第一篇:审稿意见例文(化学)
该论文采用β-环糊精修饰玻碳电极对1-萘酚进行测定,研究目的明确,方法具有一定的创新性,与其他方法相比,本文所用方法操作简便,其测试条件显示本方法有实际应用的潜在价值。文中对实验条件进行了细致的优化,并且对模拟水样进行了测定,内容充实,但其优化实验条件的数据没有写在文中,建议将此部分数据补充,同时将数据图处理的更加清晰标准(CV图中没有标注电位相对于哪种参比电极)。如果能对实际水样进行测定可以更加明确的展示方法的实际应用价值,建议补充实际水样测定实验。
整篇文中思路清晰,所列数据能够很好的支持相应问题。建议修改后同意接收。
第二篇:一些英文审稿意见的
最近在审一篇英文稿,第一次做这个工作,还有点不知如何表达。幸亏遇上我的处女审稿,我想不会枪毙它的,给他一个major revision后接收吧。呵呵 网上找来一些零碎的资料参考参考。+++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++
1、目标和结果不清晰。
It is noted that your manuscript needs careful editing by someone with expertise in technical English editing paying particular attention to English grammar, spelling, and sentence structure so that the goals and results of the study are clear to the reader.2、未解释研究方法或解释不充分。
In general, there is a lack of explanation of replicates and statistical methods used in the study.Furthermore, an explanation of why the authors did these various experiments should be provided.3、对于研究设计的rationale: Also, there are few explanations of the rationale for the study design.4、夸张地陈述结论/夸大成果/不严谨:
The conclusions are overstated.For example, the study did not show if the side effects from initial copper burst can be avoid with the polymer formulation.5、对hypothesis的清晰界定: A hypothesis needs to be presented。
6、对某个概念或工具使用的rationale/定义概念: What was the rationale for the film/SBF volume ratio?
7、对研究问题的定义:
Try to set the problem discussed in this paper in more clear, write one section to define the problem
8、如何凸现原创性以及如何充分地写literature review: The topic is novel but the application proposed is not so novel.9、对claim,如A>B的证明,verification: There is no experimental comparison of the algorithm with previously known work, so it is impossible to judge whether the algorithm is an improvement on previous work.10、严谨度问题:
MNQ is easier than the primitive PNQS, how to prove that.11、格式(重视程度):
In addition, the list of references is not in our style.It is close but not completely correct.I have attached a pdf file with “Instructions for Authors” which shows examples.Before submitting a revision be sure that your material is properly prepared and formatted.If you are unsure, please consult the formatting nstructions to authors that are given under the “Instructions and Forms” button in he upper right-hand corner of the screen.12、语言问题(出现最多的问题): 有关语言的审稿人意见:
It is noted that your manuscript needs careful editing by someone with expertise in technical English editing paying particular attention to English grammar, spelling, and sentence structure so that the goals and results of the study are clear to the reader.The authors must have their work reviewed by a proper translation/reviewing service before submission;only then can a proper review be performed.Most sentences contain grammatical and/or spelling mistakes or are not complete sentences.As presented, the writing is not acceptable for the journal.There are problems with sentence structure, verb tense, and clause construction.The English of your manuscript must be improved before resubmission.We strongly suggest that you obtain assistance from a colleague who is well-versed in English or whose native language is English.Please have someone competent in the English language and the subject matter of your paper go over the paper and correct it ?
the quality of English needs improving.作为审稿人,本不应该把编辑部的这些信息公开(冒风险啊),但我觉得有些意见值得广大投稿人注意,就贴出来吧,当然,有关审稿人的名字,Email,文章题名信息等就都删除了,以免造成不必要的麻烦!
希望朋友们多评价,其他有经验的审稿人能常来指点大家!
国人一篇文章投Mater.类知名国际杂志,被塞尔维亚一审稿人打25分!个人认为文章还是有一些创新的,所以作为审稿人我就给了66分,(这个分正常应该足以发表),提了一些修改意见,望作者修改后发表!
登录到编辑部网页一看,一个文章竟然有六个审稿人,详细看了下打的分数,60分大修,60分小修,66分(我),25分拒,(好家伙,竟然打25分,有魄力),拒但没有打分(另一国人审),最后一个没有回来!
两个拒的是需要我们反思和学习的!(括号斜体内容为我注解)
Reviewer 4
Reviewer Recommendation Term: Reject Overall Reviewer Manuscript Rating: 25 Comments to Editor: Reviewers are required to enter their name, affiliation and e-mail address below.Please note this is for administrative purposes and will not be seen by the author.Title(Prof./Dr./Mr./Mrs.): Prof.Name: XXX Affiliation: XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXx Manuscript entitled “Synthesis XXX。。。。。。” it has been synthesized with a number of different methods and in a variety of forms.This manuscript does not bring any new knowledge or data on materials property and therefore only contribution may be in novel preparation method, still this point is not elaborated properly(see Remark 1).Presentation and writing is rather poor;there are several statements not supported with data(for some see Remarks 2)and even some flaws(see Remark 3).For these reasons I suggest to reject paper in the present form.1.The paper describes a new method for preparation of XXXX, but:literature data, RESULTS AND DISCUSSIONliterature data, RESULTS AND DISCUSSIONit has to be added in the manuscript what kind of XXXXXX by other methods compared to this novel one(INTRODUCTIONdiscussion),state that XXXXXThis usually happens with increasing sintering time, but are there any data to present, density, particle size?(很多人用XRD,结果图放上去就什么都不管了,这是不应该的)
3.When discussing luminescence measurements authors write “XXXXXIf there is second harmonic in excitation beam it will stay there no matter what type of material one investigates!!
