的英语写作基础后，特别是对高年级学生来说，教师不能总是手把手地修改他们的作文了，而是应该提供给他们一定的空间和时间，让他们互相修改作文，在修改他人作文的过程中，可以帮助学生打开思路，获取更多的信息，也让他们在自己的小群体中互相帮助，共同进步。同时学生在互改作文的过程中，对写作及其修改有更深入地认识，了解成功写作的标准，并且可促使学生对自己的写作负责。同时还可节约教师的修改作文的时间。

互相修改作文，可以是同桌、伙伴或小组进行，每一位学生除了自己的作文不修改外，对于群体内他人的作文都要进行阅读——修改——提建议。

此处需要注意的是：教师对于人员的分配一定要有所调控，使每一个组合中都有不同层次的学生，让优等生帮助学困生，在助人为乐中感受成功；让学困生向其他学生学习，一步一个脚印地成长；让中等生寻找差距，迎头赶上，使自己的作文水平更上一层楼。同时教师还要注意定期改变组合内的人员，因为时间久了，学生会因为缺乏新鲜感而产生惰性。

采取这种互相修改英语作文的方法，也可以形成一种语言意识。学生既是作者又是读者、修改者，他们通过批评性地阅读修改别人的作文，可以学到更多的写作知识和技巧，他们会时刻留心语法及用词错误，以后在自己写作时他们会开始想到的是读者（而非教师），因为他们的作文要拿给教师以外的同学去阅读修改，可以促使他们在写作文时对自己和别人更加负责。

三、游戏、竞赛辅助，让修改英语作文也富于乐趣。

说实话，修改作文实际上是满枯燥的，怎样使这枯燥的工作有点乐趣呢？我尝试着搞一些游戏竞赛活动。

如“I’m a teacher.”，让学生报名成为小老师，然后他（她）有权指名

修改其他同学的作文，让他们感受一下做老师的荣耀。

如“扩充”游戏，给学生一个单词，先让他们把它扩充为一个词组，然后是一个句子，apple--a red apple--a big red apple--I want a big red apple.--My mother and I want a big red apple.--My moyher and I want to buy a big red apple.从而让学生真切地体会到什么叫写具体。

还有“纠错大赛”，教师提供给全班学生若干篇英语作文，让全体学生进行阅读找错比赛，将错误找出并能正确修改者才能得分，对于不同层次的学生评分要求也是不一样的，最后选出能手奖（优等生）、优胜奖（中等生）、进步奖（学困生）等，既让学生感到了获奖的快乐，又为他们修改好一整篇作文奠定了基础。

总之，一种好的、有效的修改作文的方法，能为学生更好地写好英语作文起到事半功倍的作用。教师要会集思广益，充分运用身边的资源，发挥自己和学生的力量与作用，让修改作文也变得轻松一点。

当然修改英语作文的方法很多，我还在不断地实践、寻找一些更为有效的方法。

第二篇：英语作文修改

A Trip to the Zoo孩子的原稿：

Yesterday way Sunday and it was a fine day.So I take a trip to the zoo.I went there by bus, I get there at 8:00 am.There are many people.and some people watched the tigers ,some watched the monkeys, Others watched the bids,I saw many animals and I tool many phtos.That’s a interesting trip.I’ll never forget it.That’smy trip.修改后：

It was a sunny SundayAfter a quick breakfast , I couldn’t wait to get on the bus.This is my first time to enjoy a trip alone.Varions lovebal animals are waiting in the zoo!

