高三写作训练5任务型写作（大全）

第一篇：高三写作训练5任务型写作（大全）

2011-2012高三英语写作训练(5)班级 _________ 姓名 ___________ 座号 _________ 任务型写作：阅读下面短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。【阅读材料】

Advertisement: Angels or Evils? Advertising can be a service to customers.This is true when ads give reliable information about the goods advertised.Such information is needed if the customer is to make a wise choice when he buys goods in the shops.Printed ads do this job best.Customers can collect them and compare them.They can be used to check against the actual goods in the shops.Some ads are not very useful to customers.Instead of helping the customer to satisfy his real needs, they set out to make him want things by doing ads cleverly.The people who produce them understand our weaknesses.They set out to make us believe that what they advertise will make us cleverer, prettier, or more handsome, if only we use it.For example, the voice on TV says, “By using SK-II, it makes your skin crystal.” The screen shows a series of pictures in which a famous actress not only has her skin whitened but also has her pronounced wrinkles silkily smoothed.Some ladies with dark skin will be persuaded to choose that cosmetic(化妆品).【写作内容】

1）概括短文的内容要点，该部分的字数约30单词；

2）就“The use of advertisements”这个主题发表你的看法，至少包括以下的内容要点，该部分的词数大约为120： a）广告盛行的现状和原因；

b）谈谈人们对广告的不同看法； c）你对广告的态度是什么？

【写作要求】

1、你可以使用实例或其他论述方法支持你的论点，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不要抄袭阅读材料中的句子。

2、题目自拟。

【评分标准】概括准确、语言规范、内容合适、篇章连贯、卷面工整。__ ___________________________________________________________ 2011-2012高三英语写作训练(5)参考答案

The Use of Advertisements

From the passage we know that advertisements can be useful when they provides the customers with reliable information, while some advertisements are produced only to persuade customer to buy what they don’t need.Nowadays we can see advertisements everywhere, such as on TV, in the newspapers, on the Internet and so on.Nobody can avoid being influenced by them.Why is advertising so popular? Undoubtedly, with the developing competitive ecnomy,there are many similar products from different companies and it is ads that can help the customers have a better choice when they want to buy the products.Some people are in favor of advertisements because they can get the latest and detailed information needed more conveniently through them.Moreover, some people enjoy the stories and ideas in the ads.However, some hate them for the reason that some false advertisements mislead the customers by using part of the truth to suggest something false.Worse still, by using the famous stars for advertising, it makes the prices much higher.In my opinion, the advertisement is a necessity in modern society.Towards it, a correct attitude should be held: let advertisements serve our life, but never easily believe them.

第二篇：高考英语考前专题综合训练任务型写作

高考英语任务型写作

话题预测：（供参考）

通过模读写任务的分析和考察，根据题材必须要贴近学生生活的原则，今年可能要考的写作话题有以下几个方面：（1）环境保护：Development and the Environment;Preserving Natural Resources;Saving Our Earth(2)生活见闻：Habits;How to Make Friends;Smoking is Harmful, Honesty(3)教育学习：Success and Failure;No Pains, No Gains;Study Alone or Study With Groups(4)文化科技：Net Bar；Internet;Mobile Phone, Email, QQ Chatting,(5)社会时事：How to Get Along Well with Others;One-child Family;The Cause of Fire;Volunteers;The Danger of Fake Commodities；Honesty;(6)饮食健康：Health Is More Important;The Way to Stay Healthy;Smoking and Health(7)娱乐休闲：Use of Free Time;The Value of Reading Books;Work and Recreation(8)和谐、沟通、情感、心理健康（障碍）、,感恩：True Beauty;On Perseverance;An Ideal Friend, Thanksgiving, Communicating with other, Healthy Psychology，Parents’ love，In memory of old generation., Cleaning the Tombs.读写任务（1）：阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。[阅读材料] Once upon a time some tiny frogs held a competition.The first to reach the top of a very high tower would be the winner.A big crowd gathered around the tower to see the race and cheer them on.The race began.No one in the crowd really believed that any of the tiny frogs would reach the top of tower.“They will never get to the top!They will never succeed!” someone said.One by one, the tiny frogs began to collapse(退下).The crowd kept shouting, “It is too difficult!No frog will make it!”

More tiny frogs got tired and gave up, but one continued climbing, higher and higher.This one wouldn’t give up.In the end, he was the only one left—the only one to get to the top.The other frogs naturally wanted to know: How did the frog make it？

One frog stepped forward to ask the winner.It turned out:„ that the winner was deaf.He had won because he was able to keep his own mind.He was able to keep trying.He couldn’t hear criticism;neither could he hear praise.[写作内容](1)以约30个词概括寓言故事的大意。

(2)然后以120个词就“坚持就会成功”这个主题发表你的看法, 并包括如下要点：

a)叙述着个寓言给你的启示；b)以自己或朋友、家人的经历说明“坚持就会成功”或者不坚持导致失败； c)你自己的感受或思想。[写作要求](1)可以使用实例或其它论述方法支持你的论点, 也可以参照阅读材料的内容, 但不得直接引用原文中的句子；

(2)标题自定。

[评分标准] 概括准确、语言规范、内容合适、篇章连贯。

参考范文：

The passage tells us about a competition where only a deaf frog got to the top of tower.He won the race because of his deafness, which made him keep his own mind and keep trying.This story tells us that in our life,work or study, usually only those people who don’t listen to criticism or praise from others will succeed in the end.„„.读写任务2 阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。

In addition to teaching here, I also teach at a smaller high school 17 miles down the freeway from where I live.One day a few weeks ago I was driving to that school when my car broke down just after I exited the freeway.I was only about a quarter of a mile away from the school so I grabbed my books, and started walking.“ ”As soon as I got there I called a repairman to meet me at my car after class.One of my colleagues asked me what had happened.'This is my lucky day,' I replied, smiling.“ ”Your car breaks down and today is your lucky day?' She was puzzled.'What do you mean?'“ “I live 17 miles from here.' I replied.“My car could have broken down anywhere along the freeway.It didn't.Instead, it broke down in the perfect place: off the freeway, within walking distance of here.I'm still able to teach my class, and I've been able to arrange for the repairman to meet me after class.If my car was meant to break down today, it couldn't have been arranged in a more convenient fashion.”