(研究了什么???)4.英语写作要提高
(这条很多人的软肋,大家努力啊)
Reviewer 5
Reviewer Recommendation Term: Reject Overall Reviewer Manuscript Rating: N/A Comments to Editor: Title(Prof./Dr./Mr./Mrs.)rof.Name:(国人)
Affiliation: XXXXXXXXxxxxXXXXXXXXXXXXXxxxx Dear editor:
Thank you for inviting me to evaluate the article titled ”XXXX“.In this paper, the authors investigated the influences of sintering condition on the crystal structure and XXXXXX,However, it is difficult for us to understand the manuscript because of poor English being used.The text is not well arranged and the logic is not clear.Except English writing, there are many mistakes in the manuscript and the experimental results don't show good and new results.So I recommend to you that this manuscript can not be accepted.The following are the questions and some mistakes in this manuscript:(看看总体评价,不达标,很多人被这样郁闷了,当然审稿人也有他的道理)
1.TheXXXXXXX.However, this kind material had been investigated since 1997 as mentioned in the author's manuscript, and similar works had been published in similar journals.What are the novel findings in the present work? The synthesis method and luminescence properties reported in this manuscript didn't supply enough evidence to support the prime novelty statement.(这位作者好猛,竟然翻出自己1997年的中文文章翻译了一边就敢投国际知名杂志,而且没有新的创新!
朋友们也看到了,一稿多发,中文,英文双版发表在网络时代太难了,运气不好审稿人也是国人,敢情曾经看过你的文章,所以必死无疑,这位作者老兄就命运差了,刚好被审稿人看见,所以毫无疑问被拒,(呵呵,我97年刚上初一没见到这个文章,哈哈))2.In page 5, the author mentioned that: “XXXX Based on our knowledge, ”sintering“ describes the process when the powders become ceramics.So, I think the word ”synthesis“ should be better instead of ”sintering“ here.Second, the XRD patterns didn't show obvious difference between three ”sintering" temperatures of 700, 800 and 900 ?C.(作者老兄做工作太不仔细了,虫子们可别犯啊)
3.Also in the page X, the author mentioned that: XXX。。。。。However, the author didn't supply the morphologies of particles at different synthesizing temperatures.What are the experimental results or the references which support the author's conclusion that the XXXX properties would be influenced by the particle size?(作者仍在瞎说,这个问题我也指出了,不光我还是看着国人的份上让修改,添加很多东西,说实话,文章看的很累很累)
4.XXXXXXXXXXXXXXX However, to my knowledge, after the milling, the particles size will be decreased exactly, but how and what to destroy the host structure?(虫子们自己注意)
5.XXX on the vertical axis of the XRD patterns was meaningless, because author add several patterns in one figure.It is obvious that these spectra are not measured by ordinary methods.(都是老问题,不说了)
第三篇:英文论文审稿意见汇总
英文论文审稿意见汇总
以下12点无轻重主次之分。每一点内容由总结性标题和代表性审稿人意见构成。
1、目标和结果不清晰。
It is noted that your manuscript needs careful editing by someone with expertise in technical English editing paying particular attention to English grammar, spelling, and sentence structure so that the goals and results of the study are clear to the reader.2、未解释研究方法或解释不充分。
◆ In general, there is a lack of explanation of replicates and statistical me thods used in the study.◆ Furthermore, an explanation of why the authors did these various experiments should be provided.3、对于研究设计的rationale: Also, there are few explanations of the rationale for the study design.4、夸张地陈述结论/夸大成果/不严谨:
The conclusions are overstated.For example, the study did not show
if the side effects from initial copper burst can be avoid with the polymer formulation.5、对hypothesis的清晰界定:
A hypothesis needs to be presented。
6、对某个概念或工具使用的rationale/定义概念:
What was the rationale for the film/SBF volume ratio?
