第一篇：英语作文例文点评88篇
借鉴和模仿是提高写作的基石。先借来再转为自用是巧学者之法。内容可适用于读写任务正文部分。
--Miss.Q 英语作文例文点评88篇（收集于网络）【要求】
英语课上老师教给同学们一句英语格言“No Pains, No Gains”（不劳则不获），并让大家围绕如下三方面以这句格言为题写一篇短文。
人们在困难面前容易气馁，并产生不劳而获的想法。
“不劳则不获”这一格言能给予人鼓励。
学生要取得优异成绩离不开苦功夫，所谓成功的秘诀即是辛勤的劳动。
【范文】
No Pains, No Gains
People attempting a task may be discouraged in front of difficulties.They start with a great interest and passion.When they find that the task will take much more effort than they thought, their interest diminishes and their passion wanes.At that time, they are likely to have the idea of reaping a good harvest without much labor.The old saying “No pains, no gains” comes as a word of cheer to these discouraged persons.No task that is really worth doing can be done either easily or quickly.No mastery of any knowledge or skill can be gained without painstaking efforts.We students shoulder the task of learning knowledge that calls for exertion.To improve our grades is what every student wants.We may envy those who have achieved excellence, and wonder what makes them succeed.In fact, their secret of success is no secret.It depends largely on their efforts.Good grades only belong to hardworking students.Many thanks for the favor you did for me!【评语】
该文紧紧围绕题目给出的三方面加以论述，层次清楚，语言流畅易懂。“interest diminishes and their passion wanes” 中词语搭配讲究，“reaping a good harvest without much labor” 用另一个习惯表达法点出了“No Pains, No Gains”的含义，同时又避免了重复。文章句式灵活，长短搭配得当，使文章朗朗上口，虽然是议论文，但却没有枯燥之感。
【要求】
根据下面的提示写一篇短文，内容须包括下面几个要点。
没有坚强的意志就不可能取得成功。
事业成功须非凡的干劲。
有些人害怕困难，则一事无成。
【范文】
Where there is a Will, There is a Way
No man can win success without strong will.We hear some men have got good results, but hardly realize that the great men had been making more efforts before they achieved success.Success requires an unusual amount of energy to overcome difficulties.So it is important for us to have great resolution.Some men tend to be afraid of difficulties.If they meet with some difficulties, they will give in.So they get nothing eventually.So let's make up our minds, stick to it and surely win success in our career.Focus on the most important things to do to help your organization be successful.Don't focus on the easiest things.【评语】
对这种提纲式作文，一定要囊括所给提纲中的全部内容，但又无须拘泥于提纲，更不能逐字逐句地“翻译”。对此应发挥自己的想像力和创造力，大胆地创作扩展。
【要求】
很多人都希望能在事业上有所成就，但不是所有人都能取得胜利。成功需要顽强的意志，锲而不舍的努力，勤奋学习的精神。请你以此为主要内容，准备一篇百字左右的简短发言。
【范文】
The way to success
Everyone tries to achieve success in his/her career.But some finally attain their aims while others fail.Why? Some continue their cause to the end through long period of hard struggles, but others are easily disappointed and stop halfway.Strong will, perseverance and diligence are the three essentials of success.A man of strong will and perseverance always has an inflexible spirit.He sticks to his cause no matter how tough it might be.Life is short and we have too much to do.Without diligence no one can achieve anything.I believe that where there is a will there is a way, and that success belongs to those who can make constant efforts.Don't be afraid of life.Believe that life is worth living, and your belief will help create the fact.【评语】
这是一篇议论文，作者首先提出问题，再提出自己观点：意志坚强、锲而不舍、勤奋，是成功的三大要素。作者在结尾，巧妙地运用了谚语“where there is a will there is a way”，使文章增色不少。
【要求】
坚强的意志(Man's Strong Will)请以下面三句分别作为三段段首的主题句，写一篇以坚强的意志为题的文章。
Strong will is universally regarded as a very praisable quality.There have been many examples that success can be achieved by strong will.It is not easy to cultivate a strong will.【范文】
Man's Strong Will
Strong will is universally regarded as a very praisable quality.It is neither genius nor extraordinary ability that gives us power to deal with and overcome whatever hardship that befalls.It is strong will that enables us to endure the trying situation and to attain our goals.Strong will gives us light when we are in the dark, and encouragement when we are frustrated.With this meritorious quality, no enemy can overwhelm us, and no obstacles can stand in our way.As the saying goes, where there is a will, there is a way.All pain helps to make us rise, how-ever much we may hate it at the time.There have been many examples that success can be achieved by strong will.During the Long March, the Red Army soldiers met with the greatest hardship men have ever experienced.They had nothing to eat but grass roots and barks of trees.It was their strong will that made them defeat the hardship.Helen Keller, a strong willed American blind woman, mastered the English language and became a well-known educator.Such instances abound, and suffice it just to enumerate the two.Develop a high tolerance for ambiguity----you'll be more satisfied.It is not easy to cultivate a strong will.First of all, we must set up a firm faith in our cause, namely, the cause of communism, and be ready to devote our lives to it.Secondly, we must learn from strong-willed persons, especially, from revolutionary martyrs who fought for communism to the last drop of blood.Finally, we should boldly go through trials and hardships to train our will so as to get rid of the weak points of our moral character.【评语】
本文为议论文。首段的“neither„nor„”“It is strong will that„”，和“no enemy„no obstacles„”的运用，加强了文章的语气，突出了坚强意志的重要价值。段末的格言起到了画龙点睛的作用。第二段用了红军二万五千里长征和海伦•凯勒这两个例子，有力地证明了坚强的意志能使人获得成功这一主题。末段谈如何培养坚强的意志，层次清晰，观点正确，具有说服力。
【要求】
以“Don't Stop Halfway”为题写一篇议论文。
论证具体
结构完整
字数100—150 【范文】
Don't Stop Halfway
When a man is doing some work, he desires some benefit from it.In order to get this benefit, the must do the task to the end and completely finish it.To finish a task, whether hard or not requires patience and firmness.Therefore when you have some work to do, you must do it faithfully, irrespective of the difficulty.Difficulties and obstacles are unavoidable;if you turn your back on meeting them, you will succeed in nothing, but if you can overcome them, you will accomplish something.To stop halfway is very bad.Suppose that a precious stone is at a great distance from you and you want to obtain it;you must reach for it;you must not stop halfway.If you stop halfway, you will not only get nothing, but also lose something, because your time and strength will be wasted.It is a good thing for one to do one thing at a time, and never stop halfway.Cultivate a reputation for being reliable and hardworking, even if it means bucking peer pressure.【评语】
作者对不要半途而废的论证具体而有说服力，告诉我们半途而废不仅无法达到目标而且浪费时间、精力。段落安排逐层深入，循循善诱。全文整体结构完整、自然。
【要求】
题目：Failure（失败）是一个人经常遇到的。失败不是好事，因为它使人的努力(efforts)付之东流。但是，失败也是好事，它可以教育我们使我们学到更多的东西。试写一短文就此谈谈你对失败的看法。
【范文】
Failure
Nearly everybody regards failure as a bad thing.The efforts we have made seem to be of no use and we feel very disappointed.Some people even lose the courage to start again or lose interest in life when the failure is a very great one.But failure can also benefit us.It can teach us a good lesson and make us experienced.Also, we can realize our own shortcomings and get a better knowledge of ourselves.So when we start again, we can succeed more easily.Therefore, failure not only disappoints us but also benefits us.When we fail, we should make full use of our failure and learn from our experience.Then, we may succeed in the future.Life is made up of ambiguous victories and nebulous defeats----claim them all as victories!【评语】
本文最大的优点是正反对照，条理清楚。高考作文时间很短，所以谋篇布局显得十分重要。本文脉络清楚，浅显易懂，应该说在考场中是容易取胜的。此外，本篇行文简练，显得干净利落。要求】
每个人的生活中都有过失败的经历，失败对于我们来说，到底意味着什么？请你按如下提纲写一篇文章，谈谈你对失败的理解。
失败是生活中的常事。
人们对失败的态度各不相同。
就我而言，我认为失败„
【范文】
Is Failure a Bad Thing
Failure is quite a common thing in our life.As long as we do things we will surely encounter difficulties.Of course we should try our best to get over them, but in many cases, it is not so easy, or even impossible.Then how should we face failure? Different people take different attitudes towards failure.When faced with failure, some people become frustrated and lose their selfconfidence.They refuse to make any further efforts.These people will probably never amount to anything in life.Some people just don't fear failure.They firmly believe that failure is the mother of success.As a result, not only can failure stop them, but they draw useful lessons from it and try even harder.Such people are sure to succeed someday.As for me, I don't think failure is a bad thing.Failure can never discourage me but only enrich my experience and steel my will.With this positive attitude in mind, I will try hard in anything I'm determined to accomplish and attain success in the end.【评语】
本文按题目所给纲要分为三段。首段简要地论述了失败是每个人都会遇到的，末句用了一句设问，起到了承上启下的作用。第二段谈到了人们对失败的两种典型态度，先写错误观点进行铺垫，而后再写正确观点。这种安排自然突出了作者所赞同的态度，同时为引出第三段做好的了准备。末段作者则阐明了自己的观点。全文层次清楚，段落间衔接紧密而自然，主题突出，语言流畅，用词准确。
【要求】
失败，是人人都不愿体验的结果。有人说失败使人消沉，有人说失败是成功之母。你对失败的态度怎样？写一篇短文。
字数150—200字，题目自拟。
【范文】
Is Failure a Bad Thing?
Failure is a common thing in our daily lives.As students, We sometimes fail to get high scores on our examinations.When we play game, we sometimes can't avoid losing to others.And there are times when we fail to do satisfactory work.All these failures happen naturally and almost every one of us has had such experiences.However, there are different attitudes towards failure.Some people lose heart in failure, they think the world has come to an end.Some people don't take failure seriously and just ignore it, while some others learn much from it.In my opinion, what really counts is not failure itself, but what we think of failure and do after failure.As long as we believe in ourselves and don't give up, and in the mean time learn something from our failure, We'll certainly be successful in the end.So I'm never afraid of failure, for I believe that failure is not a bad thing, but the mother of success.看问题一定要看到正反两面，体现在文中，就往往是鲜明的对比。
【评语】 表达思想清楚，内容比较充实，文字流畅，句子结构多样。第一段、第二段主题句简练而贴切，句间衔接比较自然，用词造句有不少闪光点，如：the world has come to an end 等。
要求】
请以下面三句话分别作为三段段首的主题句，写一篇题为“诚实”的文章。
It is usually better to be honest than dishonest.One of the worst things about lying is that it results in a guilty conscience.Honesty makes you happy and gain a good reputation.【范文】
honesty
We often praise somebody because of his diligence and honesty.So all the people think that honesty is a virtue and that it is the best policy.It is usually better to be honest than dishonest.People tend to believe an honest man, no matter what he does and what he says.On the contrary, dishonest people are not trustworthy.For this reason, honest people are always more successful than the dishonest.So it is better to be honest because it can help you succeed.One of the worst things about lying is that it results in a guilty conscience.If a person tells lies, his face will turn red and his heart will beat faster.He will always live in fright.Honesty makes you happy and gains a good reputation.All people consider what you've said true and trust you just because you are an honest man.Therefore, you can say what you like and do what you like without fear.You will feel very happy.Likewise, just because of your honesty, people respect you and love you.Gradually, you will gain a good reputation.To be honest will ensure you a happy life.【评语】
该文内容切题，详略安排得当，重点放在诚实的益处，即第二段和第四段上。这两段的段末均有一句总结句与段首的主题句相呼应，使段落结构完整，同时强化了主题。文章语言略显单调，但比较顺畅，表达也较清楚。
【要求】
班会课上要求同学们为大家用英文讲述一个小哲理，要求条理清晰，有自己的见解。你的发言稿内容如下：
真诚是一种重要的思想方法。
应该弄清楚什么是真诚。
为什么有时人们难以做到真诚。
真诚，是一种人生态度。
【范文】
On the Truth
Truth is an attitude of the mind.It is important, if one does not wish to inconvenience and bore his or her friends.It means telling no lies and never backing out of one's word.But it is more important to know what is the truth, and not to slide into those untruthful habits of thought which are so pleasant and so easy.There is a word named “the victory habit of mind”.People who have this mind are unduly preoccupied by what was socially and morally convenient.One should have the courage to think uncomfortably, since it is only by rejecting the convenience that one can come to think the truth.Truth, is an attitude of the life.直线式思维，层层推进是英文的习惯。避免Chinglish不仅仅要防止出错，还要培养语感和思路。
【评语】
这篇短文首尾照应，用同一句式，只换了一个单词：“mind”、“life”，却把意思推进了一层，很符合英文的习惯，能起到警人的效果。能够不停地把意思深入，也是这篇短的一个特点。它使用的是层层推进的办法，没有在每个点上展开论述，但却显得乏味。
【要求】
题目：自信
请指明什么是自信，并阐明自信的重要性。
【范文】
Self-confidence
Self-confidence means trust in one's own ability.As a very important psychological quality, it brings your creative power to play, arouses you enthusiasm for work and helps you overcome difficulties.When asked of the secret of her success, Marie Curie answered, “My success lies in perseverance and self-confidence, the latter in particular.”