I once read somewhere before that every morning when you get up, you have a choice about how you want to approach life that day.And this is what I choose---to be cheerful.[写作内容] 最近你感到学习压力很大, 你的外籍老师对你讲述的自己的亲身经历。你准备在今天的日记中表达自己的感受。1．以约30个词概括老师所讲述的这个故事的内涵； 2．以约120个词表达你内心的感受，并包括如下要点：(1)你听完这个故事的感受；

(2)在你成长过程中你自己或他人用积极的态度去面对问题的某个经历；(3)激励你自己正确面对学习压力。[写作要求] 1．作文中可使用自己的亲身经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容但不得直接引用原文中的句子； 2．信中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。

[评分标准]概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，篇章连贯。Possible version: Saturday, may.22nd, 2008 Dear diary, Today in class the teacher told us a story, in which he was optimistic and maintained a positive attitude when his car broke down on his way to school.I appreciate the teacher’s optimistic attitude to difficulty, which allowed him to stay positive to perform his job well.If he didn’t do so, this one problem would have turned into many other problems.The story reminded me of waiting in line with Li Hua at the amusement park last summer.There were so many people waiting in line for boating and I felt upset at wasting so much time queuing.But Li Hua said with a smile, “We haven’t seen each other for ages.I have so many wonderful things to tell you.Let’s share this precious chance to chat with each other.” It dawned on me that waiting in line was not a problem but an opportunity.Now I’m determined to always be optimistic when I meet problems.Rather than think of study as a pressure, I should see it as an opportunity to learn more about the world.读写任务3 阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。

Some years ago, leaving the farm to work in the city, three brothers were employed by the same company and on the same pay.But three years later, they received different wages.So their father was confused and decided to pay a visit to the boss, who told him that he would let his sons explain for themselves.The three brothers were asked by the supervisor to go to the airport to get a cargo inventory at different times.Jim, who received 500 dollars a months, got the information on the phone instead of going to the airport himself.Frank, the 1000 dollars a month brother with a list of more cargoes.George, the 1500 dollars a month brother came back with detailed information and also did something extra without being told.[写作内容] 1．概括该故事的内容要点，该部分的字数大约30词左右；

2．就“态度决定一切”这个主题发表你的看法，至少包含以下的内容要点，该部分的字数大约120词左右。1）你认为是什么导致三兄弟的薪酬差异;2）你从这个故事得到什么启示;3）你对 “态度决定一切”如何理解? 4)举一对比事例说明不同的学习态度产生不同的结果。[写作要求] 你可以使用实例可其他论述方法支持你的论点，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不要抄袭阅读材料中的句子。参考范文

Three brothers, who worked for the same company , received different wages due to their different attitudes towards their work, which shows right attitude is of great help to one’s life.Their different attitudes towards their work result in their different wages.From the story I can conclude that those who take positive attitude towards work will be rewarded.Different attitudes lead to different results.Take Xiao Hua as an example.They are both my classmates.Not only does he put his heart into study but he is also helpful both to teachers and students.So he has become a top student in our class, even in the grade.With his diligence and concentration, he is bound to succeed in entering his ideal university.However, Xiao Li never cares about his study because he is addicted to playing games, he turns a deaf ear to the teachers’ advice.As a result, he falls far behind others in his study.In my opinion, attitude is everything.No matter what you do, you must do it well even if you may fail

many times.Sooner or later you will be rewarded for your positive attitude towards your work or life.读写任务4（感谢他人）

阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。[阅读材料] Many years ago, when I was fresh out of school and working in Denver, I was driving to my parents' home in Missouri for Christmas.I stopped at a gas station about 50 miles from Oklahoma City, where I was planning to stop and visit a friend.While I was standing in line at the cash register(收款台), I said hello to an older couple who were also paying for gas.I took off, but had gone only a few miles when black smoke poured from the back of my car.I stopped and wondered what I should do.A car stopped behind me.It was the couple I had spoken to at the gas station.They said they would take me to my friend's.We chatted on the way into the city, and when I got out of the car, the husband gave me his business card.I wrote him and his wife a thank-you note for helping me.Soon afterward, I received a Christmas present from them.Their note that came with it said that helping me had made their holidays meaningful.Years later, I drove to a meeting in a nearby town in the morning.In late afternoon I returned to my car and found that I'd left the lights on all day, and the battery was dead.Then I noticed that the Friendly Ford dealershipwas right next door.I walked over and found two salesmen in the showroom.“Just how friendly is Friendly Ford?” I asked and explained my trouble.They quickly drove a pickup truck to my car and started it.They would accept no payment, so when I got home, I wrote them a note to say thanks.I received a letter back from one of the salesmen.No one had ever taken the time to write him and say thank you, and it meant a lot, he said.“Thank you”-two powerful words.They're easy to say and mean so much.[写作内容](1)以约30个词概括作者对及时感谢别人的体会。

(2)然后以120个词就“向别人道谢的重要性”这个主题发表你的看法, 并包括如下要点：

a)叙述你为什么向别人道谢的一次真实或虚构的经历； b)你是如何认识到向别人道谢的重要性的； c)向别人道谢对你和对方都带来了什么影响。[写作要求](1)可以使用实例或其它论述方法支持你的论点, 也可以参照阅读材料的内容, 但不得直接引用原文中的句子；(2)标题自定。

[评分标准] 概括准确、语言规范、内容合适、篇章连贯。

In this passage, the writer got more help and pleasure after he expressed thanks to others for their help, and he realized “thank you” are easy to say and mean so much.I have a similar experience.Once when I was about to go home after school, it was raining so heavily that I had to wait for the rain to stop.But after half an hour it was still raining.Seeing this, the guard at the gate offered to lend me his umbrella.I accepted at once.Thanks to his help, I got home on time without getting wet.The next morning, when I returned the umbrella to the guard, I said thank you to him and left him a note expressing my gratitude sincerely.To my surprise, he said no one had ever written him to say thank you, and it meant a lot to him.So in my opinion, saying thank you to others is not only easy but also meaningful to the person who says it and the receiver!读写任务5（执法的父亲）

阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。

Recently a program was shown on CCTV.An old man took his son to the police station to admit all the crime because of killing a neighbour’s son 15 years ago.This old man looked for his son for 15 years and finally found him in a strange place far away from his hometown.What happened on earth? The old man lived in Shanxi and he had a happy family, although they were poor.Two sons were good to him and his wife.But one day, an incident happened.The old man querrelled with the neighbour and was beaten by them.After his old son cam back, he told his son about it.After hearing that, his son rushed to the neighbour’s house and fought with them.Finally he took a knife and killed the neighbour’s son.Then he escaped quickly and secretly without telling the old man.Since that, the old man didn’t see his son any more.After his son disappeared, the old man’s wife killed herself soon.His younger son went to the south for work.Only this old man was left at home.But he determined to find back his lost son.Day by day, he looked around everywhere.Year by year, he looked for his son from one province to another province.One day he came to He Nan province and suddenly he found his son in a village by chance.At that time, his son had got married and has a lovely son.However, the old man’s determination didn’t shake.He persuaded his son to go back to admit his

crime in the police station and accept the punishment of the law again and again.Time and time again, the old man talked with his daughter-in-law.In the end, the old man’s words affected his son and his daughter-in-law.The next day, the old man took his son to the local police station in his hometown.His son was sentenced to prison for 10 years because of the neighbor’s son’s death.The old man cried loudly, meanwhile he felt a big and heavy stone fell to the ground from his brains.看完这篇报导后，全班同学无比激动，深深地为这位老父亲的行为所感动，15年如一日，为了不饶恕儿子的犯罪行为，他四处奔波寻找儿子，最后终于让儿子受到法律的惩罚。请你给这位老人写一封信，谈谈你的感受。信的开头已经写出，不计入总词数。[写作内容] 1.以约30个词总结老人的做法