7、对研究问题的定义:
Try to set the problem discussed in this paper in more clear,write one section to define the problem
8、如何凸现原创性以及如何充分地写literature review:
The topic is novel but the application proposed is not so novel.9、对claim,如A>B的证明,verification: There is no experimental comparison of the algorithm with previously known work, so it is impossible to judge whether the algorithm is an improvement on previous work.10、严谨度问题:
MNQ is easier than the primitive PNQS, how to prove that.11、格式(重视程度):
◆ In addition, the list of references is not in our style.It is close but not completely correct.I have attached a pdf file with “Instructions for Authors” which shows examples.◆ Before submitting a revision be sure that your material is properly prepared and formatted.If you are unsure, please consult the formatting nstructions to authors that are given under the “Instructions and Forms” button in he upper right-hand corner of the screen.12、语言问题(出现最多的问题): 有关语言的审稿人意见:
◆ It is noted that your manuscript needs careful editing by someone with expertise in technical English editing paying particular attention to English grammar, spelling, and sentence structure so that the goals and results of the study are clear to the reader.◆ The authors must have their work reviewed by a proper translation/reviewing service before submission;only then can a proper review be performed.Most sentences contain grammatical and/or spelling mistakes or are not complete sentences.◆ As presented, the writing is not acceptable for the journal.There are pro blems with sentence structure, verb tense, and clause construction.◆ The English of your manuscript must be improved before resubmission.We str ongly suggest that you obtain assistance from a colleague who is well-versed i n English or whose native language is English.◆ Please have someone competent in the English language and the subject matte r of your paper go over the paper and correct it.? ◆ the quality of English needs improving.来自编辑的鼓励:
Encouragement from reviewers: ◆ I would be very glad to re-review the paper in greater depth once it has be en edited because the subject is interesting.◆ There is continued interest in your manuscript titled “……” which you subm itted to the Journal of Biomedical Materials Research: Part BFirst line of Introduction: aromaticity is one of the most important concepts in organic chemistry, but most of organic compounds are not aromatic.-Introduction, line 4: notice that only energetic ways of evaluating aromaticity are mentioned, however geometry-based(HOMA), magnetic-based(NICS)and electronic-based(SCI, PDI)methods are also important, and this point should be pointed out.Enlarge description in point 3.4.1 by going deeper into the data in Figure 8.Review Sent Date: 18-Dec-2006
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The Comments by the Second Reviewer
Editor: Michael A.Duncan Reviewer: 67 Manuscript Number: jp067440i Manuscript Title: Restricted Geometry Optimization, a Different Way to Estimate Stabilization
Energies for Aromatic Molecules of Various Types Corresponding Author: Yu
Recommendation: The paper is probably publishable, but should be reviewed again in revised form before it is accepted.Additional Comments: Comments on the manuscript “Restricted Geometry Optimization, a Different Way to Estimate Stabilization Energies for Aromatic Molecules of Various Types” by Zhong-Heng Yu, Peng Bao Authors propose a restricted geometry optimization technique subject to pi orbital interaction constraints as a new measure of aromaticity.The approach is interesting and has certain merits.My main objection is that the manuscript is difficult to read and understand, mainly because of poor English.A substantial revision in this respect would be beneficiary.各位:
新的恶战开始了。投往JASA的文章没有被拒,但被批得很凶。尽管如此,审稿人和编辑 还是给了我们一个修改和再被审的机会。我们应当珍惜这个机会,不急不火。我们首 先要有个修改的指导思想。大家先看看审稿意见吧。
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Manuscript #07-04147:
Editor's Comments:
This is my personal addition to the automatically generated email displayed above.Your manuscript has now been read by three knowledgeable reviewers, each of whom has provided thoughtful and detailed comments on the paper.The main points of the reviews are self-explanatory and mostly consistent across the reviews.Your presentation needs to be reworked substantially, and the reviews give you many suggestions for doing so.Clearly, the introduction needs to be much more concise and focused on the main questions you propose to answer, and why these questions are important.The rationale for selecting this unusual condition must be clear.Your discussion should focus on how the questions have been answered and what they mean.The results section is heavily dependent on statistical analyses that did not satisfy the reviewers.The figures and tables could be improved and perhaps consolidated.The methods could be shortened.For example, I think readers would take your word that these were nonsense sentences, or perhaps you could simply cite some other work where they were used.In general, it is unusual to present the first results as late as page 17 of a manuscript.Beyond the issues of presentation, some serious questions are raised by the reviewers about the design.The most notable(but not the only problem)is that there are no conditions where young and older listeners can be compared at nearly the same performance level in the baseline condition, and that at least floor effects and potentially ceiling effects are likely to significantly influence the older/younger comparison.The older listeners are tested at only one signal-to-noise ratio, at which performance was extremely poor.This asymmetric design where data for three signal-to-masker ratios are available for the younger listeners but only one for the older listeners is not ideal, but perhaps the comparison could have been salvaged if you had guessed a little better in selecting the signal-to-masker ratio for the older listeners.That didn't work out and you didn't adjust to it.I'm sorry to say that in my opinion this problem is so serious that it precludes publication of t!he older versus younger data in JASA, as I see no way of making a valid comparison with things as they are.Further, after reading the manuscript and the reviews, it seems to me that even the subjective impression comparison is difficult to interpret because of the different sensation levels at which the older and younger groups listened(if the target was fixed at 56 dBA).The Brungart et al.and Rakerd et al.data that you cite where the masker delay was manipulated over the 0 to 64 ms range would seem to have been a nice springboard for your study in older listeners.Would it not have been cleaner to have replicated those conditions with younger subjects in your lab, and then tested older listeners to see whether the patterns of data were different? There, at least, the target stimulus condition itself is not varying and there are archival data out there for comparison.As