Self-confidence gives you light when you are in dark and encouragement when you are dismayed.It is self-confidence that inspires you to cope with any arduous task.With self-confidence, the goal you intend can be reached, and so can the hard nut be cracked.Some people find most of the things impossible, saying, “It is beyond my ability to do the task.” or “I am not cut out for it.” In many cases, these are only lame excuses.When our heart is void of self-confidence, every hope is gone, and everything we are laying our hands on is spoilt.Be honest with yourself about your strengths and weakness and manage accordingly.【评语】
本文为议论文，分三部分层层深入地论述了自信心这一可贵的心理素质。首段在给自信心作出简要解释后，接着阐明了自信心的重要性。段末恰到好处地引用了居里夫人的话来支持自己的论点。第二段进一步陈述了自信心的重要性。而在末段作者首先通过两句话生动地表现出了缺乏自信心人的心态，而后从反而指出如果缺乏自信心，则会一事无成。
【要求】
ambition的意思是我们的生活目标，是对成功、权力、财富等等的强烈渴望。ambition并不意味着要成为最好的，它是一种激励我们向前的目标，使我们不因失败而失去希望。每个人都有自己的ambition，但不是每个人都能实现自己的渴望。结合以上内容，以“Ambition”为题写一篇议论文。
不要逐字逐句翻译。
字数100字左右。
【范文】
Ambition
Our ambition means the goal we have in our life.It is a strong desire for success, power, riches, and so on.To have ambition doesn't necessarily mean one wants to be number one.This is not the real sense of the word.True ambition is the goal that encourages us to look forward and not to lose hope because of failure.Ambition differs from person to person and everyone has his or her own ambition.Yet not every-one of us can succeed in what we desire to do.Live all you can.It's a mistake not to.The right time is any time, that one is still so lucky as to live.【评语】
本文充分表达了题目的要求，思路清晰，结构完整，内容简明扼要。语句活泼流利，用词直接精当，避免了华丽浮夸的词藻或含义模糊的语句。紧扣题意，中心明确，是一篇成功的议论文。结尾处引用格言更显出深厚的语言功底，为全文增色不少。
【要求】
文明礼貌(Good Manners)请以下面三句话分别作为三段段首的主题句，写一篇以文明礼貌为题的文章。
People all over the world set great regard on good manners.There are good manners in which we behave in public places.If everyone has developed good manners…
【范文】
Good Manners
People all over the world set great regard on good manners.To a certain degree, good manners indicate a person's good education and breeding.In schools, it is part of students' moral trailing to develop good manners.A person with good manners always wins praise.On the contrary, people will frown on him if he behaves roughly and impolitely.There are good manners in which we behave in public places.It is a good manner to offer help to the young, the old and the handicapped when they are in need of it.So is it to behave politely and keep away from foul language.Besides, we should guard against such minor offenses as making a loud noise, casting peels and shells, smoking and spitting.If everyone has developed good manners, people will from a more harmonious relationship.If everyone behaves considerately towards others and follows the social ethics, people will live in a better world.With the general mood of society improved, there will be a progress of civilization.【评语】
本文按照题目所给的纲要从三方面论述了文明礼貌的重要性。意思明晰，文理通顺。“frown on”，“keep away from”，“guard against”，“minor offenses”等小词用得准确自然，很好地传达了作者的意思。
要求】
在现代社会，请你谈一谈对礼貌的看法。
字数100—150字
【范文】
Politeness
Politeness means good behavior in social intercourse.Codes of politeness may differ from country to country.But the object is always to add pleasure and grace to daily life.A polite person is always an agreeable companion.He is agreeable because he is always thinking of others before himself.He doesn't interrupt people when they are talking.He is careful not to say anything to hurt other people's feelings.He doesn't push in a crowd, but waits quietly until it is his turn to pass.In addition, by acting in accordance with the prevailing customs, he is considered a member of the civilized society;otherwise, he is looked upon as a fool and will be avoided by people of high breeding.Politeness is truly a valuable asset.If you are courteous to other people, you have good manners and your everday life will be much happier.【评语】
论点鲜明。文章开头即表明作者观点，接着围绕这一观点以第三人称娓娓道来，给人以中肯无惑之感。全文运笔流畅，论证充分。读后给人以深刻印象。
【要求】
古今中外有很多关于人生问题的讨论，这方面的精彩英语文章也数不胜数。现在有一个英语杂志想开辟一个讨论人生的小专栏，要求语句精练警人，观点有新义。你的应征文章内容如下：
生命中的快乐是人们所不断寻求的。
但是我们往往忽视身边的快乐，而去寻找那些所谓大的野心勃勃的东西。
快乐无所不在。
想一想身边有哪些可珍惜的快乐呢。
【范文】
The Happiness of the Life
Life is like a winding path that surrounded by flowers, butterflies, and delicious fruit, but many of us spend much time looking for happiness around the next corner.We do not bend to enjoy the happiness that is ours for the taking just at out feet.In our desire to reach the “pot of gold”, complete and lasting happiness we all want to fill our lives, we ignore things which don't seem worthy of such a large ambition, or which can't give us the whole thing all at once.Happiness is all around us, but it often comes in small grains.When we gather it grain by grain, we soon have a basketful.What small pieces of happiness surround me right now? Most folks are about as happy as they make up their minds to be.【评语】
该文按要求描写了自己是如何看待生活中快乐的。语言很清新，几个比喻用得很有特色：比如把“life”比做“a winding path surrounded by flowers, butterflies, and delicious fruit”，把收集生活中的快乐比做“gather grain”。既生动又形象。最后的疑问句也起到了发人深省的效果。
【要求】
人人都渴望幸福，但对幸福的理解却不尽相同：有人追逐金钱，有人看重名誉，有人渴望友情，有人视爱情为人生的崇高追求。你呢？写下你对幸福的看法。
字数：100左右。
【范文】
Happiness
Happiness means different things to different people.For example some people believe that if they have a lot of money or many material things, they will be happy.They believe that if they are wealthy, they will be able to do everything they want, and so they will be happy.On the other hand, some people believe that money is not the only source of happiness.These people value their intelligence, or their health, or their religion;these things make them happy, For me, happiness is closely tied to my family.I am happy if my father and my mother live in harmony.When all the members of my family share the good time and the bad, I am happy.Although the definition of happiness depends on the individual, my “wealth” of happiness is my family.Remember this,----that very little is needed to make a happy life.【评语】
作者首先列出不同人对幸福的不同理解，然后引出作者本人对幸福的观点—“closely tied to my family”尤其“I'm happy if my father and mother live in harmony”读来令人感动。全篇行文流畅，结构严谨，首尾呼应。
【要求】
社会的变化引起人们对富有与欢乐的讨论。人们开始认为富有与欢乐并非必然相联系，穷人一样有他们的欢乐。你会在富有与欢乐之间作出什么选择？请你就常人的看法和你自己的看法写简短文。
【范文】
Wealthy and Happy
Wealth and happiness are not necessarily related to each other.First of all, we have to believe that wealthy people are more likely to be happy than poor ones.Because wealthy people do not have to worry about their work and bread, which are usually the causes of trouble to the poor.But in this world, happiness does not belong to the rich only.The poor have an equal right to it.So long as the poor are satisfied with themselves and their condition, they feel happy.I think it would be perfect to be both wealthy and happy.But if the two can not be held at the same time, I would rather choose happiness.Money may be the husk of many things, but not the kernel.【评语】
富有与欢乐是一个赋有哲学意义的问题：一个是物质条件，一个是心理感觉。不同的人应该允许有不同的看法。本文开篇阐述了常人的观点，按着从正、反两个方面辩证阐述二者的关系，最后阐明自己的观点，显得说理充分，让人信服。写这类主观性题目，个人观点必须明确。
【要求】
题目：How to Approach Money。请根据以下提示作文，要求以三句话作为段首语结构文章。
Money is necessary in our modern life.But money is not all good.How should we approach money.【范文】
How to Approach Money
Money is necessary in our modern life.We need money to buy things such as food and clothing.When we go out, we should pay traffic fee and other fees.In a word, money is important.With more money, we can live better and create better working or studying conditions.But money is not always good.Many people work hard when they have no money but do nothing when they have more than enough money, And even worse, there are some people nowadays who make money at the expense of friendship or other people's interests.How should we approach money, then? In my opinion, we should work hard to earn more money, But at the same time, we must remember that money is not our final goal.一定要把握好“度”哦，不要离topic sentence太远。
【评语】
本文为一给起首句的作文，所以内容限制很大，个人发挥余地较小。本文优点在于简练地评论了金钱的利与弊，逻辑清楚。此类文章写作起来比较容易。
【要求】
请以下面三句话分别作为三段段首的主题句，写一篇以健康、美貌和学识为题的文章。
Young people look forward to being strong and handsome.There are women who set great store by the beauty of outward appearance.Health and beauty without knowledge is almost equal to a body without soul.【范文】
Health, Beauty and Knowledge
Young people look forward to being strong and handsome.They take part in rigorous training to build up their body.They take some gymnastics stars as their models, whose welldeveloped muscles or proportioned figure is the combination of strength and grace, and also the indication of youthfulness and vitality.There are women who set great store by the beauty of outward appearance.They dress themselves in clothes of the latest fashion.They apply a heavy make-up, rouging their lips, powdering their faces, painting their brows, and wearing earrings and necklaces.To compensate the inadequacy of their natural beauty, some goes so far as to receive the operation of face mending.文体和文风也是应该注意的。文体比较郑重。
Health and beauty without knowledge is almost equal to a body without soul.A person with a stout body alone can go nowhere in the modern age of science and technology, a person's outward beauty is as easy to fade as a flower to wither no matter how colorful it is.It is true that health and beauty are something one may well be proud of.But it is of greater importance for a student to master adequate knowledge that is useful in his life-long service to the country.句子相应规整一些，用词也尽量正式，以免出现不得当的笑话。
【评语】
全文围绕三个主题句展开议论，条理清楚，层次分明，用词准确。“well-developed muscles”，“proportioned figure”，“apply make-up”，“rouging lips”，“powdering faces”，“painting brows”，及“wearing earrings and necklaces”等词语搭配讲究，生动地表达了作者的意思。“a person's outward beauty is as easy to fade as a flower to wither no matter how colorful it is.”比喻句用得贴切自然，很好地强调了主题。
【要求】
健康是革命的本钱，请以“health”为题目写篇100单词的英语小短文。每段的中心句已经给出：
Health is the foundation of one's future success.What should we do to maintain and enhance our health? Health is more important than wealth.【范文】
Health
It is clear that health is the foundation of one's future success.If you become sick, it is nearly impossible to pursue your career effectively.On the other hand, if you are strong, you can go all out to overcome the obstacles that lie ahead of you.Now that we know that health is the source of our energy, what should we do to maintain and enhance our health? First, we should exercise every day to strengthen our muscles.Second, we should keep regular hours of our lives.If we get up early, we can breathe fresh air and see the sunrise, and this habit can do wonders for our outlook on life.Third, there is a proverb that says, “Prevention is better than cure.”
In conclusion, health is more important than wealth.Those who are rich but lose their health are no more fortunate than those who are poor.If you want your wish to come true, health is the most important ingredient of your success.【评语】
该文为行云流水，结构清楚而紧凑。开篇说明健康的重要性。在第二段里，分了三个层次来阐释“健康是我们能量的源泉”，而且还有提问句来引导下面的回答。最后一段，“in conclusion”，总结了全文，而且有所提高。
Understand your health benefits and keep track of them.【要求】
题目：减肥。请根据以下要点写一短文，谈谈你对减肥的看法。
节食（diet.n.）与慢跑（jogging）是两种效果不同的减肥方法。
慢跑经济而有效；节食效果不佳。
减肥如走极端则很危险。
【范文】
Losing Weight
Many fat people want to lose weight and to be younger and slimmer.They often choose two ways----diet and jogging.Their effects are different.Jogging is the easiest and cheapest way of shaping the body.For the price of a good pair of running shoes, anyone can join the race anywhere.Dieting, too, has become a common way.People eat very little everyday, and the food they eat cannot supply as much nutrition as the body needs.Both jogging and dieting, carried to extremes, can be harmful.Above all, common sense should be the keystone for any dieting and exercise scheme.It is true that the principal part of beauty lies in decent motion.【评语】
这是一篇有提示语的作用文，因此，一般要求在文章的段首以中心句的形式点明要点。另外，提示性的作用，切忌主观修改提示要求。议论文的优点就在于紧扣提示，层层展开，干净利落，正反相称，使文章显得公允、完整。
要求】
“虚心使人进步，骄傲使人落后”这句家喻户晓的格言指出了谦虚这一美德的重要性。请你围绕这句格言写一篇短文谈谈你对谦虚的理解。
人各有所长，因此可能会自视过高。例如老年人可能看不起年轻人，认为年轻人短少智慧和阅历；而年轻人也会轻视老人，认为他们缺少活力。重要的是，要谦虚地学习别人的长处。
学习知识也离不开谦虚。一个谦虚的人会不耻下问，因为他知道，知识的海洋如此浩瀚，一个人在一生中能学到的只是沧海一粟。反之，一个自负的人则炫耀自己的一知半解，不再进取。谦虚的人对知识的追求是无止境的，这正是他能取得成功的原因所在。
【范文】
Modesty
“Modesty helps one progress, and pride makes one lag behind.”Celebrating the virtue of modesty, The saying becomes many people's motto.Everyone has his strong points, of which he may have too high an opinion.For example, the old may look down upon the young, thinking that young persons lack wisdom and experience;the young may despise the old, taking pride in their vigor.The important thing is to be modest and to learn from other people's strong points.Modesty is important in learning.A modest person never hesitates to consult those who are inferior to him.He understands that the range of knowledge is as vast as the sea and one can only gain a drop all his life.In contrast, a conceited person, while having only a smattering of knowledge, shows it off and dissatisfied with what he has achieved.As a modest person's thirst for knowledge is never satisfied, the road to success lies before him.【评语】
文章以“虚心使人进步，骄傲使人落后”这一格言开头，从“人各有所长，应虚心取人所长”和“谦虚对求学至关重要”两方面论述了谦虚这一主题，最后得出结论“虚心的人能够走向成功”。层次清楚，措辞准确。文中将知识与大海作比喻句贴切自然，没有牵强附会之感。文中一些习语的熟练运用，也显示出了作者良好的文字功底。
【要求】
题目：爱是人类普遍而伟大的感情，请以“love”为题，写一篇100单词左右的英语小短文。文章每一段的前一句话已经给出。
Love plays an important part in this world today.The love between you and your parents is a specials love.There are other kinds of love.【范文】
Love
Love plays an important part in this world today.With the increasing modernization of society, relationship between people are becoming looser and looser.It is difficult to imagine what they would be like if there were no love for each other.Love is the caring and concern for, and understanding of other people and the acceptance of their strength and weaknesses.To love and to be loved is the true happiness in life.The love between you and your parents is a special one.This love, as any other sincere love, must be honest and be shared by both parents and children.The love of parents is a great support in their children's lives.It will remain with them and help them overcome all the difficulties and make them feel secure.There are other kinds of love.Love between friends, partners, human beings and animals.The power of love makes us endure the difficulties in our lives, even though we may not have the chance to think about it, it maybe be kept alive deeply in our heart.【评语】该文逻辑清晰，词语简练，先从“爱”的普遍意义谈起，说到“爱”的含义，“爱”对我们的重要。在第二段里又重点地谈了谈父母和孩子之间的“爱”，然后结尾处点到了其他种类的“爱”。有序有节，完整精干。
并不是好文章必须追求艰涩的词语，平易的语言只要运用得当，也会有极好的效果。
【要求】
本市无偿献血日即将来到。在学校的无偿献血动员活动中，你应《英语园地》之邀，写一篇宣传稿，向包括留学生及外籍教员在内的全校师生宣传无偿献血的重大意义及其对身体的影响。大意如下：
血液是人体不可缺少的东西。它将养分和氧气输送体内各给组织，同时将废物和二氧化碳运走。一个人如果失血过多就会死亡。输血这一措施正在挽救着千百万人的生命。没有丰富的血库，也就无所谓现代医学的发展。
无偿献血是高尚之举，它体现了献血者对他人的关爱。目前，献血活动在许多国家都广泛开展，它在我国也得到提倡。
献血不会损害献血者的健康。首先，只有健康的人才有资格献血；此外，每次的献血量很少，献血者的身体会很快进行调整，使身体机制正常运行。
【范文】
Blood Donation Without payment
Blood is vital to the human body.It carries nourishment and oxygen to tissues, and at the same time, removes wastes and carbon dioxide.A person will die if he loses too much blood.Nowadays blood transfusion is saving millions of dying people.Without an adequate store of blood, the modern medicine can't develop.Blood donation doesn't harm the donator's health.First, only healthy people are allowed to donate blood;besides, every time, only a small amount of blood is taken from the donator.His body will make a quick adjustment to allow the body to operate normally.【评语】