2.以约120个词发表自己的看法，并包括如下要点：(1)你是否赞同老人的做法及对老人行为的理解(2)老人的行为给社会带来反响；(3)被老人行为感动并祝福老人。[写作要求] 作文中可使用自己的真实打算或虚构的打算，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子;[评分标准]句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章结构连贯。Dear Sir, Reading this report, I feel moved by your action„„„„„„„„„„„„„„„..Kind regards!Yours，Peter Dear Poter, It is very moving to read this report about you.You set a good example to all of us.As a girl, you give your love to those who need help in the poor area or in the disaster place.I should learn from you.In this report, you not only do good deeds for the people in difficulty.When Lewis County flood happened, you donated food and clothes, even money to them.Even you drove very far by yourself to help them by yourself.Not only did you do that, but also you affected the people beside you and called on them to contribute love to the people in disaster.In your working unit, many people join you and giving donation.After this donation, you even decided to continue this kind of donation and you set up a website to donate.If some kind people want to donate, they can contact you.That’s a good action, which can solve many problems of the poor people and help them to rebuild their home again.In a word, I admire you for your action and boldness.You are well worth learning from.I hope everybody willl give a hand to those who are in trouble or difficulty.Let people feel love around the world.Meanwhile I hope your career will become wider and wider.Best regards!Yours, Peter.读写任务6 阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。

Everyone has an experience they would rather forget Some are embarrassing, some are moving, and some teach us a lesson Here is a story of mine Last Sunday I went fishing After setting up my fishing rod（钓鱼竿）with bait（钓鱼的饵）, I sat down on the bank of the lake But two hours later, I didn’t catch any fish I got very angry and began to pack up my stuff（收拾东西）, preparing to go back home Just then, I saw an old man sitting near me To my surprise, his basket was full of fish, so I went over to him, wanting to know why “Excuse me, but how long have you sat here?” I asked “About four hours,” he answered “Four hours?” I could believe my ears “Yes It’s very important to be patient,” the old man said “ Don’t consider fishing a tiring sport Just enjoy it” Suddenly, I understand what he said I must learn to be patient Then I sat there and waited for fish patiently I felt a fish touch the bait, but I didn’t move and waited for the right moment to reel it in（卷收钓鱼线）At last, I caught it This made me very happy In the following six hours, I caught over 10 fish On my way home, I thought what had happened on the bank I gradually realized that the secret of success was patience ［写作内容］

1）以约30个词概括短文的要点；

2）然后以约120个词写一篇记叙文，描写你认识到耐心的重要性的一次经历，并包括以下要点：

a)叙述你认识到耐心的重要性的一次真实或虚构的经历； b)你是如何认识到耐心的重要性的； c)耐心对你的生活、学习有什么影响。［写作要求］

（1）可以参照阅读材料的篇章结构，组织故事，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；（2）标题自定。

［评分标准］概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，篇章连贯。Possible version: Patience is the secret of success The story is about an unforgettable lesson of the writer from an old man while fishing on the bank of the lake, through which the writer realized patience was very important and that it was the secret of success(39 words)I have a similar experience Once I waited for the bus at the stop for 30 minutes, no bus came I couldn’t wait any longer and decided to walk to school But no sooner had I left than the bus arrived I thought if I had waited for one more minute, I would have caught it If I wanted to take the next bus, I would have to wait for another 30 minutes Only then did I realize the importance of patience Being impatient will waste all the efforts that we have made Patience also plays an important part in our study and work With it we can achieve greater(110 words)Now, whenever I am to lose my patience, I’ll think of the experience of waiting for a bus(18 words)(167 words)读写任务7 阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。

Years ago in Scotland Clark and his wife worked and saved, making plans for their family to travel to the United States Finally they had saved enough money and gotten passports The entire family were filled with excitement However, before their departure, the youngest son was bitten by a dog The doctor sewed up（缝合）the boy but hung a yellow sheet on the Clarks’ front door Because of the possibility of rabies(狂犬病), they were separated for fourteen days The family’s dream was dashed(破灭)They would not be able to make the trip to America as they planned The father, filled with disappointment and anger, wept bitter tears and cursed（咒骂）both his son and God for their misfortune Five days later, the tragic(悲剧的，悲惨的)news spread throughout Britain—Titanic, which was on her maiden(首次的)voyage on April 14,1912, had sunk, taking hundreds of lives with it The Clark family should have been on that ship, but because the son had been bitten by a dog, they were left behind When Mr Clark heard the news, he hugged his son and thanked him for saving the family He thanked God for turning what he had felt was a tragedy(悲剧，惨剧)into a blessing(赐福，幸事)［写作内容］

1)以约30个词概括短文的要点；

2)然后以约120个词写一篇记叙文，描写你或你的朋友因祸得福的一次经历，并包括以下要点：

a)叙述你或你的朋友因祸得福的一次真实或虚构的经历； b)谈谈这次经历对你或你的朋友的影响。［写作要求］

（3）可以参照阅读材料的篇章结构，组织故事，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；（4）标题自定。

［评分标准］概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，篇章连贯。

A tragedy turning into a blessing This story is about a tragedy turning into a blessing The Clark family, who were unlucky to miss boarding Titanic because one son was bitten by a dog, were saved fortunately(32words)Mary, my friend, once had a similar experience as the Clark family Last year her family were to make a trip to Beijing Just on the afternoon before their trip, she was knocked down by a car when crossing a road and her leg was seriously hurt She would have to lie in bed for 3 months and their trip had to be cancelled That evening, she couldn’t help crying the moment she saw me I made efforts to comfort her and promised to help her with English I spared her much time When she was recovered, her English improved greatly(101words)Now she often says she is thankful for the accident, which has a great influence on her study and her thought Facing a tragedy, she can keep calm, expecting it to turn into a blessing(29words)

第三篇：任务型写作

任务型写作

阅读下面的短文，然后按要求写一篇150字左右的英语短文。

Many students fail to perform well in an exam not because they lack ability, but because of the pressure of the exam room---the tense atmosphere, the ticking clock on the wall, the teacher walking around, and the thought that their future will be decided by the exam.It’s not just students who will face pressure.Human beings are competitive animals and we evaluate each other, whether in exams or in job interviews, so all of us occasionally get nervous.Removing pressure from life is an impossible dream.However, there are some ways which can help reduce our pressure.We are likely to overcome the pressure when we are familiar with the situation we are about to face.Of course, even when we are well-prepared, we may still feel nervous, but at least we will be more equipped to deal with our nervousness.Furthermore, we may remind ourselves that the big moment is not that big from a different viewpoint.Even a huge exam is not as important as a loving family, or good health.写作内容