the reviews point out, your conditions present brand new complications because the ITI changes the spatial impression of the target, may change the energetic masking of the target, and distorts the target temporally all at the same time.Although the temporal distortions did not impair performance substantially in quiet, they may well in noise.Further, the spatial impressions created by the target in quiet are likely to be very different than those when the target is at v!ery low sensation levels in masking.Please investigate the literature on the influence of sensation level and noise on the strength of the precedence effect, particularly the perception of “echoes” at the longer delays.Yuan Chuan Chiang did her dissertation on this and published the results in JASA in 1998, but the first observation that noise can influence the breaking apart of a lead-lag stimulus into two images dates back at least to Thurlow and Parks(1961).To be sure, the sounds that we want to listen to are often accompanied by reflections, and I am not questioning the general validity of your conditions.However, it is important that your experimental design allows you separate out the various contributions to your results.I think there are several options for you to consider:(1)If you think it is very important to publish all the data you have right now, you could withdraw the manuscript and attempt to publish the data in another journal.(2)You could argue that the reviewers and I are wrong about the seriousness of the floor effect with the older listeners and submit a revision that includes the same data while making a convincing case for the validity of the older/younger comparison.Although this option is open to you, I don't think this is a promising alternative.(3)You could collect more data on older listeners under more favorable conditions where performance is better.With the added data this could either be a new manuscript, or, if such data were collected and the paper rewritten in a reasonable amount of time, it could be considered a revision of the current manuscript.The revision would be sent back to the reviewers.Of course, I cannot promise in advance that a manuscript even with these new data would be judged favorably by the reviewers.(4)You could drop the older/younger comparison from the manuscript and submit a much shorter version that includes only the younger data and focuses on the noise masker/speech masker distinction, perhaps analyzing your data to draw inferences about release from energetic versus informational masking from the data.Here too, it will be important to provide a clear rationale for what your specific question is about release from masking, why your conditions were chosen, and what new insights your data offer.I still worry about how spatial effects and the effects of temporal distortions are to be distinguished.(5)You could simply withdraw the manuscript and consider a more straightforward design for asking the questions you want to ask with older listeners.Thank your for submitting your manuscript to JASA.I hope the alternatives described will help guide you on how you should proceed from here.Whatever you decide to do, please consider the reviewers' comments very carefully as they have gone out of their way to provide you with suggestions on improving the presentation.Sincerely yours,Richard L.Freyman
Reviewer Comments: Reviewer #1 Evaluations:
Reviewer #1(Good Scientific Quality):
No.See attached
Reviewer #1(Appropriate Journal):
Yes
Reviewer #1(Satisfactory English/References):
No.Reviewer #1(Tables/Figures Adequate):
No.Reviewer #1(Concise):
No.Reviewer #1(Appropriate Title and Abstract):
No, because the term “interval-target interval” in the title required further explanation.MS#: 07-04147
Huang et al.“Effect of changing the inter-target interval on informational masking and energetic masking of speech in young adults and older adults.” This paper investigates the benefits of release from masking in younger and older listeners, as a function of inter-target interval(ITI)in two masker conditions(speech masking and noise masker).The same target speech was presented from two different locations simultaneously in two different maskers, one from each location(L or R).Results show that release from informational masking is evident in both younger and older listeners when the ITI was reduced from 64 ms to 0 ms.General comments:
1.Introduction needs to be rewritten:
• The general impression is that the introduction section is unnecessarily lengthy.There is too much unnecessary information, while some important terms and information are left unexplained.• The organization is poor and concepts are disjointed, jumping from place to place.For example, the authors spent 1.5 pages on reverberation and the difference between older and younger adults, than spent a full-page to talk about masking, and then came back to reverberation.• In addition, the authors did not clearly present the purpose of the study and the core of the issues under investigation.The authors mentioned that “the present study investigated whether changing the ITI over the whole precedence-operation range...can induce a release of target speech from speech masking or noise masking.” However, they did not explain how and why manipulating ITI can address their questions, questions that were not clearly stated anywhere in the paper.No hypothesis was provided in the paper and no explanation was given regarding how the experimental conditions or contrast of results in different conditions can answer the questions under investigation.2.Report of results and statistical analyses needs to be accurate and precise:
• Authors failed to provide results of statistical analyses in many occasions.• At the beginning of the result section for both the younger and older groups, the authors should clearly present the number of factors included in the analysis and which one was a between-subject factor and which ones were within-subject factors.Main effects and interaction(3-way and 2-way)should also be reported clearly.• Bonferroni correction was mentioned in the post-hoc analyses;however, no pvalue was reported.• The authors should not use the term “marginally significant”.It is either
“significant” or “nonsignificant”.I don't see p=0.084 is “marginally significant.”
• When you say percent release, do you mean percentage point difference between
the 64 ms ITI and other ITI values? For example, in the statement “...the release
amount was 31.9% under the speech-masking condition,...”, do you mean “31.9 percentage points”?
3.Baseline condition is questionable:
• The authors failed to provide clear explanation of the results.For example, the authors finally provided the definition of release from masking(on p.19)as
“...the release of speech from masking at each ITI is defined as the percent difference between the speech-identification at the ITI and the speech identification at the ITI of 64 ms(the longest ITI in this study).”