文章从血液对人体的重要性和献血对人体的影响两方面对无偿献血活动进行了论述。每段句首为主题句，使整篇文章结构清晰。行文流畅，用词准确。句式虽略显简单，但“carry, remove, make an adjustment”等词语的恰当使用，使文章呈现出一定的变化。
We may miss the point of life by being too important.【要求】
人类每时每刻都在浪费着各种各样的资源，不仅包括自然资源，还包括时间资源。请你以下面三句话分别作为段首主题句，写一篇短文谈谈浪费问题。
Mankind is wasting things everywhere and every day.The worst example of man's waste is the waste of time.It is time to call for an end to waste.【范文】
Mankind is wasting things everywhere and every day.Wherever we turn, we can see that paper, bottles and cans are thrown away;food is wasted just because of its poor taste;clothes are discarded simply due to their old fashion.Not only things and money are wasted, but natural resources are abused as well.Trees are cut down merely for fuel;wildlife is killed simply for food;oil, coal and minerals are exploited in a bad way.The worst example of man's waste is the waste of time.Many people tend to spend their time on worthless things, such as wandering about in the street, gossiping in the office, or sleeping too much during the day.As we know, time is so precious to us that it passes by and never returns.The waste of time amounts to the waste of life.It is time to call for an end to waste.On the one hand, we must save natural resources and make full use of them;otherwise human beings will be faced with the scarcity of natural resources and suffer from the pollution caused by wastes.On the other hand, we must treasure our time.Only with our time devoted to study and work for the people will we never regret the life we have had.【评语】
该文主题突出，论述充分而有层次。句子之间衔接自然，逻辑性强。文中词语搭配讲究，符合英语表态习惯。
词语搭配是难点也是重点，只要熟练运用，才能真正掌握。
【要求】
面对班上越来越多的同学开始讲究吃穿，追求名牌，班主任王老师组织了一次以“节俭”为主题的班会。经过讨论，大家达成了共识，认为现在虽然生活富裕了，衣食无忧了，但节俭是我们富家强国的基础，是一种美德，不应忘记。请你从以下三方面入手来谈一谈你对节俭的认识：
节俭是一种美德，节俭的人懂得花钱之道；
节俭有诸多益处；
中国是一个发展中国家。我们只有勤劳节俭，才能建设一个强大的祖国。
【范文】
Thrift
Thrift is considered as a kind of virtue not only in China but also in the world.Thrifty people take great care not to waste anything when they are doing things and not to waste any money when they are spending it.As a virtue, thrift is very important to everyone.In the world some people spend their money like water, while others keep the habit of practicing thrift.The latter never spend their money on useless things, what's more, they always make good use of their money, for example, to help the poor to do things out of charity.By doing this they have made contributions to the society and their virtue has been highly appreciated.Live within your means.Not everyone knows how mysteriously money dribbles away in petty expenditure.If we don't take care of the cent, it will mount to dollars, which will take wings and fly away.We should always remember the English proverb“Take care of the pence and the pounds will take care of themselves”.Sometimes we want to go out to have holidays with our family and by means of thrift the money to be spent on such occasions can often be saved beforehand.Sickness sometimes comes and unless preparation has been made, there is much difficulty in meeting the increased expenditure.So everybody should try to save as much money as possible.China is a developing country.If we Chinese people are all thrifty and working hard, surely our country will be stronger and stronger, and then one day become a very rich and prosperous one.突出特点是大量谚语的运用，借力发挥，为文章增色不少。
【评语】
全文围绕题目所给的三方面展开论述，内容切题，观点鲜明。语言流畅，句与句之间联系紧密，富有逻辑性。句式的变换和一系列比喻及谚语的使用，使文章读来生动，具有说服力。
【要求】
幽默感是上天赐给人类的最好礼物，是快乐生活中所必不可少的要素。请你以下面的提纲写一篇短文，谈谈为什么幽默感非常重要。
幽默感是上天赐给人类的最好礼物，是公认的最有价值的性格特征之一。
幽默可以促进我们的身心健康。
幽默有助于我们与他人和谐相处。
综上所述，„
【范文】
Why a Sense of Humor is Important
A sense of humor, God's greatest gift to mankind, is universally considered the most valuable personality asset.It is born within every person's heart, but has to be cultivated.A person without humor is just like a spring without flowers and a dish without seasoning.In a sense, your personality lies in your sense of humor.Humor can enhance physical as well as mental well being.It helps us bear our burdens, lessen our tension, overcome our frustration, relax our body muscles, and dissolve countless trifles and irritations.With the cracking of a joke, all our worries, sadness and tiredness disperse like mist and smoke, and we are full of vigor once again.Humor helps us live in harmony with others.It is unavoidable to have misunderstanding and tension with others during work or study.But humor can ,as a“pacifier”, inject a light note into the touchy situation to ease these problems quicker than angry words or quarrels.With it you can always keep on good terms with others.In short, a sense of humor is really one of the keys to happiness.It gives zest to life to make it worth living.【评语】
该文语言生动流畅，用词准确。尤其是词语的搭配比较讲究，值得大家学习。文章内容切题，层次清楚，句与句之间的连接富有逻辑性。
【要求】
以“Why a sense of humor is important”为题，写一篇100字左右短文。提示如下：
幽默能体现个性。
幽默有益于身心健康。
幽默能融洽与他人关系。
【范文】
Why a Sense of Humor Is Important
Humor shows a person's characteristics.If you can see everything with a sense of humor, you are an interesting person, and people will never feel dull together with you.It also shows that you are a well-educated man.You are healthy and happy with your sense of humor, for it can always keep you in high spirit, which will do good to both your mental and physical health.A sense of humor changes the color of the whole world before you.You will also have plenty of friends with your sense of humor.People feel it a pleasure to be with you, for you help them to see things from an entirely different view and a much brighter view.You give people strength to face a world full of struggle.【评语】
本文给出了每段的主题句。文章应围绕这几点发展成段，运用类比、假设等技巧，可以完成一篇出色的习作。
A little bit of humor can be an effective icebreaker.【要求】
你认为在人际交往中最能体现个性风度、融洽与他人关系的性格是什么。
请用100字左右阐述你的理由。
题目自拟。
【范文】
Why a Sense of Humor Is Important
A sense of humor is universally considered the most valuable personality trait.Although everyone is born with it, it has to be cultivated.A person without humor is just like a spring without flowers.In a way, your personality lies in your sense of humor.Humor can enhance physical as well as mental well being.It helps us reduce stress, overcome frustration and dissolve countless trifling irritations.Humor helps us to get along with others.Misunderstanding and tension with others during work or study is unavoidable.But appropriate use of humor can settle quarrels and conflicts.With a good sense of humor you can always keep on good terms with others
【评语】
本文语言优美，比喻恰当，论述有理有据，条理清晰，层次分明。自拟的题目既指出了性格关键词“humor”，又说明了本文的主要内容是论述“重要性”，是自命题作文中的精品。
把这几篇同题材的文章对照参阅，一定会很有帮助的。
【要求】
题目：时间是无价之宝，浪费时间就是浪费生命。请以“The Value of Time”为题，写一篇100单词左右的英语小短文。每段的中心句已经给出。
Time is even more precious than money.We should make full use of time.There are a lot of people who waste their time.We should get into the good habit of saving time.【范文】
The Value of Time
A proverb says:“Time is money”.But in my opinion, time is even more precious than money.When money is spent, we can earn it back.However, when time is gone, it will never return.This is the reason why we must save time.It goes without saying that the time at our disposal is unusually limited.Hence, even an hour is extremely precious.We should make full use of our time to do useful things.As students we must not relax our efforts to engage in our studies so as to serve society and our nation in the future.It is a pity that there are a lot of people who do not know the importance of time.They spend their precious time smoking, drinking and gambling.They do not realize that wasting time is equal to wasting part of their valuable life.In a word, we should get into the good habit of saving time.Do not put off what can be done today until tomorrow.Laziness will not only bring us failure but also lead us to the road of poverty.【评语】
该文分为四段，结构清晰，每段有每段的重点和内容。每一段，开门见山地谈到为什么我们要珍惜时间，因为它比金钱还宝贵；第二段里说，作为一名学生，更应该如此，“hence„”作为一种总结；第三段，对于一些不学无术的同学表示遗憾和惋惜。最后，用“in a word”来说明我们应该培养高效率地利用时间的好习惯。
【要求】
题目：暑假两个月的漫长假期为紧张学习的同学们提供了空闲娱乐、实践锻炼的好机会。你将怎样安排你的暑假生活？请以“How to Spend the Summer Vacation”为题，写一篇100个单词左右的英语短文。
写出你安排暑假的活动和选择这些活动的理由。
【范文】
How to Spend the Summer Vacation
In school, we have summer vacation.In summer, the weather is so hot that our brain needs a rest after a period of hard work.Thus it is for health reasons that we have our summer vacation.What would be the most healthy way to spend it then? There are many kinds of sports, which are good for health in summer, such as swimming, tennis and baseball.But care should be taken not to practice such sports all day long, which would be very bad for our health.Another point we have to consider is that our time should not be spent entirely in playing.We attend school in order to get some knowledge, which will be useful in our life.But knowledge can only be obtained through constant drilling.During the vacation, we should not neglect to review the lessons we have learnt.It is true that all work and no play makes you a dull fellow.Though there may be other ways to spend the summer vacation, this seems to me the best of all.【评语】文章首先从暑假的必要性开始，在第二段里又用问句来承上启下，提出本文的中心意思：“我们怎么才能最好地利用暑假的时间呢？”并说明运动是一个很好的选择，但是，第三段又说明还要学习以增长知识。
回答“怎么样”的时候往往要阐述“为什么”，才显得理直气壮。
【要求】
周末两天的休息对于平时忙于工作学习的人们来说是非常宝贵的。请你根据下列提纲写一篇短文。
周末对于人们来说意味着什么。
每个人都有自己度周末的方式。
我是怎样度周末的。
【范文】
Weekends
Weekends to people mean that they can have a two-day good rest.For example, people can go out to enjoy themselves or get together with relatives and friends to talk with each other or watch interesting video tapes with the whole family.Everyone spends weekends in his own way.Within two days, some people can relax themselves by listening to music, reading novels, or watching films.Others perhaps are more active by playing basketball, wimming or dancing.Different people have different relaxations.I often spend weekends with my family or my friends.Sometimes my parents take me on a visit to their old friends.Sometimes I go to the library to study or borrow some books to gain much knowledge.I also go to see various exhibition to broaden my vision.An excursion to seashore or mountain resorts is my favorite way of spending weekends.Weekends are always enjoyable for me.【评语】
全文思路清晰，论述充分，语言流畅易懂。用词讲究，注意了词语搭配，没有重复、堆砌之感。
【要求】
要求：旅游事业对我国具有举足轻重的作用。请以Ways to Improve China's Tourism为题为我国旅游事业的发展提几点建议。（提示：扩大宣传，改善旅游设施，提高服务质量„„）
【范文】
Ways to Improve china's tourism
Tourism is now becoming a major industry throughout the world.However, tourism in China is not as developed as it should be.If the following is done, China's tourism will definitely be improved.First, our places of interest should be better advertised throughout the world to attract more tourists.Second, facilities should be provided to ensure that tourists enjoy their trip.Finally, the quality of service should be improved.Don't tell people their ideas are bad unless you've got a good one.【评语】
本文第一段提出问题，第二段解决问题，“first”，“second”，“finally”等词的使用，使整篇文章条理格外清晰。
【要求】
题目：人们对旅游观光有各种不同的看法，旅游也有其巨大的优点，同时也有缺点。请写一短文谈谈你如何看待旅游的。
【范文】
Nowadays, it is very popular among young people to travel around and see the world.Some people say they want something exciting and choose sightseeing.Some people who go outside simply want to see how other people live.And other people hope to refresh themselves and relax.However, when you want to travel, you will find many things to worry about before you really enjoy yourself.For example, ticket, hotel, luggage, thirst, hunger, rain, etc.In my opinion, if you have made up your mind to travel, you'd better well prepare yourself and never complain.Living close to nature is fun, especially for city people.Many new inventions make camping easier.【评语】
本文从几个方面表明了不同人有不同旅游观念这一现实，同时指出旅游的麻烦之处，而没有泛泛地谈旅游的种种优缺点，这是本文取胜之处。文末的话，形象表明了大众对旅游的态度，显得真实贴切。此文另一优点，在于罗列不同观点时有条不紊。
【要求】
暑假就要到了，许多同学都会选择旅游作为度假的一种方式。的确，旅游对一个人的身心健康颇有好处。那么就请你以下面三句话分别作为三段段首的主题句，写一篇旅游的文章。
Travel is a very good means of broadening a person's perspective.Travel may relieve a person of boredom and gloom.Travelers can choose different modes of transportation which have advantages and disadvantages.【范文】
Travel
Travel is a very good means of broadening a person's perspective.It makes you come into contact with different cultures, meet people of different colors and go through peculiar rites and ceremonies.Travelling much, you will not only enrich your knowledge and experiences, but also be aware of the vastness of nature.Travel may also relieve person of boredom and gloom.Travel brings you enjoyment and attraction.It gives you a pleasant experience, which will disperse your boredom and make you forget whatever annoys you.Travel broadens your mind and leaves you good memories.Later, you may go over these memories and enjoy your past experiences, thus keeping a fresh and sunny mind.The field's his study, nature was his book.Travelers can choose different modes of transportation which have advantages and disadvantages.Airplanes are the fastest but also the most expensive.Buses and trains are less expensive, but they soon make you feel cramped and uncomfortable.Ships provide you with comfort unless you get seasick.Most people can afford traveling by bicycle, which, although slow, can limber up your muscles and get you closer to nature.【评语】
本文首先陈述了旅游能够开阔人们眼界的原因，接着指出为什么旅游能够消除烦闷、抑郁的心情，最后说明进行旅游可采取的不同交通工具的优缺点。本篇各段解释言简意明，主题突出。“come into contact with„”，“enrich you knowledge and experiences”，“be aware of the vastness of nature”，“disperse your boredom”，“broaden your mind”等词语的恰当搭配，生动而准确地表现出了旅游的益处。
要求】
题目：你将参加校园英语讲演比赛。现在需要写出一份简要的底稿，底稿应包含以下基本要点。
随着工作时间的缩短，空余时间越来越多了。
如何利用空余时间。
利用空余时间的益处。
题目自拟。【范文】
Use of Free Time
Some people may be so busy that they never have a spare moment, but it would be hard to find such people in contemporary times.Working hours are shorter and vacations longer, and there are more and more ways to spend the weekends.Aside from eating and sleeping, what do people do during the many hours when they are not at work or at school? Use of free time often discloses much about one's tastes, values, interests and personality.What may be one man's leisure, however, might be another man's work.In leisure hours, some may turn to the humanities: literature, magic, art and here we might also mention movies and television.Others participate in sports, politics, voluntary work or hobbies at home.Still others like parties, travelling, or just loafing.Obviously, the use of free time is a good means of relaxation, but its benefits go beyond this.All things people do in leisure hours enable them to gratify their wishes.This can contribute to intellectual growth and promote social activities as well.So the good use of free time will make life rich, colorful and rewarding.【评语】
这篇文章写得很有水平。说理深入浅出，语言丰富晓畅，例证详实，句式灵活多变，使得文章生动并吸引人。开篇用问句，引出下文；结尾点题，总结全文。并且很有文学性。
【要求】
和外国朋友交谈是文化生活中很重要的一部分，但是谈什么话题却要慎重考虑，因为各国风俗习惯不同，谈的东西要关涉到禁忌、兴趣。学校的英语角将要组织一次对外交流活动。请你以书面形式写一些可以作为谈话的材料。
【范文】
Holidays and Outings
It is common in English to ask people about their holidays.In the West many families go away on holiday during the summer months and so it is very usual to ask about this.If the holiday has not yet taken place, then their holiday plans can be talked about.And if it is already over, then where they went, whether they enjoyed it and so on can be discussed.Similar questions are asked before festivals and pubic holidays.Foreigners living and working in China often have frequent opportunities for travel, either at weekends or during their holiday periods, so questions on this topic can often lead to fruitful discussions.They may be particularly interested to hear comments on which places are worth visiting and why, especially if these places are a little less well known and not clearly described in the tour guides.Take vacaticn and long weekends.Never let vacation time expire.【评语】