1.以约30个词概括上文的主要内容。

2.以约120个词就压力进行议论，内容包括：（1）简述正确面对压力的重要性。

（2）你现在面对哪些方面的压力？

（3）你认为应该如何面对压力？

写作要求

1.作文中可以使用亲身经历或者虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引

用原文中的句子。

2.作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。

The passage mainly tells us not only students but also other people will feel stressed on different occasions.So some suggestions are given on how to reduce pressure.When summer or winter vacation comes, some students can’t stand wandering about with nothing to do.Now, more and more college students and high school students are looking for part-time jobs.Wang Danning, a high school student, works as a hostess during winter vacations to earn some pocket money.Hostesses are paid per event, which normally lasts for one day or several hours.They can earn 150-300 yuan a day.Different from Wang, Guan Zhang focuses more on the experience he can get from part-time jobs.The 22-year-old student, who studies at Tsinghua University was recommended by his schoolmates to work as a coach at a winter camp.His responsibility was to take care of a group of middle school students during their six-day tour around Beijing.Guan earns 150-200 yuan a day, but he thinks the value of his part-time job lies more in the personal skills he acquires.“I am graduating this year.This experience will help me get ready for my future job,” he said.In fact, when choosing a certain part-time job, students need to be cautious about the employer’s credibility.写作内容

1.以约30个词概括上文的主要内容。

2.以约120个词就“中学生假期打工”进行议论，内容包括：

（1）简述你对中学生假期打工的看法。

（2）列举你或他人的一次打工经历。

（3）谈谈你的感受或收获。

写作要求

1.作文中可以使用亲身经历或者虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引

用原文中的句子。

2.作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。

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第四篇：高三语文写作专题

铺就锦绣前程，点亮智慧人生 “红学仕”高考系列讲座-作文-专题讲练

高三语文写作（1）

如何达到基础等极的要求

一、正确认识基础等级和发展等级的关系。

近几年来，高考作文采用基础等级和发展等级分别评分的评分方法，我个人认为，其目的在于强化写作的基础，同时引导考生追求“发展”，从整体上提高高中毕业生的写作水平。可是，有人盲目鼓吹发展等极，一味引导考生追求发展等级，这对高三同学有某种程度的误导。我们认为首先应重视发展等级。

首先，基础等级是50分，发展等级只有10分，孰轻轻重，不言自明。

其次，基础等级达不到应有的要求，是否就能拿到发展分？虽然在具体的评分上各省市有所不同，有的省就明确规定，基础等级得不到相当的分数，就不给发展分。

第三，就多数高中毕业生的写作实际来说，“基础等级”的要求并没有真正达到，或者说写的基础功并没有过关。

因此，我认为对那些还没有达到基础等级要求的同学来说，首先应提高基本的写作能力，力求在基础等级上有较大的“发展”；同时，尽可能地去争取发展分。在这一点上，不能“本末倒置”，更不能“舍本逐末”这是一个比喻性的说法。写作基本功好的，另当别论。

二、基础等级的要求

基础等级的要求共有六项，分别说明如下：

1．符合题意

这是应试作文的第一道关口，也是高考作文评分的第一把尺子。如果不合题意，文章写得再好，也是不行的。一般说来，考生的实际写作水平是平时练就的，但考试作文的得分未必与平时水平完全一致，其中的一个重要因素就是对题意的理解。一道作文题往往包括“命意”和“要求”两部分。“命意”部分，或出示材料，或出示标题，或出示话题；“要求“部分提出若干限制条件。写作前，要对试题的各个组成部分作准确全面地审读和理解。要正确理解材料的寓意，要扣住关键词，把握标题或话题或材料的内涵；要用好相关的提示语，划定构思范围，确立中心和写作内容；要在文体、表达、字数方面做到“令行禁止”。

譬如，有这样一道作文题：

阅读下面一则材料，按要求作文：

莱特兄弟完成第一架飞机试飞任务以后，到欧洲去旅行。在法国的一次欢迎酒会上，主持者请莱特兄弟讲话。莱特兄弟只讲了一句话：“拓我所知，世界上会说话的鸟儿只有鹦鹉，而鹦鹉是飞不高的。”

领会这则材料的基本精神，联系实际，写一篇不少于800字的议论文。

这是一道“材料作文”题。这则材料的“基本精神”是什么？是“少说多干“吗？有道理，因为材料中有“只讲了一句话”。但它不是“基本精神”，基本精神在莱特兄弟的话中。鹦鹉“会说话”，但只是“学话”、“人云亦云”而已。所谓“飞不高”，是指不会有大作为。换言之，基本精神是反对“鹦鹉学舌”，而要有创新精神。据此立论，符合题意。其他如“联系实际”、“议论文”，“800字”也要一一落实。

自从考话题作文以来，不断有人鼓吹“淡化审题”，甚至有人说“想跑题也不容易”。话题作文降低了审题的要求，这是事实，但“淡化审题”之说，却没有根据，也是不太负责的说法。于是要求写“心灵的选择”，有不少人不去按照题意写心灵的冲突，而将题意泛化，只写“选择”，这就不在符合题意。2003年的试题一再提示“感情上的亲疏远近和对事物的认识的正误深浅有没有关系？是什么关系？“请就感情亲疏和对事物的认知”这个话题写文章，“类似”、“不同”、“相反”都可以写。可是，相当多的 一世的修养，一生的朋友 铺就锦绣前程，点亮智慧人生 “红学仕”高考系列讲座-作文-专题讲练

考生对“关系”视而不见、或只定“感情亲疏”，或只写“认知”，甚至有另设话题的。这种情况不能不引起同学们的重视。

2．符合文体要求

高考作文有“文体自选”的要求，“自选”是为了扬长避短。从评分的角度说，你“自选”了什么文体，就按该文体评分。也就是说你选定何种文体，就要写得“像”——体现出文体的规范。可是，近几年有人鼓吹“淡化文体”“淡化”的结果是“四不像”的文章大量涌现，这样的文章在评分中大受影响。

“符合文体要求”，就考先来说，你写记叙文，就要写人叙事为主；你写议论文，就要注重发表自己的看法，注重议论，注重说理；你写类叙来议的文章，就要注意叙议的结合。《考试说明》在写作部分首句就说“能写记叙文、议论文、说明文及常用应用文”。在具体的写作中，就要适当强化“文体感”，不要写那种非驴非马的东西。