• It took me a while to understand what this means, and finally came up with the interpretation(if my interpretation is correct)of the data for the authors.It seems that when ITI was at 0 ms, the perceived spatial location is between the two maskers(spatial separation).But when the ITI was 32 and/or 64 ms, listeners heard two images(one from each side)and there was no spatial separation between the target speech and the masker on either side.Therefore, according to the authors, the release from masking is the performance difference between the ITI conditions when listeners heard only one image in a location different from the maskers', and the ITI conditions where two images from the masker locations were heard.However, I have a problem with the baseline condition(64 ms ITI in which two images were perceived).If the listeners could not fuse the image, did they hear a delay(echo)between the two targets? If so, the poor performance in the 64 ms condition can be partially due to the confusion/disruption induced by the echo in noise conditions in addition to the lack of spatial separation between the target and the masker.4.Subject recruitment criteria were unclear:
• The authors recruited both young and older adults in the study and claimed that both groups had “clinically normal hearing.” However, reading the fine details of their hearing thresholds(< 45 dB HL between 125 and 4k Hz), it is hard to accept that the hearing thresholds are within normal limits in the older group.There is at least a mild hearing loss below 4k Hz and mild-to-moderate hearing loss above 4k Hz(see Fig.1)in these subjects.The authors should explain the differences in the results in relation to the threshold differences between the two groups.• The threshold data provided in Fig.1 is average data.It is necessary to provide individual threshold data(at least for the older group)in a table format.5.Language problem:
• I understand that English is not the authors' native language.It is recommended that the authors seek assistance in proof-reading the manuscript before submission.6.Tables and Figures:
• Table 1 and 2 are not necessary since the information is presented in Fig.7
• The authors should provide legends in the figures.• The authors should provide error bars in the graphs in Fig 1.• It is hard to see the short ITI data in Fig.2
• The authors should consider changing the scale on the y-axis in Fig.4 to provide better visualization of the data.• Fig.6 should be deleted.Results could be clearly described in the text.Specific comments(this is by no means a complete list):
p.3 first par: The quote from Knudsen(1929)is not necessary.p.4 first & second par.The authors provided an exhaustive list of references in various place.I recommend they only cite the ones that are most relevant and representative.p.4 last sentence.“A listener subject to informational masking a target speech feels it difficult to segregate audible components of the target speech from those of masking speech.” This sentence is incomprehensible, please rewrite.p.5 first line, first par.“Masking(particularly information masking)of target speech can be reduced if the listener can use certain cues(perceived spatial location, acoustical features, lexical information, etc)to facilitate his/her selective attention to the target
speech.” References are needed for each cue listed in this sentence.p.5 line 5.“Age-related deficits...inhibition of goal-irrelevant information..., therefore may cause more speech-recognition difficulties” This sentence is coming out of the blue without further explanation.p.8-10.Please explain the terms “inter-loudspeaker interval”, “inter-masker interval”, “inter-target interval” before using them.p.11 line 11 “Moreover, if the recognition of target speech under either the speech masking condition or noise masking condition is significantly influenced by the ITI in younger adults, the present study further investigated whether there is an age-related deficit in the releasing effect of changing the ITI.” This sentence is incomprehensible.p.11 line 2 “The 36 young university students all had normal and balanced....” Change “balance” to “symmetrical.”
p.12 line 8 “Direct English translations of the sentences are similar but not identical to the English nonsense sentences that were developed by Helfer(1997)and also used in studies by Freyman et al.(1999, 2001, 2004)and Li et al.(2004).” I thought the sentences were created by the authors.So, are they a direct translation from the English version or created by the authors?
p.13 last par “For the two-source target presentation,....” This came out of the blue.The experimental conditions should be described clearly in a separate section.Schematic representation of the conditions could be included.p.15 line 8 “During a session, the target-speech sounds were presented at a level such that each loudspeaker, playing alone, would produce a sound pressure of 56 dBA.” Is this the rms level of speech? The level at 56 dBA seems a little low to me.It may sound very soft for the older listeners given that they have mild to moderate hearing loss.Can you explain why you chose such a low presentation level?
p.15 last line “There were 36((17+1)x2)testing condition for younger participants, and there were 32((15+1)x2)testing conditions for older participants.” The number of conditions for each group is not apparent to me.Could you explain further in the manuscript?
p.16 line 9 “...participated in additional speech-recognition experiments under the condition without masker presentation.” Where did the target speech come from? Front? Right? Or left? p.17-27.See comments on reporting results and statistical analysis under “General comments” point #2.p.23 line 12-13 “A 2(masker type)by 15(ITI)within-subject ANOVA confirms that the interaction between masker type and ITI was significant...” Since the interaction is significant, the authors should not simply interpret the main effects.p.29 line 9 Explain “self-masking” effect.Would the author expect a “self-masking” effect in noise?
p.30 last par first line “Specifically, when the SNR was-4 dB, changing the ITI(absolute value)from 64 to 0 ms led to only a small improvement in target-speech intelligibility, and the improvement was similar between the speech masking condition and the noise masking condition.” The amount of release from masking in the speech masker condition at-4 dB SNR may be limited by the ceiling effect.p.31 line 5 “In older participants, the reduction of the ITI also improved speech recognition under both the speech masking condition and the noise masking condition...”
It is hard to tell if there is a significant difference among the ITI conditions with the noise masker due to the floor effect.p.31 line 7 from bottom.“The results suggest a faster decay of temporal storage of the fine details of speech sound in older adults than in younger adults.Thus at long it is(16 ms or 32 ms), cues induced by the integration of leading and lagging target signals were weaker and/or not be well used in older participants.” First, the author should take into account the hearing loss in the older group.Second, this conclusion seems somewhat