As soon as I got there,I was attracted at once.Monkeys were climbing in the tree happily.Sometimes they even came to fetch the bananas in visitors’hands.How naughty they were!What’s more, I was also intersted in the tigers.They are called “the king of animals”,but at this moment they were lying quetly ,maybe they were sleepy.Animals ,humanbeings ,we live in a world.we are family.I t came to my mind immiediatly.Anyway, I had an interesting trip today.It gave me a deep impression, I’ll never forget it.My favourite season

孩子的原稿：

There are four seasons in a year.And my favourite season is summer.Although it’s very hot.I still love it.Because I can swim in the sea.And lie in sun.That’s very comfortable.And I also can eat some Icecreams.they are delicious so there’re lots of thingd to do in summer.That’svery intersting.So I love summer.That’s my favourite season.修改后

My favourite season

As is all know , there are four seasons.Speaking of my favourite , summer comes first although it is hot.Many things can be done in summer such as swimming in the sea, Lying on the beach… How comfortable!More importantlyI can eat delicious Icecream.Of course, we also enjoy beautiful views outside.And I’m always looking forward to going fishing with my father.In a word ,summer is my favourite season because it brings me a lot of happiness.

第三篇：英语作文-修改

The Changes In My Life

Since I entered junior middle school, I became hastier, because I am afraid to be surpassed by others.I am under stress every day.I did not only feel very tired,but also did not achieve what I have ever expected.I felt very confused and thought nobody could help me.Until one day, my head teacher asked me “What do you see out of the window?”.“Many students,” I answered with a little curiocity.“Yes, you are right.But do not you see flowers?”she asked with a smile.“You should slow your pace and enjoy every moment”, she turned away after saying these words, just giving me an expressive smile.I stood there seeming to understand something.Yeah, she is right.I often crossed the school in a hurry and hardly ever noticed the flowers which was blooming in the corner.Maybe I really need to slow my pace, and slow my heart.Now, I am in Grade Nine, the most important year during my junior middle school, but I do not feel very nevious and anxious.This is just because I can enjoy my life, enjoy every step I have taken.This is the biggest change in my life!

Na.2013.10.02

一些基础的表达要注意，尤其是词性和拼写。

另外，文章时态的处理请注意，记叙过去事件和描述现在情况要在时态上有所体现。

第四篇：2010高考英语作文 已修改

2010高考英语作文范文：金融危机下大学生就业

当今我国大学生就业成功率很低，除了全球性的金融危机影响外，还有就是大学生对工作的选择。有的人认为应该优先选择自己喜欢的工作，而不是自己擅长的;另一部分人相反。你班学生就此事进行讨论，请客观地介绍情况并谈谈你的看法。

观点 理由

一部分人 喜欢比擅长重要。兴趣是最好的老师，精通与擅长的可能性会大大增加等。

另一部分 擅长比喜欢重要。擅长更容易成功，后天努力培养兴趣。

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注意：1.短文须包括所有要点, 可适度发挥。

2.开头已为你写好, 但不计人总词数。

3.词数:120左右。

Recently the students in our class have discussed the following topic: which is more important for college graduates to choose jobs, being interested in it or being good at it?___________________________________________

Recently the students in our class have discussed the following topic: which is more important for college graduates to choose jobs, being interested in it or being good at it?

Some agree that the love of job is very important because interest is the best teacher.People are often willing to do what they like doing.If you are not good at it in the beginning, you can work hard and gradually improve your skills to make you good at it.Others hold their view that if you are good at it, you have more chances to achieve success very soon.While you work, you can do all you can to gain the interest in it little by little.From my point of view, I think we should make full use of our strengths to change them each other regardless of the fact that you like it or you are good at it.2010高考英语作文范文：低碳经济下的环境保护 低碳经济下的环境保护(1)

“低碳经济”是一个具有广泛社会性的经济前沿理念，最早是在2003年英国政府发布的能源白皮书《我们能源的未来：创建低碳经济》正式提出的。低碳经济包括低碳发展、低碳产业、低碳技术和低碳生活等经济形态，是指在不影响经济发展的前提下，通过技术创新和制度创新，降低能源和资源消耗，尽可能最大限度地减少温室气体和污染物的排放，实现减缓气候变化的目标，促进人类的可持续发展。