3．感情真挚，思想健康

“感情真挚”是文章的生命。它旗帜鲜明地反对虚假的、造作的、苍白的乃至庸俗、颓废的文章。所谓“真挚”，就是真诚恳切。它是作者发自内心的对人对事的情感态度。无论写人、叙事、描景、还是说理，都应渗入作者或爱或憎，或喜或忧、或褒或贬的真挚感情。人们说，写作是生命的运动。感情虚假的文章，给人的只能是虚假，而不可能动人。有一名考生定《外婆的选择》，写外婆身患癌症，拒绝治疗，其理由有两条：一是外婆一生都爱美，如果化疗、放疗、头发、眉毛都掉光了，“死后孩子们梦见我，还不吓得半死”；二是子女的经济都不宽裕，“把仅有的一点钱留给孩子们作教育费用吧”。看了这样的文章，即便是铁石心肠，也会潜然泪下，也会对这位外婆肃然起敬。这便是感情真挚的力量，这是那些胡编乱造的文字不可比拟的。

虽然有的考试题目可以写“故事新编”之类，即便是这样的文章也写出真情实感。

“思想健康”，是指文章的内容具有正确的思想。它惩恶习扬善，表现出对符合社会发展，总趋势的认识、理想、愿望等，透射出真善美的光辉，能给人以美的感受和鼓舞力量。它的底线是正确的是非观，道德观。这个底线是不能超越的。

“感情真挚”与“思想健康”相辅相成、相得益彰，共同构成文章的精髓。

4．内容充实，中心明确

“内容充实”，指文章的材料翔实、具体，能为“中心明确”服务。内容不充实，只有干巴巴的几条筋，没有鲜活、丰满的血肉，写记叙文形象不具体，没有意境，写议论文空喊口号或堆砌事实论据。这样的文章自然不能算较好的文章。

“中心明确”是指文章要有一个明确的中心，并围绕这个中心来写人叙事或议论，否则就会散乱而不知所云。现在一般考生易犯的毛病是“脚踩西瓜皮，滑到哪里是哪里”。这样的文章没有明显的写作意图，没有明确的写作目标，自然不可能成为好文章。

“内容充实，中心明确”，是高考评分的又一把重要尺子，在这一点上达不到基本要求，也就是文章内容不合要求，得分只能比较低。

5．语言通顺，结构完整。

“语言通顺”包括“通”和“顺”两个层面的要求。通，指文句表达要合乎规范，合手含乎所写的内容，不出现明显的语病；顺，指句子连贯，符合所写事物的自然流程，符合一般的思维规律。用词不当，造句不规范，文句之间不贯通，是若干语言基本功不过关的考生的通病。对这些同学来说，最应努力的是把每一句话要表达的意思说清楚，顺着一定的思路说需要说的话，不要“东一概头西一棒”。

“结构完整”，从历年高考来看，绝大多数考生是不存在问题的，除非有的人不能完卷。在结构上存在的问题主要是全文思路不清晰，段与段之间的内在联系不明确。这是应当注意的。所谓“内在联系”是指各段落之间内容上的联系。是并列、承接，还是递进？写作前都应有一个明确的考虑。

6．书写规范，标点正确

首先要写字规范、正确，不写错别字，不写不规范的简化字，不写繁体字；不漏用、错用标点符号； 一世的修养，一生的朋友 铺就锦绣前程，点亮智慧人生 “红学仕”高考系列讲座-作文-专题讲练

其次是字体美观端正，清晰易辨识；再次是书写格式正确，卷面整洁，修改要用规范的修改符号，不随意涂沫。

高考阅卷在赋分方面受阅卷者的主观因素影响较大，尽管我的评分标准在尽量缩小赋分的误 差，但书写、卷面毕竟是给阅卷者造成的第一印象的主要因素。客观地说，那些书写、潦草，文面脏乱、难以卒读的文章，“暗中”所失之分远不止“标准”规定的几分。

对书写文面提出下列建议：

①拟一个较详细的写作提纲、避免盲目行文，乱涂乱画；②不会写的字可用意思相同的字替换；③正确使用删除、增补、颠倒、移位、连接等修改符号；④掌握标题、分段以及应用的行款格式；⑤认真使用标点符号，防止“一逗到底”；⑥墨色浓淡，粗细适中。

三、作文评改练习

下面两篇作文都是2003年的考场作文，话题是“感情亲疏对事物的认识”。请阅读它们，分别完成后面的评改练习。

（一）一 张 彩 票

现如今经济高速发展，各式各样的中奖还有真不少，弄不好你又买一张试试看，也许就是500万。但就这500万可让人觉悲唉。

据一份报道。一张中奖彩票看出亲情，一对老年夫妇在过年大团圆的日子里买了两张彩票。可以说试运气，一家人团团圆圆在一起吃饭，老夫妇拿出两张彩票对，这一对不要紧，忽然出现的钱可让老夫妇的儿女们看花了。500万可干事多了。而老夫妇也决定给儿女们分一点，于是大家都高兴，那晚一个个料醉如泥才归，可第二天出事了。

什么事？彩票没了，兄弟们都到了老夫妇家里问这问那，可没有已成实现于是儿女们相互猜疑因为那晚就几个儿女知道这事。于是不久警察来了，警察便一个一个询问从中得知儿女都在怀疑对方拿走了那彩票。于是警察对儿女们进行的测试。可依然没有什么眉目，不久那500万被领了。警察一看这是夫妇俩楼下的邻居，他怎么会有的了。

这个邻居了警察慌了，便讲述了其中的经过，这彩票是拾得当时样子被叠成了飞机。这是怎么回事，原来是孙子叠成了小飞机，飞出窗外的。这个故事就这样结束了。

一份不意这财，引来无数争议，首先足妹手足之情，同时一个娘胎出来的。但为了自己的，眼前的利益，相互猜疑为了自己的利益想尽一切方法。报警本无可厚非，但儿女们为了自己希望对方偷了彩票，被抓住那才好了。这样自己不就又多了一份不意之财吗？

这个故事简单，但像之样的事还少吗？对事情还没弄清楚，还不知其所以然便到处胡说到处猜疑。一件事情是由头到尾的一个过程不能认识不清前，以个人主观意愿乱说。

中华民族是美德之邦。由五千看的文明历史，人情之间的淡泊和对事物认识的不清都会对自己和他人造成损害。

人是高等的动物，人与人的感情，人与人之间的友谊不能应一件不肖的事物而改变。

社会在发展，人类存在进步。这些就是进步文明的伴脚石，我们应该踢开它。还给一个真实的“我”。

1．这篇文章在“符合题意”上存在什么问题？

2．这篇文章在思路和结构上存在什么问题？

（二）小恩与大惠

在现实生活中，我们处理事情时往往受自己的感情上亲疏的干扰，当自己的朋友与别人辩论时，不论自己的朋友正确与否，我们的心总是在不经意间倾向于自己的朋友。

正如《韩非子》中的寓言所描述的那样，邻居家的老人同富人的儿子一样，担心富人由于墙被淋坏而东西被盗，于是便提醒富人把墙修好，而富人未听劝阻结果东西被盗走许多，由于儿子与富人的关系较为亲近，于是富人认定是儿子聪明而怀疑老人偷了他的东西。由此可见我们自身的感情亲疏使我们认 一世的修养，一生的朋友 铺就锦绣前程，点亮智慧人生 “红学仕”高考系列讲座-作文-专题讲练