contradictory to what the authors reported regarding the perceived image(s)of the target signal under various ITI conditions.All except for one younger subject perceived two
separate images at 32 ms ITI, but most of the older subjects still perceived the target as one image.p.32 2nd par.The discussion on the effect of inter-sound delay on ear channel acoustics came out of nowhere.Reviewer #2 Evaluations:
Reviewer #2(Good Scientific Quality):
Generally yessee general remarks.The referencing is occasionally excessive, e.g.the 17 references provided to back up the existence of informational masking on page 4, lines 13-17, or p28 lines 15-16.Some choice examples would generally suffice instead of these long lists of citations(see JASA guidelines).The English is satisfactory, with lots of minor comments(see 'detailed comments' below)
Reviewer #2(Tables/Figures Adequate):
The figures would benefit from being redrawn using appropriate graph-plotting software.In their current form, they are quite pixelated.The figures would benefit from a legend, when there are several symbols used on the same graphs.Figure 2 and Figure 3's x-axes should be suitably non-linear, because the points plotted for ITIs between-10 and 10 ms are illegible.Figure 3 is perhaps largely repeats information that is apparent in Figure 2.Also, the top panel is perhaps misleading, as the difference between the two conditions could be explained to some degree by a ceiling effect.The use of symmetry in Figure 3 should be applied to Figure 2, since we had no reason to expect left-right effects.Tables 1 and 2 should be omitted, since all their information is provided in a Figure.Reviewer #2(Concise):
There seem to be a large number of ANOVAs described in great detail.Perhaps these could be reduced to more essential statistics, or even omitted when the differences are clear from the figures(see 'general remarks' below).Reviewer #2(Appropriate Title and Abstract):
In the title, the term 'inter-target interval' could refer to many things, and it is not immediately obvious from the title that the paper has anything to do with the precedence effect.Reviewer #2(Remarks):
The authors have presented uncorrelated speech or noise maskers from two speakers, and presented the target speech from the same two speakers non-simultaneously, varying the time-interval(the inter-target interval, or ITI)between the two presentations.(1)Young listeners' speech-recognition: Novel differences were mentioned between the design of your experiment and seemingly similar experiments(Rakerd et al.2006;Brungart et al.2005).The discussion section would benefit from a comparison of the results from these experiments.There should be some mention of the general effect of ITI on speech-recognition, and some discussion about its cause and/or implications.(2)Age-related differences in speech-recognition: I was not entirely convinced that the differences could not be adequately explained by a combination of elderly listeners' increased susceptibility to energetic masking, elderly listeners' reduced ability to listen in the dips, and floor/ceiling effects.These simple explanations should receive more emphasis.Once they have been ruled out, more emphasis should be given to the apparent connection between the subjective results and the speech-recognition results(around 32 ms ITI).There should be more discussion about the meaning and importance of this interesting connection, and its implications for elderly listeners, perhaps mentioning auditory scene analysis.It's unfortunate that the elderly listeners were only tested for SNRs at which they had such poor speech recognition.(3)Age-related differences in subjective perception: Elderly listeners had reduced echo-thresholds for speech compared to young listeners.This seems to be a novel result.If this section is to be included, further discussion of relevant literature should be included, and further description of the method used to get these subjective responses.Perhaps this aspect could be published separately as a letter.Age-related differences were described as 'temporal decline'.If this term is to be used, it should perhaps be defined more carefully.Also, does it refer to the age-related differences in dip-listening, age-related differences in subjective perception, the interaction of subjective perception and speech-recognition, or some combination of these? If it is some combination, there should be further argument that the phenomena are related, perhaps incorporating other temporal-decline results from the literature.Overall, there is too much statistics and not enough interpretation of what the results mean.A major re-write is required, focusing on the important results in the Results section, and interpreting them in the Discussion section.-----------------MINOR COMMENTS
Pages 3-4
The second paragraph has somewhat flawed logic(the last sentence does not logically follow from the preceding sentences)and the conclusion isn't particularly relevant to the rest of the paper.It could be omitted.Page 11, lines 14-15: You describe the elderly listeners' audiograms as 'clinically normal'(also in the abstract)yet above, you suggest that some of them have 45 dB HL hearing losses for some pure tones.You might want to specify the definition of normal-hearing that you are using.I would agree with you(especially given their mean audiogram in Figure 1)that they are in the early stages of presbycusis, rather than normal-hearing.Describing them as simply 'normal-hearing' is perhaps misleading.Some indication of the range of the audiograms would be useful.Page 12, line 11.It might be helpful to include an example sentence and its translation, to save the reader referring back to the cited papers.Page 13, lines 7-14.-log(1/f)is the same as log(f);and the sum of log(f)is equal to log(the product of f).Thus you have balanced the product of the word frequencies.This seems an unusual measure: one nonsense word of frequency = 0 would not make the whole list unintelligible.Perhaps there are more meaningful comparisons of the distribution of word frequencies within a list, or perhaps that would be too much detail.It would suffice to say that the words were distributed pseudorandomly.Page 13, lines 20-21.Why was the 0.5-ms ITI not used for elderly listeners?
Page 14.A short summary of the conditions would be useful, for ease of reference.Page 15, lines 1-5: When the sentences were mixed, were their onsets simultaneous or randomised? Also, if there was no processing other than addition(e.g.phase-randomisation)would it not be better to refer to the masker as speech babble throughout, rather than noise?