看完上文，可知这实际上是一篇讨论英语话题的文章。从这个角度来写“Holidays and Outings”这个题目可谓不无新义。但是在与外国人交往时谈些什么都是一个很现实的问题。本文提供了这一范例。全篇也围这个问题来写，几乎每句话都是紧扣中心的。比如它始终突出了这是一个话题，就反复用“ask”、“discuss”、以及“comment”等词。
【要求】
在一次主题为“电脑时代”的学校征文活动中，你计划以“The Computer”为题写一篇文章参加评选，你的辅导老师帮助你制订了一个写作纲要，如下：
计算机正广泛被用于各行各业。
在过去的五十年中，计算机得到了迅猛的发展。
计算机最终还是由人来设计和控制。
【范文】 The Computer
The computer is widely used in all phases of society.In industry, business, education, medicine, nearly all walks of life, computers have made their appearance, providing great speed and accuracy for our work.Computers have been used in the home, offices, laboratories and research institutions, functioning as the most efficient and versatile instruments for calculating, sorting, filing, recording and distributing.Computers are indispensable to modern civilization.Without computers, our life and our society will undoubtedly suffer a big regression.During the past five decades the computer has been rapidly advanced.Ever since the computer came into being, it has experienced the development of several generations, which are based respectively on vacuum tube, transistor and integrated circuit.Early computers were of great size, and had no match for the latest electronic computers in speed and accuracy.The Latter is capable of processing the most complicated information and reaching solution to problems in a fraction of time.At present, efforts are being made not only to bring the hardware to perfection, but also to improve the quality of the software.作文的内容千变万化，这就要求我们丰富自己的知识，特别是各行业的最新动态。只有这样，才能自如地处理各种题材和内容。
Computers must be instructed and programmed by people.In spite of the remarkable skill of the computer, men can never become its slave.Computers are not creative.They work according to men's instructions.So the development of computers and their use will depend upon the ingenuity of men.Although there are times when computers seem to operate like a mechanical “brain”,their achievements are not comparable to what the minds of men are able to do.【评语】
全文按照题目所给主题共分三段，以说明为主，第三段具有议论性质。本文层次清楚，表达准确，句与句之间联系紧密。该文题材涉及当今热门话题，许多与电脑有关的词汇和表达法对同学们有参考价值。
题目：计算机是现代科学技术最杰出的成果之一，它无处不在，与我们生活的各个领域息息相关。
请以“Computers”为题，写一篇100个单词左右的英语小短文。
要求写出计算机的具体用途和人们对于计算机应用的态度。
【范文】
Computers
One of the greatest advancements in modern technology has been the invention of computers.Computers are changing the way people live and work.They are already widely used in industry, business and in academic institutions.With the popularization of science and technology, computers have found an increasingly wide application in all fields.A computer can do a lot of work.It is capable of doing extremely complicated work in all fields of learning.It can solve the most complex mathematics problems.Computers are able to store large amounts of information, which can be recalled rapidly at any time.The truth of the matter, however, is that any new technology has a “dark”side.The problems caused by the use of computers are quite different.For example, assembly lines will be a slow process to retain workers to build and operate new equipment.Nevertheless, the dark side of the computer shouldn't mean that we should abandon the use of computers.Technology only can make the real work cheaper, faster, and less tedious.It cannot solve problems.【评语】
该文从现代化的技术革新角度来谈计算机，然后在第二段里讲到，随着科学和技术的普遍应用，计算机也大放光彩，具体的例举了两个用处。最后一段里，用“the truth of the matter”，再加“however”转折，说明了计算机的“dark side”，文章全面而重点突出。【要求】
世界环境日到来之际，你将代表你们班以一个污染的环境为题向全校同学发出一封倡仪书，先描述列举环境污染对人类健康的危害，然后号召大家保护环境。
【范文】
A Polluted Environment
Environmental pollution is a serious social problem.It poses a terrible threat to men's health.The atmosphere is filthy.The air is thick with dust and burnt oil.Dark smokes are being emitted from chimneys, and choking fumes are being released from numerous vehicles.Stay a little while in a big city, then wipe your forehead with your handkerchief, it is black.Hang out your washing on the line to dry, you will have to wash again.Garbage is left to accumulate in unsanitary heaps that attract flies and give off bad smell.Nor is the pollution confined to air and land.Large quantity of sewage and chemical waste are dumped daily into rivers, lakes and the sea, which kills millions of fish.Noises coming from honking cars, rumbling machines and broadcasting loudspeakers may make a person nervous and irritable, even drive him crazy.Environmental pollution is responsible for many diseases that are disabling, or bringing death to human beings.In short, let's take good care of our mother globe, not only for the well-being of ourselves, but also for that of our future generations.【评语】
本文是描写文，以主观描写的方式，具体、形象地描绘了被污染的环境。文章突出强调了污染对人体健康有极大危害这一主题。语言简练有力，句式总体上讲也较简单，但有效地表达了倡议书所需的语气。文章感染性强，特别是以祈使句作结，增强了本文的号召性。
【要求】
题目：“世界环保日”即将到来，你将为校广播站写一篇宣传保护水资源的稿件，包含如下要点：
水是必不可少的。
人类面临严重缺水问题。
我们应该怎么做。
【范文】
Conserving Water Resource
Water is indispensable to our life and the development of national economy.It is often described as the source of all living things and the lifeblood of agriculture and industry.Without it, nothing could grow and out world would become a terrible desert.The world we live in is now faced with a severe shortage of fresh water.According to some official figures, more than 1,700 million people in the world don't have enough clear water to drink and over 25 thousand people die of water related diseases daily.So, all of us should actively b save water.It's our obligation for the benefit of the future generations.每篇文章都会有自己的特色，要尽力突出自己的闪光点。
【评语】
文章条理清晰，层次分明，语言流畅，用词灵活不落俗套。运用了一个比喻，使文章增色不少。
【要求】
题目：以“Preserving Our Environment”为题，写一篇征文。要求按如下三条作为文章的提纲：
人类正在污染环境。
污染对人类的危害。
如何保护环境。
【范文】 Preserving Our Environment
Man is slowly polluting his environment.He dirties the air with waste gases;he poisons the water with chemical wastes;he damages the soil with fertilizers.Pollution does great harm to man.As we know, water, air and soil are necessary to man's survival.Polluted air, water and soil make people sick and even cause deaths.Environmental pollution is becoming one of the most serious problems that mankind faces.Now it's high time drastic action was taken.First, we should make the public aware of the dangers caused by pollution.Second, we should take pollution control measures to reduce pollution.Third, we should keep our pollution under control.After all, the earth is our home.We must take care of it for ourselves and our descendants.Never miss deadlines.Never.【评语】
层次分明，条理清晰，是这篇文章一大优点。每段围绕一个中心，主题明确。“first, second, third, after all”是提示层次的常用词汇。
【要求】
随着经济的快速发展，大城市中的高楼越建越多，道路越修越宽，但树木却越来越少。以国庆五十周年为契机，国家号召各大城市努力整顿市容，拆除违章建筑，增加绿化面积。这无疑是个造福子孙的明智之举。请你以下面三句话分别作为三段段首主题句，以绿化我们的城市为题，写一篇文章。
With industries and business developing quickly, the number of trees in many big cities has dramatically reduced.Making cities greener has many advantages.Making our cities greener requires nationwide efforts.【范文】
Make Our Cities Green
With industries and business developing quickly, the number of trees in many big cities has dramatically reduces.Efforts are being made to prevent people from cutting more trees.But a lot of trees are being destroyed by people who have never thought of the importance of green plants.Making cities greener has many advantages.First, it can make our air cleaner.Some researchers have proved that trees can reduce the amount of carbon dioxide in the atmosphere through absorption.Second, it can make our cities more beautiful.With trees and flowers everywhere, living conditions can be improved.Finally, it can produce timber----an effective way to solve the problems of limited supply of natural resources.Making our cities greener requires nationwide efforts.People in every field should not only know about the importance of keeping the quality of urban environment, but also take common action to plant more trees and flowers so as to improve our living conditions.【评语】
本文按照题目所给的三个主题句分三段展开论述：论点突出，论据充分，层次分明。语言连贯流畅，表达准确。
【要求】
要求：近年来，水污染现状越来越令人担忧。针对此，各种防污治污工程也相继展开，尽管水在人们生活中的地位无可替代，但人们却视而不见，尤其是污染根源——排污的工厂企业。请你对水污染情况作一分析。
【范文】
Water Pollution
Water is recognized as the source of life.However, this source is in trouble and we are faced with the problem of water pollution.Polluted water carries poisonous chemicals to rivers and seas, poisoning animals and infecting our drinking water.Water is mainly polluted by industrial wastes.For example, water coming from the paper----making factories will pollute the clean water near the factories.The quality of water directly influences our health, and water resources are limited on earth.So, effective measures should be taken immediately to secure our life.【评语】
本文开篇开门见山，在起首段直接引出论题，使人一下子抓住文章的重要思想，然后层层展开论述，条理清楚，使人对水污染的危害及其产生原因有了一个大致的了解。
追根溯源，会让你的见解更深刻。
【要求】
题目：机会（opportunity），机会，对每个人的成才都很重要，不同的人对机会有着不同的看法。在人的一生中，你会面临许多机会，也会错过很多机会。那么你是怎样看待机会的呢？请写一篇短文谈谈你对机会的看法。
【范文】
Opportunity
Some people regard opportunity as the most important part of their life.It's the way to success.So when they see their friends succeed, they will complain that they are not lucky enough to have the opportunity.But other people think that opportunity is sheer luck, with their hard work, knowledge and skill, opportunity will be waiting for them everywhere.Although the attitudes towards opportunity are different, opportunity is important indeed, and no one should neglect.It can make a person successful.We should grasp every valuable opportunity and make good use of it, otherwise nothing can be left with us but regret and disappointment.But I think it is not opportunity itself that decides a person's success or failure.It is fair to every person, I think.To grasp the opportunity, we need knowledge, skill and experience.In a word, opportunity is important but not decisive.【评语】
本文层层推进，首先列举两种对立的观点，然后阐述机会的重要性，最后以自己的观点结束全文。文章很有深度。从语言上讲，说理透彻，也很生动，避免了题目一大就空的毛病。此外，文章在逻辑上严密，观点不偏不倚，不失为一佳作。
【要求】
请写一篇文章谈谈早起对我们的好处。
【范文】
Early Rising
Early rising is beneficial to us in more than one way.First, it helps to keep us fit.We all need fresh air.But air is never so fresh as early in the morning.Besides, it improves our health to take morning exercises.Second, early rising helps us in our studies.In the morning we learn more quickly and find it easier to memorize what we learn.Get into the office.Never be late.Third, early rising enables us to plan our work for the day.we cannot work well without a proper plan.Just as the plan for the year should be made in the spring, so the plan for the day should be made in the morning.Fourth, early rising gives us enough time to get ready for our work, such as to wash our handsome faces and eat our breakfast properly.Late risers may find it very difficult to cultivate the habit of early rising.They ought to make a special effort to do so.As the English proverb says, “Early to bed and early to rise makes a man healthy, wealthy and wise.”
【评语】
该文层次清楚，分别用“first, second, third , fourth”引出早起的四个好处，表达清楚。末段的谚语用得较恰当，对全文主题作了很好的概括。
【要求】
要求：人的生活难免会遇到挫折和痛苦。当生活对你收敛起笑容时，你该以什么样的态度回报生活呢？请以Escape for a While为题，写一篇80字左右的文章，包括以下要点：
当你在生活中遇到困难时，暂时的回避往往会有所裨益。
如果你不能身体力行地从烦恼中暂时解脱出来，精神上的“想像回避法”也不失为一种很好的方法。
暂时地回避困难并不等于逃避现实，其目的是为了最终解决困难。
【范文】
Escape for a While
When things go wrong, it is often helpful to get away from the problem for a while.At school, you can go out for a walk or go to watch a movie.If you can't physically get away from your problem, try an imaginary escape.Even a few minutes in your imaginary retreat can refresh you.In that way, you can come back and deal with your problem when you are in better mood.迂回是一种策略。写作也是一样，正面无法表达的，试试侧面描述，或者反面对照？
【评语】
本文层次清楚，举例恰当，句型运用灵活自如，“go wrong”、“get away from”、“deal with”等短语恰如其分，起到了画龙点睛的作用。
【要求】
要求：目前社会上有不少假冒伪劣产品（fake commodities），请用100字左右论述为什么会有这种现象，并举例说明假冒伪劣商品对消费者个人、社会等的危害。
【范文】
The Danger of Fake Commodities
Today, fake commodities are quite common.In order to get high profits, some factories and companies produce fake commodities.Another cause of this phenomenon is that laws are not strict enough.Fake Commodities can bring about great loss to both state and private property.A case in point is that if a consumer buys some fake medicine, he will inevitably suffer much pain.The fake medicine may even cost him his life.So every one of us has the duty to fight against fake commodities for our society and for ourselves.【评语】
本文短语的使用恰到好处，便文章既不枯燥乏味又无画蛇添足的累赘感。
【要求】
要求：社会上假货很多，它对人民生活造成不良影响，请就假货的危害及针对假货应采取什么措施，谈一谈你的看法。字数100-150。
【范文】
My View on Fake Commodities
Nowadays, more and more fake commodities appear on the market ,a problem which has attracted a lot of attention.Fake commodities are very harmful to consumers.There are different types, ranging from food and clothes to radios, and TV sets.Even some medicines are fake too, which has caused a lot of trouble.In addition, fake commodities have affected the manufacturers, too.Those who have fallen victim to fake commodities will never buy them again.There are many ways to get rid of fake commodities.First, laws should be passed to punish those who produce fake commodities.Second, people should be educated to tell the original from the fake.They shouldn't buy something just because the advertisements tell them to do so.In a word, the whole society should pay close attention to the problem of fake commodities and fight a battle against them.Only in this way can fake commodities be driven out of our daily life completely in the future.【评语】
语言流畅，观点鲜明，结构严谨。
要求】
要求：产品的质量问题关系到国计民生，是广大商家和消费者瞩目的焦点。然而，在某些地区劣制商品充斥市场，严重影响了生产和生活。请以The Quality of Products为题，写一篇80字左右的文章，包括如下要点：
随着经济的发展，产品的丰富，劣质产品也越来越多，许多劣质商品流入市场。
劣质商品极大地损害了生产者和消费者的利益。
应采取有效措施保证商品质量。
【范文】
The quality of products
With the development of our economy, we can see more and more things produced.But a the same time ,many poor quality goods are pouring into the market.They do a great deal of harm to the producer and the customer as well.We should take effective measures to ensure products of good quality.Everyone should pay attention to the quality of products, for it is closely related to our daily life.多读多背，才能保证你的语言流畅平易。
【评语】
本文语言流畅，观点明确，涉及并阐述了要求中的所有要点，是一篇优秀的的应试作文。
【要求】
请以“独生子女家庭”为题，写一篇100字左右的文章。具体内容如下：
在中国，大多数人开始认为，只有一个孩子的家庭要比有几个孩子的家庭好。
计划生育的优点：控制人口增长；家长有更多的时间关心自己孩子的学习和生活。
因此出现了越来越多的独生子女家庭。但有人说独生子女家庭将来可能会造成社会问题。例如：孩子会觉得孤单，有时会被家长宠坏（be spoiled）。
比较两种不同的观点，我们能看出独生子女家庭有更多的优点。它对个人和国家都有好处。
【范文】
The One-Child Family
In China, most people have begun to think that a family with only one child is better than the one with many children.Family planning tends to control population growth.Besides, parents have much more time to look after their child.So there are more and more one-child families.But some people say that the one-child family may result in some social problems in the future.For instance, the child will feel lonely and sometimes be spoiled by their parents.Compared with the different view, we can see that the one-child family has more advantages.It benefits people as well as our country as a whole.【评语】
本文紧扣内容要点，结构清晰，语句通顺，承接转换比较自然。用词规范，短语的灵活运用更为文章增色不少。不足之处是句式单调，缺少变化，行文也不够简洁，但总体上还是达到了题目的要求。【要求】
按以下线索完成一篇100字左右的短文，以“Is it Good to Have a Small Family? ”为题，谈谈你的看法：
有些人认为孩子多些好（说明可能的原因）。
有些人认为孩子少些好（说明可能的原因）。
你对此问题的看法。
【范文】
Is It Good to Have a Small Family?