Protection of Environment

1.目前环保还存在着许多问题。

2.为了保护环境，3.各国政府做了大量的工作。

4.我的看法。

There are still many problems of environmental protection in recent years.One of the most serious problems is the serious pollution of air, water and soil.the polluted air does great harm to people’s health.The polluted water causes diseases and death.What is more, vegetation had been greatly reduced with the rapid growth of modern cities.To protect the environment, governments of many countries have done a lot.Legislative steps have been introduced to control air pollution, to protect the forest and sea resources and to stop any environmental pollution.Therefore, governments are playing the most important role in the environmental protection today.In my opinion, to protect environment, the government must take even more concrete measures.First, it should let people fully realize the importance of environmental protection through education.Second, much more efforts should be made to put the population planning policy into practice, because more people means more people means more pollution.Finally, those who destroy the environment intentionally should be severely punished.We should let them know that destroying environment means destroying mankind themselves.低碳经济下的环境保护(2)

根据题目《师父被熏晕过去了》的漫画和下面要求写一篇关于河水污染的感想。

1.情况。2.原因。3.后果。4.措施。

词数 100~120。

One day Sun Wukong together with his master and brothers was walking across a river.Suddenly his master fell off the horse by the bad smell of river water.They found the water so dirty that they could hardly breathe.A lot of factories along the river always poured their waste water and rubbish straight into the river which made the river water polluted.In this way most of the fish in the river were killed.If the river water all over the country is polluted like this, no living things will exist in the water.Now more and more people have come to realize how serious this problem is.Our government is doing her best to take measures to fight against pollution.We expect that the water in every river will be made cleaner and cleaner before long.低碳经济下的环境保护(3)

全世界的环境问题在变得越来越严重。请你根据漫画内容和下面要求给China Daily写一封信反映这一情况，并提出保护环境的建议。

注意：1.信的开头与结尾已经给出，不计算在总词数内。

2.字数要求: 120左右。

人口膨胀population expansion;过度开发overdevelopment。

Dear editor，Environmental problems are becoming more and more serious all over the world._________________________________________________________

Yours truly

Li Hua

Dear editor，Environmental problems are becoming more and more serious all over the world.With the development of industry and agriculture, cars make great noises and give off poisonous gas.Because of population expansion and overdevelopment, resources has become less and less.Trees on the hills have been cut down, and waste water is being poured continuously into rivers.The whole ecological balance of the earth is changing.Massive destruction of environment has brought about negative effects and even poses a great threat to man’s existence.We must face the situation that exists and take actions to solve our environmental problems.We hope that all these measures will be effective and bring back a healthful environment.Yours truly

Li Hua

第五篇：考研英语大作文修改范例

考研英语大作文修改范例

原文：

From this picture, we can see a farmer planting the corn, he works hard and then he could drink a drop of water.Life is also like this.Our life is just like drinking a cup of tea, you feel the bitterness, and then sweet after taste could be get after bitterness.Life is not always so smooth, you might come across frustration and sadness, failure and even disaster, but you must be brave and stick on your dream.If you worked hard on your dream and tried your best to make it come true, you must get the sweet after bitterness.Therefore, once you have a dream or when you do something, please don’t give up, stick it on and you would be successful after that.修改以后的文章：

As is vividly depicted in the picture, we can see a farmer planting the corn.He should work hard so that he could drink a drop of water.Life has something common with this phenomenon.Our life is just like drinking a cup of tea, you may feel the bitterness at the first sip, and then the sweetness.We should believe sweetness can be got after bitterness.Life is not always smooth;therefore, you may come across frustration and sadness, failure and even disaster.If you can hold out, stick to your dream and continue to strive for it, you will definitely get a bright future and an upgraded life.In addition, once you have a dream or feel like doing something important to you, please don’t give up when there are some difficulties or obstacles on your way to success.As the old saying goes, “No pains, no gains.” If you try to avoid the arduous course of realizing your ideal and make hardly any efforts, you will never enjoy the feeling of being successful.