Page 16, line 13: Perhaps it would be worth mentioning that participants were(say)given two options(broad or compact);or, if the participants were free to describe the stimulus in any terms, some description of the experimenter's process of interpretation should be mentioned.Pages 17-27: There are a large number of interactions mentioned.Not all of them have any influence on the discussion or conclusions.In fact, in many instances, there are no post hoc analyses to find the source of the interaction, nor descriptions of the effects.Not all interactions are interesting.Some may disappear under appropriate transformations;we wouldn't always expect linear effects with percent-correct recognition.However, some of the interactions you describe seem interesting.Comparing the middle-left, middle-right and bottom-left panels of Figure 2, or the two panels of Figure 4, leave me in no doubt that you have genuinely observed more release from speech maskers than noise maskers.More emphasis should be placed on describing these interesting interactions, and less emphasis should be placed on the raw statistics.Also the results section should be generally shortened, omitting statistics when the results are obvious from the figures.Example candidates for omission are:
-p17 last lineit didn't decrease at all for the older participants;also 'faster' is perhaps not the appropriate word in this context.Page 28, paragraph 1: The raised thresholds observed for elderly listeners is not a novel result, and perhaps the previous research showing this should be referenced.Page 28, line 22: 'Wingfield' rather than 'Wingfiled'.Page 29, line 19: 'fuses with' not 'fuse withs' Page 30, line 2: 'and' rather than 'and and' Page 30, line 6: 'maskers' not 'makers'
Page 30, line 5: '...fused;they...' or '...fused, but they...' rather than '...fused, they...'.The following point from 'co-variations' could perhaps be made more clearly.Page 30, line 16: 'sufficiently' rather than 'sufficient' Page 30, line 16: 'ITI-induced' rather than 'ITI-induce'.Page 32, line 16: '...manipulations, as long as they help...' Page 33, line 1: 'loudspeakers' rather than 'loudspeaker'.Page 33, line 3: 'one or more' rather than 'one or some'
Page 33, lines 9-10: 'several papers have failed to find any age-related effects...' rather than 'there are no age-related effects on the precedence effect'.Page 33, line 13: 'ITI-induced' rather than 'ITI0induced'.Page 34, line 1: 'became 8 ms or short' should be 'was 8 ms or shorter'.Page 34, line 5: 'masker' not 'maker'
Page 34, line 15: which condition is the 'non-reverberant condition'? Keep the terminology consistent to the rest of the document.(The same applies to the rest of the summary)
Page 37: Appendix 1 should be omitted, unless the spectral differences are described and interpreted.Page 37, line 8: 'sound-progressed software'? Page 37, line 10: 'spectral' rather than 'spectrum' Page 38: Appendix 2 could be omitted
Reviewer #3 Evaluations:
Reviewer #3(Good Scientific Quality):
The paper is vague and needs reworking to make clear the goals and hypotheses driving the work and the interpretation of the results.Reviewer #3(Appropriate Journal):
Yes.Reviewer #3(Satisfactory English/References):
The English is alright, but there are many typos and grammatical errors.Reviewer #3(Tables/Figures Adequate):
Yes.Reviewer #3(Concise):
No.The introduction is long and unfocused.Reviewer #3(Appropriate Title and Abstract):
The results do not tease apart informational vs.energetic masking contributions.In meaning of “inter-target interval” is not descriptive enough to be meaningful until after reading the methods.Reviewer #3(Remarks):
This paper presents results of an experiment conducted in young and older listeners listening to target speech embedded in competing signals.The experiment uses a complex set-up, including two competing maskers from different(symmetrically positioned)locations and a target that is played from both speakers while varying the timing of the target signals from the two speakers.The authors spend a *lot* of time trying to relate this set up to the precedence effect and difficulties of understanding speech in a room, fusion of a leading and a lagging sound, and temporal processing.The introduction is, indeed, long and hard to follow.It is not clear where the argument is going, or how the reviewed material influenced the design of the current experiments, let alone what the current experiment is trying to test.While all of the issues raised in the introduction undoubtedly contribute to the results obtained in the experiment, none of these ideas is explored fully enough to understand how or why they may be important in the current setup.What is the goal of the experiment? Why use this complex setup? What are the hypotheses for what will happen as a function of inter-target delay? For aging listeners? None of this is clear in the current presentation.Off the top of my head, here is a list of examples of the kinds of things that are very troubling in the manuscript:
There are never any clearly stated hypotheses for what should happen in the different settings, or why.There is no discussion or interpretation of the results that lends insight into what processes are contributing to the observed effects.The influences of energetic masking are not discussed and the results confound release from energetic and informational masking.While the overall long-term spectral average of the speech is shown to change only by a limited amount with inter-target delay, there is no discussion of what happens in the modulation domain(which, arguably, is the most relevant domain for speech understanding).There is no discussion of how envelope cues are affected, or what this could do to INTELLIGIBILITY as well as SEGREGATION of the sources.The single-source control(dashed line in the main figures)is not an adequate control for energetic or informational masking in the two-masker conditions, and thus is essentially useless.The older listeners perform worse overall than any of the younger listeners, and thus, there is no point in the direct comparisons that are made between younger and older listeners.Nothing can really be concluded about why the older listeners do poorly, since they are worse than any of the control groups.The fact that the change in performance with inter-target delay is smaller for the older listners is meaningless, since this may be a floor effect.Similarly, the fact that changes in performance with inter-target delay are smaller in the younger listener group with the best signal-to-noise ratio than for the other groups is likely due to ceiling effects--there is no reason to expect equal changes at all performance levels(psychometric functions are sigmoidal, in general, not linear).This same problem makes the target-only control experiment particularly pointless.Given that all of the results are taken at different points on the psychometric functions and that the psychometric functions are nonlinear, the ANOVA analyses presented seem pointless to this reviewer--they compare apples and oranes.Moreover, the statistical analyses are presented **instead of** any description of what is happening and what it might mean.I would rather have some help understanding what you expected to see and why instead of a lot of statistical analyses that don't lend any insight into what was found.Throughout the manuscript, there is no attempt to determine what is due to energetic and what is due to informational masking.The noise control condition probably *only* gives energetic masking, but the amount of energetic masking it produces is different from that of the the other speech conditions.Thus, there is no way to conclude anything about how IM and EM contribute in the speech conditions as a function of inter-target delay, or what the inter-target delay is really doing.The experiment in which listeners were asked to judge the spatial quality of the different conditions might have been important in helping to interpret what was happening, but was never developed.What is shown is actually quite confusing.The older listeners may have a slightly different pattern of spatial perception as a function of inter-target delay, but this is never fully explored.No hypotheses are given to describe how these differences are likely to impact speech understanding in the speech intelligibility task.IF the results are reliable and repeatable enough to be meaningful(which is suspect, given the small number of subjects), what do you expect to happen for older listeners for whom the sounds are MORE DIFFUSE AT ZERO DELAY than for younger listeners? Wouldn't that suggest that they should have more difficulty in understanding the target compared to young listeners at these short delays? But they are like the younger listeners at the longest delays, hearing two targets.Is that good or bad? If hearing two separate targets(at the locations of the maskers)is expected to make the task harder, why aren't the older listeners BETTER than the younger listeners at the delays of 16 and 32? There is no discussion of these points to help interpret any of this.The paper ends with conclusions that are not linked to any of the results shown.How can one assert that the “listeners perceive two spatially separated images of the target and can selectively focus their attention to only one of the images(usually the leading one)”(p.29)from the data presented? This one sentence contains so many assumptions, it is indefensible.All that was measured is intelligibility.On p.31, the authors write “The results suggest a faster decay of temporal storage of the fine details of speech sound(sic)in older adults than in younger adults.” The only thing that is shown is that the older listeners have more difficulty in general, are near the performance floor, and show less dependence on the inter-target delay.There are too many leaps to go from this to asserting that there are differences in “temporal storage of the fine details.”