Influenced by traditional ideas, some people still think it's better to have a big family.They think the more children they have the better life they will live when they grow old.Most people now, however, only want to have one child.They think they can give the child better food and better education.And they themselves want to have more time to work ,to learn and to play.In my opinion, it's enough for a family to have one child, not only for the sake of the child and the parents, but also for the benefit of the country and the world.As we know, people in the world are becoming more and more.If we don't exercise birth control, some day the earth will be too crowded for people to live on.【评语】
这是一篇自由讨论的议论文，因此第三点应占更多的篇幅。本文可用我们较为熟悉的写法，分为三段，每段先写主题句。第二点和第三点如观点一致，我们说明原因时，应从不同角度来谈，如第二段可从个人经济上着笔，第三段则从国策上着笔。
分析利弊的文章，重在比较，一定要把自己的观点，从论证中体现出来。
【要求】
当今世界面临人口爆炸的危险，而中国的人口问题显得尤为紧迫。在这种情况下，控制人口无疑成为中国的一项基本国策。请你围绕人口问题写一篇文章，以下面三句话分别作为三段段首的主题句：
Mankind is feeling greater pressure from the expanding number of people.Birth control should be a basic policy in our country.There are disadvantages of a family having more children.【范文】
Population and Birth Control
Mankind is feeling greater pressure from the expanding number of people.The earth can never be expanded.Nor are there endless sources of food and clothing.Yet people are being born faster than they die.In the next forty years, the world population may double.How can so many people be fed? What is worse, there is danger that someday mankind will have only standing room.Birth control should be a basic policy in our country.China has the biggest population in the world.With a high birth rate, the production of grains and goods will be unable to meet the need of the people.To raise people's living standard, we must practice birth control.注意平时的积累，学会多角度思维，有助于深入透彻地写好这类文章。
There are disadvantages of a family having more children.First of all, as the parents have only limited income in general, they cannot give their children a good breeding in food , clothing and shelter, let alone education.Second , child rearing will exhaust the parents, leaving them no time and energy for their work.Last, having more children will increase the burden of the society.【评语】
本文分三段论述了人口问题。首先从土地面积、衣、食以及出生率等方面论证了当今世界人口爆炸的严重性。接着，文章从我国人口数量大、人均耕地面积小、谷物增长速度相对缓慢的国情入手，阐明控制人口是我国的一项基本国策。最后，文章举出事例说明一个家庭多子女的不利之处。全文条理清楚，行文简练流畅。人口问题是目前比较热门的话题之一，本文中一些有关的表达方法，值得同学们学习掌握。
【要求】
要求：请您根据下面的提纲写一篇英语短文，内容涵盖下列要点：
世界人口增长迅速。
有许多问题是由于人口过多造成的。
解决人口问题的一些办法。
【范文】
The problem of Human population
The world's population keeps growing at rapid speed.It's reported that by the next century, the world's population will reach 7,000 million.There are many problems related to population explosion, such as food shortage, housing problem and so on.If we can't solve the problem one day, our survival will be affected.Birth control, as we know, is for sure a way out.Besides, rational population distribution may also work.数字从何而来？这是广种薄收的成果。临渊羡鱼不如退而结网。
【评语】
文章开端并非老生常谈地说人口问题如何严峻，而是采用了一个令人触目惊心的数字，给读者留下了深刻的印象。在这一基础上，作者再进行论述就水到渠成了。
【要求】
要求：随着经济的发展，中国的城市化速度越来越快，大量人口拥入城市，在促进城市发展的同时，也带来不少问题，请你对此谈一下看法。
【范文】
The Rush to Cities
With the development of economy , more and more people rush to cities.Some people rush to cities in order to look for jobs and earn more money while others want to learn new knowledge and improve the quality of their personal life.Opportunities for bright young people are greater in the cities.But there exist some problems.For example, owing to the increasing population, the housing and traffic problem are becoming more and more serious.And the rush of the country people to cities also leads to the rise in crimes.To solve these problems, the government should take effective measures to control the population and make them live orderly.Also some opportunities should be created for the country people to receive education and improve their quality of life.【评语】
本文成功之处在于，行文恰当，合理地运用了一些成语、习惯用语和固定搭配等表达方式，使文意的表达准确有力，形象生动。
【要求】
随着越来越多的外来人口涌入城市，城市的住房总是变得越来越紧迫。许多人提出了不同的解决办法。你对此有什么建议吗？请你写一篇短文谈一谈你对解决城市住房问题的建议。
【范文】
With the development of modern industry, more and more people are flowing into big cities.Accordingly, the housing problem in big cities is becoming more and more serious.People have offered many solutions to this problem.I think building satellite cities in the suburbs is more practical.The fresh air and beautiful scenery in the suburbs will be appealing to the city citizens, who suffer from air pollution, noises, etc.In the overcrowded city, with more people leaving the city, more space will be available for those remaining.The housing problem in big cities will thus be solved.In the meantime, I'm against the idea of utilizing the underground space to solve the problem.We can imagine how uncomfortable it will be to live under the ground , having to probe in the dark.The air there will be very stuffy, and the cost of building underground houses will be tremendous.In brief, building satellite cities can not only improve the living condition in big cities , but also provide a much better living environment.But the housing problem is very complicated.Perhaps people can hardly rely on only one way to solve the problem completely.【评语】
该文首段以一句话概括了目前的问题。而后作者在第二段提出了建造卫星城的解决办法，并阐述这样做的好处。第三段作者提出了反对向地下发展住房这一解决办法，并解释了原因。末段，作者指出虽然建造卫星城有诸多好处，但住房问题非常复杂，不能依赖单一方法来解决。全文思路清晰，结构分明，段落之间过渡自然。用词准确清楚。
【要求】
近年来，随着国家交通工具的日益增多，大大小小的交通事故频繁发生，给人民的生命财产带来了重大损失。交通事故的严重性在什么地方？如何采取有效的方法加以解决？未来的前景到底如何？请发表你的看法。
【范文】
Road Accidents
In recent years, the number of road accidents has been on the rise, especially in big cities.Whenever they happen , the people involved are either injured or killed, which causes great losses both to the country and to their families.Therefore, it is necessary that we do something to reduce traffic accidents and make our life safe.There are several ways to cut down the accident rate.In the first place, the government should take measures to improve the road conditions.Secondly local authorities should educate people in every possible way to obey traffic regulations.Finally, people should be careful when crossing streets.I believe, if we do our best , we'll make our roads safe.For safety , it is very important for everyone to obey the traffic laws.【评语】
本文的论述条分缕析，层次鲜明，思路清晰，结构严整，使人一目了然；且在复杂多变的语法时态方面，做到了主谓一致，时态合理，单复数搭配恰当，杜绝了平时易犯的语法错误。
【要求】
要求：随着社会经济的发展，上海作为中国的大都市，其交通状况不太令人满意，如不及时有效的解决，则会成为制约其发展的“瓶颈”。请你根据你的了解，谈一下关于上海交通阻塞的情况。
【范文】
Traffic Jams in Shanghai
For the past ten years traffic jams in Shanghai have become more and more serious.There are many reasons for it but in general they come down to three main causes.First, with the rapid development of economy in Shanghai, too many traffic tools are brought into use.Next, the traffic system in Shanghai was established mainly in the 1940's.The roads are so narrow that they can't bear such heavy traffic.The final reason is that the population of Shanghai has been increasing too fast.So, it is clear that the traffic system in Shanghai must be reorganized as soon as possible.【评语】
本段第一句为主题引入句，提出上海交通阻塞的严重性。第二句为主题句，指出阻塞有三个主要原因。然后明确阐述原因所在。最后，作者没有作为一个客观者总结其原因，而是对主题加以评述，表达自己的观点，以引起读者思考。
少以旁观者的身份表达自己的观点，要多用自己的声音说话。
【要求】
现代人出行有多种交通工具可以选择，公共汽车和自行车就是两个最普遍的工具。有人认为坐公共汽车上班最方便，而有人则认为骑自行车更好。你的意见如何？请写一篇短文表明你的意见和理由。
【范文】
Going to Work on Bicycle Rather than by Bus
In my opinion, bicycles, as a means of transportation, have many advantages over buses.One reason is the traffic jam.Crowded people and numerous vehicles often hold up the traffic.You can hardly afford the delay.Another reason is the difficulty in getting on a bus during rush hours.There are so many people waiting at the bus stop.You will be quite lucky if you can push your way into the bus.What happens in the bus is the third reason.Pressed by the crowded passengers, you feel very uncomfortable.A passenger standing next to you may shove his elbow in you ribs or step on your toes.It is certainly a relief when you finally get off the bus.By comparison, riding on bicycle can free you from all these troubles.It is seldom stopped by the traffic jam, thus making you active at your workplace in time.Also, it limbers up your muscles and animates your mind.【评语】
本文一开始就开门见山地指明骑自行车上班更有利。接着文章分别阐明了几个原因：第一，交通阻塞，乘车容易误事；第二，乘车困难；第三，上车后拥挤不堪；第四，骑自行车上班的好处。写这类文章最忌拐弯抹角，顾左右而言他。本文的一大优点就是单刀直入，论据清楚，语言平易懂。
用细节来讲道理，理直气壮，说服力更强。
【要求】
汽车自发明以来，已成为人们生活中不可缺少的一部分。请你以下面三句话分别作为三段段首的主题句，写一篇关于汽车的文章。
The automobile is constantly improved.The speed of the automobile can be of great advantage in time of emergency.On the other hand, the automobile can cause damage because of the violation of driving regulations.【范文】
The Automobile
The automobile is constantly improved.Man has given his talents to full play in designing and perfecting all kinds of automobiles.Old-fashioned types are replaced by new ones, which are faster, more energy-saving.more enduring and more comfortable.The engine, the wheels, the body, the tires and the inner furnishing have all undergone much improvement.The speed of the automobile can be of great advantage in time of emergency.When a hospital receives an urgent call, its ambulance dashes to the sick or the wounded person.It carries him to the hospital before it is too late to save his life.Being informed of a crime, the police drive to the spot to subdue the criminal.When a building is on fire, the fire engine runs at a high speed to put out the fire.Life doesn't give itself to one who tires to keep all its advantage at once.On the other hand, the automobile can cause damage because of the violation of traffic regulations.It is not a rare happening that two cars collide on the motor way and the drivers get killed.It is often reported that a truck overrides a child or throws down a bicyclist.The most dreadful is the accident that a bus falls down a steep hill with all passengers falling victims to the tragedy.【评语】 本文根据所给的主题句展开段落。第一段写汽车在许多方面都得到了改进。第二段举例陈述了汽车在紧急时刻的作用。第三段举例说明了由于违章驾驶汽车所造成的危害。全篇文理通顺，论据充足，语言明白易懂。
【要求】
根据提示，用英文写一篇100—120字左右的短文，说明乘飞机或火车旅行的利弊。如：乘飞机省时舒适，乘火车拥挤，不便于休息，但乘火车便宜，可观光等等。标题及文章的第一句已给出，不计入总字数之内。
Train Travel or Air Travel? Air travel has two advantages（益处）over train travel„
【范文】
Train Travel or Air Travel?