知事物时走进了误区，其实有许多真实而又明显的真情在我们身边，而我们却浑然不知。

记得曾经看过这样一个故事，故事说的是一个女孩同自己的母亲吵架，于是一气之下离家出走，不知走了多久，女孩来到一个面摊前，这时才发现自己的肚子饿了，可又发现自己忘了带钱，便怔怔地站在那儿，这时一位老婆婆走上前来对女孩打招呼说：“小姑娘，饿了吧，进来下碗面吃。”女孩望了望老婆婆小声道：“我忘了带钱。”“没关系，我免费请你吃。”老婆婆笑着说完便位着女孩进里面坐下。

过了一会儿，老婆婆端着一碗饨和几碟小菜递给女孩。女孩感激地拿起筷子吃了起来，可刚吃了几口眼泪便落了下来滴在碗里，老婆婆问女孩怎么了，女孩回答说说：“我和你第一次见面，又不熟，而你却下馄饨弄菜给我吃，而我的妈妈，我和她吵了一架，她便把我赶了出去，还叫我不要再回去！”

老婆婆平静地对她说：“孩子，你想想看，我只不过是做了一些饭菜给你吃，你便这么感激我，而你的妈妈做了十几年的饭菜给你吃，你怎么不感激她呢？”女孩恍然大悟。于是赶紧吃完馄饨，急忙向家去，只见妈妈正站在路口寻找自己，便急忙跑过去，母亲见女孩回来，急忙抱住她说道：“你这个淘气包，跑到哪里去了，都等你吃饭呢，饭菜都凉了，快回家吧！”刚说完，女孩的眼泪又掉了下来……

有时亲情就在我们身边，对于别人一点点的恩惠我们会铭记于心，而对于自己亲人的关爱我们却不以为然，缺少认识，留心你的周围吧，你会发现你未曾发现的，知道你未曾在意的事物。

1．这篇文章在审题和立意上有什么优点？

2．这篇文章在“符合文体要求”上有什么缺陷？

四、写作练习

“全球化”将被称为21世纪的重要特征，人与人之间、民族与民族之间、国家与国家之间相互依存的程度越来越高。时代对我们提出了一个十分重要的要求——学会共处。我们要学会与他人共同学习、生活、工作；要了解自身，发现他人，尊重他人；要学会关心，学会平等对话，互相交流；学会处理矛盾，解决冲突。

请以“学会共处”为话题写一篇文章。

要求：立意自定，文体自选，题目自拟，不少于800字；努力体现基础等级的六项要求。

附：评改的参考意见

（一）本文叙述了一个因一张中奖彩票丢失而引起家人互相猜疑的故事。揭示了“当事情未弄清楚前，不要凭主观意愿胡说”的道理。谈的始终是认识问题，而未涉及到话题的核心“情感亲疏与认知关系”的问题，属不合题意的文章。且故事编的也不圆，如一张中奖彩票竞然被叠成纸飞机扔下了楼，被邻居捡去兑了奖。结尾的议论与前面的故事又明显脱节。有生拉硬拽往主题上靠的“贴标签”的嫌疑。

从语言表达上看，基本还算文通字顺，所以建议评该题应该文章的上线34分

（二）这篇文章主要论述了生活中一种常见的现象，疏远陌生的人给我们的一点小恩惠，我们感激涕零，而对亲人无微不至的爱反而熟视无睹。切合“感情的亲疏远近对事物认识有影响”这一话题，而且论及到与寓言故事相反的一种情形：即感情越深认识反而截止浅，在立意上是有一些新意的，至少比单简单演绎“智子疑邻”故事的立意要高。

但本文也有一个明显的问题，即文体运用不规范。整体看应归为议论文，但叙例过繁，有大段叙述，不伦不类，所以降等处理，判45分。

四、写作

略

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高三语文作文（2）

如何达到发展等级的要求

一、高考对发展等级的要求

高考对发展等级的要求包括深刻、丰富、有文采、有创新这四项。下面分别作说明。1．深刻

深刻，是对文章思想内容方面的要求。怎样达到深刻呢？（1）透过现象看本质

纷繁芜杂的事物无不具有各自外部的表象和内在的本质。要看到事物的本质，就要有一个由表及里、由此及彼、由特殊到一般的思维过程。这个过程就是分析、比较、综合、概括的过程。有了若干这样的过程，才能达于事物的本质。

这种深刻不是靠引用一两句话或“灵机一动”所能奏效的。譬如2003年全国卷有一名考生写了一篇《拨开感情的迷雾》的思辨说理的文字。该文在反思感情和认知的关系时，在社会、历史、人生的大背景下，“将人的目光投向更深处”，进行了反复的追问和求索，并且时时观照现实，最后得出结论。“让我们跳出心灵的依托和贪欢，用灵魂和良知去判断。每一次打破感情的樊笼，必将带给我们一片绿树一片春天，每一次对感情的反抗，必将给我们带来一股甘泉一丝甘甜。”这个看法是比较深刻的。

（2）揭示问题产生的原因

因果索因法，是作文立意式分析论证的常用方法。一个矛盾的产生，一种现象的出现，总是有前因的。分析它，发现它，弄清来龙去脉，就能找到问题产生的原因，找到矛盾的主次关系，也就找到了解决问题的途径。找到某种原因，比不揭示原因深刻；找到根本原因，比找到一般原因深刻。

（3）观点具有启发性

这是指文章所透射出来的思想能引起读者的联想而有所顿悟。写议论文，能针对现实生活中人们所关注的热点、焦点问题，或者易被人们忽视的“边角”问题，激浊扬清，拨乱反正，充满对社会进步的真诚关注，表现出对事物发展的前瞻思考，有一石激起千层浪之效。写记叙文，取材鲜活，小中见大，微中寓著，充满情感，从而催人感奋，使人联想，在关注周围人事上产生共鸣。这些都是富有启发性的。

讲“深刻”，一般指议论文字而言。使文章深刻，当然不止这三方面，但主要是这三方面。追求深刻，不是用大话、套话所能奏效的。我们应该在树立正确的世界观、人生观和价值观的基础上，培养良好的思维品质，掌握科学的方法论，运用实践认识、内因外因、量变质变、发展变化、局部整体等基本的哲学原理去看世界、辨事理：

2．丰富

丰富，是就文章的内容而言的，它比“内容充实”的要求更高一层。它对文章内容的质和量提出了更高的要求，即在有限的文字中提供更精要的东西。

（1）材料丰富

材料是文章的“血肉”。材料丰富，指文章的人、事、情、理，丰盈饱满，具有多向多

层面的特点。具体说来，写议论文能旁征博引，揭示诸多现象之间的内在联系，有论辩力。写记叙文，故事复杂、情节曲折，画面纷呈，线索分明。写人能主次映衬，叙事能跌宕起伏。但不要认为材料丰富，就是罗列事实。材料贵在精当。以一当十，以少胜多，目标可视为丰富。