There are numerous typos(names misspelled, grammar issues)throughout;however, the manuscript needs to be completely rewritten before it is in an acceptable form for JASA, so I will not comment on that here.In summary, while the results might be of interest if presented in a more accessible way, with clearer justification for the experimental design and explicit hypotheses for what should happen in the different conditions, this could be salvaged into an acceptable paper.In its current form, it is not appropriate for JASA.
第四篇:《名师学案》九年级历史审稿意见
《名师学案》九年级历史·学生用书审稿意见
《名师学案》九年级历史·学生用书作为助学助教型教辅,不仅仅满足于对学生的课本知识掌握的检测,同时注重课堂知识的归纳总结以及单元综合的能力测验。
全书同步练习部分依照教材内容分单元、分课时,每课时训练量作为家庭作业或课堂小测验来说较为合适。每课时依照中考题型分为三个板块。第一板块为“合作互学”,该板块依照中考知识点梳理而成,配有相应单项选择题,既有教材内容的基础知识巩固题,也有根据考点内容延伸的能力题。第二板块为“自觉练学”,该板块为材料分析题,主要考察学生的材料理解能力和表达能力。这两大板块均有大量中考题,可以供学生适应真题的难易度,针对本课的知识要点进行练习。第三板块为“智慧在线”,主要供学生自我梳理本课要点,感受新知。速查速记,可供学生在做题的同时回顾本课重点。巧记歌诀,有助于学生记忆本课知识点。此外,《名师学案》还有单元测评部分,一共有八套题可供演练,每一套题都是针对某些章节而编写,可以使学生得到很好的训练。相比同类型的教辅来说,《名师学案》九年级历史·学生用书的练习题很到位,一课一页,排版简洁明了,题目难度适中,选用真题较多,与湖北省中考接轨,针对每一个中考考点都有相应的训练能很好地巩固和测试学生的知识掌握度。
当然,《名师学案》也有一些不足之处:
第一、在有些题目细节上的处理不够恰当,在一少部分的选择题题干上存在着表述有误、语病及错别字等问题,标点的误用现象也存在;
第二、板块“智慧课堂”在某些排版上存在着问题,建议把这一板块进行简化; 第三、有些题目的配图应该标清楚题号或进行简要描述;
第四、参考答案的排版建议改进。答案过于简洁,选择题只提供了选项答案,没有更进行详细的说明。另外,参考答案若是装订成册,学生核对答案也比较方便;
第五、有些内容的表述或标点用法前后不一致,应进行统一。
以上建议在审稿时望多加注意。
总体来说,对于学生来说,《名师学案》九年级历史·学生用书是一本很好的学习和巩固所学历史知识的教辅,同步练习有利于学生查漏补缺,综合测评卷可供老师对学生进行检测。
王林君
2014年3月30日
第五篇:一篇文章的英文审稿意见
No.:MY-24-20 Title:Technology Management of strategies for organic Food Industry Expansion in China Major:Technical Economics and Management Expert No.1 1.Academic evaluation.This paper which tries to put forward Chinese business model of organic food market, based on referring the business model of organic food industry in America and combined with the analysis of the organic food market in China, then conducted a preliminary qualitative and quantitative analysis of the consumer demand and the target customer group.Overall, although this paper may have some practical significance, but on the whole, there is little contribution for business model and consumer behavior theory.This paper also lacks literature review and only makes some situational innovation.From the reliability of research, the paper lacks of method introduction chapter, and the methods introduction scattered through chapters.At the same time, the paper also lacks of reliability description of case study and online survey.Such as how to choose a representative case and the sample in quantitative analysis.Which method should select in the data collection.How to determine the sampling range.How to measure nonresponse bias.How to analyze the qualitative data.Conclusion: This paper has some practical innovation, but insufficiency in theoretical innovation, besides should strengthen research methods.2.Limitation of the paper and the recommendations of review experts.Firstly, the research scope is too large, but the depth is not enough.My suggestions on this aspect are select one point of the current works and give detailed research.Then put forward more theoretical problems and give depth study, the framework and implementation of the whole paper should base on the exploratory research.Secondly, the paper should give literature review on selected direction, summary and evaluation of current theoretical research both of the progress and shortcomings.Thirdly, increase the methods introduction chapter, covering study design, data collection, and introduction of qualitative data technology, how to control the validity and reliability of research methods.Fourthly, According to the research questions, the paper should have a chapter in depth discussion about research found.Fifthly, in the chapter of conclusion, you should summarize the research from both theoretical significance and practical significance, and puts forward the research shortcoming and future research direction.