Air travel has two advantages（益处）over train travel.First, traveling by plane can save a lot of time.For example, traveling by plane can save a lot of time.For example, you can fly from Beijing to Zhuhai in two hours, but if you go by train, you have to spend more than two days.Secondly, air travel is more comfortable.The plane flies so smoothly that you can rest well during the trip, while the train is sometimes crowded.Passengers have to sit for a long time ,which makes people tired.But train travel also has its own advantages.For example, traveling by train can save over nine hundred yuan than by plane from Beijing to Zhuhai.And you can enjoy the views outside the windows of the train.So different people like different ways of traveling.【评语】
本文的结构顺序用“First”、“Secondly”等标志性词语显示出来，因而使层次显得极为清晰。
注意控制字数，尤其本文有特殊要求。
【要求】
要求：中国是世界上的“自行车王国”，自行车是我们日常生活中最普遍的交通工具，与我们生活息息相关，请你写一篇短文，介绍一下中国的自行车状况。
【范文】
Bicycles in Our Everyday life
Bicycles are the most common transportation means for Chinese people.China is known as the kingdom of bicycles.In big cities, many people ride bicycles to work.In countryside, many peasants use bicycles to send agricultural products to the market.Know what shoes to wear and keep them in proper shape.One important reason why bicycles are popu lar in China is that they are cheap, for bicycles do not need any supply of gas or oil, and consequently they do not cause any pollution.The low price makes it become the favorite trans portation tool of ordinary people , and play an important part in our everyday life.【评语】
本文是一篇介绍性的说明文。文章一开始提出了自行车在我国所占的地位，然后分析它在不同地区发挥不同的作用。在介绍自行车流行的原因时，它重点介绍了价格低这个关键因素，使得全文重点突出，关系紧凑。
【要求】
按照下面要求写一篇不超过120字的作文，题目为“Bicycle or Car”。
自行车和小汽车作为交通工具各有的特点。
中国人和外国人（如美国人）在选择上的不同之处。
陈述你个人的选择及理由。
【范文】
Bicycle or Car
Both bicycles and cars are important means of transportation.Bicycles go slowly while cars go quickly.Bicycles need only human power, but cars must be run by either gas or electricity.Bicycles can be put almost anywhere, whereas cars need garages or parking lots.Perhaps the most obvious difference is that buying a bicycle will cost you only a small amount, while owning a car will certainly consume a large sum of money.Which is better, a bicycle or a car ? Well , it all depends on your practical needs and personal income.For example, most Americans would rather have a car.But this is not the case with most Chinese.They profer a bicycle for they simply don't know what to do with a car.I, of course, prefer a bicycle.It doesn't cost me much to buy one, yet it is very convenient.What is more, it does not pollute the air.A bicycle serves me well.【评语】
这是一篇议论文。作者首先运用对比的写法简述了自行车和小汽车各自的特点。如何看待这些特点，作者随即对此进行论述并提出了自己的看法，论证合理流畅。
It is never a disgrace to say,“ I can not afford it.”
【要求】
根据题目，按下面所给提纲写一篇短文。
多看电视对学习、工作的副作用。
多读书的好处。
谈一下你个人的看法。
【范文】
Watch less Television----Read More Books
There is no doubt that television is a miracle of technology created by man and it gives us many useful and wonderful things.But if a student is continuously exposed to the world of TV, he will be unable to concentrate on his lessons.And he may eventually fail in his examinations.On the other hand, one can get knowledge through reading books.From books , one can learn what he doesn't know.Therefore, one can benefit a lot from reading books.Personally, I think some of the TV programs are interesting and instructive.As a student, I should devote most of my time to reading more useful books.【评语】
这是一篇提纲式作文。对这种题型，必须先揣摩提纲，明确命题要求，然后根据提纲层层展开论述，连段成篇，做到意义连贯、中心思想清楚。
【要求】
学校中寄宿班的同学最近提议开设一个电视室，让大家在课余时间有机会看一看电视。为此，校领导们进行了认真的讨论，有的认为，为学生们配备电视只会分散大家精力，影响学习；而有的则认为，学生们可以通过电视加强与外部世界的联系，丰富知识，同时也在紧张的学习之余获得一定的放松。请你写一篇短文，谈一谈你认为开设一个电视室是否有必要，为什么？
【范文】
Is a TV Lounge Necessary to Students?
As a student, I completely agree with the proposition that students should have a television lounge.A television lounge not only is necessary to those who don't know how to spend their spare time after class, but also can help solve the problem of the noise in study halls caused by the students who have no homework.Indeed, many of the students want to have a place to relax after a day of hard work.Watching TV is a good way to relax.Students can share entertainment and havesome fun while watching interesting programs.In this way the TV lounge can help keep students out of trouble during part of their free time.A TV lounge would definitely be an attractive place for students.There can be no doubt that opening a television lounge would be beneficial to both those who want to have a quiet place to study and those who want to relax after a day of hard work.【评语】
该文开门见山，先表明了作者对上述建议持肯定意见，随后作者阐述了支持的原因。虽然原因分析得有些简单，但全文叙述连贯，表达清楚，合乎逻辑，能够自圆其说，很好地支持了作者的观点。
Leave your classroom sometimes.It will clear your head.【要求】
针对学校许多学生都沉湎于电子游戏之现象，学生英语周刊发出了“No More Video Games”的倡议。作为该刊的编委之一，你将执笔这份介议。提纲如下：
青少年在游戏厅花费了太多的金钱和精力。游戏厅应该被取缔。青少年应该在课余做一些更有意义的事。
电子游戏厅对青少年的身心健康均无益处。
所以，„„
【范文】
No More Video Games
Teenagers are spending too much time and money on video arcades these days.Video games should be done away with.They are nothing but a waste of time , money and energy.Teenagers should be doing valuable things like reading, studying, and going to the concerts and the museums.Video games are bad for both the physical and mental health of the young.In video arcades, the lights are often dim and the games are noisy, which damages people's eyes and ears.In addition, a lot of money is spent by teenagers on these games.They think nothing of spending twenty or thirty yuan in an afternoon just to have the satisfaction of beating an electronic machine.What's more, playing video games does not allow people to use any of their creativity.There is also no opportunity for physical exercise, which young people are sadly lacking these days.Therefore, video arcades should be banned from cities and towns.【评语】
该文结构清楚，分析合理，语言流畅。
【要求】
夏天到了，有的同学换上了尼龙面料（nylon）的夏装，而有的同学则穿起了丝和棉等天然面料制成的衣服。英语老师在课堂上让大家围绕这两类面料的利弊进行讨论，然后写一篇短文对二者进行比较，指明你喜欢哪一种，并说出你的理由。
【范文】
A Comparison Between Two Kinds of Clothes
Clothes made of nylon have big advantages over those made of natural materials such as cotton and silk.First of all, they are more durable.That is to say, they don't wear out so quickly.Second, they are easier to wash and dry.So the wearer can spare time while washing and drying them.Besides these two advantages, clothes made of nylon are lighter, and they keep their shape longer.In spite of this ,clothes made of nylon can not match those made of natural materials in several respects.They are not quite as beautiful as silk, and as cheap as cotton.They make the wearer feel hot and sticky, therefore less comfortable than clothes made of natural materials.As each kind has its advantages, it is hard to say which I prefer.There are clothes made by mixing cotton or silk with nylon.They can make up the deficiencies of the former by acquiring the strong points of the latter.I prefer this kind of clothes.【评语】
本文采用比较和对照的方式，说明了两类用不同材料制成的衣物的长处和短处。文章先谈了以尼龙制成的衣物的长处——耐穿，易洗，易干，轻便，不易变形等；接着又谈论了用棉和丝等天然材料制成的衣物的长处——美观，柔软，舒适等；最后写明了作者的选择及作出这种选择的原因。该文结构清晰，论据充分，观点明确。文章套路结构具有代表性，值得同学们学习。
【要求】
题目：Fast Food。目前中国有两种快餐：中式快餐和西式快餐。这两种快餐相互竞争。中国的西式快餐，兴起晚但势力强。麦当劳（MacDonald），肯德基（KFC）和比萨饼（Pizza Hut）等。中式快餐更适合中国人口味，但往往管理不善。对此现状，请写一短文进行说明。
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Fast Food
There are at present two kinds of fast food in China: Chinese fast food and western fast food.There are many kinds of western fast food , such as MacDonald, KFC and Pizza Hut.Western fast food industry has a longer history and more advanced management than Chinese fast food, It is especially popular among young people.But at the same time , it also produces some negative effects on Chinese culture and tradition.Chinese fast food suits Chinese people's taste better and finds support among all age groups.But much of the Chinese fast food industry is not well managed and needs to be improved.【评语】
注意本文题目要求，即根据所述情况写一说明文，所以首先不要过多地加入个人感情色彩。本篇行文简练，采用总分式写作顺序，显得结构严谨。同时，在分别介绍时，抓住了其主要特点，显得贴切真实。
Act as if customers were God.【要求】
学校《时代》周刊要求一些从小处表现时代变化的英语文章。请你准备从饮食方面阐述，内容如下：
饮食习惯随着时代发生变化。
在20世纪，人们的饮食习惯发生了哪些具体变化。
这些变化对社会有哪些影响。
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The Eating Patterns
Eating patterns change over time.Ingredients cannot be seen before in a country might begin to appear in local markets , shipped from abroad.Migration causes cultures to change, and eating patterns invariably reflect new influences.In the 20th century, few people have the time to go home for lunch, and many city dwellers find themselves in need of grabbing a bite to eat in a place close to their offices.As a result, the popularity of fast food and takeaway food has risen.In many urban areas, people who traditionally ate their main meal at midday now enjoy it in the evening, after work.Changing eating patterns have an effect on other aspects of society.Meals have traditionally been times when members of a family catch up with each other.Fast food and quick meals sometimes threaten such family get-together.【评语】
开篇点题是否准确，是一篇文章的关键。一篇一百上下的短文更要尽量做到开宗明义，其次才是层次的清晰。这篇短文在第一段里简述了“the eating patterns change”的原因。第二段里讲了“change”的实际内容。第三段则论及它的影响。观点表达清楚。
【要求】 请以“Haste Makes Waste”为题，写一篇短文。
言之有理。
表达清晰。
字数150-200字。
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Haste Makes Waste
There is an old saying,“Haste makes waste.”It was the experience of our forefathers, but it is correct in many cases even today.Usually, if you act quickly, you can reach your goals sooner.But this isn't always the case.If you emphasize only speed and ignore the quality of your work, you will have the opposite result.The hastier you are, the slower you achieve completeness and success.In short, haste makes waste.Assume that you are preparing for your final examination.There are a lot of exercises to do and many rotes to remember.The fact that you don't have enough time makes you very worried.So you read and write continuously, without rest, without sleep, without relaxation.The result is that your brain is less and less efficient and your work is slower and slower.The situation goes from bad to worse.All your efforts lead to nothing.On the contrary, if you prepare with a deliberate plan and carry out the plan step by step.Your work will be effective.Whatever you do, please remember the saying----“Haste makes waste”.If you understand and apply it in your study or work, you'll certainly benefit a lot from it.【评语】
文章结构完整，开篇新颖，论证条理清楚，结论合情合理，句型有变化，用词有特色。
Always plan your day in the morning.【要求】
随着人们生活水平的不断提高，越来越多的家庭养起的宠物。宠物为人们的生活增添了许多情趣，使人们更加亲近自然，但同时，养宠物也带来了不少问题。请你写一篇短文，谈谈饲养宠物的利与弊，并表明你的观点。
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Are Pets Good for People?
People's opinions about whether pets are good for people vary from person to person.Some people say that the great virtue of pets is that they can keep us company, and we all need companions to keep us happy.Often a cat or a dog can comfort us at times when human works can't help.A pet in a family keeps people in touch with the more natural animal world.Others think that keeping pets is just a waste of time and resources.And some pets can cause serious diseases.Besides, some people nowadays are so crazy about pets that they even neglect caring for others' health and public hygiene.Personally, I agree with the latter argument.It is true that pets can keep us happy, but I think , we should think of others' happiness and health.In short, pets are not good for the benefit of all people.【评语】
该文内容切题，结构清晰，语言简洁，逻辑性强。
【要求】
随着社会的发展，学校教育的重点从过去的仅仅传授书本知识转移到了现在的全面素质培养。而评判一个学生是否优秀的标准也因此而发生了变化。请你按照下面的提示分三段写一篇短文，对比一下今昔好学生标准的不同，并对所发生的变化发表你的看法。In the past, a “good student”referred to …
Now the criteria（标准）of a good student are changing.Generally speaking , the criteria of a good student are changing for the …(better/worse).【范文】
The Good students
In the past, a “good student”referred to one who was only good at studies.For example, in the school, what the school master cared about was how well the student did in his school subjects.It did not matter whether a student had good health or not as long as he got the top marks.At home , for another example, before leaving for school, the parents would again and again tell their children to study hard and try to get good grades.As a result, many students showed little interest in anything else.Books are good enough in their own way, but they are a mighty bloodless substitute for life.Now the criteria of a good student are changing.As society is developing ,people have now come to realize that the traditional standard of a good student is too limited.Today, in addition to being good at studies, a student is also encouraged to cultivate interests in many other things, such as sports, painting, and music.In short, by the new criteria, a good student should not only achieve good marks in academic subjects, but also have varied interests and abilities.If a man reads very hard, he will have little time for thought.Generally speaking, the criteria of a good student are changing for the better.For one thing ,the growth of one's personality depends on a variety of factors, in addition to that of academic learning.For another, the development of modern civilization requires that education should lay emphasis not only on school subjects but on the ability to solve problems as well.Therefore, this change is beneficial both to the student and to society as a whole.【评语】
该文首段先概括了过去好学生的标准即是学习好。而后分别从在学校和在家中两方面加以描述，最后末句得出结论——许多学生除了读书以外对别的事情毫无兴趣。该段层次清楚，表达准确到位。第二段集中阐述了变化后的好学生标准——除去学习好之外，还应有广泛的兴趣和较高的综合素质。该段与首段内容衔接较好，体现出了“变化”二字。最后一段作者得出结论——新的标准是一种进步，并分析了原因以支持这一结论。该段的论述也很有层次，并且分析合情合理，能够自圆其说。全文结构清楚，内容切题，观点鲜明。
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随着我国不断地深化改革，扩大开放，越来越多的外商来华投资。那么外商投资对我们的经济建设有什么益处呢？我们又如何更好的吸引外资呢？请你以外商投资为题，围绕以上两个问题写一篇短文。
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Foreign Investment
Thanks to the open policy in China, more and more foreign businessmen have come to invest, building new factories, mines an other business enterprises, or enlarging and improving old ones.Foreign investment is important in that it supplements the socialist economy of our country.It has the advantage of importing foreign capital, technology, talents, advanced equipment and methods of management.Ours is a country of vast territory, abounding in natural resources and labor force.Foreign investment can help to explore the resources and labor force.Foreign investment can help to explore the resources and make use of the labor force, thus giving our strong points to play.In a word, foreign investment may improve our economy.Of course, foreign investment is of mutual benefit.The foreign businessmen can also reap profits, otherwise they would not come to invest.To attract more foreign investment, we must maintain the country's political stability to bring about a good investment environment.Meanwhile we should carry out some good policies, which makes the foreign businessmen believe that to invest in China does pay.【评语】
文章着重说明了外国投资对我国经济建设的意义：它是对我国经济的补充，能利用外国的人才和先进技术、设备和管理方法，借此帮助发挥我国自身的优势。文末谈到了如何更好地吸引外资。全文内容完整，层次清楚，语言简洁。“thanks to”,“in that”,“thus”,“in a word”,“otherwise”和“meanwhile”等是写作中常用的词汇，同学们应有所把握。
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在二战结束后半个多世纪的今天，战争并没有远离我们。无论是巴尔干、海湾，还是非洲的大湖地区，克什米尔„„都一度成为硝烟弥漫的战场，人民饱受战争与地区冲突的摧残。请你以战争为题写一篇文章，表明你对战争的看法和立场。
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War
The word“war”is not unfamiliar to us.We all can form a horrible picture of war.Cities are leveled to the ground;villages are burnt down into ashes;streets are heaped with corpses in which babies struggle in the clutches of their dead mothers.It is true that war can bring about disasters in the world.Although we have been objecting to war, we never fear it.War is divided into two kinds: just war and unjust war.We are opposed to unjust war, but in favor of just war.By waging just war, the progressive force destroys the old regime and wins liberation.By waging just war, a country defends its sovereignty against aggression.We Chinese are peace-loving people, and we will never invade other countries.But, if anyone ventures to impose war on us, we will surely wage a just war to smash him.【评语】
本文为议论文，中心论点是中国人民爱好和平，但决不惧怕战争。文章首先描写了战争的恐怖，接着笔锋一转，指出我们反对战争，但并不惧怕战争，进而指出战争有正义和非正义之分，我们反对后者，支持前者。最后一部分再次强调主题，阐明中国人民决不侵略别人，但如果有谁胆敢把战争强加给我们，我们就用正义战争将他摧毁。全文观点鲜明，条理清晰，字里行间充满了正义感。
We wept when we were born.Not when we die!【要求】
题目：随着社会发展，妇女的地位提高并进一步得到解放。请以“Women in the Modern World”为题，写一篇100个单词以上的英语短文，文章每段开头第一句话给出如下：
Women are playing an increasingly important role in society today.With the changes in their social role, women's position is the family has been improved as well.In spite of these changes, the liberation of women has not been completely realized.【范文】
Women in the Modern World
Women are playing an increasingly important role in society today.Having repeatedly demonstrated ability in roles traditionally held by men, they are showing just how much they can contribute.No longer can it be said that women's place is only in the home raising children and keeping house.Throughout society, capable women are proving that they are valuable to their communities.With the changes in their social role, women's position is the family has improved as well.As a provider for the family, the wife no longer is obedient to her husband but, instead, exerts an influence on the children and family affairs equal to that of her husband.Moreover, the husband must now assume some of the responsibilities of maintaining a household such as cooking ,cleaning ,and other such jobs around the house.Always have an answer to the question,“What would I do if I lose my job tomorrow?”