（2）形象饱满

形象，就是指作品创造出来的生动具体的、能激发人们思想感情的生活图景。它包括人物以及为塑造人物而写的景物等。记叙文中，人物个性鲜明，有血有肉，情感丰富，栩栩如生，呼之欲出，就可称为形象丰满。朱自清《景影》里的父亲形象，就是一个丰满的形象。不要把丰满误解为“写的多”，主要是充分展示人物的内心世界。

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（3）意境深远

意境，指作品通过形象描写所表现出来的境界、情感等。这里所说的意境深远，应包含以下几个要素：①有情景；②有形象；③有活动，又能给读者带来丰富的想象。能使读者感受到作者想要传达的情景、形象和人物情态的作品，就有意境。作文时，营造好“情景”，塑造好“形象”，展示发人物的“活动”，使之发人深思，耐人寻味，当是我们孜孜以求的。

3．有文采

“有文采”是在语言通顺的基础上提出的更高要求。所谓“有文采”，就是语言美，富有感染力、震慑力、穿透力。文采从哪里来？从生动的用语、灵活的句式、漂亮的修辞等方面来。

（1）词语生动，句式灵活

在选用词语时，应尽量选择那些具体、生动、形象、鲜明，内涵丰富的，能调动人感官体验的词语，而少用那些抽象、概括，不疼不痒的词语。句子有长短、整散之别；语气有陈述、疑问、祈使、感叹之异；结构有常式、变式之不同。不同的句式有不同的表达效果。要根据表达的需要灵活选用句式，不能呆板地运用一、二种句式。

（2）善于运用修辞手法

我们学习各种修辞方法，学了就要用。比喻、拟人。可使表达形象生动；对偶、排比，可使语句容量大，有气势，且有整齐美；设问、反问，可引人思考、增强穿透力。等等。

（3）文句有意蕴

文句凝炼、含蕴，有丰富的内涵，有言外之意、弦外之音，可营造深邃的意境，可富含 深刻的哲理，这就叫“有意蕴”。“人有悲欢离合，月有阴晴圆缺”，这是有意蕴；“夜正长，路也正长„„”这也是有意蕴的。

请看一名考生写的《放下感情的叶片》的开头：“常常是一位亲人的生命如流星般殒落，我们才悲哀于死神的无情；常常是一位朋友与疾病殊死搏斗时，我们才咒写病魔的猖獗；常常是我们自己的利益受到侵犯时，我们才会正视社会年的毒瘤„„”这是运用整齐的排比句陈述在通常情况下人们的感情与认知之间的关系，蕴含着浓浓的反思的情味，这样的句子可以说是有意蕴的。

优秀的作文应该让语言“亮”起来，调动尽可能多的语言手段，争取尽可能显著的表达效果，语言就会“亮”起来，具有视觉的冲击力。

4．有创新

“有创新”与“深刻”、“丰富”、“有文采”不是并立关系，而是交叉关系。设置“有创新”这一发展等级的评分点，意在培养创新意识。从写作说，就是强调文章的“新”和“个性”色彩。什么是“有创新”呢？

（1）见解新颖，材料新鲜

写议论文，观点要新，例证要新，不能人云亦云；写记叙文，故事要新，立意要新，而不能因循守常。新的见解，新的材料从哪里来？从生活中来，从个人的感悟中来，而不能照搬照套。当着成千上万的考生都要移植爱因斯坦的“记忆”时，有考生想到将普通人的记忆移植给爱因斯坦，这一思考的角度就很“新”；当着成千上万的人从正面或反面说感情对认知的影响时，有考生有理有据地论说“认知不应受感情的左右”。这样的见解未尝不“新”。

（2）构思新巧

同样的题材，因构思之巧，就会各领风骚。同是《咏梅》，毛泽东与陆游迥异；同是写“灯”，巴金与柯罗连科各异其趣；同是写《乡愁》，余光中与席慕蓉各有不同。构思无定法，但以下几点要注意：①要刻意开掘事物内涵，追求立意高远；②要学会“蓄势”，写出引人入胜，欲舍不能的开头；③要写出“落地生根”、余音缭绕的结尾；④学会运用抑扬，张弛，正侧、起伏等手法。

（3）推理想象有独到之处

想象是创造的开始，是腾飞的双翼。富有创造性的想象和描述，就是一种独到之处。推理，也只

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有抛弃人云亦云，才会有“独到”。独到，是根植现实而又有超越，因而它不是违反生活逻辑的“瞎说”或荒诞。

（4）有个性特征

写作是一种生命运动，是最富有个性色彩的劳动。承认个性、张扬个性，是一种人本的回归。要写出有个性特征的文章，依据我个人数十年教学和写作的经验，似乎可以归结为一句：这就是用自己的言语写自己对生活的独到感悟。抛开这一点，很难有个性特征可言。

二、怎样对待发展等级 1．积极追求

写作本身就是一种是追求，应试作文尤其如此。对于发展等级，每名考生，不论原来水平高低，都应该追求到一定的发展等级分，不应放弃。

2．有所侧重

发展等级的四个方面的要求都能达到，固然很好，但就多数人来说是不切实际的。从某一、二个方面去突破，是完全有可能的。从评分的角度来说，即使给10分的作文，也不是四个方面都特别好的。

三、优秀作文评论

（一）阅读下面一篇作文，完成后面的题目。

坚守诚信

人生短短几十年，犹如过眼云烟，等到你“灰飞烟灭”时，留给世人的会是什么？金钱、荣誉，还是……不，人们大多谈论、记忆犹新的只会是你的人格，而诚信便是重要内容之一。

寓言中的年轻人在生命的选择中放弃了“诚信”，我为他而叹息。但回着今朝，面对物欲横流的花花世界，你是否真的得能清远淡泊？面对灯红酒绿的大众，你是否真的能心无旁骛？面对尔虞我诈的商场，你是否真的能坚守正道……是的，该守住我们的“诚信”了。

坚守诚信是一个孤寂的过程，当大谈“金钱至上”的时候，坚守诚信，你需要忍受得住别人讥笑的言语；当推崇“人不为己，天诛地灭”时，坚守诚信，你必须学会自我调整；当面对“暗渡陈仓”时，坚守诚信，你需要远大的目光……唱着“Beyond”跳出众人，虽然不喜欢“卓尔不群”，但至少会“守得云开见日月”，历经了孤寂，至少坚持了诚信。