In spite of these changes, the liberation of women has not been completely realized.It is still difficult for women to get certain jobs like top management positions.Because some fields is dominated by men, many capable women have perhaps chosen alternative careers rather than go through the difficulty of trying to break into certain professions.【评语】
此文属于比较高水平的文章，结构紧密，语文优美。首先，在第一段中，用中心句提出了妇女在当今社会里承担了越来越重要的角色，而不再是仅仅在家庭范围里养儿育女；第二段里鲜明地提出了随着妇女地位的改变，她在家庭中的位置也有变化。用“instead”,“moreover”,来表达这种层次。紧接着，用“in spite of”,说明了妇女的解放还很不够，社会应该对此抱有更大的毅力和决心。
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我们应该提倡男女平等吗？有人认为不应该提倡，因为许多男人能做的事女人不能去做。男人比女人做出的贡献多，所以应该享有更多的权利。你认为呢？写一篇80字左右的文章论述你的观点。
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Equality between Men and Women
Should men and women be equal? Many said that men and women should not be equal, because there are many things men can do that could notbe done by women.Therefore men are stronger than women, and the former should have more rights than the latter.In my opinion, men and women should be equal.Nowadays many things could also be done by women.So I think that women should come out of the kitchen.That the woman was made of a rib out of the side of Adam;not out of his feet to be trampled upon by him, but out of his side to be equal with him, under his arm to be protected, and near his heart to be loved.【评语】
本文形式活泼，整体上为设问形式，各句之间衔接自然，观点明确，是一篇较为优秀的应试作文。
【要求】
Women in the Modern World。请根据以下提示，写一篇短文谈谈你的看法。
Women is playing an increasing important part in society today.With the changes in their social role, women's position in the family has been improved as well.My opinion is…
【范文】
Women in the Modern World
Women are playing an increasingly important part in society today.In many countries, more and more women are acting as workers, farmers, scientists and even leaders.Women can work perfectly well as men do.With the changes in their social role, women's position in the family has been improved as well.Husbands are not the masters of wives in many places.Husband and wife are equal now.They cope with problems of daily life together and share happiness with each other.My opinion is that the liberation of women has not been completely realized.In some places, few women are allowed to attend important international meetings, for women are allowed to attend important international meetings for women are still regarded as incapable creatures.This is really the problem we should solve.【评语】
本文表达清楚，文字通顺，连贯性较好。基本上阐明了妇女解放的表现，有总述有例证，文章显得流畅而且恰如其分。此类给提示的作文一般要求以所给例句为段首句，然后进行写作，而且不要游离于段首句之意。
When the people told Joan of Arc(圣女贞德)she should be at home minding women's work, she answered there ere plenty to spin and wash.【要求】
现在社会上有些人认为某些数字会带来好运气，也有些人认为数字和运气毫不相干。请写一篇议论文，说明你的看法。字数在80-100字之间。
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Do“Lucky Numbers”Really Bring Good Luck?
Nowadays, some people think that “Lucky numbers” can bring them good luck.As a result, they pay quite a lot for car license plates or telephone numbers with “eight”,because this number in Chinese is pronounced“ba” which is similar to the pronunciation of the Chinese character “fa”,meaning making a fortune.However, other people believe that numbers have nothing to do with luck.They can give many examples to show that some of the people who have a car license plate or a telephone number with the so-called lucky number have not had good fortune at all.In my opinion, numbers can not determine whether we will have good luck or we will make a lot of money.Only working hard and being honest can bring us good luck.【评语】
本文短语运用精确，举例恰到好处，对题目要求理解得深入透彻，既涉及到了社会上两种人的不同态度，又鲜明地表达了自己的观点，是一篇非常切题的文章。
Life doesn't give itself to one who tries to keep all its advantages at once.【要求】
任何事物的发展都有两面性——好的和坏的。现代工业的兴起，一方面改善了人们的生活条件，另一方面却危害了人们的生活环境。请你对此发表一下你的看法。
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Modern Industry
Modern industry has changed our way of life.In the past, we traveled form one place to another either on foot or on a horse's back, but now we go by bus, train or plane.When I play with my cat, who knows whether I do not make her more sport than she makes me? Modern industry also has seriously polluted our surroundings.Cars add much waste to the air that is already polluted by power and chemical plants.These problems, however, can be solved through further industrial development.For example, we can use electricity and solar energy instead of coal.We believe a more advanced industry will certainly be more capable of taking care of its waste.【评语】
本文成功地运用了例证的论述方法。每段第一句无疑是主题句，在其后紧跟一个使子进行解释补充，一方面使文章叙议结合，另一方面增加了论点的说服力，使论证更加有效有力。
要求】
人类社会的发展与科学技术的进步是密不可分的。请你根据下面的提纲写篇短文，谈一谈科技在现代生活中的作用。
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Technology
Human life can not continue without science and technology.For many years, human society has developed with the advance of science and technology has in turn brought the process to mankind.Because of this, the life we are living now is more civilized than that of our forefather's.The development of science and technology has brought about many changes in people's lives.For instance, the invention of television and the space rocket has opened a new era for mankind.Through the use of TV people can hear the sound and learn of the events, which actually are thousands of miles away.Owing to the invention of spaceship and rocket, the dream of men's
landing on the moon, which was impossible several decades ago, has now come true.Especially in technical and scientific fields, so much new information is being addedto our present knowledge that people in technicalfields must study constantly to keep up with new developments.Science and technology also play an important role in our socialist construction.To realize the four-modernization, we need to accelerate the development of science and technology.It is hard to imagine that the modernization of industry, agriculture and national defense of our country can be realized without the application of modern science and technology.We may say, our socialist construction is just like a skyscraper, while science and technology are its base.Without the base, the skyscraper can't be built.Therefore we should all try our best to contribute, however small, to the development of science and technology so as to provide a more solid base on which we build our country.【评语】
该文紧紧围绕提纲展开论述，思路清晰，行文流畅，逻辑性强。词语搭配恰当，符合英语表达习惯。许多短语和动词的用法值得大家学习。
【要求】
科技的发展给人们的生活带来了天翻地覆的变化。没有科学和技术，人类的生活就无法维持。请写一篇100字左右的英文短文，说明科技在现代生活中的重要作用。
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The Place of Science and Technology in Modern Life
Human beings can not survive without science and technology.For many years, human society has developed with the advance of science and technology while the development of science and technology has in turn brought progress to human beings.It is we known that the development of science and technology has brought about many changes in people's life, And owing to the invention of the spaceship and the rocket, the dream of landing on the moon has come true.TV ＆ the Internet keep people informed of current events and developments in very field.Science and technology also play an important role in our socialist construction and they can be considered its base.Therefore we should try our best to contribute to the development of science and technology so as to make a more solid base for socialist construction.【评语】
本文第一段概括论述科技的重要地位，第二、三两段分别从生活和建设两方面具体论述。段落内部各句之间也呈现总分关系，总体结构一目了然。
【要求】
在市组织的一个反映两个世纪变化的学科报告会上，你应邀用英文做一个简短的主题通讯，内容如下：
如果历史重复它自己，人们相信自动化仍然会改变人们的生活。
在信息社会中，工人们会把他们的注意力放置在信息的服务上。
以一个有趣的但不无道理的反问句结尾。
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Automation Changed The society
The trend in today's offices and factories is paralleling that of the farm 200 years ago.If history repeats itself----and most experts believe it will----automation will continue to reduce the number of workers needed to accomplish unskilled and semiskilled tasks.Automation will also provide workers with valuable information that will help them better do their jobs.In the information society, workers will focus their energies on providing a myriad of information services.Today it is a bit difficult to imagine a society that may become desperately dependent on certain information services.But let's put this concern in its proper perspective.Can you imagine our nineteenth century forefathers becoming as desperately dependent on the speed of air travel or hair dryers as we are? Who among us would give up our hair dryer!【评语】
该文体现了学术报告文章的严肃性，里面有很多漂亮而规范的句子，比如：“put this concern in its proper perspective”,“If history repeats itself”。结尾的幽默手法也很符合英语习惯。
Be the first to use technology-don's fight it.【要求】
广告已经渗透到社会各个角落，潜移默化地影响着人们的生活。学校英语电台的社会生活栏目约你围绕广告这个主题，写一篇广播稿。为此，编辑为你提供了三个主题句，要求你把它们分别作为每一段的开篇句。
Advertisements and commercials appear everywhere in modern society.In order to attract more customers, advertisers will go to extremes.Although advertisements and commercials enable you to make decisions quickly, sometimes they cause a lot of trouble.【范文】
Advertisements and Commercials
Advertisements and commercials appear everywhere in modern society.Nowhere can you fail to see them.Driving on the highway, you see huge advertising signs by the roadside.When a truck passes by, you see advertisements on it.Newspapers and magazines set aside much room for advertisements.The radio waves reach for and wide, broadcasting commercials to people, while televisions make commercials vivid and visible.You might even think you are almost drowned in advertisements and commercials.Learn how to give first-sate presentations so that the message you're trying to deliver is the same one the audience receives.In order to attract more customers, advertisers will go to extremes.They do their utmost to appeal to people's five senses.Apart from the old trick of using images of beautiful girls,they also get movie stars and famous athletes in their commercials.They take pains to bring into full play the effect of light, sound, color, film and performance.The most noticeable thingis the terms of propaganda, extolling a certain commodity as ranking first among equals or being a winner of a prize or golden medal.Give presentation that tell stories, not just provide data.Although advertisements and commercials enable you to make decisions quickly, sometimes they cause a lot of trouble.For example, television programs are frequently interrupted by commercials ruin good movies and exciting television shows, which may make the audience's patience wear off and drive them crazy.Newspapers and magazines set aside valuables paces forads, which could otherwise be used for carrying more useful boastful and showy style of the propaganda which often makes people doubt whether the commodity is really good.【评语】
该文围绕主题句分为三段。首段举出事实证实当代社会广告无处不在，有铺天盖地之势。第二段写商家为吸引顾客不择手段。末段写广告在日常生活中也可给人还来麻烦。三段内容紧紧围绕主题句，论据充分，语言生动，句式富于变化，行文流畅易懂。
【要求】
形形色色的广告，如今成了人们生活中不可或缺的点缀。请以“Advertisement”为题，写一篇大既100个单词左右的英语短文，说明广告的功能，广告的弊病。每段的第一句已给出：
Advertisement appear everywhere in modern society.In order to attract more customers, advertisements will sometimes go to extremes.Although advertisements enable you to make decisions quickly.【范文】
Advertisement
Advertisement appears everywhere in modern society.When you walk along the streets, you can see large boards with pretty girl smiling at you.You read newspapers, and see half of the pages covered with ads.You turn on TV, and see commercial advertisement again.Whether you like it or not, advertisements fill into your life.In order to attrract more customers, advertisements will sometimes go to extremes.Advertisers adopt every possible simulation in producing their announcements.For instance, to advertise a certain food, advertisers will employ an actor to sit at a table and devour their seemingly delicious food product while they film him.Later this ad will be seen on TV.Although advertisements enable you to make decisions quickly.Sometimes they can cause lots of trouble.There are always many of them and they make you forget what you are sitting there for.My advice is that only believe your eyes.【评语】
该文从广告的广泛用途开始说起，先在第一段里说明了广告在现代社会里的无处不在。在第二段里，写广告商为了效果，打出各种奇招。最后一段，又提醒大家，广告只能用为参考。该文结构紧密而全面。“although”,“in order to”,有效地连接了上下文。
【要求】
校刊决定举办一次关于“学习与课外活动”的征文，要求如下：
有人认为在大学里应该多参加一些社团活动，这比功课重要。
有人认为在学校里主要的任务是学习，不愿参加课外活动。
以上2种看法你赞成哪一种，说明你的原因。
【范文】
Finding your Talent
I prefer the type of student who spends more time on his studies because I recognize that a person cannot be good at everything and that he must specialize.An old English saying----Jack of all trades but master of none.I now realize that I was not an unfortunate child in preferring reading to football.I should, in fact, have been given more time in the library.I have no sense when I take part in the activities such as clubs and sports.I find my favorite in studying.So I am willing to stay in library.I think everyone has his own talent in certain things.So I also support the students who like to play football of other things more than study.Talent is a sense “God
given”,I think everyone should find it and follow it.【评语】
角度新颖。从“每个人都有自己的天分”入手，既表明了自己的立场，又论及了其它。论证合理明析，用词准确，句式完整。
These roses under the window make no reference to former roses or to better ones;they are what they are.【要求】
We Learn More Outside the Classroom。根据你的个人角度，谈谈你对课堂内、课堂外的知识与实践的看法。
【范文】
We Learn more Outside the Classroom
I believe we learn more outside the classroom than we do inside.When we are talking with friends, listening to radio or watching TV, or reading a book which we love but is not required by our teachers, we are learning something that may be very important for our future life.In class, we can only learn how to learn.Just as the old saying go, we can not learn how to plant vegetables or how to make clothes just inside a classroom with its rows of desks and chairs and a blackboard.We have to practice what we learn outside of the classroom.We should not confine ourselves to the classroom.We should go out of the classroom, see the world and talk to others as much as we can.【评语】
本文没有罗列事例进行长篇累述，从日常生活小情节入手，以事实说明，在今天这个社会里，学知识渠道的多样性，让人可以信服。作文并非文字堆砌，而在于说明道理，力求客观真实。
Life has taught me to think, but thinking has not taught me to live.【要求】
假期将至，学生会组织了一系列社会实践活动，但报名者并不踊跃。许多同学认为社会实践没有用处，宁愿利用暑期时间参加一些辅导班或提前预习下学期的功课。针对这一想法，学生会的英语刊物《学生周报》决定印发一期简讯，纠正大家的错误认识。文章由你来执笔。大家经过讨论，认为应从下面三个方面入手：
学生往往对社会实践缺乏认识。
社会实践是学校教育的一个重要。
组成部分，对课堂教学具有有益的补充作用。
参加社会实践的好处。
【范文】
Social Practice in Education
Most of the college students think that social practice is not important, they only consider their study as the
most important thing.So they do well in class, but pay no attention to social practice.Some students don't participate in any social practice at all.Therefore, they have little knowledge about society.In fact, social practice should become organic component of school education.The knowledge we obtain in class is from the books and it is limited.So it is essential for the students to participate in social practice in order to learn things that they can't get in class.In this sense, social practice is an important part of school education because it is a valuable supplement to classroom teaching.Participation in social practice does a lot of good to us.We can apply the knowledge we obtain from our textbooks to the solution of practical problems.By doing so, we can get more experience.Furthermore, participation in social practice can help the students have more knowledge about our society and our country.They will take correct attitudes towards their studies.And the teachers needn't always urge the students to work hard.【评语】
本文紧紧扣住了题目所给的要点，每一段的论点和论据都紧密相关，结构也较紧凑。文章的重点应放在社会实践的益处上，因此作者在此用了较多的笔墨，详略得当。文章语文流畅，表达准确。
【要求】
新学年开始之际，学校英语俱乐部需要招收新成员。作为俱乐部的宣传委员，你要负责以英语写一张招新告示，从以下三个方面谈一谈学习外语的重要性。
学习外语在当前具有很大的重要性。
在中国，人们学习外语的热情空前高涨。
要掌握一门外语需要艰苦的努力。
【范文】 Foreign Language Learning
Learning foreign language is of great significance today.The mastery of foreign languages enables us to communicate with people of other countries, achieve mutual understanding and further our trading contact, economic cooperation, and cultural and academic exchange with other countries.By means of foreign languages, we read foreign books, documents and data in original, draw new ideas and fresh thoughts, and introduce advanced science and technology into our country.So foreign languages are playing an important role in our efforts to enlarge China's influence and make greater contribution to mankind.To learn a foreign language can be fun.There is great popular interest in foreign languages learning in our country.More and more people start to learn foreign languages.Every where we can see people reading aloud English and listening to a tape-recorder.And there are English corners an clubs where language learners seize the chance to practise speaking.To satisfy people's need, many foreign textbooks and references have been introduced into our country.Equally remarkable are foreign language programs on TV that attract a large audience.The mastery of foreign language needs painstaking efforts.One can never have a good command of it overnight.On the contrary, he has to spend enough time an take great pains before he can make real progress.It is not unusual that in the face of difficulties, a person gets so frustrated as to give in.But where there is a will, there is a way.So long as you persevere in your learning and practise hard, you will surely bring your study to fruition.No pains, no gains.【评语】
本文从题目所给的三个方面进行论述。首段用了“communicate, achieve, further„”等一系列动词列举了学习外语的重大意义。第二段则举出若干例证证实了中国出现的外语热。末段用了“有志者事竞成”这一格言，指出只要坚持不懈，必然会学有所成。全文层次分明，语气客观，用词严谨。
第二篇：英语作文点评
新东方英语手机报——大千世界触“手”可及，精彩英语尽在“掌”握！
钱琦来自哈工大附中，2011年她以118分的高分成为哈市中考语文第一名，她的语文作文得了50分的满分。作为本次名师公益大讲堂的嘉宾，钱琦告诉在场的同学们，写作文，不追求华丽的辞藻，追求深刻性。
重在表达内心感受
钱琦说：“写作文重在表达内心的感受，让人从文字的背后看到你的心灵，看到你心里想什么，文章不仅要感染别人，还要让人理解文章要传达到意思，让人感到深刻。”
钱琦对即将上初四的学生说：“你们还有一年时间，可以从现在开始培养对文字的感觉，从阅读开始，观察生活，写作不追求华丽的辞藻，追求深刻性。”
不能华丽辞藻堆砌
“我相信‘读书破万卷，下笔如有神’，因此喜欢阅读，尤其喜欢阅读那些有思想有哲理的书，比如《人生哲学》和《苏菲的世界》。如果觉得没看懂，可以多看几遍。”钱琦说，她在初四的上学期喜欢用华丽辞藻来堆积文章。“我写过一篇作文叫《生活的诗意》，语文老师仅给了38分，评语一共4个字：‘诗意何在’。这对我的打击很大，我主动找到了老师。老师说，你写的作文特别空洞，不知道在表达什么。我一下子就明白了，那些华丽的辞藻、排比句，无法表达自己的真实感受。”
第三篇：英语四级作文点评及
Nothing Succeeds without a Strong Will.四级写作考题出炉了。看到考题，我们眼前又是一亮：这不是新东方四级写作教材必背范文第13篇The Way to Success 的翻版吗！
这已经不是第一次了。
如果说以前这种情况颇为“偶然”，近年这种“命中考题”的情况似乎不再鲜见、渐渐变成“必然”了。2003年四、六级写作共用的题目Honesty Is the Best Policy就是我们教材必背范文第3篇Honesty；08年6月四级考题“大学生休闲娱乐的方式”和我们必背范文第12篇Ways of Relaxing 非常相近；08年12月考题Disposable Plastic Bags 是我们考前预测的重点；09年12月考题“创建绿色校园”和我们必背范文第9篇Make Our Cities Greener 非常接近，只要把city 改成campus 就可以了。
当然，猜题押题不是我们的宗旨。我们更重视的是如何培养学生的写作能力传授写作技巧。
一般来说，文章的主体段落展开方式不外乎因果分析和举例说明。今年的考题与以往很多“现象类”或“争议类”考题不同，要求评述一句格言，这和03年Honesty 非常相似。对这种文章，因果分析比较牵强。那么我们主要就依靠举例说明了。在我们的教材范文中就举了两个例子，一为孙中山依靠坚强的意志创建中华民国，二为苏秦刺股挑灯夜读。
其实考生只要掌握了方法，随便举一两个自己生活中的例子。只要文字表达顺畅，就是一篇好文章。
碰到熟悉的考题固然欣喜；碰到陌生的考题学会自如应对才是制胜的法则。
附教材范文：
Everyone tries to achieve success in his career.However, someone firmly attains his goal while another fails.Why? The one continues his cause to the end through long periods of hard struggling, but the other is easily disappointed or stops halfway.Strong will, perseverance and diligence are the three essentials of success.A man of strong will and perseverance always has an inflexible spirit.He sticks to his cause no matter how tough it might be.Dr.Sun Yat-sen was such a man.Many of his attempts failed, but he held to his purpose with firmness and finally succeeded in overthrowing the Qing Dynasty.Diligence means steadiness in one’s work and study.Su Qin stabbed himself in order to keep himself attentive to studies.Marx often worked 15 hours a day.Life is short and we have many things to do.Without diligence no one can achieve anything.I believe that where there is a will there is a way, and that success belongs to those who can suffer long years of patient toil and constant efforts.
第四篇：英语作文点评
I Have a Dream 信阳市第三职业高级中学三（3）班
孙鹏丽
Almost every student has a colorful dream , so do I.I want to be a wealth①
women.Perhaps you will be surprised at my dream.I want to explain something about it.My hometown it so poor that many young people have to leave home to make a living in big cities , leaving their children alone at home.That is not good to them.For lack of their parents’ take care② , some of them become shy and awkward③,and some
even become criminals.Therefore , if I can become a successful woman , I will set up my own company and many factories in my hometown.Then our villagers can get a job and steady income.At that time , they can live a happy life with their families , and avoid leaving home and the divide④
from their children.If that’s the case , my hometown will become beautiful and prosperous.As far as I’m concerned , only having a dream is not enough , in order to realize my dream , I will be sure to seize every minute to study hard to make a good base to enter the society , for my dream , for my hometown and for my motherland.点评：
1﹑妙语锦囊: be surprised at...对„„感到意外； so...that...如此„„以致„„ ；make a living谟生；leave...alone把某人独自留下；set up建立；live a happy life过幸福的生活；in order to...为了„„；make a good base打好基础。
2、亮点展示：文章的篇幅不长，却给人以跌宕起伏之感。这是因为小作者对文章的结构进行了精心的设计，并铺以关键性的过渡词。如：perhaps you...或许你会„„；therefore因此；if that’s the case如果那样的话；as far as I’m concerned就我而言。
3、不足之处：①wealth是名词，应换成形容词wealthy。②take care是短语动词，应将take去掉，保留名词care。③此处应是误用：awkward是指“笨拙，不熟练”，作者想表达的应该是“害羞胆小”所以用cowardly。④divide作名词时，不是“分离”，而是“分水岭”的意思，故应换成separation。
4、总 结：“文章情真”，小作者以细腻的笔调写出了自己对梦想的追求。对文章的结构，小作者也进行了精心的安排，给人以跌宕起伏之感。更为可贵的是：小作者能从身边所观察到的现象引出了“留守儿童”这一敏感话题，叫人深思。作为一篇课堂命题作文，小作者能在有限的时间里写出这样的文章，实属难得。
指导教师：刘凤
第五篇：英语说明文及点评
英语说明文及范文点评
【要求】
要求：假设你是一名图书馆的工作人员，请写一篇文章说明文，介绍图书的借阅规则。字数在80100字之间。
【范文】
Something You Must Know
This library is and English Language teaching and learning librany.If you want to borrow some books, you must fill out a library application form and put it in the box on the librarian's desk.Because of the large number of applications we receive each week, you must wait oneweek.Please bring yor student or work card to pick up your library card.Library application forms which are not picked up within 2 months will be discarded and you will have to reapply.【评语】
本文的借书规则表述得比较清晰，注意到了说明文语言的精练准确、通俗易懂的特点。对于高中生而言，这是一篇优秀的应试作文。
There is no indefinite liberty.【要求】
要求：小程原来英语成绩很差，自从他参加了学校的英语角，成绩有了很大的进步，尤其是听力和口语提高更是迅速。请你代小程写一篇短文，介绍一下英语角的情况。
【范文】
English Corner
English Corner is very useful to learn to communicate in English.Learning a foreign language requires four skills: reading, writing, listening and speaking.The English Corner is a wonderful place to practise both listening and speaking.English Corner is also a good place to meet new friends.When I went to English Corner last Sunday, I came across a variety of people, who all had one thing in common;that is they wanted to communicate in English.So the atmosphere was relaxing.English Corner enlarges our would.As we listen to foreigners talking about their countries and customs, we learn many things that we can't learn from books.【评语】
本文第一段是总领段，点明了English Corner 在英语学习中的地位和作用。紧接着简单介绍了English Corner如何在我们英语学习中发挥作用。全篇文章结构紧凑，语句连贯，无华丽词汇之堆砌，但文章中心却表达的清晰而明确。
Without you ,it would have never been possible.Thank you.【要求】
请用英语写一篇关于你校的校园平面图（diagram
教师办公室在教学楼三楼。
学校四周是树。
字数：100
【范文】
This is a diagram of our schoolyard.It is four hundred meters long and three hundred meters wide.The school gate faces the south.Our teaching building stands in the middle of our school yard.It is a building of five stories.The teachers' offices are on the third floor.There is a garden in front of the teaching building.On the left of the garden is our library.Our lab is on the right of the garden.There is a large playground behind the teaching building.Many trees are planted
around the school-yard.【评语】
本文按照由外到内、由前往后的顺序进行介绍说明，使文章层次分明，脉胳清晰，说明简短有力。
Brevity is the soul of wit.文以简洁为贵
English Dictionaries
【要求】
English Dictionariesspelling）；发音（pronunciation）和意项（meanings）。请你写一短文向别人介绍一本普通的英文字典。
【范文】
English Dictionaries
Most English dictionaries will tell you a number of things about the
language.There are three important things, spelling, pronunciation and meanings.The first is the spelling of the words.If you are not sure about the
spelling of a word, you can try to find the correct spelling in a
dictionary.The words are always given in alphabetical order.The second thing is pronunciation, Most dictionaries give the pronunciation of a word in a special kind of alphabet, which is called phonetic.The third thing a dictionary will tell you is the meanings of words,Many
words have more than one meaning, and a good dictionary will explain all of the word's meanings.These are some of the important facts that you can learn from dictionaries.【评语】
本文抓住了英文字典的三个方面的主要内容进行阐述，采用总—分—总的结构方式组织材料，显得结构严谨。文章紧扣字典的主要特点进行说明，显得重点突出，对字典有一清晰的认识。
“barbecue”是日常生活中常见的一种食品，想知道是什么就去查字典吧。
Hans Christian Anderson
【要求】
请根据下列内容和所给单词及词组，用英语写一篇介绍世界著名童话作家安徒生
（Hans Christian Anderson100——120。内容提示：安徒生生于1805年。十一岁丧
父。由于家境贫困，童年时代没能上学，开始跟人学习缝纫。十四岁时到一剧院工作。后来在一些热心的艺术家的帮助下，上了学。1828年接受高等教育，毕业后献身文学（literature）。他写剧本、小说、诗歌等等。他努力创作，获得很大成功。一生共创作160多个故事。1875年去世。
Words and Expressions to Be Used:
world-famousdevote oneself tofairy tales
by the timeadvanced educationlead to
【范文】
Hans Christian Anderson
Hans Christian Anderson was a world-famous writer of fairy tales.He was born in 1805.When he was eleven his father died.His family was then so poor that he could not go to school during his childhood.He learned sewing from a tailor.At the age of fourteen, he went to work in a theatre.Later helped by some warm-hearted artists, he went to school.In 1828, he began to get advanced education.After graduation, he devoted himself to literature.He wrote plays, novels, poems and so on.He worked hard at literature.This led to his great
success.He wrote more than 160 stories in all.He was famous for his funny fairy tales, which became popular all over the world.He died in 1875.【评语】
本文用词准确，语言流畅，内容符合要求
My favorite program
【要求】
现在随着电视等传播媒介的普及和发展，电视节目的花样越来越多，知识性、娱乐性的侧重也各有不同。请你写一篇文章，介绍一下你最喜欢的节目。
【范文】
My favorite program
Nowadays radios and TVs play a more and more important role in our daily life.There are many programs shown every day.Some of them are very good.My favorite program is called“The Animal World”, which is broadcast by CCTV every Sunday night.The program provides us with natural scenes, the life of all kinds of wild animals and the wonderful explanation about it.We also acquire some knowledge about animals, even some plants.So in my opinion, it is an
interesting as well as an instructive program.Be sides, the pictures are very beautiful.It's really a great joy to watch it.If you don't believe it, Just watch it yourself.【评语】
这篇文章给我们提供了一种写说明文的一般结构：点明主题——一般介绍——文章主体——概括和归纳结尾。通过这种结构，可使描述脉络清晰，表述自然流畅，不致于发生思路混乱的局面。
你喜欢哪个电视台的什么节目？你也试写一下？
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