坚守诚信是一个痛苦的历程，挤在浑浑噩噩的人群中，思想已经麻木，自然不会痛苦，但一旦你坚守诚信，就犹如一锅浑水中若然滴入清水，众多的“污秽”欣然而至，抵抗自然会遭到攻击。摆脱不了的人际关系，抹不去的形形色色的嘲讽，坚守诚信，就需要擦去所有的“不净”，众人的疑惑，亲人的不解都会使你心力憔悴，因为在尔虞我诈的世界，诚信的一瞬会招来不断的伤痕。

坚守诚信，总会有结果的一天；坚守诚信，总会有阳光的一天；坚守诚信，总会有…… 金钱、名誉不过是生不带来、死不带去的东西罢了。虽然诚信不会像它们那样“作用明显”，但诚信可以磨练你的人格，陶冶你的情操。寓言中的年轻人即使安全地到达了彼岸，失了诚信的他必然不会拥有健全的人格，完美的人生。

随着物质财富的飞快发展，越来越多的人感到不解：为什么幸福越来越多而感觉不到幸福呢？因为竞争的“残酷”，人情的淡化，人与人之间缺少了真诚和信任，所以没有幸福的感觉。

世界因为有了花的色彩而绚丽，而有了诚信，人在世界上会倍感幸福。坚守诚信！

1．这篇文章的语言有不少闪光之处，请用举例的方法说出“闪光”之处及其表达的好处。2．本文结构上有何不足？

（二）阅读下文，完成文后题目。

留 言 条

彼得：

妈妈今天要加班，要晚点回来，一些事情要交给你去做，请你帮妈去买两磅果酱，好吗？瓶子和钱我都已经给你拿到小桌子上了。好好干，我的小宝贝。

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你的妈妈 2.26 妈妈：

今天我回家看到了你的留言，果酱已经买回来了，现在放在厨房里的小桌上，我没有把它放进柜里（因为我够不着）。还有，我们学校放五天假，你不在家时，丽塔姨妈来过，我去她家玩两天，几天后回来。祝我在姨妈家玩得愉快。

你的儿子彼得 2.26晚

（以上彼得留言，以下果酱店意见箱中的信件，及老板迪卡的回信）迪卡老板：

昨晚，我让我的儿子彼得来你的店买两磅果酱，可是，我今天用时发现份量并不足，刚才我来找你，你不在。可能是你的店员在称量时疏忽，可他们当时不能作主解决这件事，所以我留下留言，希望你给个回复。

彼得的妈妈玛瑞卡

2.27晨

玛瑞卡太太：

我很抱歉发生这样的事，可是你也应该知道，你的果酱瓶装满的话，刚好两磅。一般来说，装少了是不可能的。冒昧问一下，你之后有没有问一下你的儿子？

迪卡 2.28 迪卡老板：

你和彼得很熟的，他曾经把在你店里捡到的五便士还给你，曾经把你多找给他的十便士退还，我非常相信他。他吃了果酱，一定会告诉我，我想，你也应该相信他，或许，你该换秤了。

玛瑞卡 2.29（以下彼得打回来的电话记录，日期，2.30）

妈妈，忘了跟你说，姨妈那天来的时候，我用面包招待了她，刚好买的果酱派上了用场。所以，妈妈，你不必再调查冰箱里失踪的面包去向了。

这是2003年高考“另类”作文。1．本文选材、立意上有什么特点？

2．你觉得本文构思是否新巧？请简要说明。

3．读了这两篇优秀作文，你对在发展等级上得分有什么新感悟？

四、写作练习

有人说，天地是有缺陷的，但缺陷造成了褶皱，褶皱造成了奇峰幽谷之美。月亮是不能常圆的，人生不如意十之八九，当我们心平气和地承认这一切缺陷的时候，就会发现没有什么是不可以接受的。

请以“缺陷”为话题写一篇文章。

要求：立意自定，文体自选，题目自拟，不少于800字。

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附：参考答案

三、（一）本篇给人的第一印象是语言精彩。“坚守诚信是一个孤寂的过程”，“坚守诚信是一个痛苦的历程”——作为两个小节的开头，这样的语言很“入眼”，因为不但句式整齐，而且内涵丰富，有思想深度，闪耀着睿智之光。作者有积极修辞的意识，三、四两个小节中的排比和比喻为文章增色，结尾的“世界因为有了花的色彩而绚丽，而有了诚信，人在世界上会倍感幸福”再一次“出彩”。近年的高考作文，因为大批的考生语言表达能力较差，如果你的文章写得“漂亮”，有“闪光”之处，就很容易引起注意。本文在结构安排上还有点不足，第七小节的位置明显不当，这一小节是可以调到开头处的。

（二）绝对小事。玛瑞卡太太发现孩子彼得买回家的两磅果酱份量不足，怀疑“店员在称量时疏忽”，结果证明是孩子的姨妈来时吃了。事情虽小，所表达的主旨却很切合作文题意。妈妈出于对孩子的了解信任，认为不可能是孩子吃了果酱而不告诉自己，因为孩子平时有着诚实无私的表现。虽然文章结尾证明玛瑞卡太太的判断是正确的，但迪卡老板包括读者不可能相信她的判断没有带感情色彩。而这里，作者暗示了“感情亲疏会影响认知”已成为一种公众习惯意识，成为当今社会人与人之间相互评价、相互怀疑的心理基因和思维定势。文章的深刻性由此而生。什么叫小中见大？什么叫举重若轻？本文选材立意就是一个范例。

绝妙构思。此许小事，似乎几句话就可以叙述清楚，作者竟然写出了近八百字的篇幅，而且写得一波三澜，颇有意味。这得力于构思的绝妙。真亏他想得出来，作者竟选择留信条作文章形成，由六则留方组成一篇文章，在江苏三十多万考生中，或许能称之为绝无仅有。六则留言，有条不紊而不恰到好处地交代了事情的起因、发展、矛盾及其结果。留言条这种应用文类中的最简单文中，一经作者巧妙调度，竟也迸发出它的艺术魅力，可谓神奇。

同时，“小桌子”，“我够不着”，“问一下你的儿子”，“或许作换秤了”，以及姨妈来过的前后照应，都充分显示出作者思路的清晰严密与语言的准确老练，其聪明机智而又沉着幽默的个性跃然纸上。

四、略。

一世的修养，一生的朋友

第五篇：高三英语写作

Section C(25 marks)

Directions: Write an English composition according to the instructions given below in Chinese.在生活中，你或者你的朋友都有可能遭遇过这样的尴尬：年长的人不能理解或误解你们这一辈比较流行的文化现象，比如说：“快闪（flash mob）”。请你就此“generation gap”的现象由此展开想像或结合你的实际经历以第一人称写一篇英语短文。内容应包括：1.你的这次被误解的具体经历；

2、你当时的心情；

3、你如何向长辈解释清楚你的“古怪”行为。

注意：

1、词数不少于120；

2、不能使用真实姓名和学校名称。

3、“快闪”只是提供一个例子，你可以自由地选取任何“流行文化现象”进行描述